Run: 2026-09-23-01M37P1DAZ2HGEW4HKBCEW3N7B

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1m 16s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain caught with a rattle before the door had opened a foot. "Three seconds," Rory said. "Then I start making noise, and Silas comes up with the cricket bat he keeps behind the till." "Then by all means, make noise." Lucien Moreau smiled through the gap, one amber eye catching the corridor's bulb light, the black one swallowing it whole. "It would be a shame to bleed to death quietly." She hadn't noticed the blood. Now she couldn't stop seeing it: a dark bloom spreading under the lapel of his charcoal suit, the ivory handle of his cane gripped white-knuckled, his weight listing against the doorframe like a man doing arithmetic with his remaining strength. "Bugger." "An eloquent welcome." "An accurate one." She unhooked the chain and stepped back. "Bathroom's the door on the left. Touch nothing else." He crossed her sitting room with the care of a man walking on lake ice, and she watched him go, cataloguing the damage. Torn seam at his shoulder. Mud on shoes that cost more than her rent. A thin line of red drying at his temple, elegant as a paper cut. Her flat above Silas' bar was small and smelled of the fryer downstairs, of cardamom and old beer. Takeaway menus papered one wall. The only flowers she'd ever kept were plastic, in a chipped blue jug on the windowsill, because plastic flowers didn't die when you forgot them. The bathroom door stayed open. She heard the tap run, heard the hiss through his teeth when the water found the wound. "You're doing that wrong," she called through. "You're supposed to let it clot." "I'm supposed to do a great many things, chérie. Clotting ranks low on the list." She fetched the first aid tin from under the sink, the one she'd bought after Evan, the one she'd told herself was for cooking burns, and carried it in without letting herself think about why she was carrying it. He'd stripped off the jacket and unbuttoned his shirt to the sternum. The cut ran along his ribs, shallow but long, a red smile that someone had carved with consideration. "Sit down," she said. "I'm perfectly comfortable standing." "You're sweating on my tiles. Sit." He sat on the rim of the bath, and she knelt between his knees with the antiseptic, and the closeness hit her like a hand to the sternum. Six months of not thinking about the smell of him, bergamot and cigarette smoke, and here it was again, undone in a single breath. "Small talk," he said. "How is the delivery business? Do the spring rolls still inspire devotion across Tower Hamlets?" "Still delivering. Still devotional." She pressed the gauze to the wound. He didn't flinch. Somehow that annoyed her more. "Who did this?" "A knife." "Whose knife." "An enthusiastic one." "Lucien." She looked up. His mismatched eyes held hers, and she hated that her pulse answered before her pride could stop it. "You don't get to do the charming deflection thing while I'm holding your blood in a cloth. Whose knife." He exhaled through his nose, slow, and for a second she saw the real weight under the tailoring. "Do you remember what I did for you. Last winter." The room went cold. She sat back on her heels, gauze forgotten. "Don't." "Evan was going to find you. He'd hired people, Rory, real ones, the kind who don't stop at bruises. So I made a call. I made him go away." "You made him go away." She stood, and her voice came out flat and even, the courtroom voice her father had paid six years of tuition to give her. "You made a bargain. With somebody. And you never told me the price, and you never told me the terms, and when I found out you'd been lying to my face for four months, you let me walk out that door without one word of explanation." "You didn't want one." "You didn't offer one!" The shout surprised them both. Below, muffled through the floorboards, Silas's jukebox carried on, some old soul record about a man on his own. Lucien looked at his hands. When he spoke again, the polish had gone out of his voice, and what remained underneath was Marseille, rough vowels, a boy's accent the suits had never quite buried. "The price was a favour. Unspecified. Callable. That is how contracts work with his kind. I assumed I would be dead of something else before he ever called it in." A small, terrible smile. "I'm ambitious, not optimistic." "His kind." The words landed slowly, one after another. "Lucien. Whose kind." "Vassago." He said the name the way other men said cancer. "Flesh broker out of Avaros. He holds paper on half the underworld and a third of the overworld, and tonight he decided to call in my favour." The gauze had soaked through in her hand. She hadn't noticed she was still holding it. "What does he want?" "Guess." "No." "He wants a name entered in his ledger. A person, delivered. Alive, intact, unharmed." Lucien rose from the bath's edge, and for the first time since she'd known him, he looked afraid, and the fear made him look young. "Vassago collects people who can see the seams of the world. He has a client with a vacancy and a very specific appetite. He wants the girl who broke a summoning circle in Whitechapel with a delivery bike and a fire extinguisher. He wants the girl who read the Avaric script on instinct, without training, without a teacher." The floor seemed to tilt. Rory put a hand on the sink. "He wants me." "He has wanted you since Whitechapel. The favour was never a favour. It was a down payment." Lucien took the gauze from her fingers, gently, as if disarming her. "I came to tell you to run. Properly this time, not a flat above a bar with one door and a fire escape that squeals like a widow. I came to tell you that I am sorry, and