Run: 2026-09-24-01M39WFT2FSW598TT24JW0H5GG

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Duration:
3m 49s
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$0.017738
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AionLabs

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Three knocks, evenly spaced, patient as a tax demand. I knew that knock. Seven months in this building had taught me the knocking habits of everyone on the stairs: the postwoman's double tap, the drunk from the second floor who hammered like the door owed him money. Nobody knocked like the answer already belonged to them. I slid the chain off anyway. My brain was still voting when my hand turned the lock. Lucien Moreau filled the frame in a charcoal suit worth more than my annual rent, platinum hair slicked to a mirror shine, one amber eye and one black, both fixed on me like I was a ledger entry come to life. The ivory-handled cane finished the picture. So did the blood dried brown along his left cuff. "Aurora." "Wrong flat." "May I come in, or shall we hold our reunion on a public landing, in full earshot of the jalfrezi trade?" I pushed the door shut. His cane met the jamb, gentle as a hand at the wrist. "Cane. Of course." "Slam it if it helps. I'll wait on the step. I'm told the gentleman downstairs cooks an excellent jalfrezi, and I make him nervous, which is a rare pleasure these days." "Eva gave you this address." "She did." "My best friend gave my address to the man I ran from." "My best friend gave her address to the man who pulled her out of the Thames with two minutes of air left. There are worse entries in her ledger. Shall we compare?" I stepped back. He crossed the threshold the way he crossed everything, like it had been arranged in advance. I threw all three deadbolts behind him. Decorative, probably. It felt professional. The flat smelled of cumin and old paper, the curry house breathing up through the floorboards like a warm animal. Eva's scholarship buried every surface: towers of books, scrolls pinned flat under mugs, her handwriting colonising every margin. Ptolemy lifted his head off a stack of Herodotus, took one look at the intruder, and poured himself down to wind around Lucien's shin, purring like a small engine. "Traitor. He bites everyone." "Animals have always liked me. You found it charming once." "I found a lot of things charming once." "Sit down. How hospitable." "I'm making tea because my hands want a job, not because you're welcome. Milk?" "Do you still keep the Darjeeling?" "I keep nothing of yours." "Then milk, please." He drifted along the shelves while the kettle worked, gloved fingers hovering over the spines without touching anything. He stopped at a battered Marlowe with a broken spine. "You kept it." "Eva kept it. I failed to throw it out." "The spine's broken at the same three poems." I put the mugs down harder than the mugs deserved. "Say what you came to say." "Eight months." "Seven." "You counted." "I count everything. You taught me that." He wrapped both hands around the tea and looked at me over the rim, amber and black, unhurried. "I saw your book, Luc. Black leather, gilt corners, the one you kept in the desk in Marseille. Page fifty-one. My real name, and a number beside it big enough to make my eyes water. So before you drink my tea, explain that." The kitchen clock tick-tocked through the silence. "You never asked." "Asking felt like an invitation to lie. You're good at it. Four languages of good." "Page fifty-one." Something shifted behind the black eye, deep, like a fish under ice. "You read upside down beautifully. One of your finer talents." "That's not an explanation." "No." He set the mug aside. "It isn't." Then he was close. I hadn't heard him move, and that was the trouble with Lucien, the trouble I'd never learned to guard against. Sandalwood and cigarette smoke. He caught my left wrist, light as a bird landing, and turned it over. "While you decide whether to answer," I said, "you can let go of my arm." "When did it change?" "What?" His thumb rested on the small crescent-shaped scar. Warm. Too warm. I felt the heat of it like a coin fresh from a pocket, and I felt him feel it too. "In Marseille this was a scar. Cold as the rest of you." He looked up. "It's a door now, chérie. And something on the other side has started knocking." I pulled my hand back. He let me, which somehow felt worse than being held. He took a photograph from his inside pocket and laid it on the table between the mugs. Me, yesterday, hood up outside the curry house, a bag of Eva's shopping in my hand. Shot from across Brick Lane. On the back, a figure in red ink and a wax seal, pressed by hand, not stamped. "Someone has bought your contract." "I don't have a contract." "Your husband sold your debt to cover his own. To a buyer I will not name in this room, because these walls are thin and some ears are older than the building. The seal is Avarosian. The figure runs seven digits." He straightened his cuff, the bloody one, without looking at it. "I came to move you tonight." "Move me where?" "Away. Properly, this time. No aliases, no curry houses, no friends left in a position to betray you." "Eva didn't betray me." The words came out flat and cold. "You did." "You said that in Marseille." "And I meant it." "You were wearing my coat when you said it." I turned away, because his face did things to my reasoning that eight months of practice should have cured. "Seven months, Luc. One phone call. One word. You let me believe you'd sold me." "Yes." The single word sat there between us, honest as a knife on a table. "The number on page fifty-one," he went on, "was what I paid, not what I was offered. I bought your debt the week before you read that page. You ran out of Marseille a free woman, and you never knew it. You spent seven months hating me over a bill I'd already settled." The laugh that came out of me was an ugly little sound. "That's hilarious. I made a career of hating you for nothing." "Not