Run: 2026-10-07-01M4AVTRGS55M6F8JCNM9TC8YS

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Duration:
23.3s
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$0.022218
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Mistral

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain fell in sheets, turning the neon glow of Soho’s signs into smears of color against the slick pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn’s breath came in sharp, controlled bursts as she pushed through the downpour, her leather watch strapped tight to her wrist, the second hand ticking away the seconds between her and the suspect. The man—tall, wiry, moving like a shadow—had bolted from the alley behind The Raven’s Nest, where she’d been watching the back entrance for the better part of an hour. The Nest’s green neon sign flickered above her, its reflection dancing in the puddles at her feet. She’d been close. Too close. The suspect had spotted her, and now he was leading her on a chase through the labyrinth of London’s underbelly. Her boots splashed through a puddle, sending a spray of water up her trousers. She didn’t slow. Eighteen years on the force had honed her instincts, and every one of them screamed that this man was connected. Connected to the clique, to the whispers of supernatural dealings she’d been uncovering, to the death of her partner three years ago. Morris had been chasing something similar before he’d vanished. She could feel it in her gut—this was the thread that would unravel the whole damn tapestry. The suspect ducked around a corner, his dark coat flapping behind him like the wings of the ravens that gave the Nest its name. Harlow followed, her sharp jaw set, her salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her scalp. She rounded the corner just in time to see him disappear down a set of iron stairs, the kind that led to the old Tube stations that had been abandoned decades ago. A rusted sign, barely legible, read *Camden Town*—but this wasn’t the Camden Town station she knew. This was something else. The stairs spiraled downward into darkness, the kind of darkness that seemed to swallow sound. Harlow hesitated for half a second. The rain drummed against the metal railing, the only sound in the otherwise deserted alley. She adjusted the strap of her shoulder bag, ensuring her service weapon was within easy reach. Then she descended. The air grew thick with the scent of damp earth and something older, something metallic and faintly sweet, like copper and rotting flowers. The stairs ended in a narrow tunnel, its walls lined with bricks blackened by time and grime. A faint, flickering light pulsed in the distance, not the steady glow of electricity but the erratic dance of fire or lanterns. Harlow’s fingers brushed the wall as she moved forward, her footsteps silent despite the water still dripping from her clothes. The tunnel opened into a cavernous space, and Harlow’s breath caught. The Veil Market. She’d heard the rumors, of course—whispers in the dark corners of the Nest, muttered by informants who’d had one too many drinks. A black market for the supernatural, hidden beneath the city, moving with the phases of the moon. But seeing it was another thing entirely. The market sprawled before her, a twisted mirror of the city above. Stalls were carved from the bones of the old Tube station, their canopies patched together from mismatched fabrics and the occasional stretch of tattered leather. Lanterns hung from chains, casting long, wavering shadows over the crowd. The air hummed with the murmur of hushed voices, the clink of coins—or something like coins—and the occasional hiss of something that didn’t sound human. Harlow’s grip tightened on her weapon. She scanned the crowd, her brown eyes sharp. The suspect was here. She could feel it. But the market was a maze of bodies and stalls, and he could be anywhere. A hand clamped down on her shoulder. She spun, her weapon half-drawn, before she registered the face. Tomás Herrera. His olive skin was slick with rain, his dark curls plastered to his forehead. The Saint Christopher medallion around his neck glinted in the lantern light. He held up his hands, palms out, the scar on his left forearm stark against his skin. “Easy, Detective,” he said, his voice low, accented with the warm lilt of his Seville roots. “You’re not exactly welcome here.” Harlow didn’t lower her weapon. “Herrera. What the hell are you doing here?” Tomás glanced around, his warm brown eyes flicking over the crowd. “Same as you, I’d wager. Following a lead.” He leaned in slightly, his voice dropping to a whisper. “But this isn’t your world, Quinn. These people—they don’t play by your rules.” Harlow’s gaze didn’t waver. “And what rules do they play by?” Tomás exhaled sharply. “The kind that’ll get you killed if you’re not careful.” He nodded toward a stall where a woman with too many teeth was selling vials of something that shimmered like liquid starlight. “That’s *moonblood*. One drop, and you’ll see things that aren’t there. Or maybe they are. Hard to tell after a while.