Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VSEQ5A1M8MTN01G256T7B

Run Details

Duration:
1m 21s
Cost:
$0.006249
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone Pendant hung against Rory's collarbone, warm as a living thing. She'd come to the Grove because the warmth had pulled her here, insistent, three nights running. The standing stones loomed ahead, oak-dark against the bruised sky, and she counted her breaths to keep her hands steady. Richmond Park had emptied hours ago. The last dog walker vanished past the Tamsin gate, and the night pressed close—no moon, no stars, just the sodium smear of distant London bleeding through the canopy. Rory pulled her jacket tighter. The delivery shift at Golden Empress had ended at midnight. She'd told Yu-Fei she had a dentist appointment tomorrow. A lie. She didn't know why she lied, only that the pendant had gone from faint thrum to something urgent, something that made her teeth ache. The stones marked the boundary. She'd read about them once, in a pamphlet Eva had pressed into her hand years ago, back when they were still girls sharing cigarettes behind the Cardiff library. *If you ever need somewhere that isn't anywhere,* Eva had said. *Find the oak stones. Wait.* Rory had never needed to. Not until now. She stepped between the stones. The air changed. Not temperature—pressure. Her ears popped, and the silence that followed wasn't empty. It was full of held breath. Wildflowers lined the path. She recognised none of them. Violets the colour of old bruises. Lilies with too many petals. Something that glowed faintly, pale green, pulsing in rhythm with the pendant at her throat. The Grove opened before her, a clearing that shouldn't exist, grass silvered with dew that hadn't fallen yet. She came here for answers. The pendant had been left on her pillow three weeks ago, no note, no explanation. Since then, dreams of a door she couldn't open, a voice calling her name in her mother's cadence, her father's. She needed to know who had given it to her. Needed to know why it burned when she thought about Evan, why it went cold when she thought about Eva. Rory walked deeper. The trees here grew wrong—trunks spiralling, bark peeling in patterns that almost formed faces. She told herself it was shadow, angle, the tricks of darkness. But when she turned back, the path behind her had narrowed, the standing stones distant and smaller than memory allowed. A sound. Not wind. Not an animal. Something wet, dragging across stone. She stopped. The pendant pulsed once, sharp, and the wildflowers dimmed. "Hello?" Her voice came out flat, stripped of its usual London edge. "I know someone's here." Nothing answered. But the dragging sound came again, closer, circling. Rory turned slowly, and at the edge of the clearing, where the trees thickened into something like a wall, she saw movement. A shape. Tall, wrong-jointed, its head tilted at an angle that made her neck ache to watch. She should run. Every instinct screamed it. But the pendant burned against her skin, and the shape—it wasn't looking at her. It was looking at something behind her, something further in, and its shoulders shook with what might have been laughter or might have been sobbing. Rory took a step forward. The grass parted silently beneath her boots. The shape didn't turn. It kept watching the dark beyond her, and she realised with a cold certainty that it had been waiting for her to arrive, that her coming had been expected, that the Grove had been holding its breath until now. Another sound. This one closer. Footsteps, but not on grass—on stone, deliberate, pacing. Rory spun, and the pendant flared crimson, so bright she had to shield her eyes, and when she lowered her hand, the clearing had changed. The wildflowers were gone, replaced by bare earth and something that gleamed white in the dark. Bones. Not animal. The skulls faced inward, toward a centre she couldn't see, and the footsteps stopped directly behind her. "You brought it back." A woman's voice, but wrong—layered, as if three women spoke at once, or one woman speaking from three distances. "You always bring things back." Rory didn't turn. She could feel the heat of the speaker's breath on her neck, smell something underneath it—roses, rotting, the particular copper-sweet scent of old blood. "Who are you?" "I am what waits." The footsteps resumed, circling now, and Rory tracked them by sound alone, her body rigid, her mind racing through exits that didn't exist. "I am what you left. I am what you ran from. I am the door you couldn't open, Rory. The door you opened anyway." The name. No one in her life called her Rory except Eva. And Eva was in Cardiff, or Dublin, or wherever Eva had fled after—after what? Rory couldn't remember. Something about a man, a fire, a choice made in darkness. She'd blocked it out. She blocked out a lot. "You're not Eva." "No." A laugh, wet and delighted. "Eva is the key. Eva is the lock. Eva is the hand that turns. But you—" The footsteps stopped. The