Run: 2026-09-23-01M37PWDASGZZDB4V1BY6Q9QVC

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1m 4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt gave under her hand and the door swung wide onto a charcoal suit and a smile she'd spent seven months forgetting. "You always did check the peephole second," Lucien said. Rory drove her palm into his chest and shoved him back over the threshold. He staggered a step, caught himself on the ivory-handled cane, and had the nerve to look delighted about it. "Deadbolts, Lucien. Three of them. What part of that says please come round for a chat?" "The part where you installed them after Marseille." He straightened his lapels. "A locked door is a conversation starter in my line of work." "Your line of work." She kept the door wide open behind her. Brick Lane breathed cumin and frying onions up the stairwell from the curry house below, and somewhere a delivery moped coughed itself to life. "Your line of work is why I stopped answering your calls." "Fourteen calls, actually. I counted." "Fifteen. You forgot the one at three in the morning." "Ah. That one I remembered. You picked up." His amber eye caught the hallway bulb; the black one swallowed it whole. "You said my name before you hung up. I've had warmer rejections." Ptolemy padded out from behind a drift of research scrolls, took one look at the doorway, and arched against Lucien's trouser leg without a flicker of feline loyalty. "Traitor," Rory said. The cat purred louder. "You see? Even your cat appreciates good tailoring." He bent and scratched Ptolemy behind one striped ear, then looked up at her through pale lashes. "May I come in? The stairwell smells like your neighbour's cigarettes and I'd rather be poisoned by your company instead." "You don't get to be charming. There's a queue for charming and you lost your place in it." "And yet you haven't closed the door." Because closing the door meant touching him again, even second-hand, even through painted wood. Because Eva wasn't home until midnight and the flat felt like a held breath, and because some ugly, honest part of her had heard his voice and unclenched for the first time since spring. She stepped aside. She hated herself for it in three languages, one of which she'd learned from him. Lucien crossed the room like he owned the lease, cane clicking once against the floorboards, and settled into the sagging armchair Eva had rescued from a skip. Books avalanched off the cushion. He caught a falling hardback, read the spine, and raised an eyebrow at her. "Demonology of the British Isles. Volume Three." "Eva's." "It's on your side of the sofa. Dog-eared at chapter nine." He set it down with terrible gentleness. "Chapter nine is binding rituals. You've been reading about binding rituals, Rory." "Maybe I'm planning to bind someone to a chair and ask him questions." "You'd need my true name for that." A flash of teeth. "I'd trade it, you know. For the right asking price." "Your true name for an explanation of Marseille. That's the trade." The humour left his face the way tide leaves a beach, slow and then all at once. He turned the cane between his gloved fingers, one slow revolution, and for a moment she could see the half of him he kept banked behind the suits and the four languages. The air over the radiator shimmered. Just faintly. Just once. "You were going to die in that warehouse," he said. "I was going to negotiate." "You were going to negotiate with a Vein Court creditor who eats negotiators, Rory. I made a choice. I'd make it again." "You made a choice without me." Her voice came out flatter than she wanted, and that was worse than shouting, and they both knew it. "You walked me out of there with a bag over my head like I was cargo, you put me on a ferry, and then you vanished for four months. Four months, Lucien. I sent word through six different brokers. Silas. That witch in Camden with the eye patch. Nothing." "I know. I received the bills for the brokers." "You received..." She laughed, and it came out with an edge that could open envelopes. "You received the bills. Did you also receive the part where I didn't know if you were alive? Did you receive the part where I stood at that ferry rail in Calais like an idiot, waiting for you to come explain, and the horn blew, and you never came?" "Yes." The word dropped like a stone into still water. "Every part. I have the receipts." Silence. Ptolemy jumped onto the bookshelf and knocked a jar of incense sticks over, one by one, deliberate as a metronome. "Why are you here?" Rory asked. "You didn't call." "Lucien." "Someone's asking about you." He reached into his jacket and produced a photograph, creased down the middle, and held it out. "A man came to my office in Soho nine days ago. Paid in old money, which is never a good sign. He wanted to know the delivery routes of a courier for the Golden Empress." She took the photograph without meaning to. Her stomach dropped before her eyes even finished looking, because she already knew the face, she'd know it in the dark, she'd know it from the grave. Evan smiled up at her from a pub garden she recognised. The Crescent. Cardiff. Three streets from her childhood bedroom. "That's not possible," she said. "He signed the papers. There's a restraining order, there's..." "He crossed the river to Soho, Rory. Old money buys new paperwork. It buys addresses." Lucien rose from the chair, and this close she could smell him, bergamot and smoke, and underneath it something older that her hindbrain recognised and her pride refused to. "I told him I'd never heard of you. He believed me. Then he paid me to find you anyway, because he doesn't know what I am." "And what did you do with the contract?" "What do you think?" "I think you took his money and came here to warn me, because