Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VKB7MFHC6SZ0CAHJ3MADD

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56.4s
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System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The stench hit Quinn before she saw the body. Not the copper-sweet rot of ordinary death, but something sharper, like ozone and wet stone, the smell of a place where the air itself had been bruised. She pulled her collar up and stepped over the threshold of the abandoned Camden Town station, her boots crunching on broken tile. "Quinn." DS Yates didn't look up from his notebook. He stood beside the body, knees bent in that permanent crouch of men who'd spent too many years at crime scenes. "You're late." "I had to find the entrance." She kept her voice flat. The Veil Market didn't appear on any map, didn't register on any satellite. She'd spent six months hunting for a way in, and she'd found it only because a dealer in Deptford had gotten careless with his tongue and too much gin. Yates finally turned. His face held the particular exhaustion of someone who'd seen too much and understood too little. "Three hours ago, a street sweeper found the door unlocked. No forced entry. No witnesses. Just this." He gestured to the corpse. The man lay on his back at the centre of the old platform, where the tracks had once run. Quinn circled him slowly, her leather watch catching the dim emergency lighting. Forty-ish, expensive suit gone grey with tunnel dust, a single puncture wound at his throat. No blood. That was the first thing wrong. A puncture wound at the throat should bleed. Should pool. Should stain. "Single puncture, no defensive wounds, no signs of struggle." Yates read from his notebook, his voice carrying that particular flatness of men reciting conclusions they didn't believe. "Looks like suicide, except for the noose around his neck." Quinn crouched. The man's hands were bound behind him with what looked like ordinary clothesline, the kind you'd buy at any hardware shop. His ankles were tied too, to a rusted rail that had once held a safety barrier. The noose around his neck hung loose, not cinched, not tightened. A prop. A message. "Staged," Quinn said. "Obviously staged." Yates didn't look at her. "Question is, staged for whom? And why here?" She stood and walked the perimeter. The platform stretched into darkness in both directions, the old tile walls sweating moisture that had nothing to do with rain. Somewhere in the tunnels, water dripped with a rhythm too regular to be natural. She'd felt it the moment she descended the stairs — the wrongness of the place, the sense that the station existed in a space slightly adjacent to the world she knew. The Veil Market's territory. The supernatural black market that moved with every full moon, that required a bone token for entry, that sold things no human government would permit to exist. She'd come here hunting something else entirely. A lead on her partner's death, three years cold, the case that had hollowed out her marriage and nearly cost her her badge. DS Morris, found in a warehouse in Bermondsey with his throat opened and no blood on the floor. The coroner had ruled it a suicide. Quinn had never believed it. Now she stood in a place where the laws of physics bent, staring at a corpse arranged with theatrical precision, and she felt the old certainty returning. The same wrongness. The same absence. "What's his name?" she asked. Yates checked his notebook. "Alistair Crane. Financial consultant. No criminal record, no known enemies. Wife says he left for a late meeting and never came home." "And the clothesline?" "Standard nylon. Nothing special." Yates finally looked at her, and she saw the question in his eyes, the one he was too professional to ask aloud. You don't belong here, Quinn. You don't have the clearance, the connections, the— She ignored him. She'd spent eighteen years learning to ignore what people thought she couldn't do. Quinn returned to the body and knelt again, this time with her hands in her pockets, her eyes scanning the details Yates had missed. The suit was expensive but worn, the kind of garment that saw regular use. The shoes were scuffed at the toes, not the heels — a man who walked, who stood, who didn't sit in a chair all day. The puncture wound at his throat was precise, almost surgical, a single clean hole no larger than a pencil's width. And the noose. She examined it now with fresh eyes. Not clothesline at all. Something softer, more pliable, with a faint sheen that caught the light wrong. Hair. Human hair, woven and braided, the colour of dark straw going grey at the temples. She'd seen this before, in her research, in the restricted archives she'd accessed through channels that would have cost her career if anyone had asked questions. A binding. A ward. Something to keep a spirit anchored, or to invite one in. "Quinn." Yates' voice had changed, tightened. "What are you doing?" She didn't answer. She was looking at the man's left hand, the one visible above his bound wrists. The index finger extended, pointing. Not at anything on the platform. Pointing down, toward the tracks, toward the darkness where the rails disappeared into a tunnel that shouldn't exist — not on any map of the Underground, not in any engineering survey, not