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Run: 2026-09-24-01M39W78KEMZB4KZDQSK3N574C
Run Details
Model:
Aion 3.5 Mini (Reasoning, High)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
3m 15s
Cost:
$0.016136
Provider:
AionLabs
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
80.16%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
57.01%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
47.26%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
78.54%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
65.26%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
77.38%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
56.98%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
88.7530%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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The pendant burned through my
shirt like a coal fresh from the fire. "Hold still."
Nyx's whisper came from everywhere
and nowhere, the way it always did.
Shadow pooled around their feet
and climbed the nearest standing stone, drowning the ancient oak in darkness until the stone looked hewn from night itself. "The door remembers what walks through it. Be worth remembering." "That's not ominous at all." Isolde stood apart from us, silver hair drifting without any wind to move it, pale lavender eyes fixed on the air between two stones.
The air had begun to
shimmer, a heat-haze in December. "A door devours the uninvited," she said. "But you two carry invitations written in stranger ink than most. Step where the
warmth
pulls you. Never step where it pushes."
The Heartstone pulsed against my
sternum, each beat a small fist knocking from the inside.
I touched the crimson gem
through the fabric and snatched my fingers away. Hot. Getting hotter. "Soon," I said. "Soon,"
Nyx agreed, and peeled the
shadow off the stone the way a person peels a label from a bottle, slow and whole. The dark spread sideways, widened, tore, and
hung in the air
as a gash of amber light. "Wait."
Isolde drifted closer, leaving no
prints on the frost-rimed grass, because she never did. "One gift more, for the road. The Veil is thin here. Thinner than it ought to be, and the solstice has not yet begun to gnaw at it. Someone has been feeding this door."
Her gaze moved from me
to Nyx and back. "Whatever you are offered, taste everything. Swallow nothing." "And if we're hungry?" "No food of Dymas has ever harmed a guest." "That's oddly reassuring." "Is it?"
She smiled, and the smile
held no
warmth
at all.
Nyx folded into the dark
like ink into water.
I followed before I could
think better of it. Crossing the Veil felt like wading through a curtain of warm water, if the water had opinions. Something brushed against my mind, curious, tasting my name.
I held onto it the
way Isolde had taught me. Rory. Aurora Carter. Rory.
The presence lingered a moment
longer, the way a stranger lingers over a menu, then let go. The world opened.
I stood on a hillside
beneath a sky the colour of honey held before a fire. No sun.
The light came from everywhere
and belonged to nothing, pooling gold in the valley below. And the valleys, God help me, the valleys were vines. Terraces of them climbed every hill in sight, heavy with grapes that glowed faintly from within, clusters hanging like chandeliers in colours I had no names for. Beyond the vineyards, orchards ran to the horizon, every tree bent double under fruit. Pears striped blue and silver. Plums the size of my head. One tree bore its crop in bunches like lanterns, and the light of them breathed,
softly
, in and out. The smell reached me next. Roast meat and honey and fresh bread and wine and ripe peaches, layered, everywhere, so thick I could taste it on the back of my tongue. My
stomach
growled. I hadn't eaten since dawn, and my body answered that air the way a starving man answers a bakery. "Don't." Nyx materialised out of my own shadow at my shoulder. "Breathe through your mouth if you must. The hunger here is not yours. It belongs to the land, and the land is generous." "The land shares its hunger?" "The land shares everything." Violet eyes swept the terraces below. "That is rather the problem." Somewhere downslope, wind chimes rang. No. Not chimes. Grapes, knocking together in the breeze, every cluster ringing like tiny glass bells. And under that, fainter, music. Strings and laughter, so distant it could have been memory. Isolde
appeared beside us, though I never saw her cross the gash
. The soft ground gave under my boots like fresh bread.
It gave under nothing at
all where she walked. "Beautiful, isn't it," she murmured. "Count what is missing, and you will count the true wealth of this place." I counted. No birds. No insects. No flies over all that fruit. No fallen grapes rotting in the furrows, no wasps, no crows, no weeds between the rows. Every terrace was
perfect
,
perfect
the way a photograph is
perfect
, held and frozen. "Nothing eats here,"
I said slowly
. "This is Gluttony's own realm and nothing eats. It all just grows. Who's it all for?" "Consider what must be grown," Isolde said, "to feed a prince whose hunger is the realm itself."
