Run: 2026-09-29-01M3P2HTJ865VC5F6EDKG4060G

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Duration:
34.3s
Cost:
$0.046458
Provider:
Claude Platform on AWS

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bag was still hot. Rory noticed it halfway across the clearing. Forty minutes on a bicycle from Chinatown, then twenty more on foot through the dark bracken, and the paper handles of the Golden Empress bag still burned her fingers. The sweet and sour should have gone cold an hour ago. "Delivery," she called. Her voice fell flat, as if the trees had swallowed it and given nothing back. "Anyone? Order for Laila?" Nothing. She checked her phone. The screen showed the address in Yu-Fei's careful capitals: *RICHMOND PARK, OAK STONES, LEAVE INSIDE THE CIRCLE.* Below it, paid in full, a tip that made her check the decimal point twice. No signal. No bars at all, though she had called Yu-Fei from the gate ten minutes ago. *Twenty quid for a stroll,* she'd told herself. *Don't be precious.* She kept walking. The path had ended without ceremony, the gravel giving way to soft turf that swallowed her footsteps. Then came the stones. Six of them, tall and black and ridged like petrified bark, rising from a ring of grass so green it looked wet. They were oak, she realised, not granite. Whole trunks turned to something harder than wood, each one wider than a door. Wildflowers crowded their bases. Foxgloves, poppies, bluebells, all open together, all at the wrong season, all pale silver in a light that had no obvious source. The air smelled of cut hay and honey. Her breath, meanwhile, did not fog. Rory stopped at the boundary. Something small and warm pressed against her sternum. She pulled the chain from beneath her jumper. The Heartstone lay in her palm, deep crimson, no bigger than her thumbnail, and it pulsed. Faintly. A slow beat, like a sleeper's heart. "Oh, you're joking." It had never done that before. The unknown benefactor who'd posted it to her flat had included no note, no instructions, only a jeweller's box and a dead moth pressed inside the lid. She'd worn it out of stubbornness. Now it throbbed against her skin as if it wanted to leave. She tucked it back under her collar. Her hand shook, and she watched it shake with a detached sort of interest. "Right. Bag down, photo for the app, home." She stepped across the ring. The sound started the moment her boot touched the grass. Behind her, a footstep. Just one, soft and deliberate, landing a half-beat after her own. Rory froze. Silence. Even the insects had gone quiet, if there had been any. She turned her head slowly, then her shoulders, then her whole body. The bracken beyond the stones stood motionless, black against blacker. Nobody there. She took another step. The echo came again, half a beat late. *Sound bouncing off the stones. Acoustics.* She said it in her head in her father's courtroom voice, flat and reasonable. *That's all it is.* She walked to the centre, where a flat slab of pale rock sat like an altar, and set the bag on it. The paper crackled. Somewhere behind her, in perfect time with that crackle, something else crackled. Paper. Or the memory of paper. Rory pulled out her phone and raised it to photograph the bag. The screen showed the camera view, the slab, the food, the stones ringing the background. Seven stones. She lowered the phone and counted with her eyes. Six. Raised it again. Seven, the extra one standing tall and narrow between two of the others, and it was not a stone at all. It had shoulders. She lowered the phone again. Six. "No," she said aloud. "Nope. Not doing that." Her voice sounded thin. She backed toward the boundary, and the pendant grew hotter against her chest, close to painful now, its pulse quickening. Her eyes stayed on the stones. Movement flickered in the corner of her left eye. She snapped her head round. A poppy nodded on its stem, though nothing had touched it. Movement in the right, and she turned again. A foxglove bell swung, ringing without sound. Then the smell changed. Honey soured. Beneath the hay came something older, like wet earth in a cellar, like a coin held too long on the tongue. It rolled across the clearing in slow, thick waves. "Whoever you are," Rory said, "this isn't funny." Something behind the altar rock chewed. She heard it clearly. Wet, patient, unhurried. The slow work of a jaw grinding on something that gave way reluctantly. She looked at the bag. Untouched, still folded at the top. The chewing went on, and beneath it came a second sound, softer, almost tender. A hum. A lullaby her mother used to sing in Welsh over the washing-up. *Suo Gân.* Rory's stomach turned to ice. "Mam?" It escaped before she could stop it. She clamped her lips shut. Her mother was in Cardiff. Her mother was asleep in Cardiff, two hundred miles from here, and had never once, in twenty-five years, hummed that song within earshot of another living soul. The humming stopped. The silence that followed felt deliberate, like a held breath, like a hand cupped over a mouth. She ran. Three strides, four, straight for the gap between the two nearest stones. The grass tugged at her ankles. The gap was six feet wide. Then five. Then four. The stones were not moving, she told herself, they were standing perfectly still, but each time she looked away and back the space between them had narrowed. She threw herself at it sideways, shoulder first, and her palm slapped against something cold and ridged. Bark. Old, damp bark, where there had been empty air. She scrambled along the ring, hands on the stones, searching for another gap. The trunks curved away beneath her fingers, seamless, and she realised she had stopped counting them. Rory spun and pressed her back against the wood. The clearing lay before her, silver and still. The altar. The bag. The flowers, every head now turned toward her like faces in a crowd. The bag was open. She had not seen it open. The paper lay folded back in neat, careful creases, and the foil lids of the containers were peeled away, one after another, as though by fingers. Steam rose from the rice. It curled upward, and it did not drift as steam should. It gathered in the air above the slab, thickening, shaping itself into a rough outline. A head. Narrow shoulders. Long arms hanging past the knees. The Heartstone seared her skin. Rory clawed at the chain, and the silver snapped, and the pendant dropped into her palm, throbbing, crimson light spilling between her fingers and staining the grass at her feet the colour of a fresh wound. The steam-thing tilted its head. Where a face should have been, the vapour parted into a smile that went far too wide. "There you are, Malphora," it said, in her mother's voice. "We've kept your supper warm." The ground under her boots began to soften.
