Run: 2026-10-07-01M4AVPEGH4QMGS4ND3HBQBGGA

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Duration:
5m 22s
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$0.033314
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Mistral

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from Rory's fingers. It did not shatter; Silas had laid down rubber mats years ago, back when the place was a ruin and he was still nursing his knee and his pride. She caught it, palm flat against the cool surface, and kept polishing. The rag moved in slow circles, buffing away the rings left by strangers' drinks. The bell above the door chimed. She did not look up. The Raven's Nest rarely saw customers between shifts, and she knew the footsteps of the regulars, the particular weight of Silas' limp, the light tread of Mrs. Higgins from the flat next door who borrowed sugar on Tuesdays. But these footsteps stopped. Lingered. "Rory." She looked up. Her bright blue eyes lifted from the mahogany. The woman in the doorway wore a coat that cost more than Rory's monthly rent. Black wool, sharp shoulders, cinched at the waist with a silver chain that caught the green neon light from the street. Her hair was the same honey-blonde it had been at university, but now it fell in a severe bob, tucked behind ears that sported diamond studs. She looked older. Not in the way of wrinkles, but in the set of her jaw, the calculation in her eyes. "Eva." Rory set down the glass. It made a soft ring against the wood. Her black hair, straight and shoulder-length, was pulled back in a practical bun that did nothing to hide the tension in her neck. Eva stepped inside. Her heels clicked on the floorboards, a staccato rhythm that did not match the blues playing from the jukebox in the corner. She surveyed the bar, the faded maps of the British Empire pinned to the walls, the black-and-white photographs of dead men in gilt frames, and her gaze settled on Rory with something like pity. "Jesus. You look..." Eva stopped. Shook her head. "Exactly the same." "You do not." The smile did not reach her eyes. "I do. I have just been busy." She slid onto the stool beside Rory, close enough that Rory could smell her perfume, something dark and resinous, like church incense and danger. Eva ordered a whisky from Silas, who was wiping down the taps with mechanical precision, his neatly trimmed beard grey-streaked auburn catching the dim light. He said nothing. She paid with a credit card, the platinum kind that reflected the green sign outside. "So," Eva said, swirling the amber liquid. "London." "Cardiff was too small." "For you, or for him?" The whisky glass froze halfway to her lips. "Excuse me?" "You heard me." Eva set the glass down. It clicked against the wood. "Evan. He still asks about you. Every time he calls, which is often. I tell him you are fine. Happy. Living your best life." She laughed, a dry sound like dead leaves. "I lie through my teeth, Rory. Every single time." Silas looked up then. His hazel eyes flicked between them, sharp as a hawk's. He said nothing, but his hand stopped wiping. His right hand, the one with the silver signet ring, rested on the bar. Rory felt the old panic rise, the one she thought she had left in Wales. "Eva, we do not have to talk about this here." "But we do." Eva leaned forward, her voice dropping to a whisper that carried across the empty bar. "Because I am here to tell you he is coming. To London. Next week. And he is not coming alone." The music from the jukebox seemed to skip. A crackle of static. Rory's mind raced. Pre-Law. Logic. Escape routes. "You should warn the police." "I did." Eva's smile was bitter. "They laughed. Said it was a domestic matter. Said I was hysterical." She reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a photograph. Slid it across the bar. Rory looked down. It was her. Standing outside the Golden Empress, delivering a bag of dumplings to some office workers. The corner of the print curled. A digital date stamp burned into the white border: yesterday, 14:32. "I am not the only one he is watching," Eva said. Silas moved. He stepped around the bar, his limp more pronounced in the dim light, and stood behind Rory. A wall. A shield. His hand hovered near his pocket, where Rory knew he kept the piece he never talked about. "Eva," Silas said. His voice was gravel and honey, the voice of a man who had given orders in Prague and watched them fail. "If he is coming for the girl, he comes through me." Eva looked at him. For the first time, her composure cracked. "You?" "Her landlord. Her employer. Her family, the only one she has left." Eva stood. Straightened her coat. Looked at Rory with an expression that held years of silence, of unspoken