Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VVTZ22PFMRQK1PSPECQ8J

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Duration:
47.5s
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$0.005377
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Mistral

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System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone pendant pulsed against Rory's chest, a heartbeat of crimson warmth that quickened as they crossed the threshold. She'd found the rift in the cellar of Silas' bar three nights ago, wedged between two rotted kegs where the stone floor dipped like a bruise. The Veil there shimmered wrong, a heat-haze distortion that made her eyes water. Now she stood at the edge of Dymas with Nyx solidifying beside her, a figure of living darkness that drank the amber light, and Isolde gliding forward on bare feet that left no impression on the loam. "First time in Hel proper," Nyx said, their voice the sound of pages turning in an empty library. "I've only passed through the borderlands. The Prince's domain runs deep." Rory adjusted the strap of her delivery bag. The Fae blade hung at her hip, cold even through the leather sheath. "You said the Veil weakens at solstice. That's why we're here." "Winter solstice. Three nights hence." Isolde's silver hair caught light that didn't exist, luminescence without source. "The barrier thins. Rifts open like wounds. You seek passage to—" She stopped, pale lavender eyes fixing on something beyond Rory's shoulder. "Something follows you, little mortal. Something that wears hunger like a familiar cloak." Rory's hand found the pendant. It pulsed harder, insistent. They moved into the vineyard first. The vines here grew wrong—too thick, too eager, clusters of fruit that gleamed with inner light, heavy enough to bend the trellises toward the amber ground. The air tasted of wine and something else, something that made Rory's mouth water despite her fear. Her stomach growled. She pressed her palm flat against it. "Don't touch the fruit," Nyx said, though they hadn't turned. "In Dymas, desire becomes sustenance. The hungry dead who wander here learned that too late." Isolde had already moved ahead, her feet sinking slightly into soil that seemed to breathe. She stopped at a stone archway overgrown with flowering vines, blossoms the size of dinner plates, petals layered like silk in shades of bruised purple and arterial red. "Beyond this arch, the kitchens of Belphegor's court," she said. "Where helbound chefs prepare meals for the Prince's endless table. The smells will—" She inhaled deeply, ethereal features rapturous. "—the smells will make you weep, seer. Do not follow them." Rory stepped through. The temperature dropped ten degrees. The scent hit her like a physical blow—roasting meat, baking bread, the sharp green of herbs she couldn't name, sweetness of caramelizing sugar. Her knees buckled. She gripped the archway stone, knuckles white. "Rory." Nyx's shadow stretched long across the path, reaching toward her like a hand. "Breathe. The hunger is not yours." She breathed. The scent remained, cloying and perfect, but she kept her eyes on the cobblestones ahead. They wound downward, into a valley where structures rose—not built so much as grown, walls of compressed vine and bone-white stone, roofs of woven thatch that steamed with perpetual warmth. "Palaces," Isolde murmured, wonder breaking through her riddles. "The Prince's gluttony made manifest. Every chamber a stomach. Every corridor, a throat." They descended. The air grew thick, humid, tasting of digestion. Rory's delivery bag felt suddenly absurd, canvas and nylon in a place of organic excess. She thought of Yu-Fei's Golden Empress, the steam and sizzle of the wok station, the controlled fire. This was fire without control, appetite without end. A sound reached them—not music, exactly, but rhythm. The scrape of a knife on stone. The wet slap of dough being folded. A voice humming, tuneless, satisfied. "Chefs," Nyx said. "Bound here for eternity. They prepare the feasts, but they never eat. The Prince consumes all." Rory's pendant burned against her sternum. She followed its pull, down a corridor lined with pantries—doors of dark wood, brass handles shaped like grasping hands. Each door, she realized, opened onto a different climate. One exhaled arctic cold, frost blooming on the threshold. Another radiated desert heat, sand drifting through the gap. A third dripped with condensation, the smell of ocean and rotting kelp. "Ingredients from every realm," Isolde said, not looking at the doors. "The Prince's table knows no season, no border. He has tasted the Fae Courts' summer wine and Hel's own—" She stopped, silver brows drawing together. "Something is wrong. The rift you followed, little mortal. It was not natural. Someone opened it. Someone wanted you to find it." Rory thought of the cellar. The kegs. The shimmer that hadn't been there before. "Who?" Isolde's eyes, pale as winter dawn, met hers. "That, seer, is the question that unravels kingdoms." They pressed deeper. The corridors narrowed, became esophageal, walls pulsing with faint peristalsis. Rory's boots squelched in something she didn't examine. The amber light above shifted, became the glow of bioluminescent fungi clinging to the organic architecture, casting everything in shades of bruise and old gold. Nyx shifted, becoming less solid, more suggestion. Their violet eyes remained, floating in the gathering dark. "I feel it now. The Prince's attention. He knows we're here. In Dymas, to