Run: 2026-10-07-01M4AVQ1ZT2N7QRAWHMB6MWP8N

Run Details

Duration:
1m 48s
Cost:
$0.014512
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Heartstone Pendant had been burning for three days. Aurora felt it now, a coal pressed against her sternum, radiating heat through the silk of her shirt. She stood at the edge of the Richmond Park clearing where the ancient oaks formed a ring, their roots drinking from soil that shouldn't exist—this was the threshold Isolde had spoken of, the place where the Veil wore thin as spider silk. "Winter's turning," Isolde said. The seer stood at the center of the standing stones, her silver hair unbound, catching light that didn't come from the sun. She turned to Aurora, pale lavender eyes unblinking. "The barrier frays when the world sleeps. Tonight, it dreams." Nyx coalesced from the shadow of a yew tree, their form flickering between smoke and substance. Where their face should have been, violet light pulsed faintly, like a lantern behind frosted glass. "I feel it," they whispered, and the wind carried their voice from everywhere and nowhere. "Hunger. Not the kind that gnaws at bellies. The kind that gnaws at souls." Aurora adjusted the strap of her delivery bag—old habit, though she'd left the Golden Empress hours ago. Her fingers brushed the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, the moonsilver dagger cold as a corpse's kiss against her thigh. "Dymas," she said. "Gluttony. Belphegor's realm." Isolde smiled, and it was not a kind expression. "The mouth opens, little moth. Will you fly into the flame?" The Veil shimmered. Aurora saw it then—the distortion in the air, like heat rising from summer asphalt, but wrong, inverted, pulling inward instead of rising. The space between the oaks tore open, not with violence, but with the soft sound of a sigh. They stepped through. The heat hit first. Not the dry heat of a London summer, but a wet, enveloping warmth that clung to skin and filled lungs. Aurora gasped, her breath coming out in a cloud that didn't dissipate but hung in the air, luminescent. The amber sky pressed down on them, a dome of molten gold that seemed to pulse with its own slow heartbeat. "Gods," Aurora whispered. They stood on a terrace of white marble that stretched in every direction, broken only by structures that defied geometry—towers that leaned at impossible angles, bridges that arched between floating islands of cultivated garden, fountains that poured not water but liquid silver. Below them, vineyards cascaded down hillsides, the grapevines heavy with fruit that glowed from within, pulsing with soft bioluminescence. Orchards of stone fruit and citrus stood in neat rows, their branches groaning under the weight of harvests that never ended. But it was the smell that overwhelmed her. Roasting meats turning on spits the size of church organs. The yeasty perfume of bread baking in ovens carved from living rock. Ripe peaches and dark cherries, wine thick as syrup, spices that had no names in any human tongue. It made her mouth water, made her stomach clench with a hunger that felt borrowed, urgent, wrong. "The gardens of excess," Isolde murmured, and her footsteps made no sound on the marble. "Watch your step, Aurora Carter. Here, the earth itself is edible." Nyx drifted forward, their shadow-form stretching long and thin across the terrace, drinking in the amber light. "The shadows here are hungry too," they said, and Aurora felt a chill that had nothing to do with temperature. "They remember being Aldric. They remember the ritual that broke him. They want to pull me apart." Aurora moved deeper into the terrace, her boots clicking against the stone. The Heartstone Pendant burned hotter, its crimson glow visible even through her clothing, a second heart beating against her ribs. She touched the scar on her left wrist—the crescent moon mark from childhood—and wondered if it would protect her here, or if it was just a memory of pain. They passed beneath an archway of intertwined grapevines, the fruit brushing her hair, leaving trails of golden pollen that sparkled in the alien light. Through the arch, she saw it: a feast. A table that extended for miles, laden with every dish imaginable. Platters of meat carved from beasts with too many legs, breads that steamed with vapors of enchantment, cheeses that wept tears of honey. And the guests—dozens of them, hundreds perhaps—seated along the benches, eating with mechanical precision. Their faces were blurred, as if seen through water, and they made no sound except for the wet, rhythmic sounds of consumption. "Helbound chefs," Isolde said, her voice echoing strangely in the open air. "Contracted from your world. They cook forever, and they are never allowed to taste what they make. Do you see, little moth? The sin is not eating. The sin is wanting." Aurora felt Nyx press close, their shadow wrapping around her like a cloak, protective. "We shouldn't stay," Nyx whispered. "This place remembers being a prison. It wants to make us prisoners." But Aurora was drawn forward, by the pendant's pulse and by a curiosity that had always been her curse. She approached the nearest table, her reflection wavering in the surface of a silver platter. The food looked perfect—a roasted bird, glazed with a sauce that shimmered like oil on water, surrounded by fruits that glowed with inner fire. She reached for a grape. Her fingers passed through it. The fruit dissolved into motes of amber light, and Aurora jerked her hand back. The pendant flared, burning bright, and she felt a tug—not physical, but metaphysical, a hook in her soul trying to set itself in her hunger. She stumbled back, her breath ragged. "Not for the living," Isolde called from the archway. Her voice held a riddle's weight. "What is given must be taken. What is taken