I decided not to follow
that thought to its end. The first worker I saw up close was a woman pruning on the terrace below, shears moving in steady,
mechanical
strokes. A brand marked her wrist, a spiral of script too fine to read, and her lips moved constantly, counting. Contract terms or debts, tallying something she could never pay off. She never looked up. Nyx watched her the way you'd watch a clock with a person inside it. "Helbound," they said. "They sold their hands for a season. The land keeps what it is given." "And when the season ends?" "What season?" We took the terraces down, boots sinking deep. The vines parted for us.
I want to be clear
about that, because I watched it happen three times before I trusted my own eyes: the tendrils leaned away as we passed, curling aside like seaweed swaying from a diver. The grapes turned too.
Slowly, gently, each one rotating
in its cluster to keep its pale underside toward us. No eyes. Nothing so honest as eyes. Just attention. Halfway down, we found the milestone. A squat stone pillar shaped like a three-tiered wedding cake, iced in white
marble
, letters carved around each tier.
I read the top row
and the letters slid apart and reformed before my eyes finished the word. I tried again. The letters obliged, rearranging into: TABLE FORTY-ONE. ONE MILE. YOU ARE EXPECTED. "Charming," I said. "Honest," said Nyx. "More than most doors." Below the milestone, a spring bubbled up from the roots of a lantern tree, except it wasn't water. Wine, dark as garnets, filled a
marble
basin and spilled over in a thin red ribbon that ran downslope between the vines. The grapes nearest the ribbon were the fattest in the whole valley. Steam curled off the basin's surface, and the steam smelled of black cherries and something older,
something like church incense
. "Taste everything," Isolde reminded me
sweetly
. "Swallow nothing." I crouched, cupped a hand, and let the wine touch my lips without swallowing. Rich, deep, wonderful, and underneath the wonderful, faint as a heartbeat, a taste of iron. Of copper. Fresh.
I wiped my mouth on
my sleeve and stood. "The floor of this place is a mouth," I said. "And we're walking down its throat." "Now you are learning the shape of it," Isolde said.
We crested the last rise
and the orchard opened onto the strangest thing yet, which
was saying
something. A banquet table. One table, white linen, running the length of a meadow, laid for a hundred at least. Candelabras burned without wax. Platters steamed: whole birds glazed amber, loaves split and breathing steam, a boar with an apple clenched in its jaws, towers of the glowing fruit. Chairs stood pulled back at every place, as though a hundred diners had risen a moment ago and meant to return at any second. No one sat. No one had ever sat. The linen held not one stain. The food steamed and steamed and steamed. "It's a lure," I whispered. "Everything is a lure here," Nyx whispered back. "The question is for whom." I walked the table's length, close enough to feel the candle-heat on my cheek. The nearest roast bird glistened, juices running, and its wings, I noticed,
were folded
in exactly the posture of a bird at rest. Not carved. Not cooked. Resting. Breathing, if a bird could breathe while roasted. Down the table, a
crystal
goblet filled itself from nothing, poured by no hand, and a second goblet tipped itself over and righted, impatient. "Rory." Nyx had gone
very
still, and a Shade going still is its own kind of alarm. "Listen." The music had stopped. All down the valley, terrace after terrace, the vineyard workers had stopped moving. I hadn't registered them until they froze: figures scattered among the vines, dozens of them, bent over their pruning, and now every one stood upright and turned toward us. Their faces were smooth where their eyes should have been. Their hands kept working even as their bodies stilled, pruning and plucking at empty air, and their mouths opened in
perfect
unison, and out of a hundred throats came one voice, warm and rich and welcoming as a bath. "Guests." The nearest of them
began to
walk toward us. Then the next. Then all of them, unhurried, hands never stopping. "You are expected," the voice said from a hundred smiling mouths, "and the table is already set."
