Run: 2026-09-23-01M37PP2Y4RNHPF73PGTZBQBFS

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1m 1s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain caught before she'd even registered the face. Rory had thrown the door open on the third knock because Eva never knocked like that, three sharp raps like a debt being called in, and because nobody else knocked at all. The gap widened four inches. Platinum hair, slicked back. One amber eye, one black one, both of them fixed on her with the patience of a man who had rehearsed this moment and knew exactly how it would go wrong. She slammed the door. His cane slid into the gap, ivory handle angled so the wood struck steel instead of knuckle. "Charming. Three months of silence, and this is my welcome." "Go away, Lucien." She leaned her weight into the door. The cane didn't so much as flex. Of course it didn't. Half-demon, half-gym-rat, all bastard. "You have a lovely new deadbolt, by the way. The middle one. Installed crooked. Tell Silas his drill bits are for doors, not for the pint glasses he keeps 'accidentally' breaking." "Silas didn't install it. I did." "Even better. You've been busy." "Busy staying away from you." She eased the pressure off the door by a fraction, enough to look at him through the gap properly. Charcoal suit, pressed to a knife's edge. Fresh cut above his collar where someone had caught him recently, thin and pink. She filed that away. "You look like a man who lost a fight." "I look like a man who ended one. There's a difference, and the other party is learning it in hospital." "Congratulations. Was it worth the trip up my stairs? Because you can leave the same way." "Rory." "Don't." The name in his mouth, that soft French roll on the R, like he was tasting it. Three months ago that sound had undone her. Now it just made her jaw ache from clenching. "You don't get to stand at my door and say my name like we're colleagues. Colleagues tell each other things. Colleagues don't let a girl find out from a bartender that her friend knew there was a bounty on her head and said nothing." "You were never in danger." "You don't get to decide that!" The shout surprised them both. Below her feet, through the floorboards, the bass from Silas' sound system thudded on, indifferent. Somewhere down there a dozen strangers were drinking and laughing and none of them could hear her heart slamming against her ribs like a fist on a door. Lucien lowered his voice, and somehow that was worse. "The hunter Evan hired was a Lachlan imp. Nasty temper, worse eyesight. It needed your scent, fresh, and it needed you moving through open ground. I kept you inside that week. I made you run deliveries to the closed shops, the indoor ones. You thought I was being overprotective." "You let me think you'd just grown bored of me." "I let you think I was a coward. It was kinder." "Kinder." She laughed, and it came out cracked. "You kissed me on that rooftop and then you vanished, and when I finally got the truth out of Silas, you know what he told me? That you'd known about the imp for nine days. Nine. You sat across from me at that café on Whitechapel, watched me eat noodles, and said nothing." "Because if you'd known, you'd have gone after Evan yourself." The chain was still on. She hadn't taken it off. That was the only reason her hands were shaking where he couldn't see them, wrapped around the edge of the door. "You're right," she said. "I would have. And I wouldn't have needed a fixer with a fancy stick to hold my hand through it." "No. You'd have needed a coroner." He tilted his head, and the amber eye caught the hallway light like a coin at the bottom of a well. "Evan Carter is many things. Stupid is not among them. He hired a supernatural tracker to find the woman who ran from him. Do you understand what that costs? What that says about how far he intends to take it?" "You're saying this to frighten me." "I'm saying this because you deserve the truth, and because I owe you the truth, and because I have spent three months owing it to you and finding no door in this city that would open to me. So." He straightened the cuff of his sleeve, a small precise motion, buying himself a second. Rory recognised the tell. She hated that she still recognised the tells. "May I come in, Aurora?" Aurora. Not Rory. He only used her full name when the armour was coming off. "No." "Understood." He didn't move. "Then I'll say the rest through a four-inch gap, and you can hate me in comfort." "Lucien, whatever this is, whatever favour you need, whatever item needs finding or person needs scaring, I'm not interested. I deliver noodles. I avoid my mother's phone calls. I'm rebuilding. I was doing fine before you knocked." "You were doing fine because I made sure of it." "Excuse me?" "The imp failed. Evan does not accept failure. So he hired something else." He paused, and Lucien Moreau never paused. He spoke four languages and none of them ever slowed him down. "Two nights ago, a thing crossed the Thames that my contacts cannot name. It paid in old coin. It asked questions about a woman with black hair and a Welsh accent who works for a Chinese restaurant and lives above a bar. It asked by the name Malphora." The floor seemed to tilt, just slightly, the way it did when a motorbike took a corner too fast. Malphora. Nobody used that name. Nobody knew it, except the people from that night in March, the ones who'd seen what she'd done to the creature in the alley behind the Golden Empress, the ones who'd started whispering that quiet Rory Carter was something other than a girl who'd fled a bad boyfriend. "Yu-Fei," she said. "Yu-Fei wouldn't sell me out." "No. But Yu-Fei's cousin gambles, and the cousin talks when he loses. Rory, listen to me. I did not come here to be forgiven. I came here because whatever is hunting you cannot be fought with a delivery bag and a fire escape, and because when I heard its name, or the shape of its name, I left a very profitable negotiation in Soho without collecting my fee." His voice dropped, and the black eye and the amber eye were both, for once, saying the same thing. "I ran here. In the