Run: 2026-10-07-01M4ATVXXTE7C97CABKFYV871R

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Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.013403
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rift opened in the air like a wound that refused to bleed. Aurora stepped back, her boots crunching on frost-kissed gravel—or what had been frost-kissed gravel moments before. Now the stone steamed beneath her feet, heat radiating upward through the soles of her trainers. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant against her sternum, feeling its crimson core hammer against her ribs in a rhythm that matched her own pulse. It burned. Not with pain, but with insistence, a beacon screaming *here*. "This way," Nyx whispered. Their voice didn't come from a mouth. It seeped from the shadows pooling at Aurora's feet, coalescing into words that tasted of cold metal and distant thunder. The Shade stood six feet two of living darkness, violet eyes burning faintly in the space where a face should be. They gestured toward the tear in reality—a shimmering distortion where the grey London sky peeled back to reveal something else entirely. Aurora swallowed. Her left wrist, the crescent scar there, itched. A phantom sensation, or a warning. "Are you certain?" she asked. Her breath didn't mist in the air. The cold had vanished, replaced by a wet, heavy warmth that smelled of roasting garlic and caramelized sugar. Nyx tilted their head. The movement sent ripples through their form, shadow sliding like oil across water. "I have walked between realms for three hundred and eighty years, Aurora Carter. I know a threshold when I see one." Isolde had given her the blade three nights ago, pressing the moonsilver dagger into her palm with fingers that left no prints on the grass. *For when the feast turns to hunger*, the seer had said, her silver hair catching moonlight that shouldn't have existed in that clearing. *And it always does, in Dymas.* Now Aurora felt the blade's cold weight against her hip, the leaf-shaped steel humming with a frequency she felt in her teeth. She had not expected to use it so soon. She had not expected to step through at all. But the pendant had been burning for weeks. And Evan—God, Evan—had found her trail once before. She needed answers. She needed the Prince of Gluttony to tell her why a piece of Hel had been left on her doorstep in a velvet box. "Stay close," she told Nyx. "If I signal, we run." The Shade's laugh was the sound of pages turning in an empty library. "Running is a mortal concept. I would simply... unravel." They stepped through. The transition was not a door opening but a swallowing. One moment, Aurora stood in the alley behind Silas' bar, the familiar stink of urban decay and last night's rain. The next, her knees buckled as the world tilted, and she was falling upward into amber. She landed on her palms. The ground was not earth but something softer—moss, perhaps, or velvet, or the dense thatch of a thousand overgrown vines. She looked up. The sky was the color of honey held up to a flame, a vast and burning dome that stretched from horizon to horizon without a single cloud, without a sun to explain its light. It was beautiful. It was wrong. The warmth pressed against her skin like a lover's hand, too insistent, too hungry. "Welcome to Dymas," Nyx said, their form flickering as shadows behaved strangely here, stretching long and sharp against the amber glow. "Realm of the Seventh Sin. Or so the Wardens call it." Aurora pushed herself upright. The Heartstone Pendant blazed against her chest, its crimson light pulsing in time with the ambient thrum of the place. Around them, the landscape undulated in waves of impossible agriculture. Vineyards climbed hills that shouldn't exist, their grapes fat and black as bruises, dripping with a nectar that caught the amber light and refracted it into rainbows. Orchards heavy with fruit—pears the size of human heads, apples that glowed from within with a soft, bioluminescent blush—bent branches to the ground under their weight. Gardens sprawled in every direction, but they were not gardens of flowers. They were gardens of flavor: rows of crystalline spice pods that chimed in a breeze Aurora couldn't feel, hedges of sugar-cane that rustled with secrets, trees bearing fruit that steamed with the heat of fresh baking. And the smell. It overwhelmed her. Roast duck crisping in its own fat. Saffron and star anise. The sharp tang of wine reduced to syrup. It made her mouth water, made her stomach clench with a hunger that had nothing to do with the empty hours since her last meal. It was a hunger for more, for everything, for the taste of infinity. "Don't eat anything," Nyx warned, their voice dropping to a register that vibrated in Aurora's bones. "The food here feeds on... enthusiasm. On the will to stop." Aurora nodded, though her throat had gone dry. She touched the Fae blade at her hip. The moonsilver was ice against her fingers, a stark contrast to the suffocating heat. They moved deeper. The path—if it was a path—wove between the vineyards, and Aurora noticed that the rows were not planted in soil but in something richer, darker. She didn't look too closely. The shadows beneath the vines moved, not with the wind, but with purpose, sliding toward the light as if drawn by thirst. They came to a clearing. It was a banquet without end. Long tables stretched into the amber distance, laden with food that never cooled, never diminished. Roast beasts turned on spits tended by figures that moved with the jerky precision of marionettes—helbound souls, Aurora realized, their eyes hollow, their mouths working in silent, endless chewing. They didn't look up as Aurora approached. They