Run: 2026-10-07-01M4ATY76MFDJY3SBN10JRTEXE

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Duration:
27.3s
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$0.024611
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Mistral

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden reeked of damp and old rust, the air thick with the kind of silence that pressed against the eardrums. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over the yellowed police tape, her boots scuffing against the grimy tile. The beam of her torch cut through the gloom, illuminating the peeling posters on the walls—faded advertisements for long-forgotten plays and products. The place had been deserted for decades, but something had happened here tonight. Something that had brought the forensics team scrambling down into the underground like ants at a dropped crumb. She adjusted the worn leather watch on her left wrist, the familiar weight a small comfort. Eighteen years on the force, and she still hadn’t seen it all. Not by a long shot. Ahead, the flicker of a forensic lamp cast jagged shadows against the curved tunnel walls. The scene was cordoned off, the usual hum of chatter and camera flashes subdued, as if the very atmosphere was holding its breath. A body lay sprawled near the old platform edge, but it wasn’t the corpse that made Harlow’s pulse quicken. It was the lack of blood. The absence of struggle. The way the victim’s face was frozen not in fear, but in something like awe. “Quinn.” She turned. Eva Kowalski stood near the edge of the platform, her round glasses reflecting the harsh light, curly red hair escaping in wild tendrils from behind her ears. She tucked a strand behind her left ear—her nervous habit—and shifted the worn leather satchel slung across her shoulder. The thing was probably heavier than Eva herself, stuffed as it was with books and notes. “You’re not supposed to be here,” Harlow said, her voice sharp. Eva wasn’t police. She wasn’t even a consultant on this case. But Eva had a way of turning up where she wasn’t wanted, especially when the unexplained reared its head. Eva shrugged, unfazed. “I got a call. They said there was something… odd.” She gestured vaguely at the scene. “And by odd, I mean the kind of odd that makes seasoned detectives look like they’ve seen a ghost.” Harlow exhaled through her nose. She didn’t believe in ghosts. But she did believe in the unexplained. Three years ago, she’d lost her partner, DS Morris, in a case that had spiraled into something no one could rationalize. The official report called it an accident. Harlow knew better. And ever since, she’d been chasing the thread of something darker, something that lurked just out of sight. She stepped closer to the body. The victim was male, mid-thirties, dressed in a long coat that looked expensive but was now caked in dust. His hands were outstretched, fingers slightly curled, as if he’d been reaching for something. Or someone. “No signs of trauma,” Eva murmured, crouching beside the body. “No defensive wounds. No blood. No weapon.” “Exactly.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. “So why is he dead?” The forensic photographer snapped a few more shots, the flash illuminating the victim’s face for a split second. His eyes were wide, pupils dilated. Not fear. Not pain. Something else. Harlow pulled on a pair of latex gloves and knelt, examining the man’s hands. The fingers were clean, but the nails were rimmed with a fine, dark residue. She scraped a bit of it with her thumb and held it up to the light. It looked like soot. Or ash. “He was holding something,” Eva said, peering over Harlow’s shoulder. “Something that burned.” Harlow grunted. “Or something that burned *him*.” A uniformed officer approached, his expression grim. “Ma’am, we found this near the body.” He held out an evidence bag. Inside was a small, brass compass, its casing etched with intricate sigils and marred by a patina of verdigris. The needle wasn’t pointing north. It was spinning wildly, as if caught in a storm. Harlow’s stomach twisted. She’d seen enough strange things to know when something wasn’t right. And this compass? This was the kind of thing Eva would know about. Eva’s breath hitched. “That’s a Veil Compass.” “A what?” “It’s…” Eva hesitated, as if choosing her words carefully. “It’s a tool. For finding things that aren’t supposed to be found. Supernatural rifts. Portals. That kind of thing.” Harlow’s grip on the evidence bag tightened. “And where would someone get a thing like this?” Eva’s gaze flicked to the shadows at the edge of the platform, where the light from the forensic lamps petered out into nothingness. “The Veil Market.” Harlow knew the name. Rumors of it had floated around the darker corners of the force for years—a black market for the supernatural, hidden beneath the city, moving every full moon. But it was supposed to be a myth. A story to scare rookies. Yet here was the compass. And here was the body. “You’re telling me this man was involved in… what, exactly?” Harlow’s voice was low, controlled. Eva adjusted her glasses. “Occult dealings. Probably bought the compass there. Or stole it. Either way, he was looking for something. And whatever it was, it found him first.” Harlow stood, her sharp jaw set. The pieces weren’t adding up. No blood. No struggle. A compass that pointed to nothing and everything. And Eva’s quiet certainty that this was no ordinary death. She turned to the forensic team. “I want every inch of this place dusted. Every footprint, every fiber. And I want to know what that residue on his hands is. *Now.