be noticed is to be—" They searched for the word. "—to be wanted. To be consumed." "Then we move quietly," Rory said. But the palace had other plans. The doors began to open. Not all at once—one, then another, the brass hands turning themselves, revealing not pantries but dining chambers, tables groaning with food that steamed and shifted and occasionally moved of its own accord. Roast birds that turned their heads to watch. Pies from which something dark and many-legged occasionally emerged, only to dive back into the crust. Wine that poured itself, glasses filling and emptying in endless cycle. And at each table, a figure. Or what had been a figure. Hollow-eyed, mouths working silently, hands clawing at food that passed through them like smoke. The helbound. The consumed. The eternally hungry. One turned its head toward Rory. Its jaw unhinged, impossibly wide, and it smiled with teeth that were not teeth but something crystalline, something that had grown in the dark. "Fresh," it whispered, and the word echoed from a dozen throats. "Fresh meat. Fresh soul. The Prince will want—" The Fae blade was in Rory's hand before she knew she'd drawn it. Moonsilver caught the fungal light, threw it back in sharp silver beams. The hollow-eyed thing shrieked, a sound like tearing silk, and dissolved into shadow that Nyx absorbed with a sound like satisfied breathing. "Run," Nyx said, solidifying enough to grasp her wrist. Their touch was cold, the cold of deep water, of graves. "Now." They ran. Behind them, the palace of Dymas began to wake, corridors contracting, the architecture of appetite closing around them like a throat preparing to swallow. Rory's lungs burned. The pendant hammered against her chest, a second heart, a warning, a compass pointing somewhere she couldn't yet see. Isolde moved ahead, no longer gliding but running, silver hair streaming, her riddles forgotten. "The heart of the realm! The Prince's own chamber! If we reach it before he finds us—" "Why?" Rory gasped. "Why would that help?" "Because in the heart of gluttony, the one who consumes all must also—" Isolde's voice broke, became something raw and young and terrified. "—must also be consumed. There is a hunger that even Belphegor cannot satisfy. The hunger of the one who opened your rift. The hunger that wears your name like a promise." The corridor opened into a cavern of impossible scale. The Prince's table stretched into amber distance, a banquet without end, and at its center, rising from a throne of compressed bone and crystallized sugar, a shape that was almost Belphegor and almost not—too vast, too many limbs, too many mouths opening in directions that didn't exist in Rory's world. It turned eyes that were not eyes, that were depths, that were the space between stars where something vast and patient waited to be fed. And it smiled with Rory's own hunger, wearing it like a mask, and said with a voice like a thousand feasts ending: "You brought her home. Finally. My last ingredient." The Heartstone pendant blazed crimson, so bright it hurt to look at, and Rory understood with perfect, terrible clarity that she had never been the hunter in this place. She had been the delivery all along.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She inhaled deeply [deeply]"
1"\"—must also [also]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.629
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
92.79% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1387
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1387
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"quickened"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count2
6
word"desire"
count1
7
word"silk"
count2
8
word"perfect"
count2
9
word"crystalline"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"streaming"
count1
12
word"crystallized"
count1
13
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"warmth"
2"quickened"
3"shimmered"
4"familiar"
5"stomach"
6"desire"
7"silk"
8"perfect"
9"crystalline"
10"echoed"
11"streaming"
12"crystallized"
13"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
98.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1377
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
67.51% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1091
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.65
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Rory18
Veil1
Dymas2
Nyx8
Isolde8
Fae2
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Belphegor2
Prince1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Belphegor"
5"Prince"
places
0"Dymas"
globalScore0.675
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"soil that seemed to breathe"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.905
wordCount1377
matches
0"not music, exactly, but rhythm"
1"not pantries but dining chambers, tables groaning with food"
2"not teeth but something crystalline, something"
3"no longer gliding but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean32.79
std18.17
cv0.554
sampleLengths
058
137
229
332
451
59
659
725
843
940
1041
1120
1247
1321
1450
1527
1619
1764
1858
1914
201
2116
2246
2346
246
256
265
2767
2833
2930
3019
3147
3221
3348
3431
357
3654
3759
3825
3930
4029
417
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"being folded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs202
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences111
ratio0.09
matches
0"The vines here grew wrong—too thick, too eager, clusters of fruit that gleamed with inner light, heavy enough to bend the trellises toward the amber ground."