didn't need to. The feast was eternal. The consumption was eternal. At the head of the central table sat a throne of woven vines and bone, and upon it lounged a figure that made Aurora's breath catch. Prince Belphegor. The Ruler of Gluttony. He was beautiful in the way a poisonous flower is beautiful—alluring, vibrant, and utterly lethal. His skin was the color of the amber sky, his hair a cascade of black silk that seemed to drink the light. He wore robes of woven grapevine and gold, and in his hand, he held a goblet that never emptied, the wine within shifting colors like oil on water. He looked up. His eyes were pits of shadow, and when he smiled, his teeth were too sharp, too numerous. "Aurora Carter," he said, and his voice was the sound of a thousand stomachs growling in harmony. "I've been expecting you. We all have. The pendant called to us, you see. It hungers." Aurora's hand went to the Fae blade. The cold seeped into her palm, grounding her. "I want to know why you sent it." Belphegor laughed, and the sound was rich, decadent, the noise of a man drowning in wine. "Sent it? My dear, I didn't send it. I *gave* it. A gift. For services yet to be rendered. You carry the mark of Dymas now, little delivery girl. You are bound to my table, whether you sit or not." The air thickened. The scent of food became cloying, suffocating. Aurora felt the pull—the desperate, gnawing need to sit, to eat, to consume until she burst. The gluttony of the place pressed against her mind like a physical weight. Nyx stepped forward, their shadow form solidifying into a wall of darkness between Aurora and the Prince. "She will not feast, demon." Belphegor's smile didn't waver. "The Shadow. Aldric. I wondered when you'd come sniffing around my borders." He rose, and the movement was fluid, obscene, like something underwater. "But tell me, shade—do you know what it is to be hungry? Truly hungry? For three centuries, I have watched mortals gorge themselves to death, and still they come. Still they want more." He gestured, and the amber sky darkened, just for a moment, showing Aurora the truth—the endless cycle, the souls trapped in the kitchens, the endless consumption that fed something older and vaster than any prince. "This place is a trap," Aurora whispered. "It is a paradise," Belphegor corrected, stepping down from his throne, vines curling around his ankles like serpents. "For those with the appetite. And you, Aurora Carter, have such an appetite. I've tasted it. The way you fled London. The way you run from everything. You are hungry for escape. For change. For—" he leaned in, close enough that she could smell his breath, sweet and rotting, "—for me." The Heartstone Pendant blazed, burning hot against her skin. Aurora gritted her teeth and drew the Fae blade. The moonsilver gleamed, cold and defiant, cutting through the amber light. "Then let's see who's hungry for a fight," she said. Nyx solidified beside her, violet eyes blazing, and the shadows of Dymas screamed as they prepared to unravel.
created_at"2026-10-07T09:24:45.123Z" 10/7/2026, 9:24:45 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1487
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1487
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"beacon"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"velvet"
count2
5
word"unravel"
count2
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"crystalline"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"vibrated"
count1
10
word"stark"
count1
11
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"beacon"
2"warmth"
3"weight"
4"velvet"
5"unravel"
6"familiar"
7"crystalline"
8"stomach"
9"vibrated"
10"stark"
11"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen70
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords15
totalWords1472
ratio0.01
matches
0"here"
1"For when the feast turns to hunger"
2"And it always does, in Dymas."
3"gave"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1221
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Aurora19
Shade2
London1
Evan2
God1
Prince3
Gluttony2
Hel1
Nyx7
Fae3
Belphegor4
Ruler1
Dymas2
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Aurora"
2"Shade"
3"Evan"
4"God"
5"Prince"
6"Hel"
7"Nyx"
8"Belphegor"
places
0"London"
1"Fae"
globalScore0.722
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"silk that seemed to drink the light"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.717
wordCount1472
matches
0"Not with pain, but with insistence, a beacon screaming *here*"
1"not a door opening but a swallowing"
2"not earth but something softer"
3"not with the wind, but with purpose, sliding toward the light as if drawn by thirst"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"noticed that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean37.74
std27.58
cv0.731
sampleLengths
013
168
24
369
416
530
638
754
840
943
1010
1122
123
1346
1428
1554
1632
17135
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1960
2027
2130
2255
235
2469
2526
2671
2720
2833
2923
3056
3139
3222
3395
347
3569
3629
3710
3818
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences101
matches
0"been left"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs200
matches
0"was falling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences110
ratio0.1
matches
0"Aurora stepped back, her boots crunching on frost-kissed gravel—or what had been frost-kissed gravel moments before."
1"They gestured toward the tear in reality—a shimmering distortion where the grey London sky peeled back to reveal something else entirely."
2"And Evan—God, Evan—had found her trail once before."
3"The ground was not earth but something softer—moss, perhaps, or velvet, or the dense thatch of a thousand overgrown vines."
