Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VSWXZ820KZS5KSCX5HBEH

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56.3s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from Rory's fingers before she could catch it. Not shattered, thank God, just a wet slap against the sticky floor of the Raven's Nest, amber liquid spreading like a bloodstain across the scuffed wood. "You're still clumsy, then." Rory didn't look up. She was already reaching for the roll of paper towels behind the bar, her wrist turning to reveal the crescent scar, pale against her skin. "Still a bastard, then." She tore off a sheet. "Si." Silas Blackwood leaned against the bar's edge, all six feet of him folded into a posture that suggested he'd once been taller, or perhaps simply more certain of his place in the world. The green neon from the street sign outside painted his grey-streaked auburn hair in sickly relief. He wore a charcoal coat that had seen better decades, and his hazel eyes, magnified slightly by wire-rimmed spectacles she didn't remember him owning, tracked her every movement with the assessment of a man who catalogued threats for a living. "Twenty-three years," he said. "And you still can't hold a pint." "Twenty-three years, and you still open with an insult." Rory crumpled the towel, tossed it in the bin. "What brings the Spymaster to my neck of Soho?" "Your neck?" He laughed, but it died quickly. "God, Rory. You used to laugh." She felt it then, the old wound, the one she'd thought scarred over. The flat above this very bar, the nights she'd spent crying into her pillow while Silas pretended not to hear through the floorboards. The way he'd looked at her when she'd finally told him about Evan, about the bruises she'd hidden beneath long sleeves in a Cardiff summer. "Things change," she said. "Evidently." He ordered a whisky. She poured it without asking, her hand steady now, the muscle memory of a thousand shifts behind the bar returning like a tide. The signet ring on his right hand caught the light as he accepted the glass, silver catching silver. "You cut your hair," he said. "It's practical." "It's—" He stopped. Drank. "Your mother called me last month." Rory's jaw tightened. She wiped down the same patch of counter she'd already cleaned three times. "She's worried about you." "She's always worried." But Rory heard the crack in her own voice, the girl beneath the woman, the twenty-year-old who'd fled to London with nothing but a suitcase and Eva's spare room key. "What'd she say?" "That you don't answer her letters. That you don't call. That you—" Silas set the glass down, untouched. "That you're delivering food on a bicycle in London, Rory. At twenty-five. With a law degree you never used." The bicycle. Of course. Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress, the greasy paper bags, the rain-slicked streets of Camden and King's Cross. She'd told herself it was temporary. A stopgap. A way to survive while she figured out what came next. "I'm figuring it out," she said. "You've been figuring for four years." "And you've been watching for four years?" The accusation slipped out before she could catch it. "Is that it, Si? You've been keeping tabs? Running your little intelligence network on your former—" She gestured vaguely, at the bar, at the life he'd built around her absence. "Your project?" Silas's hand closed around his glass. She saw the knuckles whiten, the old injury in his knee shifting as he adjusted his weight, favouring his left leg. "I opened this place for you," he said quietly. Rory blinked. "What?" "I opened this place for you. So you'd have somewhere to land. Someone who knew where to find you." He finally drank, the whisky disappearing in one swallow. "I told your mother that. I told her I'd watch over you, keep her informed, make sure you were safe. She thought—" He laughed, hollow. "She thought I was still in the game. Still connected. Still useful." "Si—" "But I'm not." He set the glass down with a crack that made the bottles behind him hum. "Prague ended that. The knee, the pension, the quiet retirement they forced on me. I'm a bar owner, Rory. I pour drinks and I listen to old men argue about football and I pretend I don't recognise the faces that walk through my door." He leaned closer, close enough that she smelled the tobacco and bergamot of his cologne, the scent that had once meant safety. "And every night, for four years, I've waited to hear that you were hurt. That you needed me. That you'd finally come home." The bar noise seemed to recede, the murmur of conversation, the clink of glasses, the low thrum of the bass from the speakers in the corner. Rory stared at the scar on her wrist, the crescent moon pale against her skin, and thought of all the times she'd stood in doorways, phone in hand, Silas's number already dialled, and talked herself out of it. "I didn't know," she whispered. "You never asked." "I was ashamed." The word tasted of copper, of all the nights she'd spent alone in that flat, of the degree gathering dust in a drawer, of the life she'd been too proud, too frightened, too *young* to accept. "I thought if I needed you, I'd failed. That I'd let him win." Silas was quiet for a long moment. When he spoke, his voice had changed, stripped of its performative edge, reduced to something raw and unfamiliar. "Your father called me too. Last month. Before he—" He stopped, shook his head. "Brendan was a good man. Stubborn, like you. He wanted to know if you were happy." "Was I?" "You tell me." Rory looked at him then, really looked, and saw the lines around his eyes, the grey threading through his beard, the way his left hand trembled slightly as it rested on the bar. She saw a man who had built a life around absence, who had mistaken surveillance for care, who had let pride curdle into something that looked like resentment. "I'm not unhappy," she said. "I'm... suspended. Like I'm waiting for permission to start living." "And who holds the permission?" She met his eyes. "I do." Silas reached across the bar, his fingers