*” As the team sprang into action, Eva lingered, her green eyes scanning the shadows. “There’s something else,” she said slowly. “The Market doesn’t just *move*. It’s *hidden*. You can’t find it unless you know how. Or unless it wants to be found.” Harlow followed Eva’s gaze. The tunnel stretched into darkness, the old tracks disappearing into the black. And for the first time in her career, she felt the prickle of something she couldn’t explain. Not fear. Not doubt. But the cold, creeping certainty that she was standing at the edge of something vast and unseen. She pulled out her phone and dialed the station. “Get me everything we have on the Veil Market. And I mean *everything*.” Eva watched her, a flicker of something like approval in her eyes. “You’re starting to see it, aren’t you?” Harlow didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. The compass in the evidence bag was still spinning, its needle a blur of motion. And in the depths of the abandoned Tube station, where the light didn’t reach, something shifted. Just for a second. But it was enough. Harlow’s fingers tightened around her phone. Three years ago, she’d lost Morris to something she couldn’t explain. She wouldn’t let it happen again. Not to her. Not to anyone. She turned back to the body, her mind already piecing together the impossible. The lack of blood. The compass. The Market. And the fact that, whatever had happened here, it wasn’t over yet. Eva crouched beside the body again, her satchel thudding softly against the tile as she set it down. She pulled out a small, leather-bound notebook and a pen, scribbling something quickly. “The residue on his hands—it’s not just ash. It’s *shadow*.” Harlow raised an eyebrow. “Shadow?” Eva nodded. “There are stories. Old ones. About things that live in the spaces between. Things that can… reach out. If you know how to call them.” Harlow’s stomach twisted. “You’re saying this man was *summoning* something?” “I’m saying he was *trying* to.” Eva tapped her pen against her notebook. “But the Market doesn’t give its secrets away for free. And neither do the things it sells.” Harlow knelt beside Eva, examining the body again. The man’s coat was unbuttoned, and beneath it, tucked into an inner pocket, was a small, bone-white token. It looked like a coin, but the surface was etched with the same kind of sigils as the compass. Eva’s breath caught. “That’s a bone token. It’s how you get into the Market.” Harlow’s mind raced. The Market moved every full moon. And the full moon was in three days. She stood abruptly. “We need to find out where the Market is going to be next.” Eva shook her head. “It’s not that simple. The Market doesn’t *want* to be found. And the things inside it? They’re not… friendly.” Harlow’s jaw set. “Then we’ll make it unfriendly right back.” Eva looked up at her, a small, wry smile playing at her lips. “That’s why I like you, Quinn. You’re stubborn enough to think you can punch a ghost in the face.” Harlow didn’t smile. She was too busy staring into the darkness, where the compass’s needle still spun wildly. Somewhere in that black, there was an answer. And she was going to find it. She turned to the forensic team again. “I want that token bagged. And I want to know *exactly* what killed this man. If there’s even a hint of the supernatural, I want to know about it.” One of the techs, a young woman with a skeptical frown, cleared her throat. “Ma’am, with all due respect, we’re not equipped to test for… that.” Harlow fixed her with a look. “Then get someone who is.” The tech swallowed and nodded. As the team got back to work, Eva stood, brushing dust from her trousers. “You realize this is bigger than a single death, right? If the Market’s involved, this could be just the beginning.” Harlow knew. She could feel it in her gut, the same way she’d felt it the night Morris died. There was a thread here, a connection. And she was going to pull on it until the whole damn tapestry unraveled. She pulled out her notebook, flipping to a fresh page. “Tell me everything you know about the Veil Market. And I mean *everything*.” Eva hesitated, then nodded. She reached into her satchel and pulled out a thick, leather-bound book. The cover was