Run: 2026-09-25-01M3CKJ6851CG7WBK35N0Z1CYT

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Duration:
25.6s
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$0.021363
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Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden reeked of damp concrete and old rust, the air thick with the kind of silence that pressed against the eardrums. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over the yellow police tape, her boots scuffing against the gritty floor. The beam of her torch cut through the gloom, illuminating the peeling posters on the walls—faded advertisements for long-forgotten plays and products, their edges curled like dead leaves. She adjusted the worn leather watch on her left wrist, the familiar weight a small comfort in the oppressive dark. Something was wrong here. The call had come in an hour ago: a body, found by a maintenance worker who’d stumbled upon a hidden access tunnel. But the scene didn’t fit. No blood. No signs of struggle. Just a single figure, sprawled near the edge of the platform as if they’d simply… stopped. Harlow crouched beside the body, her sharp jaw tightening. The victim—a man in his late thirties, dressed in a rumpled suit—lay on his back, eyes wide and unblinking. His skin had an odd, waxy pallor, like he’d been drained of something more than just blood. She reached for his wrist, not expecting a pulse, but her fingers still lingered, pressing into the cold flesh. Nothing. “No wounds, no defensive injuries,” muttered PC Harris, a fresh-faced officer hovering at the edge of the light. “Almost like he just dropped dead.” Harlow’s brown eyes narrowed. “Almost.” A flicker of movement caught her attention. She straightened, torch swinging toward the far end of the platform where the shadows pooled unnaturally thick. A figure stepped forward—Eva Kowalski, her curly red hair escaping the loose bun she’d tied it into, her round glasses reflecting the torchlight. She clutched her worn leather satchel to her side, the strap digging into the crook of her elbow. “Detective Quinn,” Eva said, her voice steady but laced with something Harlow couldn’t place. Concern? Fear? “I was told you’d be leading this.” Harlow exhaled through her nose. “And you are?” “Eva Kowalski. Research assistant at the British Museum.” Eva tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear, a nervous habit Harlow had seen before in witnesses. “I was called in as a consultant. The, uh… circumstances are a bit… unusual.” Harlow’s gaze flicked back to the body. “Unusual how?” Eva hesitated, then stepped closer, her boots scuffing against the concrete. “The maintenance worker who found him said the tunnel wasn’t here yesterday.” Harlow’s fingers twitched. “Tunnels don’t just appear.” “No,” Eva agreed. “But this one might have.” Harlow followed Eva’s gaze to the far wall, where the torchlight revealed a jagged opening in the brickwork—too clean, too precise. No debris, no dust. Just a void. She moved toward it, her military precision honed over eighteen years of service making her steps deliberate, controlled. The air grew colder as she approached, her breath fogging in front of her. “This isn’t on any city blueprints,” Eva said, trailing behind. “I checked.” Harlow crouched at the entrance, running her fingers along the edges. The bricks were smooth, almost polished. “Someone went to a lot of trouble to hide this.” Eva shifted her satchel, the leather creaking. “Or something did.” Harlow shot her a sharp look. Eva’s green eyes were wide, but not with fear—with something like recognition. Harlow had seen that look before, in the eyes of people who knew more than they were saying. She stood, brushing dust from her trousers. “You’re holding something back.” Eva’s fingers tightened around the strap of her satchel. “There’s a market. The Veil Market. It moves every full moon. Last night was a full moon.” Harlow’s pulse ticked up. “And?” “And this,” Eva gestured to the tunnel, “is how you get there.” Harlow’s jaw clenched. Supernatural nonsense. That’s what this was. She’d heard the whispers before—after Morris died, the way the other officers had looked at her when she’d insisted there was more to his death than a botched raid. But she wasn’t about to dismiss this out of hand. Not when the evidence was staring her in the face. She turned back to the body. The man’s right hand was clenched, fingers curled around something small and metallic. Harlow pried his fingers open. A compass. Not just any compass—a small brass one, its casing etched with intricate sigils, the needle spinning wildly beneath the glass. The patina of verdigris on its surface gave it an ancient look, but the craftsmanship was precise, deliberate. “That’s a Veil Compass,” Eva said, her voice barely above a whisper. “It points to the nearest supernatural rift.” Harlow’s grip tightened around it. The needle didn’t settle. It just kept spinning, as if the very air around them