breath on her neck withdrew, replaced by cold, absolute cold. "You are the door itself. You always were. Born between, belonging nowhere, carrying the blood of two worlds and the hunger of neither. That's why it chose you. That's why it waits for you." Rory's hand found the pendant. It pulsed in answer, warm, insistent, and she understood suddenly that she hadn't come here by accident. The dreams, the warmth, the pulling—it had been calling her home. Not to Cardiff. Not to London. To somewhere older, somewhere that had been waiting since before her birth, since before her parents met, since before the names Carter and Ellis meant anything at all. "What do you want?" The shape in the trees moved again, closer now, and Rory saw it clearly for the first time—not a monster, not a fae creature from Eva's stories, but a woman. Beautiful and ruined, her face shifting between features she almost recognised, her eyes black pools that reflected nothing, not even the pendant's glow. She wore a dress of woven shadow, and where her feet touched the earth, the grass died, turned grey, crumbled to dust. "I want what I've always wanted." The woman stepped into the faint light, and Rory saw that she was bleeding, slow and steady, from a wound in her side that no bandage covered. "I want to come through. I want to walk in your world, in your time, in your skin. The Grove is a threshold, Rory. A wound between. And you—" She smiled, and her teeth were too sharp, too numerous. "You are the stitch that holds it closed. Break the stitch, and I walk free. Refuse, and I unmake you. Slowly. Piece by piece. Until there's nothing left to hold the door shut." The pendant burned. Rory gasped, and the pain was real, searing, as if the silver chain had become a brand. She clutched it, and the crimson gem flared brighter, and the woman hissed, recoiling, her shadow-dress tearing like smoke. "You don't have to." The voice came from everywhere, from the stones, from the earth, from the pendant itself. "You can open it. You can let me in. I'll give you what you want. Answers. Power. The truth about why you've never fit, why you've always been waiting for something you couldn't name." The woman circled, closer now, close enough that Rory could see her own reflection in those black eyes—older, harder, smiling. "What do you want, Aurora Carter? What have you always wanted?" Rory thought of Evan, his hands, the way he'd looked at her when he broke things. She thought of Eva, her laugh, the way she'd shown up at Rory's door at three in the morning with nowhere to go. She thought of her mother's voice on the phone, worried, Welsh rising to the surface when she was tired. She thought of her father, proud, distant, never quite seeing her. She thought of the flat above Silas' bar, the delivery routes, the small kindnesses of strangers. She thought of Yu-Fei, who paid her in cash and dumplings and never asked questions. She thought of the way the sun felt on her face after a twelve-hour shift, the particular silence of London at dawn, the way Eva's hand had felt in hers the last time they'd met, before everything. "I want to go home," she said. The woman's smile faltered. "Home is a door, Rory. You can't go back through a door you've already opened." "Then I'll make a new one." Rory pulled the pendant from her neck. The chain came free, and the gem blazed, crimson light spilling across the clearing, across the woman's reaching hands, across the stones that groaned and shifted and began to sing. "I don't know what you are. I don't know what you want. But I know I didn't come here to be a door. I came here because something was calling me, and I thought—" Her voice broke, and she let it, let the fear show, let the anger rise. "I thought I was being hunted. But you're not hunting me. You're begging. And I don't beg for anyone. Not anymore." The pendant pulsed once, twice, and Rory felt it—felt the weight of it, the history, the sacrifice. Someone had given this to her. Someone had chosen her, trusted her, believed she could be the lock or the key or whatever it needed to be. She thought of Eva's pamphlet, the oak stones, the words *wait*. She thought of her mother's voice, her father's pride, the life she'd built from nothing, brick by brick, lie by lie, until it was real enough to stand on. She threw the pendant. It struck the woman's chest, and the sound was not impact but recognition, a key finding its lock, and the clearing screamed. The stones shuddered. The wildflowers—those that remained—wilted and blackened, and the woman's form flickered, destabilised, her beautiful ruined face cycling through expressions of rage, grief, desperate hope. "You can't—" she started. "I can." Rory was already moving, back toward the stones, back toward the path that had narrowed and would narrow again, back toward the world that was hers even if she'd never felt she belonged in it. "I don't know what happens now. I don't know if you'll follow me, if you'll find another way, if I've just made it worse. But