in the hundred and fifty years of records that documented every inch of London's subterranean bones. "There's a tunnel there," she said. "According to the plans, that's a solid wall. Bricked up in the 1920s." Yates laughed, but it came out wrong, uncertain. "Old stations have all kinds of—" "Not this one." Quinn stood, her knees popping. She walked to the edge of the platform and looked down. The tracks were still there, rusted but intact, disappearing into a darkness that seemed to drink the light. And at the tunnel's mouth, barely visible, something glinted. Brass, catching what little illumination there was. Small. Circular. "The Veil Market," she said. Yates went very still. "You're joking." "I've been looking for it for six months." She turned to face him, and she let him see everything she felt — the hunger, the exhaustion, the desperate hope that had driven her to trespass in places where the rules of the world she understood no longer applied. "This man, Crane, he was here. Someone brought him here. And whatever killed him, it wasn't anything in your notebook, Yates. It wasn't anything in your training." She pulled a folded paper from her pocket — a photocopy of an engineering survey, the kind she'd obtained through a contact in Transport for London, the kind that showed tunnels that didn't exist, spaces that shouldn't be there, the hollow places beneath the city where something else had built its own architecture. "This tunnel connects to the old Camden Town deep-level shelter. Abandoned in 1945. Sealed in 1962. But the Market moves, Yates. Every full moon. And tonight—" She checked her watch. 11:47 PM. The moon would be full in three days. But the Market didn't keep human schedules. It kept its own. Yates was staring at her now with something that might have been fear, might have been recognition. "You can't go in there. You don't have a token. You don't know the rules. People disappear in places like that, Quinn. They don't come back. They don't—" "Morris came back." The words escaped before she could stop them, raw and bleeding. "Three years ago. In a warehouse in Bermondsey. Same wound. Same absence. Same—" She stopped, her jaw tightening. She wouldn't say it. She wouldn't give him the satisfaction of seeing her break. "I need to see what's in that tunnel. And I need you to call for a proper forensic sweep of this platform. Not the standard kit. I need UV lamps, EMF detectors, the whole—" She gestured vaguely. "Everything. Because whatever happened to Crane, it left traces. It always does. You just have to know where to look." Yates was quiet for a long moment. Then he nodded, slow and reluctant, and pulled out his phone. "I'll call it in. But Quinn—" He met her eyes. "If you go down there, if you find something, you bring it to me. You don't handle it yourself. That's an order." She almost smiled. Almost. "You're not my superior, Yates." "No." He pocketed the phone. "But I'm the one who's going to have to explain to your superintendent why a detective with eighteen years of service got herself killed in a hole in the ground that doesn't exist. So you do this my way, or you don't do it at all." Quinn studied him — the exhaustion in his face, the genuine concern, the fear that he was watching a colleague walk toward something she couldn't survive. She thought of Eva, waiting somewhere above ground, Eva with her books and her nervous habit of tucking hair behind her ear, Eva who had found the first reference to the Market in a restricted archive, who had drawn the connection between Morris's death and the supernatural underworld beneath London. She thought of the Veil Compass she'd purchased three weeks ago, brass casing green with verdigris, needle spinning toward rifts in the world that shouldn't exist. She'd bought it on impulse, on desperation, on the small hours when grief had worn her down to nothing and she'd needed something to point her toward an answer. The compass had pointed here. To this station, this platform, this corpse arranged like a message in a language she was only beginning to learn. "I'll do it your way," she said. "But I'm going down there. Now. And you're going to seal this station, every entrance, every access point. Nobody comes in, nobody goes out, until I come back or until you hear from me. That's my condition." Yates hesitated. Then he nodded. "Seal it. But Quinn—" He reached into his pocket and pulled out something small, something that caught the light. A token, carved from bone, pale and smooth, etched with symbols she didn't recognise. "Take this. If you need to get into the Market, if you need to buy something, ask for anything. But don't—" He stopped, his throat working. "Don't let them see you coming. Don't let them know you're police. And don't—" Another stop, longer this time. "Don't look at anything too long. Some things look back." She took the token. It was warm in her palm, warmer than it should have been, pulsing with a faint rhythm like a heartbeat. "Where did you get this?" "Morris." Yates' voice was barely audible. "He gave it to me the night before he died. Said if I ever needed to find him, if I ever needed to understand—" He turned away, his shoulders tightening. "He said the Market moves with the moon. And he said there was something in there that could hurt people. That had hurt people. That