Run: 2026-09-29-01M3P2DKNRX2E9YNNVT2D6KSQ4

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35.7s
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$0.047092
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Claude Platform on AWS

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last deadbolt slid back, and Lucien Moreau did not so much as glance at it. "Three locks." He leaned on the ivory handle of his cane. "Your friend is either very paranoid or very well informed." "Both." Rory kept one hand on the door and her body in the gap. "How did you find this place?" "I am a finder of things, Aurora. It is the whole business." "It's a bad business." She looked him over. Charcoal suit, not a crease in it. Platinum hair slicked back, though a few strands had come loose at the temple. His amber eye caught the landing light. The black one swallowed it. "You look terrible." "I look exactly as I always do." "You missed a button." He glanced down. Then he laughed, one short breath through the nose, and did not fix it. That was what stopped her. Lucien fixed everything. Behind her, floorboards creaked under a tabby's weight. Ptolemy stalked out of the gloom, sniffed the air, and sat down on her foot as if to say the matter was settled. "Your cat has judged me," said Lucien. "He's Eva's. And he judges everyone." "Then I am in good company." He lowered his voice. "Let me in, Rory." Nobody had called her that in three weeks. Not since the night she'd left his office with his ledger in her fist and her name written on page forty-one, next to a sum. She stepped back. He ducked under the low frame and stopped a pace inside. The flat swallowed him. Books climbed every wall in leaning towers. Scrolls curled out of a laundry basket. Research notes papered the window, and the smell of cumin drifted up through the floor from the curry house below. A man built for marble lobbies stood in a room that looked like an avalanche of paper. "Charming," he said. "Don't touch anything." "I never touch what I cannot afford to break." His gaze drifted to the desk, to the map she had pinned there, then to her. "You are reading her notes." "Somebody has to. She's been gone eight days." "I know." Rory shut the door. Bolt, bolt, bolt. The sound rang like a countdown. "Of course you know. You know everything. Except, apparently, how to knock and wait." "I did knock." "Twenty minutes ago. Then you stood out there and breathed." That landed. A muscle moved in his jaw. He turned away, ran a gloved finger along a spine on the nearest shelf, and read the title as though it might save him. "Say it, Lucien." "Say what?" "Whatever brought you across London with a button undone." "I came to return this." He reached into his jacket and drew out a small square of black cloth. He unfolded it on the arm of the sofa. Her mother's silver bracelet. The one Rory had pawned in Peckham to buy a train ticket, back when she was nineteen and stupid and running from Cardiff. She had not told anyone that. Not Eva. Not him. "Where did you get that?" "A shop in Peckham that no longer exists." He said it lightly. His hand shook once against the cloth, and he stilled it. "I have been looking for it since the night you left." "That's not an apology." "No." "An apology has words in it." "Then I will use some." He faced her fully. Without the smirk, his face turned severe, all planes and shadow. "I put your name in that ledger because a man named Varga offered me a choice. Your name, or my sister's. I chose neither. I wrote a lie, and I sold the lie, and I kept you off his list. Every line on page forty-one is false. Every figure. I built a fiction so that you would be worth more alive." Rory said nothing. The fridge hummed in the kitchen. Ptolemy leapt onto the desk and settled across a stack of Eva's index cards. "You could have told me." "You would have walked into Varga's office and burned it down." "Yes." "You see the difficulty." "I see a man who decided what I could handle." She crossed the room, and the floor gave a soft complaint under each step. She stopped close enough to smell him, bergamot, cold iron, a whisper of smoke. "I've had one of those already. Evan made all my decisions for me too. He just had worse tailoring." The words hit him like a slap. She watched them go in. Watched his mouth open, close, and set into a line. "That is not fair." "No. It isn't." She held his gaze. "But you weren't fair either." He nodded once. Slowly. "Then we are even." "We're not even close." "No." His eyes dropped to her mouth, then jerked back up as though they'd been burned. "Forgive me." "For which part?" "Choose one." The laugh escaped her before she could stop it. It was small and cracked, and it cost her something. She pressed her wrist against her lips, thumb brushing the crescent scar there, an old habit. His attention followed the motion, and she saw him notice. Saw him decide not to say so. "You look tired," he said quietly. "I've been sleeping on a sofa with a cat sitting on my face." "Come home with me. My apartment has four bedrooms and no cat." "Your apartment has a ledger with my name in it." "I burned it." She blinked. "You what?" "Page forty-one, and the forty pages before it. Everything." A corner of his mouth lifted, wry, wretched. "I am told it was an heirloom." "Lucien." "I know." She should have stayed angry. She had planned it out on the night bus, in the queue at Tesco, in the shower with its temperamental boiler. Every cutting line lined up like soldiers. Now they scattered. She reached for the bracelet instead and turned it over in her palm. The