Run: 2026-09-23-01M37PZ9GETAANV2D4A1NT91NX

Run Details

Duration:
1m 20s
Cost:
$0.020807
Provider:
AionLabs

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The standing stones found them before Rory found the stones. She'd been following the pendant. Three weeks of London deliveries, three weeks of the Heartstone lying cold against her sternum, and then tonight, somewhere past Pen Ponds where the grass gave way to bracken and the streetlamps of Richmond petered out behind her, the crimson gem had begun to warm. Not the steady pulse she'd come to dread — that heartbeat rhythm that meant a Hel door was opening somewhere nearby — but something slower. Uncertain. A flicker of heat, then nothing, then heat again, as if the stone itself couldn't make up its mind. "You feel that?" She held the chain up. The gem's inner glow guttered like a candle in a draught. From the shadow of a hawthorn, a voice like wind through a keyhole answered her. "The Veil is thin here. Thinner than thin. It has been worn through, like a heel worn through a boot sole." Nyx poured themselves out of the tree's darkness and rose to their full height, a column of living shadow with two violet points where eyes should be. "I have walked between realms for four hundred years, Aurora Carter. I have never felt a place like this. It does not leak. It breathes." "That's comforting." "It was not meant to be." The bracken ended at a hollow. Rory counted the oaks before she understood what she was counting — thirteen of them, grown in a perfect ring, each one vast and ancient in a way no tree in a London park had any right to be. Their trunks had twisted as they grew, bark spiralling upward like frozen smoke, and carved into the wood, so faint she might have imagined it, were lines that moved when she wasn't looking directly at them. The air inside the ring was a different temperature. She felt the boundary before she crossed it — a shiver across her skin like stepping from one room into another, from a warm house out into snow. Behind her, the distant growl of the A3 went silent mid-note. No cars. No planes. No wind. She checked her phone. 11:47 pm. The screen's glow looked wrong here — thin and papery, like light reflected off water. "Rory." Nyx had stopped at the edge of the ring. Their silhouette had gone rigid, and where their shadow-form met the shadows of the oaks, the darkness was pulling at them — threads of black stretching from Nyx's shoulders toward the trees, like iron filings dragged toward a lodestone. "The shadows here are not idle. They want me. They are — hungry is the wrong word. Curious." "Can you resist them?" "I am resisting them now. It is like standing in a gale." A pause, and the violet lights dimmed, almost sheepish. "It is also not unpleasant." Of course it wasn't. Rory filed that away with everything else she knew about Nyx that she preferred not to think about too hard, and stepped between two of the oaks. The world opened like a held breath released. The hollow was gone. So was Richmond Park, so was the winter — the ground under her boots was soft and green, carpeted with wildflowers in colours she had no names for: blue as deep as a bruise, a violet that shimmered, small white blooms that gave off their own faint light, so that the whole meadow glimmered like a spill of stars. There was no sun and no moon, only a pale amber radiance that came from everywhere and nowhere, sourceless, casting no shadows at all. That was the first thing that truly unsettled her. She looked down at herself and had no shadow. Nyx, stepping through behind her, made a sound like leaves scattering. "Where did you go?" She turned. Nyx was there — but flattened, wrong, their form smeared and indistinct, as if the grove's light was erasing them. "I am here." The whisper came from everywhere. "But I am — spread. This place has no darkness of its own, so it is borrowing mine. Give me a moment." The violet eyes guttered, pulled themselves together, and Nyx re-formed, smaller than before, hunched, hugging their own outline close. "Do not let me linger in the open here. I will spend myself like a lamp spends oil." "Then stay near me." She unzipped her jacket and let it hang open, offering a pocket of shade at her side. Nyx flowed into it and settled there, a cold weight against her ribs, like a cat that was also the concept of a cat. They walked. The flowers did something she didn't like: as she passed, the blooms turned to follow her. Not all at once, not with any snapping or rustling — they simply rotated on their stems, faces tracking her, the way a room full of people turns to watch a stranger walk in. When she stopped, they stopped. When she looked back, every flower in her wake had already swung forward again, innocent, swaying in a breeze she couldn't feel. "Don't like that either," she muttered. "They are not flowers," Nyx whispered from her jacket. "Or they are flowers the way I am a man. Look at the ground. Look at what the ground does." She crouched. The soil was dark and rich, and it moved — a slow, rhythmic swell and settle, faint as a sleeper's breathing. She pressed her palm flat against it and felt a pulse. Not hers. The earth's. She wiped her hand on her jeans and didn't mention it. Her phone said 11:47 still. She watched the screen for a full minute by