Run: 2026-10-08-01M4D9W8MGXHSXA4N59N00RTRK

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 5.5 (Adaptive)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 16.7s
Cost:: $0.001422
Provider:: Claude Platform on AWS

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
0.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
84.71%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
79.61%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
78.32%	Name drop frequency	(details)
25.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
98.06%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
80.64%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
92.54%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
82.59%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
89.39%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
41.63%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
15.31%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
78.9265%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The gate in the iron railings had been left open, which Rory thought was the first wrong thing about the night. Richmond Park at two in the morning should have been locked, the deer bedded down in the bracken, the only sound the occasional car sighing along the far road. Instead the grass lay silver under a half moon, and the path ahead curved away between the bracken into dark that seemed deeper than trees could make it.

"Don't look back at the gate," Isolde said. She walked a pace ahead, silver hair loose down her back, and she made no sound at all. Rory had watched her cross a patch of frost ten minutes earlier and seen only the ground unmarked behind her, the frost undisturbed. "Looking back is how people end up walking home for a week."

"That's not reassuring," Rory said.

"It was not meant to be."

Beside Rory, the shadow at her left shoulder shifted and thinned, then folded itself into a tall, narrow shape that was somehow more solid than the dark around it. Nyx's voice came from nowhere in particular, soft as wind moving through dry leaves. "She is trying to frighten you, Aurora. It is one of her few pleasures."

"Rory," she said automatically. "And I'm not frightened."

"Your heartbeat says otherwise."

She ignored that and kept her hand near the hilt at her hip. The Fae blade sat in its sheath, and even through the leather it was cold, a clean cold that had nothing to do with the January air. Isolde had given it to her with the warning that it would cut through any ward laid by human or demon, and the look that came with it had suggested Rory might one day need that more than she wanted to.

The pendant at her throat stirred. She felt it before she saw anything: a faint warmth against her breastbone, the Heartstone pulsing once, like a held breath released. She pressed her fingers over it through her coat. Nothing in Dymas should be near enough to a Hel portal to make the stone react, and she had no idea whether that was a comfort or a warning.

The path opened. Standing stones rose on either side in a ring of grey and moss-furred oak, the trunks so old they had become more stone than wood, bark split into deep grooves. Rory counted them without meaning to. Eleven. Twelve. The last stood a little apart, and she realised she had walked between two of them without noticing the moment of crossing.

The air changed. It was warmer, and it smelled of crushed thyme and honey and something sharper underneath, like rain on hot iron.

Then she saw the flowers.

They grew everywhere, through the grass and up the flanks of the stones, between the roots of the oaks: foxgloves, primroses, wild violets, white clover in lazy drifts, and a dozen blooms she had no name for, petals luminous as if lit from within. It was the middle of winter. Her breath still clouded in front of her. Yet the meadow beyond the stones was in full summer, humming with bees that glowed faintly gold where they crossed the moonlight.

"Oh," Rory breathed, and hated how small the word sounded.

"Yes," said Isolde, and for once she sounded almost gentle. "Everyone says that."

Rory pulled out her phone to check the time. The screen was dark, then flickered to life and showed a number she didn't recognise, a clock running backward in slow, patient digits. She turned it off. When she looked up, the moon had moved a hand's width across the sky, though she had only blinked.

"Time is a courtesy here," Nyx murmured. "It is not obliged to keep pace with the world you left."

They walked on through the meadow. The grass brushed her knees and was warm, as if the earth beneath it had been sun-soaked all day. Water sounded ahead: a narrow stream ran over smooth black stones, and where it pooled, the surface reflected not the sky but a vast branching canopy of roots and lanterns hanging in dark space. Rory crouched at the edge and saw her own face there, pale and too still, and behind it, very briefly, a pale lavender eye that was not hers.

She stood quickly.

On the far bank, half hidden in ferns, a circle of stones had been set into the earth, carved with spirals that seemed to move when she didn't look directly at them. Something had been burned into the central slab, a shape like a hand with too many fingers, blackened and fresh. Rory's stomach tightened. She thought of the rift points the Wardens watched in their dull grey reports, the tears in the Veil that no one was supposed to walk through.

"Someone has been here recently," she said.

"Someone has been here for a very long time," Isolde corrected. "The recently is merely the part you are able to see."

Nyx drifted closer to the carving. Their violet eyes brightened, and the shadow pooled under them grew darker and longer. "Dymasian work," they said quietly. "Gluttony's brand. Someone from the vineyards has been paying a debt here."

The pendant burned against her skin. Rory's hand went to her throat, and she felt, distinctly, the pulse answer something beyond the stream, deeper into the glowing dark, where the flowers thinned and the air carried the faint sweet rot of over-ripened fruit.