that I would rip the contract apart with my teeth if teeth were enough, and that four months ago I let you walk out because keeping you angry at me was the only way I knew to keep you looking over your shoulder." "Over my shoulder at you." "Yes." He said it simply, and the simplicity was worse than any flourish. "Better my shadow on you than his." She stared at him. Six months of rehearsed speeches, all the things she'd say if she ever saw him again, and every one of them had just turned to ash, because he was standing in her bathroom bleeding for the second time tonight and the only words left in her mouth were the ones she'd sworn she'd never give him again. "Say it," she said. "Whatever it is you're not saying. Say it now, Lucien, because if this is another half-truth I swear to God I'll," "He gave me until dawn to deliver you. And Rory," Lucien turned towards the sitting room, his head cocked, listening, "the music has stopped." Below them, through the floorboards, Silas's bar had gone silent. No jukebox. No glassware. No roar of a Saturday crowd that should have been three deep at the till. Then came the sound of the street door downstairs, opening without a key, and unhurried footsteps beginning their climb.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The words landed slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.32
leniency0.64
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.04
83.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1238
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slowly"
2"very"
3"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1238
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"comfortable"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"comfortable"
2"pulse"
3"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences55
matches
0"looked afraid"
64.94% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences55
filterMatches
0"think"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen81
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1238
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount688
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.73
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien5
Moreau1
Takeaway1
Evan1
Silas2
Marseille1
Saturday1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
places
0"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
76.47% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences34
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if disarming her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1238
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"hated that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean23.81
std23.5
cv0.987
sampleLengths
013
122
236
345
41
53
619
751
848
922
1013
1115
1239
1330
144
154
166
1752
1819
1922
202
212
223
2341
2418
2510
2612
271
2829
2975
304
314
3224
3334
3438
3512
3638
3716
384
391
401
4197
4212
433
44110
455
4620
4761
4825
4924
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
29.06% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs117
matches
0"was carrying"
1"was still holding"
2"was standing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences88
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount546
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.02197802197802198
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005494505494505495
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean14.07
std14.34
cv1.02
sampleLengths
013
14
218
326
410
55
640
71
83
910
109
1123
125
139
1414
1518
165
1725
185
1917
207
216
2215
2339
2412
2518
264
274
286
2928
3024
314
3215
3311
343
355
363
372
382
393
404
4118
4219
4318
4410
454
468
471
4829
4929
70.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.48863636363636365
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences49
matches
0"Somehow that annoyed her more."
1"Then came the sound of"
ratio0.041
56.73% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences49
matches
0"She hadn't noticed the blood."
1"She unhooked the chain and"
2"He crossed her sitting room"
3"Her flat above"
4"She heard the tap run,"
5"she called through"
6"She fetched the first aid"
7"He'd stripped off the jacket"
8"He sat on the rim"
9"She pressed the gauze to"
10"He didn't flinch."
11"She looked up"
12"His mismatched eyes held hers,"
13"He exhaled through his nose,"
14"She sat back on her"
15"She stood, and her voice"
16"He said the name the"
17"She hadn't noticed she was"
18"He said it simply, and"
19"She stared at him."
ratio0.408
62.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences49
matches
0"The chain caught with a"
1"Lucien Moreau smiled through the"
2"She hadn't noticed the blood."
3"She unhooked the chain and"
4"He crossed her sitting room"
5"Mud on shoes that cost"
6"A thin line of red"
7"Her flat above"
8"Takeaway menus papered one wall."
9"The only flowers she'd ever"
10"The bathroom door stayed open."
11"She heard the tap run,"
12"she called through"
13"She fetched the first aid"
14"He'd stripped off the jacket"
15"The cut ran along his"
16"He sat on the rim"
17"She pressed the gauze to"
18"He didn't flinch."
19"She looked up"
ratio0.796
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences49
matches
0"Now she couldn't stop seeing"
ratio0.02
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Six months of rehearsed speeches, all the things she'd say if she ever saw him again, and every one of them had just turned to ash, because he was standing in h…"
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He said, and the simplicity was worse than any flourish"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.16
leniency0.32
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.04
90.5573%