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. “I’m not here for a sightseeing tour. I’m here for the man who just ran down those stairs. Tall, dark coat, moves like he’s got a stick up his arse.” Tomás’s expression darkened. “Ah. Him.” He hesitated, then grabbed her wrist, pulling her deeper into the market, away from the main thoroughfare. “You don’t want to follow him, Detective. Not unless you’re ready to see what’s really down here.” “Try me,” Harlow said, her voice steel. Tomás led her past a stall where a man with eyes like polished obsidian was selling what looked like human teeth strung on a necklace. Past another where a woman with skin the color of blue-tinged marble was trading in something that writhed in a glass jar. Harlow’s stomach twisted, but she didn’t look away. She’d seen horrors on the force, but this—this was different. This was the kind of horror that made her question whether she’d ever really understood the world at all. They stopped at the edge of a cluster of stalls, where the lantern light barely reached. Tomás pointed to a narrow gap between two booths, where a figure in a dark coat was slipping into the shadows. “There,” Tomás said. “But Harlow—” He turned to her, his voice urgent. “That’s not just a man. And this isn’t just a market. The Veil isn’t just a place. It’s a *threshold*.” Harlow’s fingers twitched toward her weapon. “A threshold to what?” Tomás’s gaze was grave. “To the kind of things that made your partner disappear.” Harlow’s breath hitched. Morris. The case that had haunted her for three years. The case that had started with whispers of the supernatural and ended with a body that had never been found. She’d buried the file, but she’d never buried the questions. “You know something,” she said, her voice low. Tomás hesitated, then nodded. “I know that the clique you’ve been chasing—they’re not just criminals. They’re *hunters*. And they’re not hunting money or drugs or power. They’re hunting *things*. Things that don’t belong in this world.” Harlow’s mind raced. This was it. The break she’d been waiting for. But Tomás was right—this wasn’t her world. She was a detective, not a soldier. Not a hunter. But she was also a woman who had lost too much to the unknown to turn back now. The suspect—if he even was a suspect anymore—was slipping away. Harlow made her decision. “I’m going after him,” she said. Tomás grabbed her arm. “Harlow, think. You don’t have a token. You don’t have protection. If you cross into the deeper parts of the Veil without—” “I don’t need protection,” Harlow snapped, shaking him off. “I need answers.” Tomás’s grip tightened. “You’re going to get yourself killed.” Harlow met his gaze, unflinching. “Then it’ll be on me.” She turned away, stepping toward the gap where the figure had disappeared. The air here was colder, the shadows thicker. She could feel the weight of the market pressing in around her, the eyes of unseen things watching her every move. She took a deep breath and stepped forward. The moment she crossed the threshold, the world seemed to shift. The lantern light dimmed, replaced by a sickly, greenish glow that pulsed like a heartbeat. The stalls here were different—older, darker, the wares on display even more unsettling. A jar of eyes blinked at her. A cage held something that looked like a cross between a fox and a shadow. The air smelled of ozone and something acrid, like burning hair. Harlow’s pulse pounded in her ears. She could see the suspect ahead, his coat flapping as he moved deeper into the market’s depths. She followed, her hand now fully on her weapon. The crowd here was thinner, the faces more guarded. A few figures watched her with open hostility, their forms flickering at the edges, as if they weren’t entirely solid. She passed a stall where a man with too-long fingers was selling bones—human bones, if the shape of the skulls was anything to go by. The man’s smile was a slash of white in his gaunt face. “Looking for something, Detective?” he asked, his voice like dry leaves. Harlow ignored him, her eyes locked on the suspect. He was almost within reach now, just a few more steps— A hand shot out from the shadows, grabbing her wrist. Harlow reacted on instinct, twisting and driving her elbow into her attacker’s ribs. The man grunted, stumbling back, and Harlow got her first good look at him. He wasn’t human. His skin was the color of old parchment, stretched too tight over a frame that was too tall, too thin. His eyes were black pits, and his mouth was a lipless gash. He hissed at her, baring teeth that were too numerous, too sharp. Harlow’s training took over. She drew her weapon and fired. The shot echoed through the market like a gunshot in a cathedral. The creature shrieked, clutching its chest, but it didn’t go down. Instead, it lunged at her, its movements jerky, unnatural. Harlow fired again, and this time the creature staggered, its form flickering like a dying flame. Then it was gone, dissolving into the shadows as if it had never been there at all. Harlow’s breath came in ragged gasps. The suspect was gone. The market around her seemed to hold its breath, the other patrons watching her with a mix of fear and curiosity. She lowered her weapon slightly, her mind racing. This was real. All of it. The supernatural, the clique, the things that had taken Morris—it was all real. And she was in the middle of it. A voice cut through the tension, smooth and amused. “Well, well. If it isn’t Detective Harlow Quinn.” Harlow