worn, the pages yellowed with age. “I’ve been researching this for years. Most of it’s just stories. But some of it…” She trailed off, flipping through the pages until she found what she was looking for. “Some of it’s real.” Harlow took the book, her fingers tracing the intricate illustrations of sigils and strange, shadowy figures. It was heavy, the weight of knowledge pressing against her palms. She looked up at Eva. “And the compass?” Eva’s expression darkened. “It doesn’t just point to rifts. It *reacts* to them. If there’s a portal nearby, it’ll spin like that. And if there’s something *using* the portal…” She didn’t finish the sentence. She didn’t have to. Harlow’s grip on the book tightened. The compass was still spinning. Which meant the rift—or whatever was causing it—was still here. She turned back to the tunnel, her torch beam sweeping the darkness. The tracks disappeared into the black, the old brick walls slick with moisture. And then, just at the edge of the light, she saw it. A flicker. A shift. Like the air itself had rippled. Harlow’s breath caught. “Did you see that?” Eva was already moving, her satchel bouncing against her hip as she hurried toward the disturbance. “It’s a residual effect. The rift’s been used recently.” Harlow followed, her boots echoing against the tile. The air grew colder, the darkness deeper. And then, just as suddenly as it had appeared, the flicker was gone. But the compass was still spinning. Harlow stopped, her torch beam steady on the spot where the air had rippled. There was nothing there. No door. No tunnel. Just the solid wall of the Tube station. Eva crouched, running her fingers along the brick. “It’s here. Or it was. The Market moves, but the rifts… they linger for a while.” Harlow knelt beside her, pressing her palm against the wall. The brick was cold. Unnaturally so. “Can we track it?” Eva shook her head. “Not without the right tools. And even then, it’s dangerous. The things that come through these rifts… they’re not always what they seem.” Harlow stood, dusting off her trousers. She didn’t believe in ghosts. But she believed in evidence. And the evidence was telling her that something had come through that rift. Something that had killed the man on the platform. And if it was still here, it might not be done. She turned back to the body, her mind racing. The bone token. The compass. The residue on the man’s hands. It all pointed to one thing: the Veil Market. And if the Market was involved, then this wasn’t just a murder. It was a message. Harlow pulled out her phone again, dialing the station. “I need a team down here with UV lights, thermal imaging, the works. And get me a list of all reported missing persons in the last week. If this man was involved with the Market, he wasn’t working alone.” As she hung up, Eva watched her, a mixture of concern and admiration in her eyes. “You’re really going to do this, aren’t you? You’re going to chase this down, no matter where it leads.” Harlow met her gaze, unflinching. “Someone has to.” Eva nodded, then glanced back at the wall where the rift had been. “Just… be careful. The Market doesn’t play by our rules. And neither do the things inside it.” Harlow didn’t answer. She was too busy staring at the compass, its needle still spinning wildly. Somewhere in the darkness, something was waiting. And she was going to find it. No matter what it took.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"she said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.204
leniency0.407
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.074
82.26% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2255
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
6
adverb"suddenly"
count1
7
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"slowly"
4"softly"
5"quickly"
6"suddenly"
7"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2255
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"flicker"
count4
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"etched"
count2
7
word"intricate"
count2
8
word"stomach"
count2
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"depths"
count1
12
word"eyebrow"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"tapestry"
count1
16
word"tracing"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count1
18
word"racing"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"gloom"
2"familiar"
3"weight"
4"flicker"
5"pulse"
6"etched"
7"intricate"
8"stomach"
9"flicked"
10"scanning"
11"depths"
12"eyebrow"
13"raced"
14"could feel"
15"tapestry"
16"tracing"
17"echoing"
18"racing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences191
matches
0"t in fear"
1"felt the prickle"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences191
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences233
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans13
markdownWords13
totalWords2248
ratio0.006
matches
0"him"
1"Now."