1"\"—the smells will make you weep, seer. Do not follow them.\""
2"The scent hit her like a physical blow—roasting meat, baking bread, the sharp green of herbs she couldn't name, sweetness of caramelizing sugar."
3"They wound downward, into a valley where structures rose—not built so much as grown, walls of compressed vine and bone-white stone, roofs of woven thatch that steamed with perpetual warmth."
4"A sound reached them—not music, exactly, but rhythm."
5"She followed its pull, down a corridor lined with pantries—doors of dark wood, brass handles shaped like grasping hands."
6"\"—to be wanted. To be consumed.\""
7"Not all at once—one, then another, the brass hands turning themselves, revealing not pantries but dining chambers, tables groaning with food that steamed and shifted and occasionally moved of its own accord."
8"\"—must also be consumed. There is a hunger that even Belphegor cannot satisfy. The hunger of the one who opened your rift. The hunger that wears your name like a promise.\""
9"The Prince's table stretched into amber distance, a banquet without end, and at its center, rising from a throne of compressed bone and crystallized sugar, a shape that was almost Belphegor and almost not—too vast, too many limbs, too many mouths opening in directions that didn't exist in Rory's world."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount647
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.02472952086553323
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00463678516228748
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean12.41
std8.94
cv0.721
sampleLengths
019
126
213
337
418
511
68
713
811
916
1022
1113
125
134
146
1526
1617
173
187
1910
2015
2115
2228
2310
2419
2511
263
275
2823
293
307
3114
326
332
3415
3530
368
3713
382
398
4015
4117
428
438
447
457
465
473
4816
496
65.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.44144144144144143
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences87
matches
0"She'd found the rift in"
1"She stopped, pale lavender eyes"
2"It pulsed harder, insistent."
3"They moved into the vineyard"
4"Her stomach growled."
5"She pressed her palm flat"
6"She stopped at a stone"
7"She inhaled deeply, ethereal features"
8"Her knees buckled."
9"She gripped the archway stone,"
10"They wound downward, into a"
11"She thought of Yu-Fei's Golden"
12"She followed its pull, down"
13"She stopped, silver brows drawing"
14"They pressed deeper."
15"Their violet eyes remained, floating"
16"They searched for the word"
17"Its jaw unhinged, impossibly wide,"
18"it whispered, and the word"
19"Their touch was cold, the"
ratio0.253
23.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences87
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant pulsed against"
1"She'd found the rift in"
2"The Veil there shimmered wrong,"
3"Nyx said, their voice the"
4"Rory adjusted the strap of"
5"The Fae blade hung at"
6"Isolde's silver hair caught light"
7"She stopped, pale lavender eyes"
8"Rory's hand found the pendant."
9"It pulsed harder, insistent."
10"They moved into the vineyard"
11"The vines here grew wrong—too"
12"The air tasted of wine"
13"Her stomach growled."
14"She pressed her palm flat"
15"Nyx said, though they hadn't"
16"Isolde had already moved ahead,"
17"She stopped at a stone"
18"She inhaled deeply, ethereal features"
19"\"—the smells will make you"
ratio0.874
57.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"Now she stood at the"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant pulsed against Rory's chest, a heartbeat of crimson warmth that quickened as they crossed the threshold."
1"The Veil there shimmered wrong, a heat-haze distortion that made her eyes water."
2"Now she stood at the edge of Dymas with Nyx solidifying beside her, a figure of living darkness that drank the amber light, and Isolde gliding forward on bare f…"
3"The vines here grew wrong—too thick, too eager, clusters of fruit that gleamed with inner light, heavy enough to bend the trellises toward the amber ground."
4"The air tasted of wine and something else, something that made Rory's mouth water despite her fear."
5"They wound downward, into a valley where structures rose—not built so much as grown, walls of compressed vine and bone-white stone, roofs of woven thatch that s…"
6"Not all at once—one, then another, the brass hands turning themselves, revealing not pantries but dining chambers, tables groaning with food that steamed and sh…"
7"Hollow-eyed, mouths working silently, hands clawing at food that passed through them like smoke."
8"Its jaw unhinged, impossibly wide, and it smiled with teeth that were not teeth but something crystalline, something that had grown in the dark."
9"The Prince's table stretched into amber distance, a banquet without end, and at its center, rising from a throne of compressed bone and crystallized sugar, a sh…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Isolde said, not looking at the doors"
1"it whispered, and the word echoed from a dozen throats"
35.71% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"the smells will (will)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"it whispered (whisper)"
3"Rory gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.229
75.0631%