turned. The suspect stood a few paces away, his dark coat now draped over one arm, revealing a tailored suit beneath. His face was sharp, his smile knowing. And his eyes—his eyes were the color of polished silver, reflecting the greenish light like a cat’s. “You’ve been a thorn in my side for some time, Detective,” he said. “But I must admit, I didn’t expect you to follow me *here*.” Harlow raised her weapon again, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her. “Who the hell are you?” The man chuckled. “Names have power, Detective. And I don’t give mine away for free.” He gestured to the market around them. “Welcome to the Veil. I do hope you enjoy your stay.” Harlow’s finger tightened on the trigger. But before she could pull it, the man snapped his fingers. The world exploded in a burst of green light. Harlow staggered back, her vision swimming. When she blinked the spots from her eyes, the man was gone. The market was gone. She was standing in the middle of the abandoned Tube station, the rain from above dripping down through cracks in the ceiling. And Tomás was at her side, his face pale. “Harlow,” he said, his voice tight. “You shouldn’t have followed him.” Harlow holstered her weapon, her hands shaking slightly. “I had to.” Tomás exhaled sharply. “He’s not just a suspect. He’s one of *them*. And now he knows you’re onto him.” Harlow looked around at the empty station, the echoes of the market still ringing in her ears. She’d crossed a line tonight. And there was no going back. “Good,” she said, her voice steady. “Let him know.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He hesitated then [then]"
1"She turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.421
leniency0.842
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.105
83.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2067
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"sharply"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"sharply"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2067
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"dancing"
count1
2
word"could feel"
count3
3
word"unravel"
count1
4
word"tapestry"
count1
5
word"ensuring"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count2
7
word"dance"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"wavering"
count1
10
word"scanned"
count1
11
word"stark"
count1
12
word"lilt"
count1
13
word"whisper"
count1
14
word"shimmered"
count1
15
word"tinged"
count1
16
word"marble"
count1
17
word"stomach"
count1
18
word"grave"
count1
19
word"raced"
count1
20
word"weight"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count1
22
word"depths"
count1
23
word"echoed"
count1
24
word"racing"
count1
25
word"tension"
count1
26
word"echoes"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"dancing"
2"could feel"
3"unravel"
4"tapestry"
5"ensuring"
6"pulsed"
7"dance"
8"footsteps"
9"wavering"
10"scanned"
11"stark"
12"lilt"
13"whisper"
14"shimmered"
15"tinged"
16"marble"
17"stomach"
18"grave"
19"raced"
20"weight"
21"pulse"
22"depths"
23"echoed"
24"racing"
25"tension"
26"echoes"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences156
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences156
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans7
markdownWords8
totalWords2051
ratio0.004
matches
0"Camden Town"
1"moonblood"
2"threshold"
3"hunters"
4"things"
5"here"
6"them"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1718
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow30
Quinn1
Raven1
Nest4
London1
Tube3
Camden2
Town2
Veil1
Market1
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Seville1
Tomás14
Morris3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Tomás"
8"Morris"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Camden"
3"Town"
4"Seville"
globalScore0.627
windowScore0.5
61.50% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences113
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"darkness that seemed to swallow sound"
1"something like coins—and the occasional hiss"
2"looked like human teeth strung on a neckl"
3"looked like a cross between a fox and a s"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.488
wordCount2051
matches
0"not the steady glow of electricity but the erratic dance of fire"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences178
matches
0"screamed that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean35.36
std24.95
cv0.706
sampleLengths
0101
125
285
3104
440
582
660
773
837
97
1055
1121
1213
1342
1411
1556
1633
1739
187
1984
2037
2132
2210
2314
2443
258
2636
2747
2814
296
3026
3112
329
3351
348
3572
3661
3748
3820
3937
403
4144
4210
4365
4439
4527
4617
4746
4825
4919
87.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences156
matches
0"was connected"
1"been abandoned"
2"were carved"
3"been found"
4"was gone"
5"was gone"
6"was gone"
7"was gone"
14.17% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs287
matches
0"was leading"
1"was selling"
2"was selling"
3"was trading"
4"was slipping"
5"was slipping"
6"was selling"
7"was standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences178
ratio0.073
matches
0"The man—tall, wiry, moving like a shadow—had bolted from the alley behind The Raven’s Nest, where she’d been watching the back entrance for the better part of an hour."