2"move"
3"hidden"
4"everything"
5"shadow"
6"summoning"
7"trying"
8"want"
9"exactly"
10"everything"
11"reacts"
12"using"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions81
wordCount1637
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.14
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Tube3
Camden1
Harlow35
Quinn1
Kowalski1
Eva32
Morris3
Market4
Veil1
persons
0"Camden"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Kowalski"
4"Eva"
5"Morris"
6"Market"
places(empty)
globalScore0.431
windowScore0.333
62.28% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences114
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"something like awe"
1"as if choosing her words carefully"
2"something like approval in her eyes"
3"looked like a coin, but the surface was e"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.445
wordCount2248
matches
0"not in fear, but in something like awe"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences233
matches
0"through that rift"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs81
mean27.75
std17.88
cv0.644
sampleLengths
094
133
282
31
464
541
638
766
841
917
109
1130
1250
1313
147
1554
1627
177
182
1928
2016
2126
2244
2310
2415
2529
2633
2731
2842
2954
3022
3119
3242
334
3429
3521
3612
3741
385
3927
4010
4130
4245
4314
4417
4516
4623
4710
4832
4933
88.73% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences191
matches
0"been deserted"
1"was cordoned"
2"were outstretched"
3"were rimmed"
4"was supposed"
5"was unbuttoned"
6"was etched"
7"was gone"
8"was involved"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount13
totalVerbs276
matches
0"was holding"
1"wasn’t pointing"
2"was spinning"
3"weren’t adding"
4"was standing"
5"was still spinning"
6"was looking"
7"was still spinning"
8"was causing"
9"was already moving"
10"was still spinning"
11"was telling"
12"was waiting"
93.81% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences233
ratio0.017
matches
0"The beam of her torch cut through the gloom, illuminating the peeling posters on the walls—faded advertisements for long-forgotten plays and products."
1"She tucked a strand behind her left ear—her nervous habit—and shifted the worn leather satchel slung across her shoulder."
2"Rumors of it had floated around the darker corners of the force for years—a black market for the supernatural, hidden beneath the city, moving every full moon."
3"Which meant the rift—or whatever was causing it—was still here."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1648
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"small, leather-bound notebook"
1"small, bone-white token."
2"thick, leather-bound book."
adverbCount59
adverbRatio0.035800970873786406
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.009101941747572815
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences233
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences233
mean9.65
std6.9
cv0.715
sampleLengths
025
116
222
313
418
516
612
75
815
923
1019
116
124
1315
141
152
1627
1719
1816
1911
203
218
2219
233
2416
2519
265
275
287
2921
307
313
3218
336
3419
3514
362
3710
387
394
405
4118
426
432
442
452
4614
4714
4816
494
43.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2017167381974249
totalSentences233
uniqueOpeners47
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences170
matches
0"Just for a second."
1"Somewhere in that black, there"
2"Just the solid wall of"
3"Somewhere in the darkness, something"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences170
matches
0"She adjusted the worn leather"
1"It was the lack of"
2"She tucked a strand behind"
3"She wasn’t even a consultant"
4"She gestured vaguely at the"
5"She didn’t believe in ghosts."
6"She stepped closer to the"
7"His hands were outstretched, fingers"
8"His eyes were wide, pupils"
9"She scraped a bit of"
10"It looked like soot."
11"He held out an evidence"
12"It was spinning wildly, as"
13"She’d seen enough strange things"
14"She turned to the forensic"
15"she said slowly"
16"She pulled out her phone"
17"She didn’t have to."
18"She wouldn’t let it happen"
19"She turned back to the"
ratio0.229
92.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount125
totalSentences170
matches
0"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over"
2"The beam of her torch"
3"The place had been deserted"
4"Something that had brought the"
5"She adjusted the worn leather"
6"The scene was cordoned off,"
7"A body lay sprawled near"
8"It was the lack of"
9"The absence of struggle."
10"The way the victim’s face"
11"Eva Kowalski stood near the"
12"She tucked a strand behind"
13"The thing was probably heavier"
14"Harlow said, her voice sharp"
15"Eva wasn’t police."
16"She wasn’t even a consultant"
17"Eva shrugged, unfazed."
18"She gestured vaguely at the"
19"Harlow exhaled through her nose."
ratio0.735
29.41% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences170
matches
0"No matter what it took."
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Something that had brought the forensics team scrambling down into the underground like ants at a dropped crumb."
1"The scene was cordoned off, the usual hum of chatter and camera flashes subdued, as if the very atmosphere was holding its breath."
2"The victim was male, mid-thirties, dressed in a long coat that looked expensive but was now caked in dust."
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Harlow said, her voice sharp"
1"Eva hesitated, as if choosing her words carefully"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.074
leniency0.148
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.037
82.1014%