Run: 2026-09-24-01M39WXKR1EJ5MGK6BQ5NE718Z

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Duration:
1m 49s
Cost:
$0.008184
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AionLabs

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
I opened the door with the chain still on, a frying pan raised in my free hand. Lucien Moreau stood on Eva's landing, charcoal suit ruined from shoulder to hip, blood dried black along his collar. His cane carried most of his weight. The amber eye found me first. The black one stayed fixed on the frying pan. "Good evening, Aurora." Nobody used my full name. That was the point of it. "No." I pushed the door until it caught on the chain. "Whatever this is, take it elsewhere." "Three weeks of silence, and this is the welcome." His breath came shallow, each word priced separately. "I had hoped for tea." "You hoped wrong." The cane slipped. He caught himself against the doorframe, and the towel pressed to his side came away red. Fresh. Bright. Something in my chest dropped a floor. I slammed the door, unhooked the chain, and opened it again before pride could argue. "Four seconds," he said, straightening. "I'd have bet on six." "Shut up and get inside before Mrs. Adeyemi sees you dripping on her landing." He came in like a ship finding harbour, all that elegant height folding down onto the chair I cleared of books. The flat took him the way it took everything, in layers. Scrolls pinned three deep over Eva's research notes. Paperbacks stacked into unstable towers. Cumin and cardamom drifting up through the floorboards from the curry house below, warm and constant. Ptolemy watched from the summit of a pile on Sumerian door seals, tail flicking, unimpressed by the new furniture. I fetched the first aid kit from the bathroom. "Second shelf, behind the painkillers," Lucien said. "You always kept it there." "That was my flat. Different city. Different life." "Memory is a cruel thing. It keeps what we would rather discard." I dropped the kit on the arm of his chair and knelt beside him. "Jacket off." He peeled it away from his side with the control of a man who had done this dance before. The shirt beneath clung, dark and wet. I cut it open with scissors from the kit, and there it was, a wound low on his ribs, deeper than a scratch, cleaner than a knife wanted to be. "Who?" "A professional. I declined to die on schedule." "Lucien." "Marlowe's collector found me in Rotherhithe on Thursday. I heeded the invitation poorly." He watched me soak the gauze, watched my hands, not his blood. "You have steady hands, Carter." "Delivery work. You learn to carry things without spilling." "You could have been a surgeon." "I could have been a lot of things." I threaded the needle. "Three weeks, Lucien. Three weeks after the Hollowgate job went sideways, and you vanished. Marlowe's people put me in a room for two days. Do you know what they asked?" He said nothing. "Who I worked for. Who hired me. And I had nothing, because the man who signed the contracts never existed. No paper. No name. You erased yourself and left me holding the knife." "I erased us both." His voice stayed level, maddening. "You walked out of that room. It worked." "It worked." The needle went through his skin, and this time he flinched, a small thing, quickly mastered. "Say that again while I sew you shut." "Aurora." "Don't." "Every day I stayed away, Marlowe's hounds watched me instead of you. I was the better bait. I let them chase the scent they wanted." He leaned back as I tied off a stitch, and his hand came up, slow, deliberate, and covered the one I had braced against his sternum. His palm was fever-hot. "It was the only gift I knew how to give you." My heart did something stupid and ancient against my ribs. "Then why come back now?" "Because it stopped working. They lost interest in me on Tuesday." He held my hand a moment longer than the sentence needed. "Yesterday a man asked questions about you at the Golden Empress. He described your face to Yu-Fei's boy with unsettling accuracy. So here I am." I pulled my hand back and reached for the antiseptic, busying myself with cotton wool, with anything. "You could have phoned." "And said what? Forgive me, I have ruined your life in an interesting new way?" A dry sound, almost a laugh. "You would have hung up. You should have hung up." "I should have." I pressed the gauze to the wound and he went still under it. "Eva will kill you when she's back. She's been researching how to dissolve a soul contract, and you're the practice case." "Then I shall die among friends. There are worse venues." I stitched him in silence for a while. His breathing evened out. The curry smell thickened as someone downstairs fired a wok, and Ptolemy hopped down from his tower to inspect the intruder, sniffing at the ruined jacket draped over the chair. "You kept the scar," Lucien said. I looked down. The crescent on my left wrist, pale against the antiseptic sting. His fingertips brushed it, light as paper. "You still notice everything except when to leave." "A failing of mine." His thumb traced the scar's curve once, and stopped. "I noticed it the first night. A childhood accident, you said. You would not tell me the story. I have thought about that story more times than is dignified for a man of my age." "There's no story. A broken bottle. My cousin's fault." "You lie beautifully when you are frightened. It is one of your finest qualities." "I'm not frightened." "No." His amber eye caught the lamplight. "You are furious. That