must be paid. The realm keeps its debts, Aurora. It always keeps its debts." Nyx solidified beside her, their form flickering between shadow and something almost solid. Violet eyes—faintly glowing, luminous in the gloom—fixed on the feasting hall. "I can hear them," they said softly. "The chefs. They're screaming without mouths. Do you hear, Rory? The silence of the damned is loud here." Aurora's hand went to the Fae blade. The moonsilver was warm now, no longer cold, as if the realm's heat had infected it. She thought of Evan, of the abuse that had driven her to London, to this flat above Silas' bar. She thought of the delivery routes through rain-slicked streets, of Yu-Fei Cheung's worried face when she was late. She thought of the normalcy she'd fought to build, the fragile life she'd carved out of Cardiff and London. This place was the antithesis of that. It was want without end, consumption without satisfaction, a hunger that could never be sated. "We need to leave," Aurora said, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. "Now." But as she turned, the amber sky darkened. Not to night—there was no night here—but to a deeper, richer gold, and the music began. Drums and flutes and voices singing in languages that predated human speech. The guests at the feast turned their blurred faces toward her, and she saw that they were smiling, all of them, with too many teeth. The Heartstone Pendant blazed, a star against her chest, and Aurora felt the Veil calling her back, felt the tear in reality that had brought them here begin to seal. Isolde stood at the edge of the terrace, her silver hair whipping in a wind that touched only her, no footprints marking her passage across the marble. "Run," the seer said, and for once, her riddle was simple. "The feast has noticed the guest who has not eaten. The realm is curious. The realm is always curious." Nyx stretched their shadow across the terrace, a bridge of darkness leading back toward the archway. "Through me," they whispered. "Step into the shadow. I can slip between. I can pull you through." Aurora looked back at the feast, at the endless hunger, at the beauty that was also a trap. She thought of the Fae blade at her hip, of the pendant's warmth, of the scar on her wrist that reminded her she had survived before. She ran. Nyx's shadow enveloped her, cold and absolute, and the amber light faded to grey, then to the green of Richmond Park, then to the familiar dark of the bar's alley where they had started. The Heartstone cooled against her skin, merely a stone again, merely a mystery. Behind them, or perhaps only in memory, the drums of Dymas played on, hungry and eternal.
created_at"2026-10-07T09:39:34.017Z" 10/7/2026, 9:39:34 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"they said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
96.51% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1434
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
9.34% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1434
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"silk"
count2
1
word"pulsed"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count2
3
word"warmth"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"marble"
count3
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"mechanical"
count1
11
word"rhythmic"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count1
13
word"wavering"
count1
14
word"perfect"
count1
15
word"gloom"
count1
16
word"silence"
count1
17
word"normalcy"
count1
18
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"pulsed"
2"shimmered"
3"warmth"
4"pulse"
5"marble"
6"weight"
7"stomach"
8"footsteps"
9"chill"
10"mechanical"
11"rhythmic"
12"echoing"
13"wavering"
14"perfect"
15"gloom"
16"silence"
17"normalcy"
18"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences81
matches
0"felt a chill"
1"felt a tug"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1420
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
87.40% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1198
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.25
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Pendant3
Richmond2
Park2
Isolde7
Veil3
Aurora15
Golden1
Empress1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
London3
Nyx7
Fae3
Evan1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Cardiff1
Dymas1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Isolde"
3"Veil"
4"Aurora"
5"Nyx"
6"Evan"
7"Yu-Fei"
8"Cheung"
9"Dymas"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Fae"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.874
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"gold that seemed to pulse with its own slow heartbeat"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.817
wordCount1420
matches
0"not with violence, but with the soft sound of a sigh"
1"Not the dry heat of a London summer, but a wet, enveloping warmth"
2"not water but liquid silver"
3"not physical, but metaphysical, a hook in her soul trying to set itself in her"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"saw that they"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean39.44
std22.38
cv0.567
sampleLengths
09
160
244
361
443
520
643
73
863
93
1082
1165
1226
1354
1461
1532
1670
1743
1831
1958
205
215
2245
2338
2449
2579
2622
2716
2861
2957
3030
3133
3244
332
3447
3516
96.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences81
matches
0"were blurred"
1"was drawn"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs190
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences94
ratio0.106
matches
0"She stood at the edge of the Richmond Park clearing where the ancient oaks formed a ring, their roots drinking from soil that shouldn't exist—this was the threshold Isolde had spoken of, the place where the Veil wore thin as spider silk."
