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Run: 2026-10-05-01M46B98K0HGVHHR3A8HWQSVDE
Run Details
Model:
GPT-6.1 Sol (Reasoning, Medium)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
1m 35s
Cost:
$0.029591
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
71.47%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
59.09%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
57.71%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
59.79%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
81.08%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
44.84%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
92.4660%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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Rory caught Isolde’s wrist before
the root dragged her through the opening.
The bark split beneath her
fingers and showed a row of teeth. “Cut the root, not the door.”
Isolde’s silver hair hung over
the edge of the hollow.
Something below tugged again, pulling
Rory’s boots through the wildflowers.
Rory drew the moonsilver dagger
with her free hand. Cold bit into her palm. One stroke severed the root.
A shriek burst from the
oak.
Nyx rose from its shadow
and caught Rory beneath the arms. For an instant, she felt nothing but a
chill
through her coat.
Then their hands hardened, and
they hauled both women away from the hollow.
The severed root thrashed among
the flowers.
Isolde pressed her heel against
it.
Her foot left no mark
in the soft earth, but the root stopped moving. “You said it would open.” “A mouth is an opening.” “You left out the teeth.” “I had not seen them.”
Rory looked down at the
pendant against her chest.
The crimson stone pulsed through
her shirt, warm enough to sting.
The hollow had appeared when
she brought it between the grove’s boundary stones. Until then, the oak had offered nothing stranger than a split trunk and a patch of pale fungus.
Now the fungus curled away
from the opening, revealing steps.
They descended into a depth
the tree could not contain. Nyx leaned over the edge.
Their violet eyes narrowed to
two thin strokes. “No shadows below.” “Light?” “Something that remembers light.”
Rory wiped the dagger on
a broad leaf. Clear sap clung to the blade. “Does either of you have advice that comes without a puzzle?” “Do not eat.”
Isolde lifted a fold of
her torn skirt. Beneath it, the root had left five red marks around her ankle. Nyx looked at the pendant. “Do not let anyone take that.” “Right. No food, no jewellery theft. Almost a normal shift.”
She slipped the pendant beneath
her shirt and started down. The first step bent under her boot. Not stone. Wood, though it had the smooth grain and pale sheen of bone. Each tread flexed as she put
weight
on it, then stiffened before she could fall.
She kept one hand against
the wall. Warm ridges moved beneath the bark, rising and sinking with a slow
pulse
. Behind her, Isolde’s skirt brushed the stairs. Nyx made no sound. After twelve steps, the wall opened. Rory stopped so abruptly that Isolde touched her shoulder. An orchard spread beneath them. Trees grew upside down from a ceiling lost in amber haze.
Their trunks descended through the
air, dividing into slender branches that carried fruit the size of lanterns. Clear skins enclosed tiny moving shapes: a shoal of silver fish, a winding stair, a red bird beating its wings. Roots rose from the floor and met the branches overhead. Some formed arches. Others twisted into benches. No wind stirred the leaves, yet they whispered against one another. A narrow stair wound down towards a terrace. Beyond it, channels crossed a garden in neat rows. Dark liquid ran through them, carrying the scent of wine, cloves and crushed pears. Rory’s
stomach
tightened.
She had eaten half a
spring roll between deliveries. That seemed a long way away now. “Dymas.” Nyx spoke close to her ear. “How can you tell?” “The hunger.” Isolde looked across the orchard.
Her pale eyes followed something
Rory could not see. “This garden bears what the upper orchards have forgotten.” “You’ve been here?” “No.” “Then how do you know?” “A seed dreams of its tree.” Rory drew a breath through her mouth and tasted honey. She descended to the terrace. Small square tiles covered the floor. Each held the imprint of a leaf, but no two matched. Ferns, oak leaves, broad veined shapes with hooked edges. When she stepped on one, its lines filled with green light. The glow followed her across the terrace and faded behind her. Nothing lit beneath Isolde’s feet. Nyx drifted beside a low wall, their lower body thinning into smoke. The wall’s carvings showed people carrying baskets towards a seated figure with an empty bowl.