her own counting. The display didn't change. Then she counted again and it read 11:49, and the second count had felt like ten seconds, and the first like an hour. She put the phone away. Some things you didn't need to measure. You just needed to leave before the measuring stopped meaning anything. Deeper in, the meadow gave way to a clearing ringed with more of the twisted oaks, and at its centre stood a pool that held the night sky. That was the only way she could describe it — a basin of perfectly still water, and in the water, stars. Not reflections. There was no sky above the grove to reflect. The stars were in the pool, drifting, turning, and as she leaned over the edge one of them swam a slow circle, like a koi. "The pendant," Nyx breathed. The Heartstone was glowing. Not the Hel-pulse — this was softer, a deep crimson bloom of light that rose and fell in time with the ground's breathing, in time with the pool's slow turning. Warmth spread through her chest, through the silver chain, down to her fingers. "It's never done this," she whispered. "Near the Hel doors it panics. This is — this is different. It sounds like it's being sung to." "Everything here is being sung to. Listen." She went quiet. Under the silence — and it had been silence, she'd thought, total silence — there was a hum. Not heard so much as felt, in her back teeth, in the bones of her feet. A single sustained note, ancient, patient, the sound a cathedral makes at four in the morning when no one is in it. "You came through the thirteen doors." Rory spun. The voice had come from behind her, and there had been no footsteps, and there were no footprints — that was the second thing that truly unsettled her. A woman stood at the pool's edge where no one had stood a heartbeat before, barefoot on the breathing soil, and the ground behind her lay smooth and unmarked as untouched snow. Silver hair fell to her waist. Her eyes were pale lavender, and they were old in a way that made Rory's spine try to leave through the back of her ribs. "Isolde." Rory kept her voice level. "You're shorter than I expected." The Seer smiled, and the flowers across the whole clearing turned their faces toward her, all at once, like a congregation. "And you are exactly as I have seen you, Aurora Carter, though the seeing is not the same as the meeting, and the meeting is not the same as the knowing." Isolde tilted her head, and her gaze dropped to the pendant at Rory's throat, and something moved behind the lavender — recognition, or grief, or both wearing the same face. "You carry a stone that remembers a garden it has never seen. You carry a shadow that remembers being a man. And you have walked into my grove on the night when the walls between the worlds are at their thinnest, which was either very brave or very foolish, and I am forbidden to tell you which." "Forbidden?" "I cannot lie, child. It is the one law my blood still keeps." Isolde drifted closer — drifted, her bare feet never quite seeming to commit to the ground. "So I will tell you only what is true. Ask me your questions, and I will answer them crooked. It is the only way I know."
created_at"2026-09-23T18:03:15.872Z" 9/23/2026, 6:03:15 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1508
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"truly"
count2
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"truly"
1"perfectly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1508
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"flicker"
count1
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"unsettled"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count1
10
word"silence"
count3
11
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"flicker"
2"comforting"
3"perfect"
4"shimmered"
5"unsettled"
6"whisper"
7"weight"
8"rhythmic"
9"warmth"
10"silence"
11"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences83
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1528
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount1180
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Nyx"
discoveredNames
Rory7
London2
Heartstone2
Pen1
Ponds1
Richmond2
Hel2
Nyx10
Park1
Hel-pulse1
Seer1
Isolde2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Seer"
3"Isolde"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like ten seconds, and the first li"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1528
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean39.18
std31.99
cv0.817
sampleLengths
010
195
219
315
473
52
66
781
854
921
1067
114
1226
1331
148
1587
1629
1726
1867
1945
2079
216
2229
2338
2411
2567
2685
274
2847
2925
307
3159
326
3393
3411
3521
36118
371
3855
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences83
matches
0"was gone"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs197
matches
0"was opening"
1"was counting "
2"wasn't looking"
3"was pulling"
4"was erasing"
5"was glowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences98
ratio0.153
matches
0"Not the steady pulse she'd come to dread — that heartbeat rhythm that meant a Hel door was opening somewhere nearby — but something slower."
1"Rory counted the oaks before she understood what she was counting — thirteen of them, grown in a perfect ring, each one vast and ancient in a way no tree in a London park had any right to be."
