Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VZ34G22SZ1ARNMN2VHDNP

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Duration:
1m 3s
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$0.005289
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Mistral

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Heartstone pendant grew warm against Rory's sternum, a heartbeat of crimson light pulsing through her jacket. She pulled it free, the silver chain catching the amber glow of a sky that had never known the sun. Above them, the heavens of Dymas stretched in bands of molten gold and bruised violet, the light of a dying star trapped in eternal twilight. "This way," Nyx said, and their voice came from everywhere and nowhere, a whisper that seemed to rise from the cracked earth beneath Rory's boots. She followed. She always followed, these days. The Shade moved ahead of her, a silhouette given temporary weight, their form flickering between solid and smoke. They had found the rift together three nights ago, in the cellar beneath Silas' bar, where the Veil had worn thin as old parchment. The pendant had led them there. The pendant had led them here. Rory's boots sank into soil that drank at them, rich and black and faintly luminescent. Fungi clung to the trunks of trees that twisted overhead, their bark the color of burnt copper, their leaves broad and translucent as stained glass. Each leaf caught the amber light and threw it back in fractured patterns, so that the forest floor shimmered with moving constellations. She reached out to touch one. It was warm, almost feverish, and when she withdrew her hand, her fingertips glowed faintly green for a moment before the light faded. "Don't touch the flora," Nyx said, not turning around. "In Dymas, everything hungers. Even the beauty." They had brought Isolde with them. The seer walked slightly behind, her silver hair catching light that didn't exist, her pale lavender eyes reflecting depths that had nothing to do with the grove around them. She moved without sound, left no footprints in the loam, and spoke only when the silence grew too heavy. "The trees remember," Isolde said now, her voice like wind through dry reeds. "They remember the first feast. They remember the hunger that followed." Rory's wrist twitched. The crescent scar there, pale against her skin, seemed to ache in this place. She had not thought of Evan in weeks. She tried not to think of him at all. But the scar remembered, even when she didn't. The path opened into a clearing, and Rory stopped breathing. Before them stretched a vineyard unlike any she had known. The vines grew not in rows but in spirals, in fractals, in patterns that hurt to follow too long. The grapes hung in clusters the size of her fist, their skins shifting through colors she had no names for—colors that existed in the corner of vision, that vanished when looked at directly. Some were deep as wine, others pale as bone, others striped with veins of liquid gold. And the air tasted of them. Sweetness so thick it coated her tongue, richness that made her stomach clench with wanting. Rory's mouth watered. She had not eaten since breakfast, hours ago, days ago, time moved strangely here. The hunger rose in her like a tide, and she gripped the Heartstone pendant to anchor herself. "Careful," Nyx said, and for the first time, their whisper carried something like fear. "The fruit here doesn't grow for eating. It grows for wanting." Isolde stepped forward, and where her bare feet touched the soil, wildflowers erupted in her wake. They bloomed in impossible colors, petals that unfolded like origami, releasing scents that made Rory's head swim. The seer's eyes were closed, her face tilted toward the amber sky, and when she spoke, her voice came from everywhere at once. "Three paths diverge where the gluttonous king holds court. One of wine, one of flesh, one of forgetting. Choose with your stomach, and you will be consumed. Choose with your heart, and you will be changed. Choose with your mind—" She opened her eyes. They were wrong, Rory realized. The pupils were slit, vertical, feline. "—and you will remember what you have lost." The wind moved through the vines, and Rory heard it then. Not music, exactly. Something beneath music. The sound of a thousand mouths opening, of satisfaction and hunger intertwined, of a feast that had never ended and never would. "Which path do we take?" Rory asked. Nyx turned to look at her, and their form flickered, shadows pooling and reforming in the shape of a face that might have been Aldric's, three centuries ago, or might have been something older. "The one that leads to what you need," they said. "Not what you want." They moved deeper. The vineyard gave way to an orchard where the trees bore fruit that was not fruit—shapes that suggested apples, pears, things that had once been fruit, now grown strange and swollen with too much sweetness. The air grew thick, humid, tasting of ripeness and rot in equal measure. Rory's jacket clung to her back. Her blue eyes, usually so sharp, found it difficult to focus on any single tree, any single branch. She saw movement in the branches. Shapes that might have been birds, or might have been something that had once been human, now adapted to this place of endless growing and endless hunger. They watched her with eyes that reflected the amber sky, and when one of them opened its mouth, Rory heard not a cry but a word, whispered so softly she almost missed it: *Hungry.