words, of a friendship that had died in a Cardiff bedsit three winters ago when Rory had packed her bags and run without saying goodbye. "You left," Eva said. It was not an accusation. It was a fact, heavy as a stone. "You left me with him. You left me to be the good girl, the one who stayed. The one who married him." Rory's throat closed. "Eva, I had no choice. You know what he was like. What he became." "I know." Eva's hands trembled. She gripped the edge of the bar. "I know because I watched you run, and I stayed. I thought if I was good enough, if I was perfect, he would love me instead of hurting me. I finished my degree. I got the job at the firm in Cardiff. I married him in a white dress six months after you disappeared." She laughed, broken. "I became the woman you were supposed to be. And it did not save me." Silas poured two more whiskies. Set them down without being asked. The ice clinked. "We were going to change the world," Rory said, her voice barely audible. Eva shook her head. "We were going to be happy. That was the plan, was it not? Aurora Carter and Eva Brennan. Unstoppable. And then you vanished. And I..." She stopped. Looked at her reflection in the mirror behind the bar. A stranger stared back. "I became his property. His ornament. And I let him convince me that you abandoned me. That you chose your freedom over our friendship." "I was terrified," Rory said. The words tasted of ash. "I am still terrified. Every time I see a man with his hands in his pockets, every time a car slows down on the street. I fled, Eva. I ran until my lungs burned. And I never stopped to look back." "That is the regret," Eva said. She turned to face Rory fully. "You regret leaving without me. I regret staying without you. We have spent three years punishing each other for a choice that only one of us could make." The weight of the years sat between them, palpable as the smoke from Silas' cigarette, which he had lit without realising. "I followed you here," Eva said. "Six months ago. I watched you work. I watched you live in that flat above the bar. I told myself I was waiting for the right moment. Waiting for him to come to London so I could warn you." She reached across the bar. Her fingers, manicured and perfect, brushed Rory's wrist, right over the crescent-shaped scar. "I have been waiting to see who you became. And you are still her. The girl who thinks. The girl who fights." Rory looked down at their hands. Eva's nails were painted a deep red, chipped at the edges. "And who did you become?" Eva's laugh was hollow. "A ghost. A wife. A liar." She withdrew her hand. "I need you to help me disappear again. Properly this time. No loose ends. No Cardiff. No Evan." "Silas can help," Rory said. "He has contacts. Ways out." "Silas has a bar," Eva said. "And a limp. And a past he does not discuss." She leaned closer. "But you, Rory. You have a brain. You have the law degree you never used. You have the anger. Use it. Help me burn it all down." The bell above the door chimed. This time, the scrape of boots on the pavement outside drowned out the sound. The bell's tinny note hung in the air, vibrating. A shadow fell across the green neon sign. The temperature in the bar seemed to drop ten degrees. Silas' hand went to his pocket. His hazel eyes locked onto the door. "Stay behind me," he told Rory. Eva stood. Smoothed her coat. Her face had gone pale, the makeup a mask of porcelain and defiance. The door swung wide. The cold London air rushed in, carrying the scent of rain and cigarettes and violence. Evan stood in the doorway. He was bigger than Rory remembered. Harder. His eyes found hers immediately, scanning past Eva, past Silas, locking onto her with a hunger that made her stomach clench. He smiled. It was not a friendly smile. "Hello, Aurora," he said. "I have been looking for you."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1526
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.02% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1526
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"footsteps"
count2
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"tension"
count1
3
word"mechanical"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"raced"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count2
11
word"palpable"
count1
12
word"porcelain"
count1
13
word"scanning"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"weight"
2"tension"
3"mechanical"
4"flicked"
5"whisper"
6"raced"
7"silence"
8"unspoken"
9"trembled"
10"perfect"
11"palpable"
12"porcelain"
13"scanning"
14"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences117
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences117
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1526