4"Orchards heavy with fruit—pears the size of human heads, apples that glowed from within with a soft, bioluminescent blush—bent branches to the ground under their weight."
5"The path—if it was a path—wove between the vineyards, and Aurora noticed that the rows were not planted in soil but in something richer, darker."
6"Roast beasts turned on spits tended by figures that moved with the jerky precision of marionettes—helbound souls, Aurora realized, their eyes hollow, their mouths working in silent, endless chewing."
7"He was beautiful in the way a poisonous flower is beautiful—alluring, vibrant, and utterly lethal."
8"Aurora felt the pull—the desperate, gnawing need to sit, to eat, to consume until she burst."
9"\"But tell me, shade—do you know what it is to be hungry? Truly hungry? For three centuries, I have watched mortals gorge themselves to death, and still they come. Still they want more.\" He gestured, and the amber sky darkened, just for a moment, showing Aurora the truth—the endless cycle, the souls trapped in the kitchens, the endless consumption that fed something older and vaster than any prince."
10"\"For those with the appetite. And you, Aurora Carter, have such an appetite. I've tasted it. The way you fled London. The way you run from everything. You are hungry for escape. For change. For—\" he leaned in, close enough that she could smell his breath, sweet and rotting, \"—for me.\""
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount603
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.01990049751243781
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004975124378109453
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean13.38
std10.53
cv0.787
sampleLengths
013
116
216
324
42
510
64
77
820
921
1021
112
128
136
145
157
1618
174
1813
1921
2025
2123
226
2322
249
259
268
278
283
2924
305
315
3213
339
343
3510
3620
3716
385
3920
403
4134
423
433
4414
4521
4611
474
4820
4910
51.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35454545454545455
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners39
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
ratio0
66.81% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences94
matches
0"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
1"Their voice didn't come from"
2"It seeped from the shadows"
3"They gestured toward the tear"
4"Her left wrist, the crescent"
5"Her breath didn't mist in"
6"She had not expected to"
7"She had not expected to"
8"She needed answers."
9"She needed the Prince of"
10"she told Nyx"
11"They stepped through."
12"She landed on her palms."
13"She looked up."
14"It was beautiful."
15"It was wrong."
16"They were gardens of flavor:"
17"It overwhelmed her."
18"It made her mouth water,"
19"It was a hunger for"
ratio0.383
29.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences94
matches
0"The rift opened in the"
1"Aurora stepped back, her boots"
2"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
3"Their voice didn't come from"
4"It seeped from the shadows"
5"The Shade stood six feet"
6"They gestured toward the tear"
7"Her left wrist, the crescent"
8"A phantom sensation, or a"
9"Her breath didn't mist in"
10"The cold had vanished, replaced"
11"Nyx tilted their head."
12"The movement sent ripples through"
13"Isolde had given her the"
14"She had not expected to"
15"She had not expected to"
16"She needed answers."
17"She needed the Prince of"
18"she told Nyx"
19"The Shade's laugh was the"
ratio0.862
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences94
matches
0"Now the stone steamed beneath"
1"*And it always does, in"
2"Now Aurora felt the blade's"
ratio0.032
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant against her sternum, feeling its crimson core hammer against her ribs in a rhythm that matched her own pulse."
1"It seeped from the shadows pooling at Aurora's feet, coalescing into words that tasted of cold metal and distant thunder."
2"The cold had vanished, replaced by a wet, heavy warmth that smelled of roasting garlic and caramelized sugar."
3"*For when the feast turns to hunger*, the seer had said, her silver hair catching moonlight that shouldn't have existed in that clearing."
4"The sky was the color of honey held up to a flame, a vast and burning dome that stretched from horizon to horizon without a single cloud, without a sun to expla…"
5"Vineyards climbed hills that shouldn't exist, their grapes fat and black as bruises, dripping with a nectar that caught the amber light and refracted it into ra…"
6"Orchards heavy with fruit—pears the size of human heads, apples that glowed from within with a soft, bioluminescent blush—bent branches to the ground under thei…"
7"They were gardens of flavor: rows of crystalline spice pods that chimed in a breeze Aurora couldn't feel, hedges of sugar-cane that rustled with secrets, trees …"
8"It made her mouth water, made her stomach clench with a hunger that had nothing to do with the empty hours since her last meal."
9"Roast beasts turned on spits tended by figures that moved with the jerky precision of marionettes—helbound souls, Aurora realized, their eyes hollow, their mout…"
10"At the head of the central table sat a throne of woven vines and bone, and upon it lounged a figure that made Aurora's breath catch."
11"His skin was the color of the amber sky, his hair a cascade of black silk that seemed to drink the light."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, and his voice was the sound of a thousand stomachs growling in harmony"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx warned (warn)"
2"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
3"Belphegor corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.444
effectiveRatio0.381
74.4630%