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
21
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"I said slowly [slowly]"
1
"Nyx whispered back [back]"
dialogueSentences
43
tagDensity
0.488
leniency
0.977
rawRatio
0.095
effectiveRatio
0.093
80.16%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1512
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"softly"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
2
2
adverb
"gently"
count
1
3
adverb
"sweetly"
count
1
4
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"softly"
1
"slowly"
2
"gently"
3
"sweetly"
4
"very"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
57.01%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1512
totalAiIsms
13
found
0
word
"whisper"
count
1
1
word
"warmth"
count
2
2
word
"pulsed"
count
1
3
word
"stomach"
count
1
4
word
"perfect"
count
4
5
word
"mechanical"
count
1
6
word
"marble"
count
2
7
word
"crystal"
count
1
highlights
0
"whisper"
1
"warmth"
2
"pulsed"
3
"stomach"
4
"perfect"
5
"mechanical"
6
"marble"
7
"crystal"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"hung in the air"
count
1
highlights
0
"hung in the air"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
125
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
125
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
146
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
43
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1512
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
17
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
24
wordCount
1237
uniqueNames
10
maxNameDensity
0.73
worstName
"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Nyx"
discoveredNames
Shadow
1
December
1
Heartstone
1
Nyx
9
Veil
1
Isolde
7
Carter
1
God
1
Violet
1
Shade
1
persons
0
"Shadow"
1
"Nyx"
2
"Veil"
3
"Isolde"
4
"Carter"
5
"God"
6
"Violet"
7
"Shade"
places
0
"December"
globalScore
1
windowScore
1
47.26%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
73
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"felt like wading through a curtain of w"
1
"appeared beside us, though I never saw her cross the gash"
2
"something like church incense"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1512
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
146
matches
0
"follow that thought"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
53
mean
28.53
std
27.63
cv
0.968
sampleLengths
0
13
1
49
2
5
3
63
4
31
5
3
6
40
7
66
8
4
9
9
10
3
11
12
12
18
13
57
14
3
15
114
16
53
17
34
18
5
19
15
20
36
21
31
22
19
23
42
24
22
25
17
26
10
27
69
28
17
29
5
30
2
31
76
32
51
33
7
34
3
35
7
36
72
37
8
38
32
39
9
40
16
41
10
42
90
43
21
44
5
45
13
46
74
47
18
48
4
49
91
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
125
matches
0
"were folded"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
224
matches
0
"was saying"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
146
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1242
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
46
adverbRatio
0.037037037037037035
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.00644122383252818
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
146
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
146
mean
10.36
std
8.18
cv
0.79
sampleLengths
0
13
1
14
2
25
3
10
4
5
5
24
6
10
7
7
8
22
9
15
10
13
11
1
12
2
13
3
14
23
15
17
16
15
17
43
18
8
19
4
20
9
21
3
22
12
23
9
24
9
25
17
26
9
27
10
28
1
29
2
30
1
31
17
32
3
33
16
34
2
35
15
36
10
37
27
38
14
39
5
40
6
41
19
42
5
43
26
44
3
45
19
46
11
47
23
48
5
49
10
78.54%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
12
diversityRatio
0.5205479452054794
totalSentences
146
uniqueOpeners
76
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
95
matches
0
"Somewhere downslope, wind chimes rang."
1
"Slowly, gently, each one rotating"
2
"Then the next."
3
"Then all of them, unhurried,"
ratio
0.042
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
24
totalSentences
95
matches
0
"I touched the crimson gem"
1
"Her gaze moved from me"
2
"She smiled, and the smile"
3
"I followed before I could"
4
"I held onto it the"
5
"I stood on a hillside"
6
"My stomach growled."
7
"I hadn't eaten since dawn,"
8
"It gave under nothing at"
9
"I said slowly"
10
"I decided not to follow"
11
"She never looked up."
12
"We took the terraces down,"
13
"I want to be clear"
14
"I read the top row"
15
"I tried again."
16
"YOU ARE EXPECTED."
17
"I crouched, cupped a hand,"
18
"I wiped my mouth on"
19
"We crested the last rise"
ratio
0.253
65.26%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
75
totalSentences
95
matches
0
"The pendant burned through my"
1
"Nyx's whisper came from everywhere"
2
"Shadow pooled around their feet"
3
"Isolde stood apart from us,"
4
"The air had begun to"
5
"The Heartstone pulsed against my"
6
"I touched the crimson gem"
7
"Nyx agreed, and peeled the"
8
"The dark spread sideways, widened,"
9
"Isolde drifted closer, leaving no"
10
"Her gaze moved from me"
11
"She smiled, and the smile"
12
"Nyx folded into the dark"
13
"I followed before I could"
14
"Something brushed against my mind,"
15
"I held onto it the"
16
"The presence lingered a moment"
17
"The world opened."
18
"I stood on a hillside"
19
"The light came from everywhere"
ratio
0.789
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
95
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
50
technicalSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"Wine, dark as garnets, filled a marble basin and spilled over in a thin red ribbon that ran downslope between the vines."
77.38%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
21
uselessAdditionCount
2
matches
0
"Nyx's whisper came, the way it always did"
1
"She smiled, and the smile held no warmth at all"
56.98%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
13
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"Nyx agreed (agree)"
1
"she murmured (murmur)"
2
"I whispered (whisper)"
3
"Nyx whispered back (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
43
tagDensity
0.302
leniency
0.605
rawRatio
0.308
effectiveRatio
0.186
88.7530%