was alive with something unseen. “You’re telling me this man died because of… magic?” Eva didn’t flinch. “I’m telling you there are things in this city that don’t follow the rules you know. The Veil Market trades in enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, information. And it’s not for humans.” Harlow’s mind raced. Morris’s case. The way his body had been found—no blood, no wounds, just like this. The way the coroner’s report had been inconclusive, the way the higher-ups had shut down her questions. She’d known, deep down, that something was off. And now here was Eva Kowalski, standing in an impossible tunnel, talking about impossible things. She pocketed the compass. “You said the market moves every full moon. Where was it last night?” Eva’s gaze flicked to the tunnel. “Here.” Harlow stepped into the opening, her torchlight swallowed by the dark. The air was different here—thicker, charged. The walls of the tunnel were lined with symbols, carved into the stone with a precision that made her skin prickle. She ran her fingers over them. They were warm. “These are wards,” Eva said, following her in. “Protection. Or maybe a warning.” Harlow didn’t answer. She was too busy staring at the end of the tunnel, where it opened into a cavernous space. The ceiling was lost in shadow, but the walls were lined with stalls, their contents obscured by the dim light of flickering lanterns. The scent of spices and something metallic hung in the air. The Veil Market. It shouldn’t exist. And yet, here it was. Harlow’s torchlight caught on a figure moving between the stalls—a tall, gaunt man in a long coat, his face obscured by a wide-brimmed hat. He turned, and for a second, his eyes met hers. They were entirely black. Then he was gone, swallowed by the shadows. Eva’s breath hitched. “We shouldn’t be here.” Harlow’s hand went to her sidearm, though she knew it wouldn’t do any good against whatever lurked in this place. “We’re not leaving until I get answers.” Eva’s nervous habit flared—tucking her hair behind her left ear, then doing it again. “The market doesn’t like outsiders. And it *really* doesn’t like police.” Harlow ignored her, stepping further into the space. The stalls were empty now, their wares abandoned. A glass vial lay shattered on the ground, its contents—some kind of iridescent liquid—seeping into the cracks between the stones. A cloth doll with too-long limbs hung from a hook, its stitched mouth a jagged line of red thread. And then she saw it. A body. Not the man from the platform, but another—this one slumped against a stall, a bone token clutched in its stiff fingers. The token was identical to the ones she’d seen in old case files, the ones linked to disappearances, to deaths that made no sense. Harlow crouched beside it, her gloved fingers brushing the token. It was cold. Unnaturally so. Eva knelt beside her, her voice low. “That’s the entry fee. You can’t get in without one.” Harlow’s mind clicked. The victim on the platform. The tunnel. The market. “He didn’t just drop dead. He was *taken*.” Eva’s eyes widened. “You think someone from the market killed him?” Harlow stood, the compass heavy in her pocket. “I think he found this place. I think he took something he shouldn’t have. And I think they made sure he didn’t leave.” Eva swallowed. “Or maybe he just… got lost in the wrong place.” Harlow’s gaze swept the empty market. The lanterns flickered, their light dimming as if the very air was resisting their presence. “No. This was deliberate.” A sound echoed through the cavern—a low, guttural growl, like stone grinding against stone. The lanterns snuffed out, one by one, plunging them into darkness. Eva’s hand shot out, gripping Harlow’s arm. “We need to go. *Now.*” Harlow didn’t argue. The compass in her pocket pulsed, the needle spinning faster, as if sensing the danger. She turned, torchlight cutting through the black, and ran. The tunnel seemed longer on the way out, the symbols on the walls glowing faintly as they passed, as if reacting to their presence. Harlow’s lungs burned, her boots pounding against the stone. Behind them, the growling grew louder, closer. They burst out of the tunnel and into the abandoned Tube station. The body was gone. The platform was empty, the yellow police tape fluttering in a breeze that shouldn’t have existed underground. Harlow didn’t stop. She grabbed Eva’s wrist and pulled her toward the stairs, her military precision overriding the panic clawing at her chest. They didn’t speak until they were back in the cold London air, the sounds of the city—honking horns, distant sirens—washing over them like a baptism. Eva bent over, hands on her knees, gasping. “That was… that was a mistake.” Harlow’s fingers closed around the Veil Compass in her pocket. The needle had stilled, pointing back the way they’d come. “No. It was a lead.” Eva straightened, her freckled face pale. “You can’t go back there. Not without—” “Without what?” Harlow demanded. “A bone