is different, and considerably more flattering." I tied off the last stitch and sat back on my heels to admire my work. Neat, if I said so myself. Seven stitches, a man put back together, three weeks of silence sewn shut with them. Then the stitches started to move. Not the thread. The skin. Ink crept out from the wound's edges, black tendrils spreading under his flesh like frost climbing glass, drawing itself into lines, into angles, into a shape I had seen once before on the door of a locked room in Hollowgate. "Lucien." He looked down. His face did something I had never seen it do. It went blank. "Aurora. The lamp. Do not turn it off, but do not stand near the window." "What is that?" "A signature." He reached for his cane, and his knuckles had gone white around the ivory. "I did not escape the collector in Rotherhithe. He let me go. He let me lead him somewhere." "Lead him where?" Ptolemy bolted off the chair and vanished under the book stacks. The curry house below went quiet, wok and all, mid-sizzle. Down the hallway, the first deadbolt turned. I had locked all three. I had thrown the chain. Eva's paranoia had put them there, and I had blessed every one of them when I came in. The second deadbolt turned. Lucien rose from the chair, wound and all, and drew the thin blade from the cane in one smooth motion. He positioned himself between me and the hallway, and over his shoulder he said, in the tone he used for business arrangements, "Stay behind me, love. And pick up the frying pan." The third deadbolt turned.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He leaned back [back]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.281
leniency0.561
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.035
95.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1223
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1223
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"dance"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"silence"
2"dance"
3"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1223
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount725
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.55
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
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Eva3
Sumerian1
Ptolemy3
Hollowgate1
Lucien4
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
places
0"Hollowgate"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1223
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean19.41
std17.56
cv0.904
sampleLengths
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311
417
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910
1014
1180
129
1312
148
1512
1616
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198
201
2130
229
236
2442
253
2633
2717
2826
291
301
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3210
335
3447
3521
3631
3737
3810
3942
406
4121
428
4348
449
4514
463
4717
4837
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs123
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences110
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount727
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.017881705639614855
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002751031636863824
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean11.12
std9.1
cv0.819
sampleLengths
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151
161
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248
255
2616
2719
289
297
305
318
3212
3314
342
3519
367
3730
381
398
401
4125
425
439
446
4512
4630
473
4833
499
69.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.42727272727272725
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners47
51.28% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Then the stitches started to"
ratio0.015
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences65
matches
0"I opened the door with"
1"His cane carried most of"
2"I pushed the door until"
3"His breath came shallow, each"
4"He caught himself against the"
5"I slammed the door, unhooked"
6"he said, straightening"
7"He came in like a"
8"I fetched the first aid"
9"I dropped the kit on"
10"He peeled it away from"
11"I cut it open with"
12"He watched me soak the"
13"I threaded the needle"
14"He said nothing."
15"His voice stayed level, maddening"
16"He leaned back as I"
17"His palm was fever-hot."
18"My heart did something stupid"
19"He held my hand a"
ratio0.554
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences65
matches
0"I opened the door with"
1"Lucien Moreau stood on Eva's"
2"His cane carried most of"
3"The amber eye found me"
4"The black one stayed fixed"
5"Nobody used my full name."
6"That was the point of"
7"I pushed the door until"
8"His breath came shallow, each"
9"The cane slipped."
10"He caught himself against the"
11"Something in my chest dropped"
12"I slammed the door, unhooked"
13"he said, straightening"
14"He came in like a"
15"The flat took him the"
16"Scrolls pinned three deep over"
17"Paperbacks stacked into unstable towers."
18"Cumin and cardamom drifting up"
19"Ptolemy watched from the summit"
ratio0.923
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He peeled it away from his side with the control of a man who had done this dance before."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"His breath came, each word priced separately"
1"His voice stayed, maddening"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.07
leniency0.14
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.035
85.1519%