Run: 2026-09-23-01M37PD5WGS0NR408ZM0FGS7K1

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped out of my hand when she said my name. Not Rory. Not Carter. *Aurora*, the full three syllables, the way only Cardiff ever said it, with the vowels stretched long like washing on a line. The pint glass hit the rubber mat behind the bar, bounced once, and rolled against my boot without breaking. Silas glanced down at it, then at me, then at the woman on the stool by the taps. "Christ alive. It is you." Nia Pritchard. Twelve years of sleepovers, four years of shared lecture notes, one terrible fringe we'd cut on each other in her mam's bathroom in Canton. She had a new coat, camel wool, too good for Soho on a Thursday. Same freckles. Same gap between her front teeth she used to whistle through at boys on Queen Street. I picked up the glass and set it in the rack. "Nia." "That's it? *Nia?*" She laughed, but it went wrong halfway through and came out thin. "Seven years, and I get my own name back like a receipt." "What are you drinking?" "Whatever you're pouring, bach. God. Look at you." I poured her a gin and tonic because she'd drunk gin and tonics since she was sixteen and pretending to be her Auntie Glenys. Lime, not lemon. Two ice cubes, never three. My hands remembered before I told them to. She watched me do it. Her eyes went to the lime. "You remembered." "It's a gin and tonic. It isn't a state secret." Silas drifted down the bar with a cloth over his shoulder, favouring the left leg the way he did when the damp got into the Nest's old bones. He wiped a spot that didn't need wiping. The silver ring on his right hand caught the green light bleeding in from the sign outside. "A friend, Rory?" "From home." "Ah. Home." He said it like a word in a language he'd once spoken and since let go. "Then the drink's on the house, madam. Any friend of Rory's is rarer than you'd imagine." Nia's smile flickered at him, then back to me. *Rory.* I watched her turn the name over, find it didn't fit the girl she'd known, and put it down again. Silas left us. Not far. He never went far. The Nest filled up the way it always did after ten, office workers loosening their ties, a pair of Italian students arguing over a map on the wall that showed Europe with borders nobody had used since 1938. Somebody fed the jukebox. Nina Simone. The black-and-white photographs along the back wall watched us all with the patience of the dead. Nia wrapped both hands around her glass. "Your hair's short." "It's practical." "You had it down to your waist. You used to sit on it by accident. Remember in Year Nine, when it got caught in the bus door and Mr Hughes had to..." "I remember." "Right." She drank. "Course you do." Silence. The comfortable kind used to live between us. This one had elbows. "What brings you to London?" "Weekend away. Anniversary." She held up her left hand. A diamond, modest, a platinum band worn smooth already. "Five years in June." "Congratulations." "You don't even want to know who?" "Should I?" She looked at me for a long moment. Then she laughed again, that same broken laugh, and shook her head. "You were never like this. You know that? You were the loud one. You were the one who climbed the fence at Roath Park at three in the morning because you wanted to see the swans sleeping. You made me come with you. I ripped my good jeans." "The swans weren't even sleeping." "No. They chased us." Something softened in her face. "You screamed so loud a man called the police." I almost smiled. It got as far as the corner of my mouth and stopped there, like a dog at the end of its lead. She saw it. She saw it stop. "Your mam asks after you." I wiped the bar. The same spot Silas had wiped. "Every Sunday at chapel. *Have you heard from Aurora, Nia love?* Every single Sunday. I tell her you're busy. I tell her London's mad. I tell her you're doing ever so well." Her voice cracked on *well*. "I didn't know if you were alive, Aurora. None of us did. You just went. You didn't even take your graduation photos off her mantelpiece." "She can keep them." "That's not the..." She stopped. Pressed her lips together. "She's poorly. Your dad won't say, but she is. Her hands shake now." My cloth stopped moving. Across the bar, Silas lifted his head. Just slightly. The way a man lifts his head when he hears a car door on a quiet street. "How poorly?" "Poorly enough that you should ring her." I folded the cloth. Once. Twice. Set it down square with the edge of the bar. Nia reached across and caught my wrist before I could pull it back. Her thumb found the scar, the little silver crescent below the heel of my hand. She traced it the way she used to when we were eight and she'd sat with me in A&E for four hours, holding my good hand, singing Spice Girls songs off-key to stop me crying. "I was there when you did this." "I know." "Garden wall. You said you could walk the whole length without falling." "I nearly did." "You nearly did." Her thumb kept moving. "I was always there. Wasn't I? Always." I didn't answer. Her grip tightened. "Except the once." The jukebox changed songs. Something with brass. One of the Italian students knocked over a chair and apologised to it. I took my wrist back. Gently. It took some doing. "Don't." "I heard you." It came out of her in a rush, like it had been sitting at the back of her throat for seven years waiting for the door to open. "That night. You were knocking. I was right there in the hall, Aurora, I was standing *right there*, and I heard you saying my name through the letterbox, and I didn't..." "Nia." "...I didn't open it, because I was scared, because he'd rung me first and said you'd had a funny turn and if you came round I wasn't to let you in, you'd only say things, and I *believed* him, or I told myself I believed him, and in the morning you were gone and your mam was on the phone crying and I..." "Nia. Stop." She stopped. Mascara ran in two neat lines to her jaw. She didn't wipe it. I looked at the diamond on her hand. Modest. Worn smooth. Five years in June. I'd left in March. Seven years ago. Which meant two years of him being kind to her. Two years of flowers and phone calls and *I just want to know she's safe, Nia, you understand, you're the only one who understands.