2"She felt the boundary before she crossed it — a shiver across her skin like stepping from one room into another, from a warm house out into snow."
3"The screen's glow looked wrong here — thin and papery, like light reflected off water."
4"Their silhouette had gone rigid, and where their shadow-form met the shadows of the oaks, the darkness was pulling at them — threads of black stretching from Nyx's shoulders toward the trees, like iron filings dragged toward a lodestone."
5"So was Richmond Park, so was the winter — the ground under her boots was soft and green, carpeted with wildflowers in colours she had no names for: blue as deep as a bruise, a violet that shimmered, small white blooms that gave off their own faint light, so that the whole meadow glimmered like a spill of stars."
6"Nyx was there — but flattened, wrong, their form smeared and indistinct, as if the grove's light was erasing them."
7"Not all at once, not with any snapping or rustling — they simply rotated on their stems, faces tracking her, the way a room full of people turns to watch a stranger walk in."
8"The soil was dark and rich, and it moved — a slow, rhythmic swell and settle, faint as a sleeper's breathing."
9"That was the only way she could describe it — a basin of perfectly still water, and in the water, stars."
10"Not the Hel-pulse — this was softer, a deep crimson bloom of light that rose and fell in time with the ground's breathing, in time with the pool's slow turning."
11"Under the silence — and it had been silence, she'd thought, total silence — there was a hum."
12"The voice had come from behind her, and there had been no footsteps, and there were no footprints — that was the second thing that truly unsettled her."
13"\"And you are exactly as I have seen you, Aurora Carter, though the seeing is not the same as the meeting, and the meeting is not the same as the knowing.\" Isolde tilted her head, and her gaze dropped to the pendant at Rory's throat, and something moved behind the lavender — recognition, or grief, or both wearing the same face."
14"\"I cannot lie, child. It is the one law my blood still keeps.\" Isolde drifted closer — drifted, her bare feet never quite seeming to commit to the ground."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1166
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.03516295025728988
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006003430531732418
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean15.59
std13.55
cv0.869
sampleLengths
010
15
245
325
41
519
68
711
815
948
1025
112
126
136
1439
1536
169
1728
1811
192
202
212
224
232
2415
2510
2639
2718
284
2921
305
314
3227
338
344
3559
3624
379
389
3911
406
4120
428
4341
4418
4521
4624
472
4816
4934
61.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.40816326530612246
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners40
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"Of course it wasn't."
1"Then she counted again and"
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences68
matches
0"She'd been following the pendant."
1"She held the chain up"
2"Their trunks had twisted as"
3"She felt the boundary before"
4"She checked her phone."
5"Their silhouette had gone rigid,"
6"She looked down at herself"
7"She unzipped her jacket and"
8"She pressed her palm flat"
9"She wiped her hand on"
10"Her phone said 11:47 still."
11"She watched the screen for"
12"She put the phone away."
13"You just needed to leave"
14"She went quiet."
15"Her eyes were pale lavender,"
ratio0.235
85.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences68
matches
0"The standing stones found them"
1"She'd been following the pendant."
2"A flicker of heat, then"
3"She held the chain up"
4"The gem's inner glow guttered"
5"Nyx poured themselves out of"
6"The bracken ended at a"
7"Rory counted the oaks before"
8"Their trunks had twisted as"
9"The air inside the ring"
10"She felt the boundary before"
11"She checked her phone."
12"The screen's glow looked wrong"
13"Nyx had stopped at the"
14"Their silhouette had gone rigid,"
15"A pause, and the violet"
16"Rory filed that away with"
17"The world opened like a"
18"The hollow was gone."
19"That was the first thing"
ratio0.75
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
51.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Not the steady pulse she'd come to dread — that heartbeat rhythm that meant a Hel door was opening somewhere nearby — but something slower."
1"Their trunks had twisted as they grew, bark spiralling upward like frozen smoke, and carved into the wood, so faint she might have imagined it, were lines that …"
2"So was Richmond Park, so was the winter — the ground under her boots was soft and green, carpeted with wildflowers in colours she had no names for: blue as deep…"
3"There was no sun and no moon, only a pale amber radiance that came from everywhere and nowhere, sourceless, casting no shadows at all."
4"The voice had come from behind her, and there had been no footsteps, and there were no footprints — that was the second thing that truly unsettled her."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.267
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