token? A better weapon? A bloody invitation?” Eva’s green eyes locked onto hers. “Without understanding what you’re up against.” Harlow thought of Morris. Of the case files gathering dust in her office, the ones no one else wanted to touch. She thought of the man on the platform, his waxy skin, his empty eyes. She pulled the compass from her pocket, holding it up between them. The sigils on its face seemed to shift in the light, as if alive. “Then help me understand.” Eva stared at the compass, then at Harlow. For a long moment, neither spoke. Then, slowly, Eva reached into her satchel and pulled out a book—its cover worn, its pages yellowed. “There are things in this city that defy explanation. But they leave traces. Clues. If you know where to look.” Harlow took the book, flipping it open. The pages were filled with sketches of symbols, notes in Eva’s tight handwriting, press clippings about unsolved cases. Morris’s case was in there. She’d recognize his photo anywhere. She snapped the book shut. “You’ve been investigating this.” Eva didn’t deny it. “Someone has to.” Harlow’s grip on the book tightened. “Then we do it together.” Eva’s nervous habit flared again, but this time, there was something else in her eyes. Determination. “Together.” Harlow nodded, tucking the book under her arm. The Veil Compass went back into her pocket, its weight a promise. She had a lead. A real one. And for the first time in three years, she felt like she was on the right track. Even if the track led straight into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1910
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"very"
2"really"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1910
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"oppressive"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"flicked"
count2
8
word"jaw clenched"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"intricate"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"raced"
count1
13
word"charged"
count1
14
word"shattered"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"echoed"
count1
17
word"pulsed"
count1
18
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"gloom"
2"familiar"
3"weight"
4"oppressive"
5"pulse"
6"flicker"
7"flicked"
8"jaw clenched"
9"etched"
10"intricate"
11"whisper"
12"raced"
13"charged"
14"shattered"
15"flickered"
16"echoed"
17"pulsed"
18"pounding"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
2
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
2"jaw clenched"
3"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences157
matches
0"t with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences157
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences199
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords3
totalWords1891
ratio0.002
matches
0"really"
1"taken"
2"Now."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions87
wordCount1535
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.41
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Tube2
Camden1
Harlow37
Quinn1
Harris1
Eva31
Kowalski2
Concern1
Morris4
Veil3
Market1
London1
Compass2
persons
0"Camden"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Harris"
4"Eva"
5"Kowalski"
6"Morris"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.295
windowScore0
48.99% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences99
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"something like recognition"
1"as if sensing the danger"
2"as if reacting to their presence"
3"seemed longer on the way out, the symbols on the walls glowing faintly as they passed, as if reacting to their presence"
4"felt like she was on the right track"
94.24% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.058
wordCount1891
matches
0"not expecting a pulse, but her fingers still lingered, pressing into the cold flesh"
1"Not the man from the platform, but another"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences199
matches
0"seen that look"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean26.63
std19.3
cv0.725
sampleLengths
090
14
249
365
424
55
665
723
88
941
109
1123
127
138
1460
1512
1627
1710
1847
1926
205
2112
2258
2364
2419
2534
2635
2758
2817
297
3047
3113
3255
333
348
3538
368
377
3827
3925
4055
415
4247
4315
4417
4520
4611
4731
4812
4925
87.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences157
matches
0"been drained"
1"was clenched"
2"been found"
3"were lined"
4"was lost"
5"were lined"
6"was gone"
7"was gone"
8"were filled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs259
matches
0"were saying"
1"was staring"
2"was resisting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences199
ratio0.08
matches
0"The beam of her torch cut through the gloom, illuminating the peeling posters on the walls—faded advertisements for long-forgotten plays and products, their edges curled like dead leaves."
1"The victim—a man in his late thirties, dressed in a rumpled suit—lay on his back, eyes wide and unblinking."