Isolde had stopped at the water's edge. She did not turn around. "You wanted to know why you were brought here, Aurora Carter," she said. "The answer is ahead of you, and it is hungry, and it has been waiting for the one who wears that stone."

Rory looked at the path, then at the blade cold against her hip, and took the first step anyway.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

0.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"she said automatically [automatically]"
1	"they said quietly [quietly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.5

leniency

rawRatio

0.2

effectiveRatio

0.2

84.71%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

981

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	2

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"quickly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

79.61%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

981

totalAiIsms

found

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

highlights

0	"warmth"
1	"flickered"
2	"stomach"
3	"pulse"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	57
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	67
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	44
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	981
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	12
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

78.32%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

837

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.43

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	12
Park	1
Fae	1
January	1
Heartstone	1
Dymas	1
Hel	1
Isolde	5
Wardens	1
Veil	1
Nyx	3

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Heartstone"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Wardens"
4	"Nyx"

places

0	"Park"
1	"Hel"
2	"Veil"

globalScore

0.783

windowScore

25.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"seemed deeper than trees could make it"
1	"spirals that seemed to move when she didn't look directly at them"

98.06%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.019

wordCount

981

matches

0	"not the sky but a vast branching canopy of roots"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"warning that it"

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

37.73

std

29.29

0.776

sampleLengths

0	78
1	61
2	5
3	6
4	57
5	8
6	4
7	81
8	66
9	63
10	23
11	5
12	80
13	10
14	13
15	55
16	19
17	87
18	3
19	82
20	7
21	22
22	37
23	43
24	47
25	19

80.64%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been left"
1	"been locked"
2	"been burned"
3	"was supposed"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	139
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	67
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

92.54%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

840

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"sun-soaked all day."

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.041666666666666664

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.011904761904761904

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	67
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.64

std

10.65

0.727

sampleLengths

0	21
1	29
2	28
3	8
4	18
5	23
6	12
7	5
8	6
9	29
10	14
11	14
12	4
13	4
14	4
15	13
16	27
17	41
18	6
19	22
20	9
21	29
22	3
23	30
24	6
25	1
26	1
27	22
28	3
29	20
30	5
31	44
32	6
33	8
34	22
35	10
36	10
37	3
38	9
39	23
40	4
41	19
42	7
43	12
44	6
45	19
46	34
47	28
48	3
49	32

82.59%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	3
diversityRatio	0.5223880597014925
totalSentences	67
uniqueOpeners	35

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead the grass lay silver"
1	"Then she saw the flowers."

ratio

0.041

89.39%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She walked a pace ahead,"
1	"she said automatically"
2	"She ignored that and kept"
3	"She felt it before she"
4	"She pressed her fingers over"
5	"It was warmer, and it"
6	"They grew everywhere, through the"
7	"It was the middle of"
8	"Her breath still clouded in"
9	"She turned it off."
10	"They walked on through the"
11	"She stood quickly."
12	"She thought of the rift"
13	"Their violet eyes brightened, and"
14	"they said quietly"
15	"She did not turn around."

ratio

0.327

41.63%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The gate in the iron"
1	"Richmond Park at two in"
2	"She walked a pace ahead,"
3	"Rory had watched her cross"
4	"Nyx's voice came from nowhere"
5	"she said automatically"
6	"She ignored that and kept"
7	"The Fae blade sat in"
8	"Isolde had given it to"
9	"The pendant at her throat"
10	"She felt it before she"
11	"She pressed her fingers over"
12	"Nothing in Dymas should be"
13	"The path opened."
14	"Rory counted them without meaning"
15	"The last stood a little"
16	"The air changed."
17	"It was warmer, and it"
18	"They grew everywhere, through the"
19	"It was the middle of"

ratio

0.837

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	49
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

15.31%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Beside Rory, the shadow at her left shoulder shifted and thinned, then folded itself into a tall, narrow shape that was somehow more solid than the dark around …"
1	"They grew everywhere, through the grass and up the flanks of the stones, between the roots of the oaks: foxgloves, primroses, wild violets, white clover in lazy…"
2	"Yet the meadow beyond the stones was in full summer, humming with bees that glowed faintly gold where they crossed the moonlight."
3	"The grass brushed her knees and was warm, as if the earth beneath it had been sun-soaked all day."
4	"Rory crouched at the edge and saw her own face there, pale and too still, and behind it, very briefly, a pale lavender eye that was not hers."

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	10
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Rory breathed (breathe)"
1	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2	"Isolde corrected (correct)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.5

leniency

rawRatio

0.3

effectiveRatio

0.3

78.9265%