* He'd always been good at that. At being understood. "Who's the lucky man, Nia?" She didn't answer. Her eyes went to her glass. Her phone lit up on the bar between us. She moved to cover it. Too slow. I'd spent seven years learning to be faster than people's hands. *Evan: Found parking finally. Which one's the bar? Green sign?* A second message landed under the first before either of us breathed. *Evan: Nevermind. See it.* "I didn't know." Her voice came out small. "I swear on my nan's grave I didn't know you worked here. We saw the sign from the taxi. I just wanted one drink on my own while he parked. I didn't *know*..." Behind me, the bottles on the back shelf chimed against each other. Silas had set down the tray he'd been carrying. When I turned my head, he was already walking, not limping now, the bad knee forgotten, and his right hand went beneath the bar to the place where he kept the thing we never talked about. "Rory. Back room. Now." I didn't move. My own hand had found the paring knife beside the limes. The green neon over the door buzzed and stuttered, and through the frosted glass a tall shape stopped, lifted a hand to shade its eyes, and reached for the handle.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.189
leniency0.377
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1388
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1388
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"comfortable"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"silence"
2"comfortable"
3"traced"
4"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences103
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences103
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen63
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords45
totalWords1388
ratio0.032
matches
0"Aurora"
1"Nia?"
2"Rory."
3"Have you heard from Aurora, Nia love?"
4"well"
5"right there"
6"believed"
7"I just want to know she's safe, Nia, you understand, you're the only one who understands."
8"Evan: Found parking finally. Which one's the bar? Green sign?"
9"Evan: Nevermind. See it."
10"know"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount915
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity0.66
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Rory2
Carter1
Cardiff1
Pritchard1
Canton1
Soho1
Thursday1
Queen1
Street1
Auntie1
Glenys1
Nest2
Nia5
Italian2
Europe1
Simone1
Silence1
Silas6
Pressed1
Spice1
Girls1
June1
March1
Found1
Nevermind1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Carter"
2"Pritchard"
3"Queen"
4"Nest"
5"Nia"
6"Simone"
7"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Canton"
2"Soho"
3"Street"
4"Europe"
5"June"
6"March"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1388
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean17.57
std18.79
cv1.07
sampleLengths
012
163
25
358
411
51
627
74
88
940
1011
112
1210
1353
143
152
1634
1730
189
1960
207
213
222
2332
242
256
2613
275
2822
291
307
312
3220
3348
345
3518
3625
377
385
3910
4062
414
4222
434
4426
452
467
4716
4863
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences103
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs159
matches
0"was already walking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount918
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.030501089324618737
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0054466230936819175
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean9.51
std10.34
cv1.087
sampleLengths
012
12
22
322
419
518
65
72
824
914
102
1116
1211
131
1415
1512
164
178
1824
193
205
218
225
236
242
2510
2628
278
2817
293
302
3118
3216
339
3421
353
362
374
3838
394
402
4116
427
433
442
4532
462
473
483
491
69.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4452054794520548
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners65
40.16% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences83
matches
0"Then she laughed again, that"
ratio0.012
32.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences83
matches
0"She had a new coat,"
1"I picked up the glass"
2"She laughed, but it went"
3"I poured her a gin"
4"My hands remembered before I"
5"She watched me do it."
6"Her eyes went to the"
7"He wiped a spot that"
8"He said it like a"
9"He never went far."
10"She held up her left"
11"She looked at me for"
12"I almost smiled."
13"It got as far as"
14"She saw it."
15"She saw it stop."
16"I wiped the bar."
17"Her voice cracked on *well"
18"My cloth stopped moving."
19"I folded the cloth."
ratio0.47
62.41% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences83
matches
0"The glass slipped out of"
1"*Aurora*, the full three syllables,"
2"The pint glass hit the"
3"Silas glanced down at it,"
4"She had a new coat,"
5"I picked up the glass"
6"She laughed, but it went"
7"I poured her a gin"
8"Lime, not lemon."
9"My hands remembered before I"
10"She watched me do it."
11"Her eyes went to the"
12"Silas drifted down the bar"
13"He wiped a spot that"
14"The silver ring on his"
15"He said it like a"
16"Nia's smile flickered at him,"
17"*Rory.* I watched her turn"
18"Silas left us."
19"He never went far."
ratio0.795
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The Nest filled up the way it always did after ten, office workers loosening their ties, a pair of Italian students arguing over a map on the wall that showed E…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.038
leniency0.075
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.038
89.2936%