for nothing." He picked up his tea again. "You needed somewhere to put it all. The hate or the fear, and hate travels lighter. I chose for you. It's a failing of mine." "You chose wrong." "I chose the option where you packed a bag and vanished inside an hour." For a moment the polish cracked, just at the seam. "If I had called, you would have stayed to hear the explanation. Explanations take time. Time was the one thing they weren't selling." The tea had gone cold in my hands. I'd made it four minutes ago. I looked at his mouth, then at the Marlowe with its broken spine, then at the door with its three deadbolts, and I hated the order I looked at things in. "Say you're sorry." "I'm sorry." No hesitation, which was its own kind of insult. "I'd do it again." "That's the problem with you. Your apologies come with a receipt." "Pack a bag, Rory. We have until the seal dries on the second copy of that contract, and I stole the first." "Say I go with you. Say I'm stupid enough. What happens to Eva?" "Eva is in Cairo, behind wards I paid for, and the cat comes with us. I've grown attached to the little sociopath." Below us, the curry house went quiet. Mid-service, mid-babble, cut like a wire. Ptolemy stopped purring. His fur lifted along his spine in a slow wave, and he backed away from the door, ears flat. "Lucien." "I hear it." Click. The first deadbolt turned itself. I was on my feet before I decided to stand. Click. The second one, and the brass tumbler gleamed in the lamplight, rotating like something patient winding down a clock. Lucien's cane cracked along a seam I'd never noticed, baring a thin silver blade. "Behind me. Now." Click. The third deadbolt turned. Then the handle began to rotate, slow and courteous, the way a hand turns it when it already owns the house.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the polish cracked just [just]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.132
leniency0.265
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.029
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1376
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1376
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences67
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1376
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount720
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.56
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Click"
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Moreau1
Herodotus1
Lucien4
Marlowe2
Eva2
Brick1
Lane1
Click3
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Herodotus"
2"Lucien"
3"Eva"
places
0"Marlowe"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1376
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"knew that knock"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean16.19
std15.86
cv0.98
sampleLengths
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147
217
357
41
52
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717
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931
105
112
1212
1332
1419
1512
1667
174
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198
204
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235
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2528
263
279
288
2916
302
311
322
337
3418
3543
367
373
3815
3924
404
418
4242
4315
444
451
4631
4729
4815
4955
94.79% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences67
matches
0"been arranged"
1"being held"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs123
matches
0"was still voting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences125
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount725
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar."
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.03586206896551724
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004137931034482759
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean11.01
std10.1
cv0.917
sampleLengths
09
14
234
39
46
511
641
76
810
91
102
1121
125
1312
143
1531
165
172
1812
1932
203
2116
227
232
243
2520
2618
2729
284
2910
308
314
3214
336
345
353
3618
3710
383
399
408
4110
426
432
441
452
467
4718
4843
497
66.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.44
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences60
matches
0"Then he was close."
1"Then the handle began to"
ratio0.033
13.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences60
matches
0"I knew that knock."
1"I slid the chain off"
2"My brain was still voting"
3"I pushed the door shut."
4"His cane met the jamb,"
5"I stepped back."
6"He crossed the threshold the"
7"I threw all three deadbolts"
8"It felt professional."
9"He drifted along the shelves"
10"He stopped at a battered"
11"I put the mugs down"
12"He wrapped both hands around"
13"He set the mug aside"
14"I hadn't heard him move,"
15"He caught my left wrist,"
16"His thumb rested on the"
17"I felt the heat of"
18"He looked up"
19"I pulled my hand back."
ratio0.517
51.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences60
matches
0"I knew that knock."
1"Nobody knocked like the answer"
2"I slid the chain off"
3"My brain was still voting"
4"Lucien Moreau filled the frame"
5"The ivory-handled cane finished the"
6"I pushed the door shut."
7"His cane met the jamb,"
8"I stepped back."
9"He crossed the threshold the"
10"I threw all three deadbolts"
11"It felt professional."
12"The flat smelled of cumin"
13"Eva's scholarship buried every surface:"
14"Ptolemy lifted his head off"
15"He drifted along the shelves"
16"He stopped at a battered"
17"I put the mugs down"
18"He wrapped both hands around"
19"The kitchen clock tick-tocked through"
ratio0.817
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Seven months in this building had taught me the knocking habits of everyone on the stairs: the postwoman's double tap, the drunk from the second floor who hamme…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.015
leniency0.029
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.5430%