Further along, the baskets grew
larger. The people grew smaller. At the last panel, only hands remained. Rory crouched. Someone had scratched words beneath the carving. English words, cut deep with an uneven point. DON’T GIVE IT THE LAST OF ANYTHING. The final G trailed into a groove where the tool had slipped. Nyx’s outline tightened. “What?” “That hand.”
They pointed at a carved
wrist near the edge of the bowl. A ring encircled one finger, marked with three small stars. “A man wore that at my table.” Rory glanced up. “When you still had a table?” “When I still needed one.” “Did he come here?” “He promised he knew a shorter road to knowledge.” Nyx reached towards the carving. Before their fingers touched it, the little stone hand closed. They withdrew. From deeper in the orchard came the soft clink of cutlery. Rory stood. A path led between the hanging trees. Fallen fruit lay in shallow dishes beside it, each split into
perfect
halves. One contained a miniature sea. Waves broke against its rind, and she heard the faint scrape of shingle.
She bent close without touching
it. Salt caught in her nose. For a few breaths, the cloves and honey vanished. “Look.” A white boat crossed the little sea. Someone aboard raised an arm. Rory lifted her hand before she could stop herself. The figure raised both arms. Its head turned towards her. Nyx covered the dish with a fallen leaf. The sound of waves ceased. “Was that a person?” “Keep your hands close.” “That wasn’t an answer.” “No.”
Their whisper had lost its
soft, drifting edge. Rory tucked her free hand into her coat pocket. They followed the path. Here, flowers grew from bronze pots shaped like cupped palms.
Their petals opened as the
group passed, releasing smells in brief, distinct breaths. Warm bread. Wet wool. Orange peel. The sharp tang of a struck match. One flower gave off the smell of the Golden Empress kitchen: ginger hitting hot oil, steam from rice, the faint scorch of a pan that needed replacing. Rory stopped beside it. A bead of grease gleamed at the centre of its white petals. “Rory.” Nyx stood a pace ahead. She stepped back. The petals folded over the bead. “Who planted these?” Isolde brushed one pot with the edge of her skirt. “The hungry. The generous. The two are not always different.” Beyond the flowers, a wall of roots enclosed a circular room. Rory found the entrance by the worn hollow in its threshold. Thousands of feet had passed there, scuffing the wood to a dark gloss. The room held a table with three places. Three chairs. Three plates. A silver jug with three narrow spouts. Rory remained outside. “Absolutely not.” No dust lay on the table. Fine scratches marked the plates, the kind forks left after years of meals. A loaf stood in the centre, its crust still cracking as it cooled. Behind the table, shallow niches filled the wall. Each contained a little clay figure holding a spoon. Some had lost their faces. Others wore expressions so precise that Rory could count the creases beside their eyes. One figure turned its head. She gripped the dagger. The figure lifted its spoon and tapped it against the niche. Once. A second answered from across the room. Then a third. The sound passed around the walls, spoon against clay, until every niche rang. Isolde stepped over the threshold. “Wait.” “Their hands hold warnings.” Rory followed her in, keeping clear of the chairs. Each spoon bore a word on its handle. Name. Years. Voice. Grief. She moved along the wall. Sleep. Mercy. Children.
Her fingers tightened around the
dagger. The figures fell silent. Nyx stopped outside the room. “Come in.” “I cannot.”
