Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VSGEZ6W3DWWKNJ89XJ63E

Run Details

Duration:
36.3s
Cost:
$0.006169
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The abandoned Camden Town Tube station smelled of rust and stagnant water. Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside the body, her leather watch catching the dim glow of the single work light someone had strung across the platform. The corpse lay on its back, one arm flung wide, fingers curled like it had been reaching for something just out of grasp. A man, mid-forties, dressed in a tweed jacket that cost more than Quinn's monthly rent. No wallet. No phone. His throat bore three parallel lacerations, clean as surgical incisions, and the blood around him had pooled in a shape that made no sense—too symmetrical, almost deliberate. "Staged," said a voice behind her. Quinn didn't turn. She knew the footsteps, the slight drag of a heel on concrete, the particular silence of someone who'd learned to move quietly through doorways. "You're three minutes late, DC Reeves." "Traffic on the Northern Line." Reeves settled into a crouch beside her, young enough that his earnestness still showed in the set of his shoulders. "Uniforms are saying robbery gone wrong. The vic's throat's been opened, sure, but look at his shoes." Quinn looked. Italian leather, barely scuffed. "He didn't walk here." "No. And he didn't struggle." Reeves pointed at the body's other hand, the one still clenched at its side. "Fist tight as a drum. Like he was holding something when he died. Something worth killing for, or something he didn't want anyone to take." "Or something that took him." Quinn finally turned her head. The work light caught the salt-and-pepper crop of her hair, the sharp line of her jaw. Eighteen years of cases had taught her to read a scene in layers, to let the obvious explanations fall away like sediment. "Show me the entry points." Reeves produced a tablet, thumbing through photos. "Two. The old staff entrance on the north end, and a service tunnel that runs parallel to the tracks. Both unlocked. No signs of forced entry." "And the witnesses?" "None." Reeves's voice dropped. "The station's been sealed since the sixties. No trains, no staff, no maintenance crews. The nearest occupied building is three hundred metres away, and the residents all say they heard nothing. Which is odd, because this—" he gestured at the body, at the blood, at the impossible geometry of the scene "—this isn't quiet work." Quinn stood, her knees popping. She walked the perimeter of the blood pool, her boots careful not to disturb the edges. The shape was wrong. Not a splatter, not a drag, not the chaotic pattern of a struggle. It formed a shallow spiral, concentric rings that narrowed toward the body's chest. Like something had been drawn in blood, or poured, or summoned. "What do you make of it?" Reeves asked. "That our killer wanted us to find him. Or wanted us to find this." She crouched again, closer now, close enough to smell the copper tang beneath the rust. The lacerations on the throat were precise, yes, but they weren't surgical. Too deep on the left side, the blade catching, dragging slightly before the final clean cut. Amateur work disguised as professional. Or professional work disguised as amateur. Her phone buzzed. She ignored it. "Quinn." Reeves's voice had changed, tightened. "The vic's jacket. Look at the lining." She pulled a pair of latex gloves from her pocket, snapped them on. The tweed was Harris, she knew the weave, her father had worn a jacket just like it. But the lining—normally a place for labels, for the maker's mark—had been stitched over. Rough work, amateur stitches, hiding something beneath. She found the seam with her thumbnail and pulled. The lining tore, revealing a pocket, and inside the pocket, a photograph. A woman with curly red hair and round glasses, standing in front of a building whose architecture Quinn didn't recognise. On the back, in fountain pen, a single word: *Aurora.* Quinn's jaw tightened. She knew that name. Everyone in the Met's occult crimes division knew it, or had heard whispers of it. The Holloway Road murders, three years back. The disappearances that had no bodies, no witnesses, no explanation that survived daylight. The case that had taken DS Morris, her partner, down a rabbit hole he never climbed out of. Morris had been obsessed with Aurora. Had called her a ghost story, a pattern, a thread that ran through cases that shouldn't connect. The department had called him paranoid. Then he'd vanished during a stakeout in Hampstead Heath, and his body had never been found. Officially, he'd resigned. Unofficially, Quinn knew better. She slipped the photograph into an evidence bag, her hands steady despite the cold that had nothing to do with the station's temperature. "Reeves. Run a check on the victim. Full financials, travel history, any connection to occult or esoteric organisations." "Already on it." He was typing, his thumbs moving fast. "But Quinn—the blood. I keep coming back to the blood. It's too much. A throat cut that deep, you'd expect arterial spray. This is—" he searched for the word "—contained. Controlled. Like he was already dead when they cut him, or like