* "Don't answer," Isolde said, but she was smiling, and her teeth were too white, too numerous. "They don't want food. They want company. They want to be remembered as they were, before." Rory thought of Evan. She thought of the way he had looked at her when he was angry, the way his hands had found her throat, her wrist, the crescent scar he had kissed once and called hers. She thought of Cardiff, of the Pre-Law degree she had abandoned, of the life she had been supposed to build. She thought of London, of Yu-Fei Cheung's restaurant, of the flat above Silas' bar where she slept with the Fae blade beneath her pillow and the Heartstone pendant against her heart. "I don't want to be remembered," she said. "Not by them." Nyx's form solidified for a moment, and Rory saw something like grief in the shadows that shaped their face. "Then we walk faster," they said. The orchard opened into a garden, and the wonder of it stole her breath despite everything. Flowers grew here that had no business existing. Blossoms the size of her head, layered in petals that moved independently, that opened and closed in slow rhythms like breathing. Colors that shifted when she looked away, that resolved into new hues when she turned back. The air was thick with perfume, with the scent of every flower that had ever bloomed, compressed and concentrated until it became almost physical, a presence she could taste, could feel coating her throat. And there were paths. Dozens of them, winding between the blooms, each one marked by a standing stone carved with symbols that hurt to read. Rory approached the nearest and touched it. The stone was warm, almost alive, and beneath her fingers she felt a pulse, slow and deep, like a heartbeat. "These mark the boundaries," Isolde said, appearing at her shoulder without sound. "Between what is offered and what is taken. Between the feast and the famine." "Which one do we follow?" The seer's lavender eyes met hers, and for a moment, Rory saw something ancient and tired and terribly sad. "The one that smells of home," Isolde said. "Even if home is a lie. Even if home is a cage." They walked. The garden seemed to stretch without end, each turn revealing new wonders and new uneases. Fountains that flowed with liquid silver, with wine, with something that glowed faintly blue and moved against gravity. Statues of figures in attitudes of ecstasy, their faces blurred as if the stone itself refused to remember what they had been. A pavilion where a feast was laid out on a table that extended into shadow, the dishes empty but the plates still warm, the glasses still wet with condensation. Rory reached for a goblet. Her fingers closed on cold metal, and she jerked back, but not before she felt it—the wrongness of it, the sense that something had touched her in return. "Don't," Nyx said, and their voice was closer now, urgent. "In Dymas, to touch is to taste. To taste is to be tasted." She pulled her hand back. The scar on her wrist burned, a warning or a memory, she couldn't tell which. They found the door at the garden's heart. It stood alone, without wall or frame, a portal of dark wood carved with scenes of feasting and famine, of plenty and want, of the endless cycle that defined this place. The Heartstone pendant blazed against Rory's chest, crimson light pulsing in rhythm with her heartbeat. "Beyond this," Isolde said, "is the court of Belphegor. Prince of Gluttony. He who consumes and is consumed. He offers what you lack, and takes what you have." "What do we lack?" Rory asked. The seer's smile was sad, knowing. "You will see." Nyx moved to the door first, their shadow-form pressing against the wood, testing. "It opens for the hungry," they said. "For the wanting. For those who come seeking." "And if we don't want?" Rory asked. "Then it opens anyway," Isolde whispered. "In Dymas, want is not a choice. It is a condition." The door swung inward, and the amber light of Dymas spilled through, carrying with it the scent of roasting meat and baking bread and wine so rich it made Rory's eyes water. She stepped forward, the Heartstone pendant warm against her skin, the Fae blade cold beneath her jacket, and the three of them crossed the threshold into the feast that never ended, into the hunger that could never be satisfied, into the heart of Gluttony itself. Behind them, the door closed. Before them, the court of Belphegor waited, and the prince who had consumed a thousand souls and been consumed in return, and the truth of what they had come seeking, and what they would have to leave behind. Rory took a breath. The air tasted of everything she had ever wanted, and everything she had ever lost. She stepped forward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1729
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1729
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"whisper"
count2
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"fractured"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"depths"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count2
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"resolved"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
10
word"almost alive"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"weight"
2"fractured"
3"shimmered"
4"depths"
5"silence"
6"stomach"
7"flickered"
8"resolved"
9"could feel"
10"almost alive"
11"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences106
matches
0"was angry"
1"was sad"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences106
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1725
ratio0.001
matches
0"Hungry."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
73.93% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1446
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.52
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Rory22
Dymas2
Shade1
Isolde8
Evan2
Nyx7
Aldric1
Cardiff1
Pre-Law1
London1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Fae1
Gluttony1
Belphegor1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Dymas"
2"Shade"
3"Isolde"
4"Evan"
5"Nyx"
6"Aldric"
7"Cheung"
8"Belphegor"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore0.739
windowScore0.833
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"whisper that seemed to rise from the cracked earth beneath Rory's boots"
1"something like fear"
2"something like grief in the shadows that sha"
84.06% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.159
wordCount1725
matches
0"not in rows but in spirals, in fractals, in patterns"
1"not a cry but a word, whispered so softly she almost missed it"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean36.7
std24.25
cv0.661
sampleLengths
062
125
261
391
416
554
624
742
810
978
1055
1125
1256
1340
1423
1539
167
1748
1875
1966
201
2132
2258
2331
2411
2525
2616
2779
2852
2926
305
3139
3286
3333
3423
3520
3654
3728
386
399
4028
417
4217
4377
4443
4519
463
92.02% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences106
matches
0"were closed"
1"been supposed"
2"was laid"
3"been consumed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs257
matches(empty)
47.62% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences120
ratio0.033
matches
0"The grapes hung in clusters the size of her fist, their skins shifting through colors she had no names for—colors that existed in the corner of vision, that vanished when looked at directly."