Their hand pressed against empty
air at the threshold. It flattened, spreading into a dark stain. Thin gold lines
appeared beneath it, woven across the doorway
. “A ward?” “A sieve. It admits what has flesh.” Isolde touched a figure whose spoon carried the word Grief. The clay woman’s mouth opened. A sob emerged, thin and breathless. Isolde withdrew her hand. Her lips pressed together. Rory studied the ward. Gold threads crossed from root to root, but a thicker strand ran along the floor. She knelt and slid the dagger beneath it. Nyx caught her wrist through the barrier. Their fingers
felt like cold wax
. “Cut one thread. No more.” She eased the blade upwards. The strand parted with a faint note, as if she had plucked a harp string. Nyx slipped through the gap. Every clay figure turned towards them. The loaf split down the middle. Black seeds spilled across the table and rolled onto the floor. Where they landed, they sprouted fine white roots. Rory backed towards the opposite doorway. “That felt like more than one thread.” “You cut one.” Nyx watched the roots spread. “The rest noticed.” They left the room before the first root reached a chair. The next passage sloped down between walls of glazed green brick. Copper pipes ran overhead. Something thick travelled through them in slow surges, rattling the brackets. At intervals, little taps protruded from the walls. Porcelain cups hung beneath them on hooks. Rory passed one cup painted with blue roses. A brown stain marked its lip. Beside it, someone had nailed a chef’s apron to the brick. A rectangular patch on the chest held a name in red thread: MARTIN HALE. The lower half of the apron had crumbled. Two knotted ties still gripped the nail. Rory touched the name. The pendant gave a sharp
pulse
. All the taps opened. Liquid struck the cups. Some overflowed with milk. Others filled with broth, wine or something clear that steamed without heat. From one came a stream of teeth. They clicked against
porcelain
. Rory snatched her hand away. “Why did that happen?” Isolde looked at the crimson glow beneath Rory’s shirt. “A guest need not reach for the bell.” “I’m not a guest.” “Then hide your invitation.” Rory pulled out the pendant. Its silver chain had left a warm line across her neck. The stone’s glow strengthened as she turned towards the far end of the passage. Beyond an archway, a vast bronze door stood open by a few inches. Warmth breathed through the gap. She could hear voices now. Many voices, speaking over one another, though no words reached her. Nyx looked back. The white roots had entered the passage. They moved along the seams between the bricks, avoiding the spilled drinks. Rory approached the bronze door. Its handles took the form of two slender hands. Between them, a shallow hollow matched the pendant’s shape and size. Below it, letters crowded a strip of dark enamel. She recognised none of them. Then the letters shifted. RETURN ALL BORROWED APPETITES BEFORE DEPARTURE. Rory read it aloud. The voices beyond the door stopped. Isolde caught her sleeve. “When the cup names its owner, do not answer.” Something moved on the other side. Rory lowered the pendant. Too late. A crimson line travelled from the stone to the hollow in the door. The bronze hands unclasped. The door swung inwards. Beyond it stretched a banqueting hall large enough to swallow the orchard. Hundreds of chairs stood along a single table. Tall candles burned in dishes of salt, illuminating platters beneath silver covers. Above them, vines climbed columns and vanished into a vaulted ceiling. Every chair held someone. No one moved. Rory saw a woman in a chef’s jacket, a boy wearing muddy football boots, a man with a powdered wig. A silver-haired guest gripped a spoon between fingers worn to bone. At the near end of the table stood three empty chairs. A fourth faced them from the far end. Its occupant rose. He wore a spotless apron over a dark suit. A narrow chain crossed his waistcoat, carrying a ring marked with three stars. Nyx recoiled. The man smiled at Rory. “Miss Carter. Your benefactor paid for the first course.” Behind her, the white roots snapped across the passage and seized the bronze doors. Rory slashed at the nearest root. Sap splashed her wrist. The severed end struck the floor, but five more wound round the handles. The doors slammed shut. Every guest lifted their knife. The man in the apron removed the cover from the nearest platter. Beneath it lay a silver chain, a crimson stone, and a small crescent of skin. Rory’s left wrist split along her childhood scar.