the blood was placed there after." "Or like he wasn't human when he died." Quinn stood, brushing dust from her trousers. The work light flickered, and for a moment the shadows on the platform seemed to shift, to lean toward her, to watch. She blinked, and they were still again. "Get forensics to check the blood for coagulation patterns. And Reeves?" "Yeah?" "Don't touch anything else. Don't breathe on anything. And if you see anything that doesn't make sense—" she met his eyes, brown and earnest and so much younger than she felt "—you tell me. Immediately. No matter how stupid it sounds." She walked toward the staff entrance, her boots echoing on the platform tiles. Behind her, Reeves was already on the radio, his voice rising with the urgency of a man who had not yet learned which horrors were real. The staff entrance was a rusted door, half-collapsed into its frame. Quinn pushed it open with her shoulder, and the darkness beyond swallowed the light from the platform. She drew her torch, the beam cutting through damp air thick with the smell of earth and something else, something sweet and wrong, like flowers left too long in stagnant water. The corridor beyond was lined with old posters, peeling from the walls in strips of yellowed paper. Safety announcements from decades past. Mind the gap. Stand behind the yellow line. Quinn's torch caught fragments of faces in the advertisements, smiling commuters from an era before she was born, all of them looking slightly wrong, their eyes following her as she passed. The corridor opened into a second platform, smaller, abandoned mid-construction. And there, sitting on a bench that had no business still standing, was a woman. She was young, twenty-six at most, with curly red hair that fell past her shoulders and round glasses that caught the torchlight. A worn leather satchel sat beside her on the bench, bulging with books. She was reading, or pretending to read, her finger tracing lines of text on a page that Quinn knew couldn't exist in any library she'd visited. "Eva Kowalski," Quinn said. The woman looked up. Her eyes were green, startlingly green, and they held no surprise at all. "Detective Quinn. I wondered when you'd arrive." She closed her book, tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear—nervous habit, Quinn noted, though the woman's face showed no nerves—and set it on her satchel. "You're early. The Market doesn't open for another hour." "I don't know what you're talking about." "Of course you do." Eva smiled, and it was a strange smile, fond and sad and knowing in equal measure. "You've been investigating Aurora for three years. Since Morris disappeared. You think she's a killer, a monster, something that wears human skin. But you've never found her, have you? Because she's not the one who leaves bodies. She's the one who leaves doors open. And doors, Detective, have a way of opening both ways." Quinn's hand moved toward her service weapon, but she didn't draw it. Something in Eva's voice, the absolute certainty, the lack of threat, stayed her hand. "Who are you?" "Someone who knows what you're looking for." Eva stood, her movements fluid, unhurried. She was shorter than Quinn, five-foot-four maybe, but she filled the space around her like water fills a glass. "The man on the platform. He wasn't robbed. He was paying. For information, for passage, for something he shouldn't have bought. And when he tried to leave without completing the transaction—" she shrugged, the gesture almost girlish "—well. The Market has rules. Old rules. Rules that predate your Metropolitan Police by several centuries." "This is a murder scene, not a market." "Is it?" Eva tilted her head, her glasses sliding down her nose. She pushed them back up with one finger. "Look at the blood again, Detective. Really look. Tell me what you see." Quinn turned. From this angle, from the second platform, the blood pool looked different. The spiral pattern, yes, but now she saw something else. The rings weren't concentric. They were offset, each one shifted slightly to the left, creating a path, a direction. A trail that led away from the body, toward the service tunnel, toward the darkness where the tracks had once run. And at the centre of the spiral, where the body's chest had been, the blood had been disturbed. Not by the body falling. By something else. Something that had stood there, in the blood, and left footprints that no one had noticed because everyone had been looking at the corpse. Footprints. Bare feet. Small. A woman's feet, or a child's. "The victim was killed elsewhere," Quinn said slowly. "This is a secondary scene. He was moved here, positioned, and then—" she stopped, her mind racing "—and then something else happened. Something that left its own mark." Eva's smile widened. "You're learning. The Market doesn't just sell goods, Detective. It sells access. And sometimes, the access walks out with the customer. Follows them home. Waits." She reached into her satchel, withdrew a small object, held it up to the torchlight. A compass. Brass, verdigris patina, its face etched with symbols that hurt to look at directly. The needle spun, wild, pointing not north but toward the body, toward the blood, toward the spiral that was also a