you're allergic to doing the sensible thing, which would be going to the police." "The police can't help you with what he bought." Lucien's voice went quiet, and quiet from him was the loudest thing in the room. "He didn't just buy your address, Rory. He bought a name. Someone at the Court sold it to him. Malphora." The room tilted. She sat down on the arm of the sofa before her knees could vote against her. "That name has been dead for two years. I buried it. You helped me bury it." "I helped you bury it," he said. "I did not help you kill it. And now a man who hits women owns the true name of something the Vein Court wants badly enough to pay a fixer in Soho to trace." He checked his watch, and the ease drained out of his posture, vertebra by vertebra. "Which is why we have a problem larger than our history." "We?" "Your friend's building." He moved to the window and eased the curtain back a centimetre with one gloved finger. "There's a car across the street that has been there since before I arrived. Two men inside. They've watched this window four times in the last twenty minutes, and one of them is holding what looks like a ledger." "You said Evan doesn't know what you are." "He doesn't." The amber eye found hers in the window's reflection, and for once there was nothing amused in it at all. "But whoever sold him your name does. And they sent an escort, Rory, which means they don't expect you to come quietly." The streetlamp outside flickered. Down on Brick Lane, a car door opened. Two of them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The word dropped like [like]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.035
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1296
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1296
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"flicker"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"grave"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"eyebrow"
2"shimmered"
3"silence"
4"stomach"
5"grave"
6"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences52
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1296
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount611
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory3
Brick2
Lane2
Ptolemy3
Lucien5
Eva2
Silence1
Crescent1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Lucien"
3"Eva"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
74.24% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences33
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a held breath, and because so"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1296
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean24.92
std20.91
cv0.839
sampleLengths
024
19
233
316
424
547
65
710
833
928
107
1145
1218
137
1466
1546
167
171
1830
1913
2021
2111
2259
2310
245
2522
2674
279
2864
2916
3021
316
323
331
3456
3534
3620
3714
3870
398
404
4127
4244
4319
4416
4567
461
4758
488
4944
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs101
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences88
ratio0.011
matches
0"\"Ah. That one I remembered. You picked up.\" His amber eye caught the hallway bulb; the black one swallowed it whole."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount613
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"wide open behind her."
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.02773246329526917
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0032626427406199023
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean14.73
std11.42
cv0.776
sampleLengths
024
19
214
319
416
512
612
712
824
911
105
1110
1221
1312
1428
153
164
1725
1820
1918
207
2114
2234
233
2415
2527
265
2714
287
291
3018
3112
3213
3311
3410
3511
3617
3732
386
392
402
4110
425
4322
4425
4549
469
4715
4849
4910
72.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.48863636363636365
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences41
matches(empty)
ratio0
44.39% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences41
matches
0"He staggered a step, caught"
1"He straightened his lapels"
2"She kept the door wide"
3"His amber eye caught the"
4"He bent and scratched Ptolemy"
5"She stepped aside."
6"She hated herself for it"
7"He caught a falling hardback,"
8"He set it down with"
9"He turned the cane between"
10"Her voice came out flatter"
11"She laughed, and it came"
12"He reached into his jacket"
13"She took the photograph without"
14"Her stomach dropped before her"
15"She sat down on the"
16"He checked his watch, and"
17"He moved to the window"
ratio0.439
20.98% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount36
totalSentences41
matches
0"The third deadbolt gave under"
1"Rory drove her palm into"
2"He staggered a step, caught"
3"He straightened his lapels"
4"She kept the door wide"
5"Brick Lane breathed cumin and"
6"His amber eye caught the"
7"Ptolemy padded out from behind"
8"The cat purred louder."
9"He bent and scratched Ptolemy"
10"She stepped aside."
11"She hated herself for it"
12"Lucien crossed the room like"
13"Books avalanched off the cushion."
14"He caught a falling hardback,"
15"He set it down with"
16"A flash of teeth"
17"The humour left his face"
18"He turned the cane between"
19"The air over the radiator"
ratio0.878
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences41
matches
0"Because closing the door meant"
1"Because Eva wasn't home until"
ratio0.049
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
98.68% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He checked, and the ease drained out of his posture, vertebra by vertebra"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Her voice came out (come out)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.14
leniency0.281
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.07
89.2545%