I know I'm not your door. I'm not your key. I'm not your—" She stopped at the boundary, turned, looked back at the thing that had worn a woman's face, that had spoken with Eva's voice and her mother's and her own. "I'm not yours." The stones were close now, close enough to touch, and behind her, the Grove was collapsing—not physically, but in time, in possibility, the pocket between worlds sealing itself, rejecting what had tried to pass through. The woman screamed, and the sound was Eva's laugh, her mother's worry, her own voice at twenty, at fifteen, at ten, saying *I'm scared* in the dark of her childhood bedroom, and Rory stepped through the stones and felt the night air of Richmond Park hit her face, real and cold and hers. She ran. Not far—just to the Tamsin gate, to the road, to the first taxi she flagged down with shaking hands and a story she wouldn't tell. The driver asked if she was alright. She said yes. She said she'd been mugged, or lost, or any of the thousand small lies she told to keep the world at a distance. The pendant was gone. She touched her collarbone, the empty chain, the skin still warm from its passing. In the taxi's rear mirror, she checked her reflection—her face, her eyes, the crescent scar on her wrist she'd never noticed before, pale in the streetlight's glow. She didn't sleep that night. She sat in her flat above Silas' bar, watching the dawn come up grey and ordinary and precious, and she thought about doors. About the ones you open and can't close. About the ones you build yourself, from nothing, from need, from the stubborn refusal to be what someone else needed you to be. Eva texted at seven. *You okay? You sounded weird last night.* Rory typed back: *Fine. Long shift.* She deleted it. Typed again: *I'm fine. Don't worry.* Sent it. Put the phone down. Looked at her hands, at the scar, at the empty space where something had been, and waited for morning to make it all feel like a dream. It didn't.
created_at"2026-10-06T15:02:23.729Z" 10/6/2026, 3:02:23 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.593
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.88% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2108
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2108
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"loomed"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"footsteps"
count4
5
word"could feel"
count1
6
word"racing"
count1
7
word"searing"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"loomed"
2"silence"
3"pulsed"
4"footsteps"
5"could feel"
6"racing"
7"searing"
8"weight"
9"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences145
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans7
markdownWords30
totalWords2091
ratio0.014
matches
0"If you ever need somewhere that isn't anywhere,"
1"Find the oak stones. Wait."
2"wait"
3"I'm scared"
4"You okay? You sounded weird last night."
5"Fine. Long shift."
6"I'm fine. Don't worry."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1718
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.34
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Rory23
Grove4
Park2
Tamsin2
London4
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei2
Eva13
Cardiff3
Evan2
Dublin1
Carter1
Ellis1
Welsh1
Richmond2
Sent1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"Grove"
3"Empress"
4"Eva"
5"Evan"
6"Carter"
7"Ellis"
8"Welsh"
places
0"Park"
1"Tamsin"
2"London"
3"Golden"
4"Cardiff"
5"Dublin"
6"Richmond"
globalScore0.831
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like a wall, she saw movement"
56.53% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.435
wordCount2091
matches
0"not a monster, not a fae creature from Eva's stories, but a woman"
1"not a fae creature from Eva's stories, but a woman"
2"not physically, but in time, in possibility, the pocket between worlds sealing i"
81.74% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences157
matches
0"arrive, that her expected, that the"
1"saw that she"
2"sleep that night"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean44.49
std31.23
cv0.702
sampleLengths
048
184
249
38
45
521
653
770
848
912
1011
1116
1249
1346
1455
1574
1628
1730
1851
1949
203
2170
2267
234
2475
25105
2639
2784
2869
2968
307
3119
32113
3384
344
3549
364
37107
3888
3960
4045
4159
4211
436
449
4533
462
93.16% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences145
matches
0"been left"
1"been expected"
2"were gone"
3"been mugged"
4"was gone"
89.26% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs301
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"was looking"
2"was bleeding"
3"was already moving"
4"was collapsing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences157
ratio0.102
matches
0"The last dog walker vanished past the Tamsin gate, and the night pressed close—no moon, no stars, just the sodium smear of distant London bleeding through the canopy."
1"Not temperature—pressure."
2"The trees here grew wrong—trunks spiralling, bark peeling in patterns that almost formed faces."