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount955
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity2.3
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
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Silas7
Raven1
Nest1
Higgins1
Tuesdays1
British1
Empire1
Shook1
Wales1
Slid1
Golden1
Empress1
Prague1
Cardiff1
Eva20
Looked2
London1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Higgins"
5"Empire"
6"Empress"
7"Eva"
8"Looked"
places
0"Wales"
1"Golden"
2"Prague"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
globalScore0.348
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like pity"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.655
wordCount1526
matches
0"Not in the way of wrinkles, but in the set of her jaw, the calculation in her eyes"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean27.25
std22.6
cv0.83
sampleLengths
061
16
243
35
41
511
683
71
836
959
1011
113
1214
1367
148
154
165
178
182
1954
2036
2125
2238
2312
2412
2537
2634
2711
2840
2935
3012
3112
3243
3339
3417
3584
3614
3713
3869
3951
4040
4121
4285
4322
4432
4510
4646
476
4841
4913
96.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences117
matches
0"was pulled"
1"being asked"
2"were painted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs170
matches
0"was still nursing"
1"was wiping"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences146
ratio0.007
matches
0"It did not shatter; Silas had laid down rubber mats years ago, back when the place was a ruin and he was still nursing his knee and his pride."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount509
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.03732809430255403
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.009823182711198428
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean10.45
std9.62
cv0.92
sampleLengths
06
129
212
314
46
55
627
711
84
91
101
113
128
1315
1421
1526
163
1718
181
195
208
2123
223
2322
2434
255
263
273
283
297
307
3124
3225
333
3415
357
361
374
385
398
402
418
425
4332
449
454
4610
478
4814
4915
48.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3150684931506849
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
55.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences95
matches
0"It did not shatter; Silas"
1"She caught it, palm flat"
2"She did not look up."
3"She looked up."
4"Her bright blue eyes lifted"
5"Her hair was the same"
6"She looked older."
7"It made a soft ring"
8"Her black hair, straight and"
9"Her heels clicked on the"
10"She surveyed the bar, the"
11"She slid onto the stool"
12"He said nothing."
13"She paid with a credit"
14"It clicked against the wood."
15"She laughed, a dry sound"
16"His hazel eyes flicked between"
17"He said nothing, but his"
18"His right hand, the one"
19"She reached into her coat"
ratio0.411
23.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences95
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory's"
1"It did not shatter; Silas"
2"She caught it, palm flat"
3"The rag moved in slow"
4"The bell above the door"
5"She did not look up."
6"The Raven's Nest rarely saw"
7"Higgins from the flat next"
8"She looked up."
9"Her bright blue eyes lifted"
10"The woman in the doorway"
11"Her hair was the same"
12"She looked older."
13"Rory set down the glass."
14"It made a soft ring"
15"Her black hair, straight and"
16"Eva stepped inside."
17"Her heels clicked on the"
18"She surveyed the bar, the"
19"The smile did not reach"
ratio0.874
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Black wool, sharp shoulders, cinched at the waist with a silver chain that caught the green neon light from the street."
1"Her hair was the same honey-blonde it had been at university, but now it fell in a severe bob, tucked behind ears that sported diamond studs."
2"Her black hair, straight and shoulder-length, was pulled back in a practical bun that did nothing to hide the tension in her neck."
3"Eva ordered a whisky from Silas, who was wiping down the taps with mechanical precision, his neatly trimmed beard grey-streaked auburn catching the dim light."
4"His voice was gravel and honey, the voice of a man who had given orders in Prague and watched them fail."
5"Looked at Rory with an expression that held years of silence, of unspoken words, of a friendship that had died in a Cardiff bedsit three winters ago when Rory h…"
6"His eyes found hers immediately, scanning past Eva, past Silas, locking onto her with a hunger that made her stomach clench."
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She laughed, broken"
1"Rory said, her voice barely audible"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.269
leniency0.538
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.077
78.9281%