brushing her scarred wrist with a gentleness that made her breath catch. His signet ring was cold against her skin. "Then give it," he said. "To yourself. Tonight." Outside, the green neon flickered, and for a moment the bar was dark, and Rory felt the weight of twenty-three years pressing down on her shoulders, and then the light returned, steady and green and strangely beautiful, and Silas Blackwood, who had once been her guardian and her confessor and the only person who'd ever seen her clearly, smiled at her with something that might have been forgiveness, or might have been the beginning of it. "There's a room," he said. "Upstairs. Yours, if you want it. I've kept it empty." Rory looked at the stairs, at the door she'd passed a thousand times without climbing, and felt the future opening before her like a door she'd been too afraid to push. "Show me," she said. And Silas, who had spent twenty-three years learning how to disappear, finally stepped into the light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.471
leniency0.941
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.078
79.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1202
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"very"
3"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.20% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1202
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"weight"
2"trembled"
3"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen77
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1202
ratio0.001
matches
0"young"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.62% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount842
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory10
God1
Raven1
Nest1
Silas9
Blackwood2
Evan1
Cardiff1
Drank1
London1
Eva1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Camden1
King1
Cross1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Silas"
3"Blackwood"
4"Evan"
5"Eva"
6"Cheung"
7"King"
8"Cross"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore0.906
windowScore1
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like resentment"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1202
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean25.04
std25.34
cv1.012
sampleLengths
037
14
229
310
489
511
627
714
861
94
101
1145
126
132
1410
1516
164
1736
1837
1939
206
216
2248
2327
249
253
2665
271
28107
2964
305
313
3252
3325
3430
352
363
3761
3815
395
406
4127
428
4376
4415
4531
464
4716
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs144
matches
0"was already reaching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences88
ratio0
matches(empty)
91.76% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount850
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.04941176470588235
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.01647058823529412
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean13.66
std13.57
cv0.994
sampleLengths
011
126
24
34
425
59
61
733
816
940
104
117
1218
139
148
156
1613
1723
1825
194
201
214
2223
2318
246
252
263
271
286
293
3013
314
3233
333
3418
3519
362
372
3816
396
402
4111
426
436
4416
4530
462
476
4821
499
57.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4090909090909091
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners36
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences46
matches(empty)
ratio0
46.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences46
matches
0"She was already reaching for"
1"She tore off a sheet"
2"He wore a charcoal coat"
3"He laughed, but it died"
4"She felt it then, the"
5"He ordered a whisky."
6"She poured it without asking,"
7"She wiped down the same"
8"She'd told herself it was"
9"She gestured vaguely, at the"
10"She saw the knuckles whiten,"
11"he said quietly"
12"He finally drank, the whisky"
13"He laughed, hollow"
14"He set the glass down"
15"He leaned closer, close enough"
16"He stopped, shook his head"
17"She saw a man who"
18"She met his eyes."
19"His signet ring was cold"
ratio0.435
14.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount41
totalSentences46
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory's"
1"Rory didn't look up."
2"She was already reaching for"
3"She tore off a sheet"
4"Silas Blackwood leaned against the"
5"The green neon from the"
6"He wore a charcoal coat"
7"Rory crumpled the towel, tossed"
8"He laughed, but it died"
9"She felt it then, the"
10"The flat above this very"
11"The way he'd looked at"
12"He ordered a whisky."
13"She poured it without asking,"
14"The signet ring on his"
15"Rory's jaw tightened."
16"She wiped down the same"
17"Silas set the glass down,"
18"Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress, the"
19"She'd told herself it was"
ratio0.891
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences46
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She was already reaching for the roll of paper towels behind the bar, her wrist turning to reveal the crescent scar, pale against her skin."
1"Silas Blackwood leaned against the bar's edge, all six feet of him folded into a posture that suggested he'd once been taller, or perhaps simply more certain of…"
2"He wore a charcoal coat that had seen better decades, and his hazel eyes, magnified slightly by wire-rimmed spectacles she didn't remember him owning, tracked h…"
3"She saw the knuckles whiten, the old injury in his knee shifting as he adjusted his weight, favouring his left leg."
4"Silas reached across the bar, his fingers brushing her scarred wrist with a gentleness that made her breath catch."
5"Outside, the green neon flickered, and for a moment the bar was dark, and Rory felt the weight of twenty-three years pressing down on her shoulders, and then th…"
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Silas set, untouched"
1"He laughed, hollow"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"He laughed (laugh)"
1"He laughed (laugh)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.235
leniency0.471
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.118
80.5965%