3"But the pendant burned against her skin, and the shape—it wasn't looking at her."
4"Footsteps, but not on grass—on stone, deliberate, pacing."
5"\"You brought it back.\" A woman's voice, but wrong—layered, as if three women spoke at once, or one woman speaking from three distances."
6"She could feel the heat of the speaker's breath on her neck, smell something underneath it—roses, rotting, the particular copper-sweet scent of old blood."
7"And Eva was in Cardiff, or Dublin, or wherever Eva had fled after—after what?"
8"The dreams, the warmth, the pulling—it had been calling her home."
9"The shape in the trees moved again, closer now, and Rory saw it clearly for the first time—not a monster, not a fae creature from Eva's stories, but a woman."
10"\"You can open it. You can let me in. I'll give you what you want. Answers. Power. The truth about why you've never fit, why you've always been waiting for something you couldn't name.\" The woman circled, closer now, close enough that Rory could see her own reflection in those black eyes—older, harder, smiling."
11"The pendant pulsed once, twice, and Rory felt it—felt the weight of it, the history, the sacrifice."
12"The wildflowers—those that remained—wilted and blackened, and the woman's form flickered, destabilised, her beautiful ruined face cycling through expressions of rage, grief, desperate hope."
13"The stones were close now, close enough to touch, and behind her, the Grove was collapsing—not physically, but in time, in possibility, the pocket between worlds sealing itself, rejecting what had tried to pass through."
14"Not far—just to the Tamsin gate, to the road, to the first taxi she flagged down with shaking hands and a story she wouldn't tell."
15"In the taxi's rear mirror, she checked her reflection—her face, her eyes, the crescent scar on her wrist she'd never noticed before, pale in the streetlight's glow."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1233
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"particular copper-sweet scent"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.035685320356853206
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0056772100567721
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean13.32
std12.04
cv0.904
sampleLengths
012
116
220
36
428
55
610
79
82
924
105
1128
1211
134
141
155
163
175
183
192
2010
216
224
235
246
255
2615
2718
285
2915
3020
3110
3220
333
3414
3511
3620
372
382
393
405
412
429
4312
444
452
468
4722
482
4915
34.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats25
diversityRatio0.2929936305732484
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences125
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.80% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences125
matches
0"She'd come to the Grove"
1"She'd told Yu-Fei she had"
2"She didn't know why she"
3"She'd read about them once,"
4"She stepped between the stones."
5"Her ears popped, and the"
6"It was full of held"
7"She recognised none of them."
8"She came here for answers."
9"She needed to know who"
10"She told herself it was"
11"Her voice came out flat,"
12"She should run."
13"It was looking at something"
14"It kept watching the dark"
15"She could feel the heat"
16"She'd blocked it out."
17"She blocked out a lot."
18"It pulsed in answer, warm,"
19"She wore a dress of"
ratio0.328
52.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences125
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant hung against"
1"She'd come to the Grove"
2"The standing stones loomed ahead,"
3"Richmond Park had emptied hours"
4"The last dog walker vanished"
5"Rory pulled her jacket tighter."
6"The delivery shift at Golden"
7"She'd told Yu-Fei she had"
8"She didn't know why she"
9"The stones marked the boundary."
10"She'd read about them once,"
11"Rory had never needed to."
12"She stepped between the stones."
13"The air changed."
14"Her ears popped, and the"
15"It was full of held"
16"Wildflowers lined the path."
17"She recognised none of them."
18"Violets the colour of old"
19"Lilies with too many petals."
ratio0.816
80.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences125
matches
0"*If you ever need somewhere"
1"To somewhere older, somewhere that"
ratio0.016
84.31% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"She didn't know why she lied, only that the pendant had gone from faint thrum to something urgent, something that made her teeth ache."
1"Tall, wrong-jointed, its head tilted at an angle that made her neck ache to watch."
2"The wildflowers were gone, replaced by bare earth and something that gleamed white in the dark."
3"Beautiful and ruined, her face shifting between features she almost recognised, her eyes black pools that reflected nothing, not even the pendant's glow."
4"She thought of Yu-Fei, who paid her in cash and dumplings and never asked questions."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She smiled, and her teeth were too sharp, too numerous"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"women spoke (speak)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.074
leniency0.148
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.074
82.2285%