2"A figure stepped forward—Eva Kowalski, her curly red hair escaping the loose bun she’d tied it into, her round glasses reflecting the torchlight."
3"Harlow followed Eva’s gaze to the far wall, where the torchlight revealed a jagged opening in the brickwork—too clean, too precise."
4"Eva’s green eyes were wide, but not with fear—with something like recognition."
5"She’d heard the whispers before—after Morris died, the way the other officers had looked at her when she’d insisted there was more to his death than a botched raid."
6"Not just any compass—a small brass one, its casing etched with intricate sigils, the needle spinning wildly beneath the glass."
7"The way his body had been found—no blood, no wounds, just like this."
8"The air was different here—thicker, charged."
9"Harlow’s torchlight caught on a figure moving between the stalls—a tall, gaunt man in a long coat, his face obscured by a wide-brimmed hat."
10"Eva’s nervous habit flared—tucking her hair behind her left ear, then doing it again."
11"A glass vial lay shattered on the ground, its contents—some kind of iridescent liquid—seeping into the cracks between the stones."
12"Not the man from the platform, but another—this one slumped against a stall, a bone token clutched in its stiff fingers."
13"A sound echoed through the cavern—a low, guttural growl, like stone grinding against stone."
14"They didn’t speak until they were back in the cold London air, the sounds of the city—honking horns, distant sirens—washing over them like a baptism."
15"Then, slowly, Eva reached into her satchel and pulled out a book—its cover worn, its pages yellowed."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1559
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.030788967286722257
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.005772931366260423
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences199
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences199
mean9.5
std6.89
cv0.725
sampleLengths
026
116
228
320
44
522
65
72
84
915
101
119
1219
1317
1419
151
1618
176
184
191
207
2117
2223
2318
2414
251
261
277
285
293
3027
3114
327
332
3411
3512
363
374
383
395
4021
414
423
4318
4414
4510
462
4711
486
4910
43.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.22613065326633167
totalSentences199
uniqueOpeners45
94.56% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences141
matches
0"Just a single figure, sprawled"
1"Just a void."
2"Then he was gone, swallowed"
3"Then, slowly, Eva reached into"
ratio0.028
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences141
matches
0"She adjusted the worn leather"
1"His skin had an odd,"
2"She reached for his wrist,"
3"She straightened, torch swinging toward"
4"She clutched her worn leather"
5"She moved toward it, her"
6"She stood, brushing dust from"
7"She’d heard the whispers before—after"
8"She turned back to the"
9"It just kept spinning, as"
10"She’d known, deep down, that"
11"She pocketed the compass."
12"She ran her fingers over"
13"They were warm."
14"She was too busy staring"
15"It shouldn’t exist."
16"He turned, and for a"
17"They were entirely black."
18"It was cold."
19"She turned, torchlight cutting through"
ratio0.199
30.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount121
totalSentences141
matches
0"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over"
2"The beam of her torch"
3"She adjusted the worn leather"
4"Something was wrong here."
5"The call had come in"
6"Harlow crouched beside the body,"
7"The victim—a man in his"
8"His skin had an odd,"
9"She reached for his wrist,"
10"Harlow’s brown eyes narrowed."
11"A flicker of movement caught"
12"She straightened, torch swinging toward"
13"A figure stepped forward—Eva Kowalski,"
14"She clutched her worn leather"
15"Eva said, her voice steady"
16"Harlow exhaled through her nose."
17"Eva tucked a strand of"
18"Harlow’s gaze flicked back to"
19"Eva hesitated, then stepped closer,"
ratio0.858
35.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences141
matches
0"Even if the track led"
ratio0.007
97.51% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"It just kept spinning, as if the very air around them was alive with something unseen."
1"The token was identical to the ones she’d seen in old case files, the ones linked to disappearances, to deaths that made no sense."
2"The lanterns flickered, their light dimming as if the very air was resisting their presence."
3"The platform was empty, the yellow police tape fluttering in a breeze that shouldn’t have existed underground."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva said, her voice barely above a whisper"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"muttered PC Harris (mutter)"
1"Eva agreed (agree)"
2"Harlow demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.137
leniency0.275
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.118
78.5435%