created_at"2026-09-29T07:54:59.535Z" 9/29/2026, 7:54:59 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.2
87.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1162
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"reluctantly"
2"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1162
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count1
2
word"throbbed"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"pulsed"
2"throbbed"
3"silence"
4"echo"
5"perfect"
6"pulse"
7"flickered"
8"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences128
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords28
totalWords1162
ratio0.024
matches
0"RICHMOND PARK, OAK STONES, LEAVE INSIDE THE CIRCLE."
1"Twenty quid for a stroll,"
2"Don't be precious."
3"Sound bouncing off the stones. Acoustics."
4"That's all it is."
5"Suo Gân."
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"The stones were not moving, she told herself, they were standing perfectly still, but each time she looked away and back…"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount1125
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.71
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Yu-Fei"
discoveredNames
Chinatown1
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei2
Heartstone2
Welsh1
Rory8
Cardiff2
Six3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Rory"
places
0"Chinatown"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Welsh"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.861
wordCount1162
matches
0"not moving, she told herself, they were standing perfectly still, but each time she looked away"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences133
matches
0"hummed that song"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean23.24
std21.79
cv0.938
sampleLengths
05
147
222
31
453
511
63
790
814
913
1032
113
1251
1321
148
155
1625
172
1836
1912
2024
2143
2227
232
2437
256
268
2770
284
2932
308
316
3259
332
345
3545
363
3717
382
3972
4010
4138
4225
434
4463
4510
4641
4722
4815
498
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences128
matches
0"were peeled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs184
matches
0"were standing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences133
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1131
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"warm pressed against her"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.03713527851458886
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005305039787798408
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean8.74
std7.1
cv0.813
sampleLengths
05
17
229
311
43
515
64
71
84
932
102
1115
128
133
143
1517
164
1722
187
1914
204
2122
228
236
245
258
268
2716
281
297
303
316
3227
336
3412
357
3614
378
385
3910
404
4111
422
431
4411
4512
4610
472
484
498
60.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.41353383458646614
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences105
matches
0"Then came the stones."
1"Just one, soft and deliberate,"
2"Even the insects had gone"
3"Somewhere behind her, in perfect"
4"Then the smell changed."
ratio0.048
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences105
matches
0"Her voice fell flat, as"
1"She checked her phone."
2"She kept walking."
3"They were oak, she realised,"
4"Her breath, meanwhile, did not"
5"She pulled the chain from"
6"It had never done that"
7"She'd worn it out of"
8"She tucked it back under"
9"Her hand shook, and she"
10"She stepped across the ring."
11"She turned her head slowly,"
12"She took another step."
13"She walked to the centre,"
14"She lowered the phone and"
15"It had shoulders."
16"She lowered the phone again."
17"she said aloud"
18"Her voice sounded thin."
19"She backed toward the boundary,"
ratio0.333
74.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences105
matches
0"The bag was still hot."
1"Rory noticed it halfway across"
2"The sweet and sour should"
3"Her voice fell flat, as"
4"She checked her phone."
5"The screen showed the address"
6"She kept walking."
7"The path had ended without"
8"They were oak, she realised,"
9"Wildflowers crowded their bases."
10"Foxgloves, poppies, bluebells, all open"
11"The air smelled of cut"
12"Her breath, meanwhile, did not"
13"Rory stopped at the boundary."
14"Something small and warm pressed"
15"She pulled the chain from"
16"The Heartstone lay in her"
17"A slow beat, like a"
18"It had never done that"
19"The unknown benefactor who'd posted"
ratio0.771
47.62% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"Now it throbbed against her"
ratio0.01
43.19% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The screen showed the address in Yu-Fei's careful capitals: *RICHMOND PARK, OAK STONES, LEAVE INSIDE THE CIRCLE.* Below it, paid in full, a tip that made her ch…"
1"The path had ended without ceremony, the gravel giving way to soft turf that swallowed her footsteps."
2"Foxgloves, poppies, bluebells, all open together, all at the wrong season, all pale silver in a light that had no obvious source."
3"The unknown benefactor who'd posted it to her flat had included no note, no instructions, only a jeweller's box and a dead moth pressed inside the lid."
4"The paper lay folded back in neat, careful creases, and the foil lids of the containers were peeled away, one after another, as though by fingers."
5"Rory clawed at the chain, and the silver snapped, and the pendant dropped into her palm, throbbing, crimson light spilling between her fingers and staining the …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.2566%