had hurt him." Quinn closed her fingers around the bone token. She thought of the warehouse in Bermondsey, the empty floor, the single puncture wound at her partner's throat. She thought of the dreams she'd had for three years — Morris standing in darkness, his mouth open around words she couldn't hear, his hand extended toward something she couldn't see. "He came here," she said. "Morris came to the Market. And something followed him out." Yates didn't answer. He was already moving toward the stairs, his phone pressed to his ear, his voice rising in the clipped tones of a man giving orders. Behind her, the platform stretched empty, the corpse of Alistair Crane staring sightless at a ceiling that didn't exist, the tunnel mouth gaping like a wound in the world. Quinn walked to the edge of the platform and looked down. The tracks were clear for fifty yards, then the darkness began, absolute and hungry. She could hear it now, beneath the dripping water and the distant rumble of a train on the Northern Line above, a sound like breathing. The Market. The place where the rules bent. The place where she might find answers, or find the same fate that had taken her partner. She checked her watch again. 11:52 PM. Eight minutes to midnight. The bone token in her pocket pulsed once, twice, three times — a heartbeat, a signal, a door opening somewhere in the dark. Quinn stepped off the platform and onto the tracks. The rails were cold through her boots, vibrating with a frequency that hummed in her teeth. She walked toward the tunnel mouth, her flashlight beam cutting through darkness that seemed to resist it, to drink it, to pull it back into itself. Behind her, Yates shouted something. She didn't turn. She couldn't afford to look back. The tunnel swallowed her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"He turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.457
leniency0.913
rawRatio0.095
effectiveRatio0.087
92.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2119
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.20% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2119
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"standard"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"standard"
1"scanning"
2"etched"
3"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
70.39% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences138
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2127
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Behind her, Yates shouted something."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1592
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.88
worstName"Yates"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn12
Camden1
Town1
Yates14
Veil3
Market5
Deptford1
Morris3
Bermondsey2
You2
Underground1
London3
Transport1
Eva3
Compass1
Alistair1
Crane1
Northern1
Line1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Yates"
2"Market"
3"Morris"
4"You"
5"Eva"
6"Compass"
7"Alistair"
8"Crane"
places
0"Camden"
1"Town"
2"Bermondsey"
3"London"
4"Transport"
globalScore1
windowScore1
56.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like ordinary clothesline, the kin"
1"darkness that seemed to drink the light"
2"darkness that seemed to resist it, to drink it, to pull it back into itself"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.47
wordCount2127
matches
0"Not the copper-sweet rot of ordinary death, but something sharper, like ozone"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean41.71
std28.41
cv0.681
sampleLengths
058
132
253
336
45
566
637
754
83
915
10103
1160
1233
135
1426
153
1639
1716
1883
1984
2010
2177
2219
2314
2455
255
266
2775
2879
2925
3045
31103
3250
339
3451
3576
3655
3725
3844
3993
4029
4164
4257
4315
4457
4575
4611
4723
4851
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences138
matches
0"been bruised"
1"were scuffed"
69.79% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs256
matches
0"was looking"
1"was staring"
2"was watching"
3"was only beginning"
4"was already moving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences162
ratio0.056
matches
0"She'd felt it the moment she descended the stairs — the wrongness of the place, the sense that the station existed in a space slightly adjacent to the world she knew."
1"You don't have the clearance, the connections, the—"
2"The shoes were scuffed at the toes, not the heels — a man who walked, who stood, who didn't sit in a chair all day."
3"Pointing down, toward the tracks, toward the darkness where the rails disappeared into a tunnel that shouldn't exist — not on any map of the Underground, not in any engineering survey, not in the hundred and fifty years of records that documented every inch of London's subterranean bones."
4"\"I've been looking for it for six months.\" She turned to face him, and she let him see everything she felt — the hunger, the exhaustion, the desperate hope that had driven her to trespass in places where the rules of the world she understood no longer applied."
5"She pulled a folded paper from her pocket — a photocopy of an engineering survey, the kind she'd obtained through a contact in Transport for London, the kind that showed tunnels that didn't exist, spaces that shouldn't be there, the hollow places beneath the city where something else had built its own architecture."