1"She could feel it in her gut—this was the thread that would unravel the whole damn tapestry."
2"A rusted sign, barely legible, read *Camden Town*—but this wasn’t the Camden Town station she knew."
3"She’d heard the rumors, of course—whispers in the dark corners of the Nest, muttered by informants who’d had one too many drinks."
4"The air hummed with the murmur of hushed voices, the clink of coins—or something like coins—and the occasional hiss of something that didn’t sound human."
5"She’d seen horrors on the force, but this—this was different."
6"But Tomás was right—this wasn’t her world."
7"The suspect—if he even was a suspect anymore—was slipping away."
8"The stalls here were different—older, darker, the wares on display even more unsettling."
9"She passed a stall where a man with too-long fingers was selling bones—human bones, if the shape of the skulls was anything to go by."
10"He was almost within reach now, just a few more steps—"
11"The supernatural, the clique, the things that had taken Morris—it was all real."
12"And his eyes—his eyes were the color of polished silver, reflecting the greenish light like a cat’s."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1737
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tall, wiry, moving like"
adverbCount62
adverbRatio0.035693724812895795
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.008635578583765112
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean11.52
std7.34
cv0.637
sampleLengths
020
135
229
317
43
52
620
714
83
920
1022
119
1217
1324
1413
1532
1616
174
1815
196
2015
2116
223
2323
2417
2522
2620
2711
283
2922
3017
317
3212
3325
3411
3525
366
378
384
394
4015
417
4210
432
4414
4512
4617
4716
485
495
42.70% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.23595505617977527
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners42
67.11% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences149
matches
0"Then she descended."
1"Instead, it lunged at her,"
2"Then it was gone, dissolving"
ratio0.02
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences149
matches
0"She’d been close."
1"Her boots splashed through a"
2"She didn’t slow."
3"She could feel it in"
4"She rounded the corner just"
5"She adjusted the strap of"
6"She’d heard the rumors, of"
7"She scanned the crowd, her"
8"She could feel it."
9"She spun, her weapon half-drawn,"
10"His olive skin was slick"
11"He held up his hands,"
12"he said, his voice low,"
13"He leaned in slightly, his"
14"He nodded toward a stall"
15"He hesitated, then grabbed her"
16"She’d seen horrors on the"
17"They stopped at the edge"
18"He turned to her, his"
19"She’d buried the file, but"
ratio0.282
23.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount130
totalSentences149
matches
0"The rain fell in sheets,"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn’s breath came"
2"The man—tall, wiry, moving like"
3"The Nest’s green neon sign"
4"She’d been close."
5"The suspect had spotted her,"
6"Her boots splashed through a"
7"She didn’t slow."
8"Morris had been chasing something"
9"She could feel it in"
10"The suspect ducked around a"
11"Harlow followed, her sharp jaw"
12"She rounded the corner just"
13"A rusted sign, barely legible,"
14"This was something else."
15"The stairs spiraled downward into"
16"Harlow hesitated for half a"
17"The rain drummed against the"
18"She adjusted the strap of"
19"The air grew thick with"
ratio0.872
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences149
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The suspect ducked around a corner, his dark coat flapping behind him like the wings of the ravens that gave the Nest its name."
1"The air hummed with the murmur of hushed voices, the clink of coins—or something like coins—and the occasional hiss of something that didn’t sound human."
2"A few figures watched her with open hostility, their forms flickering at the edges, as if they weren’t entirely solid."
3"His skin was the color of old parchment, stretched too tight over a frame that was too tall, too thin."
4"The supernatural, the clique, the things that had taken Morris—it was all real."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"He leaned, his voice dropping to a whisper"
1"He turned, his voice urgent"
2"she said, her voice low"
3"he said, his voice tight"
4"she said, her voice steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Harlow snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.263
leniency0.526
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.053
74.6560%