1"Aurora adjusted the strap of her delivery bag—old habit, though she'd left the Golden Empress hours ago."
2"Aurora saw it then—the distortion in the air, like heat rising from summer asphalt, but wrong, inverted, pulling inward instead of rising."
3"They stood on a terrace of white marble that stretched in every direction, broken only by structures that defied geometry—towers that leaned at impossible angles, bridges that arched between floating islands of cultivated garden, fountains that poured not water but liquid silver."
4"She touched the scar on her left wrist—the crescent moon mark from childhood—and wondered if it would protect her here, or if it was just a memory of pain."
5"And the guests—dozens of them, hundreds perhaps—seated along the benches, eating with mechanical precision."
6"The food looked perfect—a roasted bird, glazed with a sauce that shimmered like oil on water, surrounded by fruits that glowed with inner fire."
7"The pendant flared, burning bright, and she felt a tug—not physical, but metaphysical, a hook in her soul trying to set itself in her hunger."
8"Violet eyes—faintly glowing, luminous in the gloom—fixed on the feasting hall."
9"Not to night—there was no night here—but to a deeper, richer gold, and the music began."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount917
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.022900763358778626
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0054525627044711015
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean15.11
std8.21
cv0.543
sampleLengths
09
118
242
34
422
58
610
716
816
915
1014
1117
1220
133
143
159
1611
173
1822
1918
203
214
2220
2318
2421
253
2642
2719
2821
298
3010
3112
3218
3317
3415
3511
3617
3720
3817
3912
4020
4129
4224
438
4411
4523
4614
4722
4812
4931
60.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.40425531914893614
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners38
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences75
matches
0"She stood at the edge"
1"She turned to Aurora, pale"
2"they whispered, and the wind"
3"Her fingers brushed the Fae-Forged"
4"They stepped through."
5"They stood on a terrace"
6"It made her mouth water,"
7"they said, and Aurora felt"
8"She touched the scar on"
9"They passed beneath an archway"
10"Their faces were blurred, as"
11"She approached the nearest table,"
12"She reached for a grape."
13"Her fingers passed through it."
14"She stumbled back, her breath"
15"Her voice held a riddle's"
16"they said softly"
17"She thought of Evan, of"
18"She thought of the delivery"
19"She thought of the normalcy"
ratio0.293
46.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences75
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant had been"
1"Aurora felt it now, a"
2"She stood at the edge"
3"The seer stood at the"
4"She turned to Aurora, pale"
5"Nyx coalesced from the shadow"
6"they whispered, and the wind"
7"Aurora adjusted the strap of"
8"Her fingers brushed the Fae-Forged"
9"Isolde smiled, and it was"
10"The Veil shimmered."
11"Aurora saw it then—the distortion"
12"The space between the oaks"
13"They stepped through."
14"The heat hit first."
15"Aurora gasped, her breath coming"
16"The amber sky pressed down"
17"They stood on a terrace"
18"Orchards of stone fruit and"
19"The yeasty perfume of bread"
ratio0.827
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
2.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She stood at the edge of the Richmond Park clearing where the ancient oaks formed a ring, their roots drinking from soil that shouldn't exist—this was the thres…"
1"The amber sky pressed down on them, a dome of molten gold that seemed to pulse with its own slow heartbeat."
2"They stood on a terrace of white marble that stretched in every direction, broken only by structures that defied geometry—towers that leaned at impossible angle…"
3"Below them, vineyards cascaded down hillsides, the grapevines heavy with fruit that glowed from within, pulsing with soft bioluminescence."
4"It made her mouth water, made her stomach clench with a hunger that felt borrowed, urgent, wrong."
5"They passed beneath an archway of intertwined grapevines, the fruit brushing her hair, leaving trails of golden pollen that sparkled in the alien light."
6"Platters of meat carved from beasts with too many legs, breads that steamed with vapors of enchantment, cheeses that wept tears of honey."
7"The pendant flared, burning bright, and she felt a tug—not physical, but metaphysical, a hook in her soul trying to set itself in her hunger."
8"The Heartstone Pendant blazed, a star against her chest, and Aurora felt the Veil calling her back, felt the tear in reality that had brought them here begin to…"
9"She thought of the Fae blade at her hip, of the pendant's warmth, of the scar on her wrist that reminded her she had survived before."
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"they whispered, and the wind carried their voice from everywhere and nowhere"
1"Isolde said, her voice echoing strangely in the open air"
2"Aurora said, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
2"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
4"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.385
effectiveRatio0.385
70.6057%