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
0
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2103
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
71.47%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2103
totalAiIsms
12
found
0
word
"chill"
count
1
1
word
"pulsed"
count
1
2
word
"weight"
count
1
3
word
"pulse"
count
2
4
word
"stomach"
count
1
5
word
"perfect"
count
1
6
word
"whisper"
count
1
7
word
"absolutely"
count
1
8
word
"porcelain"
count
2
9
word
"warmth"
count
1
highlights
0
"chill"
1
"pulsed"
2
"weight"
3
"pulse"
4
"stomach"
5
"perfect"
6
"whisper"
7
"absolutely"
8
"porcelain"
9
"warmth"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
242
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
242
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
294
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
27
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2103
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
5
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
59.09%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
75
wordCount
1870
uniqueNames
8
maxNameDensity
1.82
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Isolde
14
Rory
34
Golden
1
Empress
1
Grief
2
One
4
Nyx
16
Others
3
persons
0
"Isolde"
1
"Rory"
2
"One"
3
"Nyx"
4
"Others"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.591
windowScore
0.667
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
155
glossingSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"appeared beneath it, woven across the doorway"
1
"felt like cold wax"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2103
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
294
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
203
mean
10.36
std
10.34
cv
0.998
sampleLengths
0
24
1
6
2
20
3
19
4
6
5
36
6
27
7
5
8
5
9
5
10
5
11
20
12
41
13
10
14
13
15
3
16
1
17
4
18
14
19
11
20
3
21
20
22
5
23
6
24
10
25
10
26
7
27
49
28
11
29
6
30
9
31
5
32
65
33
11
34
31
35
3
36
16
37
1
38
6
39
4
40
2
41
14
42
9
43
3
44
1
45
5
46
6
47
10
48
5
49
48
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
242
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
304
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
294
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1871
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.017637626937466594
lyAdverbCount
2
lyAdverbRatio
0.0010689470871191875
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
294
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
294
mean
7.15
std
4.03
cv
0.564
sampleLengths
0
12
1
12
2
6
3
10
4
10
5
9
6
5
7
5
8
6
9
11
10
12
11
13
12
7
13
6
14
14
15
5
16
5
17
5
18
5
19
9
20
11
21
13
22
18
23
10
24
10
25
5
26
8
27
3
28
1
29
4
30
8
31
6
32
11
33
3
34
8
35
12
36
5
37
6
38
10
39
10
40
7
41
2
42
12
43
15
44
7
45
13
46
7
47
4
48
6
49
9
57.71%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.36054421768707484
totalSentences
294
uniqueOpeners
106
59.79%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
223
matches
0
"Then their hands hardened, and"
1
"Further along, the baskets grew"
2
"Then a third."
3
"Then the letters shifted."
ratio
0.018
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
34
totalSentences
223
matches
0
"Her foot left no mark"
1
"They descended into a depth"
2
"Their violet eyes narrowed to"
3
"She slipped the pendant beneath"
4
"She kept one hand against"
5
"Their trunks descended through the"
6
"She had eaten half a"
7
"Her pale eyes followed something"
8
"She descended to the terrace."
9
"They pointed at a carved"
10
"She bent close without touching"
11
"Its head turned towards her."
12
"Their whisper had lost its"
13
"They followed the path."
14
"Their petals opened as the"
15
"She stepped back."
16
"She gripped the dagger."
17
"She moved along the wall."
18
"Her fingers tightened around the"
19
"Their hand pressed against empty"
ratio
0.152
81.08%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
169
totalSentences
223
matches
0
"Rory caught Isolde’s wrist before"
1
"The bark split beneath her"
2
"Isolde’s silver hair hung over"
3
"Something below tugged again, pulling"
4
"Rory drew the moonsilver dagger"
5
"A shriek burst from the"
6
"Nyx rose from its shadow"
7
"The severed root thrashed among"
8
"Isolde pressed her heel against"
9
"Her foot left no mark"
10
"Rory looked down at the"
11
"The crimson stone pulsed through"
12
"The hollow had appeared when"
13
"They descended into a depth"
14
"Nyx leaned over the edge."
15
"Their violet eyes narrowed to"
16
"Rory wiped the dagger on"
17
"Isolde lifted a fold of"
18
"Nyx looked at the pendant."
19
"She slipped the pendant beneath"
ratio
0.758
44.84%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
2
totalSentences
223
matches
0
"Now the fungus curled away"
1
"Before their fingers touched it,"
ratio
0.009
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
79
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
0
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
92.4660%