rain. Look at my shoes." She looked. Hand-stitched leather, ruined, the sheen of them gone grey and stiff with water. Lucien Moreau did not run anywhere, and he certainly did not ruin shoes doing it. "Rory." His hand closed over hers where it gripped the door's edge. Warm. His thumb found the small crescent scar on her wrist without looking, the way he always found it, the way Evan had once found it too, tracing it with a knife held flat and a smile that promised to make a matching one. She snatched her hand back. "Don't." "You're right. Forgive me." "Say what you came to say and go." "Turn the door around, Rory." "What?" "Look at the outside of your door. At eye height. I've been standing in front of it for a full minute hoping I was wrong." Her stomach dropped through the floorboards, past the bar, into the cellar. The chain rattled as she slid it free. She pulled the door wide, past him, past the ruined shoes, and turned. Someone had drawn a small crescent moon on the wood. Eye height. Precise. Drawn in something dark that had dried in ridges, and it was still faintly, sweetly, metallic. Lucien came to stand behind her, close enough that she could feel the cold coming off his wet suit. "He knows you're home," he said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.234
leniency0.468
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.68% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1325
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"sweetly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"sweetly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.36% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1325
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"clenching"
count1
3
word"tracing"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"clenching"
3"tracing"
4"stomach"
5"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences59
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences59
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen88
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1325
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount644
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.62
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva1
Charcoal1
French1
Three1
Rory4
Lucien4
Moreau2
March1
Golden1
Empress1
Carter1
Warm1
Evan1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Carter"
5"Evan"
places
0"March"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences36
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1325
matches(empty)
95.74% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences94
matches
0"hated that she"
1"used that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean26.5
std25.81
cv0.974
sampleLengths
09
172
221
310
43
522
631
76
85
958
1020
1116
121
1379
145
156
1648
179
1849
1910
2011
2161
2210
2331
2424
2567
266
2771
2815
291
3020
3137
3210
332
3480
3572
368
3797
3830
3961
401
414
428
435
441
4525
4633
4729
4819
496
99.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"being called"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs112
matches
0"was tasting"
1"were drinking"
2"were shaking"
3"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences94
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount676
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.02514792899408284
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005917159763313609
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean14.1
std15.11
cv1.072
sampleLengths
09
132
25
34
431
54
617
710
83
97
107
114
124
1331
146
155
1624
177
1814
194
209
2120
2216
231
2418
258
269
2744
285
296
305
3115
3228
339
3449
3510
3611
378
3853
3910
405
415
4221
434
4420
4527
4640
476
4854
494
86.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5425531914893617
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences49
matches
0"Of course it didn't."
1"Somewhere down there a dozen"
ratio0.041
56.73% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences49
matches
0"She slammed the door."
1"His cane slid into the"
2"She leaned her weight into"
3"She eased the pressure off"
4"She filed that away."
5"She laughed, and it came"
6"She hadn't taken it off."
7"He tilted his head, and"
8"He straightened the cuff of"
9"She hated that she still"
10"He only used her full"
11"He didn't move"
12"He paused, and Lucien Moreau"
13"He spoke four languages and"
14"His voice dropped, and the"
15"His hand closed over hers"
16"His thumb found the small"
17"She snatched her hand back."
18"Her stomach dropped through the"
19"She pulled the door wide,"
ratio0.408
62.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences49
matches
0"The chain caught before she'd"
1"Rory had thrown the door"
2"The gap widened four inches."
3"Platinum hair, slicked back."
4"She slammed the door."
5"His cane slid into the"
6"She leaned her weight into"
7"The cane didn't so much"
8"She eased the pressure off"
9"Charcoal suit, pressed to a"
10"She filed that away."
11"The name in his mouth,"
12"The shout surprised them both."
13"Lucien lowered his voice, and"
14"She laughed, and it came"
15"The chain was still on."
16"She hadn't taken it off."
17"That was the only reason"
18"He tilted his head, and"
19"He straightened the cuff of"
ratio0.796
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences49
matches
0"Now it just made her"
ratio0.02
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Somewhere down there a dozen strangers were drinking and laughing and none of them could hear her heart slamming against her ribs like a fist on a door."
1"Nobody knew it, except the people from that night in March, the ones who'd seen what she'd done to the creature in the alley behind the Golden Empress, the ones…"
2"His thumb found the small crescent scar on her wrist without looking, the way he always found it, the way Evan had once found it too, tracing it with a knife he…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She eased, enough to look at him through the gap properly"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.085
leniency0.17
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.043
88.9800%