6"Quinn studied him — the exhaustion in his face, the genuine concern, the fear that he was watching a colleague walk toward something she couldn't survive."
7"She thought of the dreams she'd had for three years — Morris standing in darkness, his mouth open around words she couldn't hear, his hand extended toward something she couldn't see."
8"The bone token in her pocket pulsed once, twice, three times — a heartbeat, a signal, a door opening somewhere in the dark."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1100
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.025454545454545455
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006363636363636364
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean13.13
std11.08
cv0.844
sampleLengths
09
127
222
39
421
52
611
713
829
93
1016
1117
125
1319
1412
1515
162
176
188
192
202
2127
2210
232
2421
2516
2611
272
282
293
307
318
326
3321
3414
3531
364
3727
387
3923
4018
417
425
4327
443
453
465
474
4822
493
42.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.3271604938271605
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners53
86.21% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences116
matches
0"Somewhere in the tunnels, water"
1"Then he nodded, slow and"
2"Then he nodded."
ratio0.026
61.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences116
matches
0"She pulled her collar up"
1"He stood beside the body,"
2"She kept her voice flat"
3"She'd spent six months hunting"
4"His face held the particular"
5"He gestured to the corpse."
6"His ankles were tied too,"
7"She stood and walked the"
8"She'd felt it the moment"
9"She'd come here hunting something"
10"You don't belong here, Quinn."
11"You don't have the clearance,"
12"She ignored him."
13"She'd spent eighteen years learning"
14"She examined it now with"
15"She'd seen this before, in"
16"She didn't answer."
17"She was looking at the"
18"She walked to the edge"
19"She turned to face him,"
ratio0.397
28.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences116
matches
0"The stench hit Quinn before"
1"She pulled her collar up"
2"DS Yates didn't look up"
3"He stood beside the body,"
4"She kept her voice flat"
5"The Veil Market didn't appear"
6"She'd spent six months hunting"
7"Yates finally turned."
8"His face held the particular"
9"He gestured to the corpse."
10"The man lay on his"
11"Quinn circled him slowly, her"
12"That was the first thing"
13"A puncture wound at the"
14"Yates read from his notebook,"
15"The man's hands were bound"
16"His ankles were tied too,"
17"The noose around his neck"
18"Yates didn't look at her"
19"She stood and walked the"
ratio0.862
86.21% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences116
matches
0"Now she stood in a"
1"To this station, this platform,"
ratio0.017
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"He stood beside the body, knees bent in that permanent crouch of men who'd spent too many years at crime scenes."
1"His face held the particular exhaustion of someone who'd seen too much and understood too little."
2"The platform stretched into darkness in both directions, the old tile walls sweating moisture that had nothing to do with rain."
3"The supernatural black market that moved with every full moon, that required a bone token for entry, that sold things no human government would permit to exist."
4"A lead on her partner's death, three years cold, the case that had hollowed out her marriage and nearly cost her her badge."
5"Something softer, more pliable, with a faint sheen that caught the light wrong."
6"Pointing down, toward the tracks, toward the darkness where the rails disappeared into a tunnel that shouldn't exist — not on any map of the Underground, not in…"
7"She pulled a folded paper from her pocket — a photocopy of an engineering survey, the kind she'd obtained through a contact in Transport for London, the kind th…"
8"She thought of Eva, waiting somewhere above ground, Eva with her books and her nervous habit of tucking hair behind her ear, Eva who had found the first referen…"
9"She thought of the Veil Compass she'd purchased three weeks ago, brass casing green with verdigris, needle spinning toward rifts in the world that shouldn't exi…"
10"He was already moving toward the stairs, his phone pressed to his ear, his voice rising in the clipped tones of a man giving orders."
11"Behind her, the platform stretched empty, the corpse of Alistair Crane staring sightless at a ceiling that didn't exist, the tunnel mouth gaping like a wound in…"
12"The rails were cold through her boots, vibrating with a frequency that hummed in her teeth."
13"She walked toward the tunnel mouth, her flashlight beam cutting through darkness that seemed to resist it, to drink it, to pull it back into itself."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Quinn stood, her knees popping"
1"She stopped, her jaw tightening"
2"He turned away, his shoulders tightening"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.13
leniency0.261
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.2229%