map. "The Veil Compass," Eva said. "It points toward rifts. Toward places where the world wears thin. Your victim found one. Tried to use it. And something found him first." She pocketed the compass, her hand lingering on the satchel's flap. "Aurora is close, Detective. Closer than she's ever been. And when she finds out you're asking questions, she'll come for you too. The way she came for Morris. The way she comes for everyone who gets too near." Quinn thought of Morris, of the empty flat in Crouch End, of the case file that had been closed with a shrug and a signature. She thought of the photograph in her pocket, the woman with red hair and green eyes and a smile that didn't reach her eyes. "Why are you telling me this?" Eva adjusted her satchel, the worn leather creaking. "Because I'm tired of watching her collect bodies. Because I knew Morris, and I know what she did to him, and I won't let her do it to you too." She turned toward the service tunnel, her red hair catching the torchlight like flame. "The Market moves on the full moon. Three nights from now, it will be here, in this station, and Aurora will be there, and if you want answers—" she paused, glancing back "—you'll need more than a warrant. You'll need a bone token. And someone who knows how to use it." She walked into the darkness, her footsteps fading, and Quinn stood alone on the abandoned platform with a dead man who had died somewhere else, a spiral of blood that was also a map, and the growing certainty that the case she had thought closed three years ago had only been waiting for her to look closer.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
75.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She crouched again [again]"
1"his thumbs moving fast [fast]"
2"Quinn said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.533
leniency1
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.125
87.79% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2048
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2048
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"footsteps"
count2
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"racing"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"silence"
2"chaotic"
3"flickered"
4"echoing"
5"tracing"
6"racing"
7"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences118
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords2036
ratio0
matches
0"Aurora."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1463
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.44
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Town1
Tube1
Harlow1
Quinn21
Harris1
Met1
Holloway1
Road1
Morris3
Aurora2
Hampstead1
Heath1
Reeves7
Eva7
Market1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Crouch1
End1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Harris"
3"Morris"
4"Aurora"
5"Heath"
6"Reeves"
7"Eva"
8"Market"
places
0"Camden"
1"Town"
2"Tube"
3"Met"
4"Holloway"
5"Road"
6"Hampstead"
7"Crouch"
globalScore0.782
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.491
wordCount2036
matches
0"not north but toward the body, toward the blood, toward the spiral"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences137
matches
0"knew that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean40.72
std25.99
cv0.638
sampleLengths
0106
16
233
342
410
544
653
733
83
959
1062
118
1268
136
1413
1551
1621
1730
1860
1952
2023
2118
2258
2355
241
2541
2639
2759
2861
2925
3061
314
3261
337
3474
3529
3685
378
3833
3964
4050
4110
4236
4343
4438
4578
4649
476
48103
4957
81.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences118
matches
0"been drawn"
1"been stitched"
2"been obsessed"
3"been found"
4"was placed"
5"was lined"
6"been disturbed"
7"been closed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs240
matches
0"was typing"
1"was reading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences137
ratio0.066
matches
0"His throat bore three parallel lacerations, clean as surgical incisions, and the blood around him had pooled in a shape that made no sense—too symmetrical, almost deliberate."
1"\"The station's been sealed since the sixties. No trains, no staff, no maintenance crews. The nearest occupied building is three hundred metres away, and the residents all say they heard nothing. Which is odd, because this—\" he gestured at the body, at the blood, at the impossible geometry of the scene \"—this isn't quiet work.\""
2"But the lining—normally a place for labels, for the maker's mark—had been stitched over."
3"\"But Quinn—the blood. I keep coming back to the blood. It's too much. A throat cut that deep, you'd expect arterial spray. This is—\" he searched for the word \"—contained. Controlled. Like he was already dead when they cut him, or like the blood was placed there after.\""
4"\"Don't touch anything else. Don't breathe on anything. And if you see anything that doesn't make sense—\" she met his eyes, brown and earnest and so much younger than she felt \"—you tell me. Immediately. No matter how stupid it sounds.\""
5"\"Detective Quinn. I wondered when you'd arrive.\" She closed her book, tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear—nervous habit, Quinn noted, though the woman's face showed no nerves—and set it on her satchel."
