Run: 2026-09-23-01M37PEYSZTD3NQQ7PPK4ES8PD

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The crate of Tsingtao slipped on the cellar stairs and Rory caught it against her hip, swearing in Welsh, which felt more satisfying than swearing in English. She hauled it up into the bar, set it on the counter, and that was when she noticed the stranger. He sat at the far end, hunched over a glass of water with ice in it, poured into a tumbler as if it were whisky. Grey suit, cheap and clean. His hands lay flat on the bar the way a man flattens his hands when he's stopping them from shaking. He'd been in the Nest for four minutes and hadn't touched the water. "Silas around?" His voice had the flattened vowels of a man who'd spent decades abroad and wanted you to know it. "Depends who's asking." "Tell him it's Hale." He paused, then added, quieter, "Marcus Hale. He'll want a minute. Might even give me one." Rory went through to the back. Silas was in the storeroom with the delivery ledger, silver signet ring clicking against the pencil as he ran down the columns. "Customer. Says his name's Hale." The pencil stopped. Not a dramatic stop. A machine stopping. "Marcus Hale?" "That's the one. Water drinker. Suit's seen better decades." Silas set the pencil down on the ledger, square with the edge, and stood there a moment with his weight on his right leg. Then he came out, the limp dragging its usual half-beat behind him, and stopped at the end of the bar. Twenty-five years fell open between them like a trapdoor. "Hale." "Si." The stranger's mouth worked around something that wanted to be a smile and couldn't manage it. "You've gone grey at the sides." "You've gone everywhere at the sides. What are you doing in my bar?" "Drinking water. Fifteen years sober, if you can credit it." He lifted the tumbler an inch, a toast to nobody. "The ice is for the ritual. Hands need something to hold." Silas came around the bar, slowly, and pulled two glasses from the shelf. He filled one with soda water, kept whisky for himself. Rory, wiping down the taps three stools down, made herself small and uninteresting, which was a skill she'd learned before she'd learned to ride a bike. "You look terrible, Marcus." "You should've seen me chemo week." The word sat on the bar between them. Silas's hand stilled on his glass. "Pancreatic," Hale said. "The polite kind, if there is one. Six months, they tell me, give or take. I've spent three of them working out how to say the next part, so bear with me while I get the preamble wrong." "Say it however you like. It's a free country. I've checked." "You always were generous with the things that cost you nothing." Silas drank. Rory watched the old man's face over the rim of the glass and saw something she'd never seen there in two years of pulling crates and pints: uncertainty, filed down to its smallest possible size, but unmistakable. "Prague," Hale said. "I don't discuss Prague." "You limped in here on the strength of Prague, Si. I'd say you carry it around." He turned his tumbler a quarter rotation, the ice ticking against the glass. "The route was burned. You've spent twenty-five years believing it was your fault. The dead drop, the timing, the whole sodding cascade. You've had a quarter century of thinking Marcus Hale ran and Marcus Hale left you on that bridge and Marcus Hale never once picked up a phone." The green of the neon sign pooled in the whisky bottle behind the bar and threw a sick little glow up the wall. Rory stopped pretending to wipe anything. "They had Lena," Hale said. Silas set his glass down. The click of it was the loudest sound in Soho. "Kolar's people. They took her off the street in the February, before either of us flew out. I found the photographs in my flat on the Monday. Her at the market. Her at the bus stop. Her asleep." His voice didn't break. It had been sanded down so many times there was nothing left to splinter. "They told me the route, or they told me where she'd be buried. I gave them the route. You walked into it. They put a bullet through your knee instead of your head because Kolar wanted a message delivered, and the message was that he knew, and I've never been sure whether the mercy of it was mercy or just theatre." The silence stretched. Rory found she'd stopped breathing somewhere around the word photographs. "You could have told me," Silas said at last. Quiet. Even. Worse than shouting. "With what mouth? They had her for eleven months, Si. And then she came home and she never once asked what I'd traded, which is how I knew she'd guessed. She died in 2009 and the last thing she said to me was that I was a good man, and I've been living on that lie like it was a pension." He finally took a sip of the water. The ice rattled. "I'm not here for absolution. Absolution is for men with better lawyers. I'm here because I'm dying and I find I can't do it with you still thinking the worst of me was the truest thing about me." Silas turned his signet ring once around his finger. Rory had watched him do that a hundred times, polishing a thought, and she'd never once seen the thought underneath until now. "Lena knew?" "Lena forgave. Different discipline entirely." "You should have let me carry it, Marcus. It was mine to carry. You had no right to make my ruin your secret." "No right." Hale laughed, a dry husk of a laugh. "Twenty-five years and that's the grievance. Not the leg. The bookkeeping." "The leg healed crooked. The bookkeeping never did." Rory dried the same glass she'd been drying for two minutes and wished herself anywhere else, and simultaneously wished to be nowhere else on earth. The two old men sat with their drinks, and the years between them lay on the bar like an autopsy, and neither of them would look directly at it. Then Silas said, "Kolar." Hale went