Run: 2026-09-23-01M37P4QEJSY7CS2GSWNRHTWD1

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3m 54s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The woman at the end of the bar had been nursing the same gin for the better part of an hour, and I'd narrowed her down to two types, waiting for someone or hiding from them, when she raised her hand for another and I saw the nails. Bitten to the quick. Bare. Eva used to paint them a different colour every week, blue on Monday, gold by Friday. Art-school hands, her mum called them. I hadn't seen those hands in three years. Behind me, the bookshelf had clicked shut over Silas and his meeting, sealing them into the back room with the maps and the whisky nobody was supposed to know about. He'd pressed the till key into my palm on his way past and given me one instruction, spoken low. "Nobody through that door you don't like the look of." The fridge hummed. The green sign outside laid a sickly stripe across the floorboards. I picked up her glass, still full, and walked it down the bar. "You've been holding that drink like it owes you money." Her head came up slow, the way animals lift theirs, weighing flight against stillness. Then the corner of her mouth tilted. The old tilt. The one that got us both detention in year nine. "Rory." "Eva." "You work in a bar." "I live above one. Different tax bracket entirely." She laughed, and it broke in the middle, like a plate set down too hard. Up close the years showed. She'd gone blonde, sleek and expensive, a camel coat folded on the stool beside her that cost more than my year. Her face had thinned into angles it never used to have, cheekbones like something carved by a person in a hurry. "You look expensive." "You look tired." "I deliver noodles for a woman called Yu-Fei Cheung. She thinks my name is Laila." I found a clean glass and poured her something with actual alcohol in it. "It's a glamour industry." "You." She pressed her fingers flat on the bar, steadying something. "Rory Carter. You were going to be a barrister. Little wig, big briefcase, judges frightened on sight." "You were going to fill galleries. Walls and walls of colour." "Life does what it likes." I slid the glass across. She looked at it, then at the shelves behind me, at the maps of places Silas had never admitted visiting and photographs of people he'd never name, the way people look around churches. "Three years, Eva. Not a text. Not a postcard." "You knew where I was." "Did I?" "You knew where home was." Home. She said it like a word in a foreign language she'd been tested on and failed. I set the bottle down and saw the ring properly. Plain gold, worn thin, turned and turned by her thumb in slow circles. "Someone married you." "Someone did." "I'd ask who. But my shift ends at midnight." "Careful." "I'm always careful." Her sleeve had ridden up. Four marks on her wrist, finger-shaped, yellowing at the edges. Old enough to be healing. Not old enough to be gone. I didn't want to say his name. I said it anyway. "Evan." Her chin came up. Defiance or armour, and after a second I understood there was no difference left between the two. "He was different after you left." "He was different before I left. That's the whole reason I left." "You ran." She turned the ring, around, around. "I stayed. You'd be amazed what staying turns into." The neon buzzed. Behind the wall, Silas's meeting murmured on, a low tide of men's voices. I wiped a glass that was already clean and thought about being seventeen, sitting on the barrage at Cardiff Bay with chips going cold between us, Eva sketching the sailboats on the back of her maths homework. London by spring, we'd said. A flat with a broken boiler and good light. She'd paint. I'd read law and hate every minute of it, but on my own terms, in my own city, a hundred miles from my father's disappointment. "You were supposed to come with me." "I know." "I waited at that coach station like a tit. Two hours. They had to put me on the last one." "I know." She looked at her hands. "I got as far as packing." "What stopped you?" She answered the ring instead of the question. Around and around it went, a little planet with her thumb for a moon. "He came to the flat the week after you went. Sat on our sofa. Cried, if you can picture it. Said you'd broken something in him." She took a sip of the drink, a small one, a drinker's sip, measured. "I thought, there it is. There's the crack. I can be the one who gets in before the weather does." "Eva." "He was quiet for a year after the wedding. Almost kind. You learn to take what's on offer." Her eyes came up, bright and level. "You of all people know that." "I of all people ran." "You did." She said it without heat, and that was worse. "And I stayed, and I stayed, and I stayed, and here we are, and you're pulling pints in Soho, and I'm, what's the word. Present. I'm present." The hatch behind the bar swung, and Silas came through with two coffees nobody had ordered. He set them down without asking and let his eyes do a slow lap of her, the coat, the sleeve, the wrist, the ring, and he took his time about all of it, the way a man takes his time reading a document he intends to keep. "Kitchen's open if you want something warm. On the house." "That's kind." "Old habit." He looked at me. "I'll be in the back." "Si." "Door stays unlocked." He said it to Eva, not to me. "The lock's new. The offer's older." He limped back through, the silver ring on his right hand catching the light as he went, and the hatch clicked shut behind him. Eva wrapped both hands around the coffee though she hadn't touched it. "He's not wrong, your