clasp had been mended. Neatly. By someone with patient hands. "You fixed the clasp." "A man who cannot fix a clasp has no business fixing anything else." "That's the worst line you've ever used." "It was not a line." Silence stretched between them, warm and dangerous. He took one step. She let him. Close now, close enough that she could see the pulse ticking under the sharp line of his jaw, the flecks of gold in the black eye that she'd never noticed before. His gloved fingers rose and hovered beside her cheek. Not touching. Waiting. She should have said no. Ptolemy's ears flattened. A low hiss rolled out of the cat, thin and continuous like a kettle. Every hair on his spine stood up. He stared at the door, and the door stared back. Lucien's hand dropped. "Rory." "I see him." "Get behind me." "Not a chance." She snatched the bracelet, slid it on, and grabbed the heavy brass paperweight off the desk. "What is it?" The cane twisted in his grip. Steel whispered out of ivory, a thin bright blade that caught the lamplight. His voice dropped to something she had never heard from him before, flat and ancient and French in the oldest way. "Something that did not need to knock." The first deadbolt screamed and buckled inward. Then the second. Then a voice slid through the wood, soft as silk over broken glass, and it said a name that was not Aurora, not Rory, not Laila. "Malphora. Come out, little queen."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences70
tagDensity0.214
leniency0.429
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.029
83.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1243
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"lightly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1243
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"marble"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"gloom"
2"marble"
3"whisper"
4"silence"
5"pulse"
6"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences92
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences92
filterMatches
0"notice"
1"decide"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1243
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount804
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.62
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien4
Moreau1
Rory5
Charcoal1
Peckham1
Cardiff1
Eva2
Tesco1
French1
Aurora1
Laila1
Ptolemy3
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Laila"
5"Ptolemy"
places
0"Peckham"
1"Cardiff"
2"Tesco"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like an avalanche of paper"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1243
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs76
mean16.36
std17.58
cv1.075
sampleLengths
016
121
220
312
444
57
64
725
831
97
106
1114
1233
133
1466
153
163
1730
188
192
2027
213
2210
2332
243
252
269
2728
2837
295
3034
314
321
336
3481
3523
365
3711
381
394
4057
4122
424
4312
448
454
4618
473
482
4952
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"been burned"
1"been mended"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs130
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount805
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.03229813664596273
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006211180124223602
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean8.51
std7.62
cv0.895
sampleLengths
016
111
210
314
46
512
68
77
814
97
105
113
127
134
143
1514
165
173
188
1923
207
216
2210
234
248
2525
263
2711
284
297
307
3120
3217
333
343
3525
365
378
382
394
403
416
4214
433
4410
452
466
4724
483
492
67.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4246575342465753
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners62
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then he laughed, one short"
1"Then the second."
2"Then a voice slid through"
ratio0.037
44.39% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences82
matches
0"He leaned on the ivory"
1"She looked him over"
2"His amber eye caught the"
3"He glanced down."
4"He lowered his voice"
5"She stepped back."
6"He ducked under the low"
7"His gaze drifted to the"
8"He turned away, ran a"
9"He reached into his jacket"
10"He unfolded it on the"
11"Her mother's silver bracelet."
12"She had not told anyone"
13"He said it lightly"
14"His hand shook once against"
15"He faced her fully"
16"She crossed the room, and"
17"She stopped close enough to"
18"She watched them go in."
19"She held his gaze"
ratio0.439
33.17% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount70
totalSentences82
matches
0"The last deadbolt slid back,"
1"He leaned on the ivory"
2"Rory kept one hand on"
3"She looked him over"
4"Charcoal suit, not a crease"
5"Platinum hair slicked back, though"
6"His amber eye caught the"
7"The black one swallowed it."
8"He glanced down."
9"That was what stopped her."
10"Lucien fixed everything."
11"Ptolemy stalked out of the"
12"He lowered his voice"
13"Nobody had called her that"
14"She stepped back."
15"He ducked under the low"
16"The flat swallowed him."
17"Books climbed every wall in"
18"Scrolls curled out of a"
19"A man built for marble"
ratio0.854
60.98% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"Now they scattered."
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Steel whispered out of ivory, a thin bright blade that caught the lamplight."
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She crossed, and the floor gave a soft complaint under each step"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences70
tagDensity0.043
leniency0.086
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.6981%