still. "You said Kolar's people. Present tense, earlier, when you talked about him wanting a message. Men like Kolar don't stop wanting messages." Silas leaned forward, and now the quiet authority Rory knew came back into him like blood into a numb limb. "Why are you really here, Marcus? Dying men send letters. They don't fly to Soho and sit in a stranger's bar nursing ice." "You always could strip a man to the studs." Hale looked at his hands. Flat on the bar again. "Because Kolar's not in Prague anymore, Si. He's been retired eleven years, and retired men get sentimental, and sentimental men go through their old files to feel alive." He raised his eyes, and Rory saw the fear in them, plain as the neon. "He wrote to me. Three weeks ago. Friendly letter. Asked how I was keeping. Asked, and I quote, whether I'd ever had occasion to revisit our mutual acquaintance Blackwood, and whether the man still kept his little nest of informants above a pub." The glass in Rory's hand stopped moving. "He knows about the bar," Silas said. "He knows about the bar, the street, the sign. He knows you take in strays." Hale's gaze flicked, once, involuntary, straight at her, then back to Silas. "He knows about the girl who lives upstairs." Somewhere out on the street, footsteps slowed near the green neon, and stopped.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
60.47% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"He paused then [then]"
1"The stranger's mouth worked around [around]"
2"Hale's gaze flicked once [once]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.395
leniency0.791
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.14
92.16% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1275
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.39% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1275
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"the last thing"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"silence"
2"the last thing"
3"flicked"
4"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences58
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences83
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen69
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1275
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
56.98% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount645
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.86
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Tsingtao1
Rory11
Welsh1
English1
Nest1
Silas12
Soho1
Quiet1
Hale7
Flat1
persons
0"Tsingtao"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
3"Hale"
places
0"Welsh"
1"English"
2"Nest"
3"Soho"
globalScore0.57
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences36
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1275
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences83
matches
0"do that a"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean26.02
std28.46
cv1.094
sampleLengths
047
163
221
33
420
528
65
710
82
99
1044
119
121
1323
1413
1531
1649
174
186
1914
2041
2111
2211
2339
243
254
2678
2729
285
2915
30117
3113
3214
33110
3431
352
365
3723
3821
398
4054
414
423
4365
44105
457
467
4735
4813
99.21% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"been sanded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs112
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences83
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount647
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.03245749613601236
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0061823802163833074
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences83
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences83
mean15.36
std14.21
cv0.925
sampleLengths
027
120
225
35
420
513
621
73
820
96
1022
115
123
134
143
152
169
1724
1820
199
201
2117
226
2313
2420
2511
2613
2710
2826
294
306
318
326
333
3438
3511
3611
372
3837
393
404
4129
4249
4323
446
455
465
4710
4842
4914
67.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4457831325301205
totalSentences83
uniqueOpeners37
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences51
matches
0"Then he came out, the"
1"Then Silas said,"
2"Somewhere out on the street,"
ratio0.059
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences51
matches
0"She hauled it up into"
1"He sat at the far"
2"His hands lay flat on"
3"He'd been in the Nest"
4"His voice had the flattened"
5"He paused, then added, quieter"
6"He lifted the tumbler an"
7"He filled one with soda"
8"He turned his tumbler a"
9"His voice didn't break"
10"It had been sanded down"
11"He finally took a sip"
12"He raised his eyes, and"
ratio0.255
38.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences51
matches
0"The crate of Tsingtao slipped"
1"She hauled it up into"
2"He sat at the far"
3"His hands lay flat on"
4"He'd been in the Nest"
5"His voice had the flattened"
6"He paused, then added, quieter"
7"Rory went through to the"
8"Silas was in the storeroom"
9"The pencil stopped."
10"A machine stopping."
11"Silas set the pencil down"
12"The stranger's mouth worked around"
13"He lifted the tumbler an"
14"Silas came around the bar,"
15"He filled one with soda"
16"Rory, wiping down the taps"
17"The word sat on the"
18"Silas's hand stilled on his"
19"Rory watched the old man's"
ratio0.843
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The crate of Tsingtao slipped on the cellar stairs and Rory caught it against her hip, swearing in Welsh, which felt more satisfying than swearing in English."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He turned, the ice ticking against the glass"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Hale laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.163
leniency0.326
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.047
89.0097%