6"\"The man on the platform. He wasn't robbed. He was paying. For information, for passage, for something he shouldn't have bought. And when he tried to leave without completing the transaction—\" she shrugged, the gesture almost girlish \"—well. The Market has rules. Old rules. Rules that predate your Metropolitan Police by several centuries.\""
7"\"This is a secondary scene. He was moved here, positioned, and then—\" she stopped, her mind racing \"—and then something else happened. Something that left its own mark.\""
8"\"The Market moves on the full moon. Three nights from now, it will be here, in this station, and Aurora will be there, and if you want answers—\" she paused, glancing back \"—you'll need more than a warrant. You'll need a bone token. And someone who knows how to use it.\""
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount839
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.03694874851013111
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.010727056019070322
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean14.86
std12.42
cv0.836
sampleLengths
012
125
223
315
42
52
627
76
83
924
106
1125
1217
132
144
154
1619
1725
1810
1916
2022
215
227
2326
243
254
2655
275
2816
294
3013
3113
3211
338
3429
3512
3616
375
386
393
403
416
427
4313
4417
4514
467
479
4812
4920
75.43% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4744525547445255
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners65
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences107
matches
0"Too deep on the left"
1"Then he'd vanished during a"
2"Officially, he'd resigned."
3"Unofficially, Quinn knew better."
ratio0.037
96.64% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences107
matches
0"His throat bore three parallel"
1"She knew the footsteps, the"
2"he gestured at the body,"
3"She walked the perimeter of"
4"It formed a shallow spiral,"
5"She crouched again, closer now,"
6"Her phone buzzed."
7"She ignored it."
8"She pulled a pair of"
9"She found the seam with"
10"She knew that name."
11"She slipped the photograph into"
12"He was typing, his thumbs"
13"he searched for the word"
14"She blinked, and they were"
15"she met his eyes, brown"
16"She walked toward the staff"
17"She drew her torch, the"
18"She was young, twenty-six at"
19"She was reading, or pretending"
ratio0.308
58.13% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences107
matches
0"The abandoned Camden Town Tube"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside"
2"The corpse lay on its"
3"A man, mid-forties, dressed in"
4"His throat bore three parallel"
5"Quinn didn't turn."
6"She knew the footsteps, the"
7"Reeves settled into a crouch"
8"Italian leather, barely scuffed."
9"Reeves pointed at the body's"
10"Quinn finally turned her head"
11"The work light caught the"
12"Reeves produced a tablet, thumbing"
13"Reeves's voice dropped"
14"he gestured at the body,"
15"Quinn stood, her knees popping."
16"She walked the perimeter of"
17"The shape was wrong."
18"It formed a shallow spiral,"
19"She crouched again, closer now,"
ratio0.804
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"His throat bore three parallel lacerations, clean as surgical incisions, and the blood around him had pooled in a shape that made no sense—too symmetrical, almo…"
1"She knew the footsteps, the slight drag of a heel on concrete, the particular silence of someone who'd learned to move quietly through doorways."
2"The case that had taken DS Morris, her partner, down a rabbit hole he never climbed out of."
3"Had called her a ghost story, a pattern, a thread that ran through cases that shouldn't connect."
4"She slipped the photograph into an evidence bag, her hands steady despite the cold that had nothing to do with the station's temperature."
5"Quinn's torch caught fragments of faces in the advertisements, smiling commuters from an era before she was born, all of them looking slightly wrong, their eyes…"
6"She was young, twenty-six at most, with curly red hair that fell past her shoulders and round glasses that caught the torchlight."
7"She was reading, or pretending to read, her finger tracing lines of text on a page that Quinn knew couldn't exist in any library she'd visited."
8"Something that had stood there, in the blood, and left footprints that no one had noticed because everyone had been looking at the corpse."
9"Brass, verdigris patina, its face etched with symbols that hurt to look at directly."
10"She walked into the darkness, her footsteps fading, and Quinn stood alone on the abandoned platform with a dead man who had died somewhere else, a spiral of blo…"
20.83% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she shrugged, the gesture almost girlish"
1"Eva tilted, her glasses sliding down her nose"
2"she stopped, her mind racing"
3"She pocketed, her hand lingering on the satchel's flap"
4"She turned, her red hair catching the torchlight like flame"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.089
leniency0.178
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.3329%