"The path she knew—she'd cycled it a hundred times, cut through to the Tamsin Mynor Garden on her way home—curved wrong."
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"The pendant pulsed again, harder now, and she felt it—not warmth but recognition, the way a key finds its lock."
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"Not footsteps—something softer, a dragging, the whisper of fabric against bark."
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"Its bark was wrong—too smooth, too warm, pulsing faintly beneath her palm like something breathing."
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"Not toward the car park, toward the exit she'd come through—that way lay only more mist, more wrongness, the sense of being watched by eyes that didn't need light to see."
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"But not this—not this circle of wildflowers blooming in defiance of the season, not this ring of standing stones glowing with the same pale light that rose from the earth, not this figure standing at the center with her back to Rory, wearing something that might have been a dress or might have been woven from the mist itself."
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"Not because of beauty—though there was that, the terrible beauty of things that were not meant for human eyes—but because of wrongness."
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"\"For what?\" The figure—her, or the shape of her—tilted its head."
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"The pale light dimmed, and in the sudden relative darkness, Rory saw movement at the edge of the clearing—shapes that had been waiting, watching, wearing shapes that almost resembled people she knew."
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"The food inside—prawn crackers, salt and pepper squid, the special order of mapo tofu—had gone to stone, to ash, to something that crumbled when she touched it."
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"And Rory felt it, finally, the thing she'd been running from since Cardiff, since London, since the night she'd fled Evan's flat with a bag packed in ten minutes and no plan beyond *away*—the certainty that she was not alone in her own skin, that something had followed her through every door, every city, every version of herself she'd tried to become."
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"From the mist itself, which thickened, which moved against the logic of air, which gathered into shapes that almost resolved into figures before dissolving."
1
"A dull, rhythmic throb, matching the pendant's glow, matching the pulse in the tree."
2
"But not this—not this circle of wildflowers blooming in defiance of the season, not this ring of standing stones glowing with the same pale light that rose from…"
3
"The flowers began to close, their petals folding inward with the sound of pages turning, of a book being shut."
4
"The pale light dimmed, and in the sudden relative darkness, Rory saw movement at the edge of the clearing—shapes that had been waiting, watching, wearing shapes…"
5
"The food inside—prawn crackers, salt and pepper squid, the special order of mapo tofu—had gone to stone, to ash, to something that crumbled when she touched it."
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"And something that wore her face, or the face she might have had, began to follow, neither hurrying nor waiting, patient as only time itself can be patient, cer…"