1"\"—and you will remember what you have lost.\""
2"The vineyard gave way to an orchard where the trees bore fruit that was not fruit—shapes that suggested apples, pears, things that had once been fruit, now grown strange and swollen with too much sweetness."
3"Her fingers closed on cold metal, and she jerked back, but not before she felt it—the wrongness of it, the sense that something had touched her in return."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount590
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.030508474576271188
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005084745762711864
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean14.38
std9.82
cv0.683
sampleLengths
017
120
225
325
42
55
618
724
86
96
1015
1125
1222
136
1423
159
167
176
1829
1919
2013
2111
223
2314
248
259
268
2710
2810
2919
3033
3116
326
3315
343
3514
3617
3714
3811
3916
4017
4123
4240
434
445
456
468
4711
483
493
53.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35833333333333334
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences93
matches
0"She pulled it free, the"
1"She always followed, these days."
2"They had found the rift"
3"She reached out to touch"
4"It was warm, almost feverish,"
5"They had brought Isolde with"
6"She moved without sound, left"
7"She had not thought of"
8"She tried not to think"
9"She had not eaten since"
10"They bloomed in impossible colors,"
11"She opened her eyes."
12"They were wrong, Rory realized."
13"They moved deeper."
14"Her blue eyes, usually so"
15"She saw movement in the"
16"They watched her with eyes"
17"She thought of the way"
18"She thought of Cardiff, of"
19"She thought of London, of"
ratio0.28
3.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences93
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant grew warm"
1"She pulled it free, the"
2"Nyx said, and their voice"
3"She always followed, these days."
4"The Shade moved ahead of"
5"They had found the rift"
6"The pendant had led them"
7"The pendant had led them"
8"Rory's boots sank into soil"
9"Fungi clung to the trunks"
10"Each leaf caught the amber"
11"She reached out to touch"
12"It was warm, almost feverish,"
13"Nyx said, not turning around"
14"They had brought Isolde with"
15"The seer walked slightly behind,"
16"She moved without sound, left"
17"Isolde said now, her voice"
18"Rory's wrist twitched."
19"The crescent scar there, pale"
ratio0.914
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"Before them stretched a vineyard"
1"Before them, the court of"
ratio0.022
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The seer walked slightly behind, her silver hair catching light that didn't exist, her pale lavender eyes reflecting depths that had nothing to do with the grov…"
1"The grapes hung in clusters the size of her fist, their skins shifting through colors she had no names for—colors that existed in the corner of vision, that van…"
2"Sweetness so thick it coated her tongue, richness that made her stomach clench with wanting."
3"They bloomed in impossible colors, petals that unfolded like origami, releasing scents that made Rory's head swim."
4"Nyx turned to look at her, and their form flickered, shadows pooling and reforming in the shape of a face that might have been Aldric's, three centuries ago, or…"
5"The vineyard gave way to an orchard where the trees bore fruit that was not fruit—shapes that suggested apples, pears, things that had once been fruit, now grow…"
6"Nyx's form solidified for a moment, and Rory saw something like grief in the shadows that shaped their face."
7"Blossoms the size of her head, layered in petals that moved independently, that opened and closed in slow rhythms like breathing."
8"The air was thick with perfume, with the scent of every flower that had ever bloomed, compressed and concentrated until it became almost physical, a presence sh…"
9"Fountains that flowed with liquid silver, with wine, with something that glowed faintly blue and moved against gravity."
10"Statues of figures in attitudes of ecstasy, their faces blurred as if the stone itself refused to remember what they had been."
11"She stepped forward, the Heartstone pendant warm against her skin, the Fae blade cold beneath her jacket, and the three of them crossed the threshold into the f…"
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx said, not turning around"
1"Nyx said, and their voice was closer now, urgent"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.531
leniency1
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.059
81.1674%