barman. I am hungry. I haven't been properly hungry in years, do you know that? He used to watch me eat." She smiled at the coffee. "I used to be brave. You remember brave me?" "You punched out Craig Phipps for looking up my skirt." "He cried." "Like a fountain. I've never loved anyone more." Her eyes were wet and shining and she was still smiling, and then she set the coffee down, and the smile went with it. "Rory, I have to tell you why I'm here, and then you're going to be angry, and I want you to be angry, I've rehearsed this, I've had a coach journey of six hours to rehearse this." "Go on." "Tuesday I put the house key in the fish tank and got on a coach with a rucksack and four hundred pounds of his money." Her voice stayed level. That was the worst part, how level it stayed. "Friday morning he was awake before me. He didn't shout. He stood at the bedroom door and told me, very calmly, exactly where I'd run to. He said it like a postcode. He said, 'She lives above a bar in Soho, doesn't she.'" The clean glass slipped in my hand. I set it down before it could fall. "He's been out looking since Friday, Rory. He's been out looking for both of us." "He doesn't know the name of the bar." "He knows I'd know it." The bell over the door rang. Old brass, Silas had oiled it that very morning, and it sounded bright and clear and cheerful, a sound with no idea what it was walking in on. Eva went still. All of her, still, the way rabbits go when the hawk's shadow crosses the field. Her eyes fixed on a point past my shoulder and stayed there. "Don't turn around," she said. "Rory. Don't." The neon stripe on the floorboards shivered. A pair of shoes had stopped just inside the door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.19
leniency0.381
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1354
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1354
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences69
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tends to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1354
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions14
wordCount823
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
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Friday1
Silas5
Cardiff1
Bay1
Eva5
persons
0"Silas"
1"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Bay"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1354
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs74
mean18.3
std19.21
cv1.05
sampleLengths
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127
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349
410
527
610
734
81
91
105
118
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133
143
1533
1628
1711
185
1938
209
215
222
235
2417
2523
263
272
289
291
303
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3211
331
3421
356
3612
3717
3894
397
402
4120
4213
433
4422
4560
461
4731
485
4938
95.09% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences69
matches
0"was supposed"
1"been tested"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs139
matches
0"was still smiling"
1"was walking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences120
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount825
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.025454545454545455
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0024242424242424242
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean11.28
std10.3
cv0.913
sampleLengths
048
14
21
316
46
58
630
719
810
93
1011
1113
1210
1314
147
153
1610
171
181
195
208
2115
225
2321
2421
253
263
2729
284
2911
3017
3111
325
335
3433
359
365
372
385
391
4016
4110
4213
433
442
459
461
473
485
4910
50.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.35833333333333334
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners43
51.28% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Then the corner of her"
ratio0.015
10.77% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences65
matches
0"I hadn't seen those hands"
1"He'd pressed the till key"
2"I picked up her glass,"
3"Her head came up slow,"
4"She laughed, and it broke"
5"She'd gone blonde, sleek and"
6"Her face had thinned into"
7"I found a clean glass"
8"She pressed her fingers flat"
9"I slid the glass across."
10"She looked at it, then"
11"She said it like a"
12"I set the bottle down"
13"Her sleeve had ridden up."
14"I didn't want to say"
15"I said it anyway."
16"Her chin came up."
17"She turned the ring, around,"
18"I wiped a glass that"
19"I'd read law and hate"
ratio0.523
52.31% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences65
matches
0"The woman at the end"
1"Eva used to paint them"
2"Art-school hands, her mum called"
3"I hadn't seen those hands"
4"He'd pressed the till key"
5"The fridge hummed."
6"The green sign outside laid"
7"I picked up her glass,"
8"Her head came up slow,"
9"The old tilt."
10"The one that got us"
11"She laughed, and it broke"
12"She'd gone blonde, sleek and"
13"Her face had thinned into"
14"I found a clean glass"
15"She pressed her fingers flat"
16"I slid the glass across."
17"She looked at it, then"
18"She said it like a"
19"I set the bottle down"
ratio0.815
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She'd gone blonde, sleek and expensive, a camel coat folded on the stool beside her that cost more than my year."
1"I wiped a glass that was already clean and thought about being seventeen, sitting on the barrage at Cardiff Bay with chips going cold between us, Eva sketching …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.063
leniency0.127
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.032
88.1389%