Run: 2026-10-08-01M4D9YY9SAHGBK828JZWMFGC5

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 5.5 (Adaptive)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 15.4s
Cost:: $0.001371
Provider:: Claude Platform on AWS

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
33.33%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
90.09%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
70.27%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
75.89%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
73.08%	Name drop frequency	(details)
100.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
1.78%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
88.85%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
75.32%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
79.65%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
47.72%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
56.28%	Technical jargon density	(details)
79.55%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
82.3937%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The standing stones rose out of the bracken like the ribs of something very old and very patient. Rory counted them without meaning to: seven, then eight, then seven again when she looked back. Each was rough-barked oak that had been split and set upright, though no hand she could imagine had done the work. Moss grew on the north faces. Lichen spread in pale rings over the tops.

It was February. Frost still silvered the grass on the path behind them, and the bare oaks of Richmond Park stood black against a sky the colour of dishwater. Yet beyond the stones the ground was green.

"Don't stop," Isolde said, without turning around. "Stopping is how people end up as furniture."

Her silver hair moved down her back like poured water. She walked a pace ahead, barefoot on the damp earth, and Rory watched for the moment her heel would sink into the mud. It never came. The ground took no print from her. Rory glanced down at her own boots, which had left dark crescents at every step, and then at the grass ahead, which sprang back straight behind Isolde as if nobody had walked there at all.

"That's not going to get less disturbing," Nyx murmured at her shoulder.

The voice came from nowhere in particular. It drifted like a breath across the back of her neck, and when Rory turned, the shadow beside her was already the wrong shape. Nyx had been a silhouette of tall, careful thinness in the car park, six foot two of solid dark, but here the outline had softened and frayed at the edges. Where the low sun should have cast its light, the shade thinned to smoke and gathered again. Their eyes, faintly violet, were the only fixed points in them.

"You could try walking like a person," Rory said.

"I am walking like a person. You're simply not used to the way I do it."

Beyond the stones, the air changed. It was not warmer exactly, but it was softer, and it smelled of crushed thyme and rain on hot stone. Rory breathed it in and felt her shoulders loosen before she could stop them. Then she noticed the flowers.

They grew in drifts across the clearing: primroses, violets, a blue she had no name for, and a white bloom with petals like folded paper that opened as she watched. Bees hummed among them, fat and unhurried. There was birdsong, too, a complicated run of notes that rose and fell in a pattern her ear almost caught and then lost.

"It's February," she said quietly.

"Here, it is always whatever season is kindest," Isolde said. "Mind the roots. They remember feet."

Rory's left wrist ached where the crescent scar sat pale against her skin, an old reminder from a childhood fall she barely recalled. She rubbed it absently and felt the chain at her throat shift. The Heartstone pendant lay against her breastbone, and for the first time since it had come into her hands it was warm. Not the warmth of skin, but a deeper heat, like a coal banked under ash. It pulsed once, slow and steady.

She stopped. "The pendant's doing something."

Isolde looked back over her shoulder, and her pale lavender eyes seemed to take in the stone, the chain, and the particular set of Rory's jaw all at once. "It is remembering where it was made."

"Which is where?"

"A place that eats its own tongue for pleasure." Isolde smiled faintly. "You may ask me again when we are farther from the door."

"Which door?"

"The one behind you, child. Do not look at it too long. It has a habit of looking back."

Rory did not look. She kept her eyes on the path, and the path wound between trees that had no business being this tall. Their trunks were pale and smooth as bone, and their branches arched overhead to form a roof of gold-green leaves that filtered the light into slow-moving coins. The coins fell on her hands, on the flowers, on the still, dark water of a pool they passed. The pool did not ripple when a leaf touched it. It held the reflection of the trees a little too long, then let it go.

Nyx drifted ahead and paused at the water's edge. Rory saw the shadow lean over the pool, and for an instant there was a second shape beneath the surface, a figure with its arms raised and its face turned upward, mouth open as if mid-word. Then Nyx straightened and the reflection was only sky.

"Did you see that?" Rory asked.

"I see everything in water," Nyx said. "That is rather the trouble with me."

They reached a second ring of stones, lower and older than the first, half sunk into the earth. Between two of them a blade of moonsilver hung in the air above a cushion of moss, though no hand held it. Rory's breath caught. She had carried a blade like it for months now, a slender leaf-shaped dagger, and she could feel its cold against her hip even through her coat. It was always cold. Here, it seemed to hum with the same quiet steadiness as the pendant.

"Your knife knows its kin," Isolde said. "Do not reach for that one. It belongs to someone who has not yet been born."

"That's not a comforting sentence."

"Few true things are."

Rory let her hand fall. Above them the birdsong stopped all at once, and in the silence she heard something else: a low, distant tolling, like a bell struck underwater. It came again, and the flowers at her feet turned their faces toward it in unison.

Her watch read a little after five. She glanced at it and frowned. The second hand was moving, but the minute hand had jumped back a full quarter turn while she was not looking.

"Time," she said.

"Time is a courtesy here," Isolde replied, and walked on into the gold light, leaving no mark behind her.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

33.33%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"she said quietly [quietly]"
1	"Isolde smiled faintly [faintly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.458

leniency

0.917

rawRatio

0.182

effectiveRatio

0.167

90.09%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1009

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	2

highlights

"very"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

70.27%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1009

totalAiIsms

found

word	"reminder"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"could feel"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

highlights

0	"reminder"
1	"warmth"
2	"pulsed"
3	"could feel"
4	"comforting"
5	"silence"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"hung in the air"
count	1

highlights

0	"hung in the air"

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	64
matches	(empty)

75.89%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

"watch"

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	77
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	37
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1009
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	9
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

73.08%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

845

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.54

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

February	1
Richmond	1
Park	1
Rory	13
Isolde	7
Heartstone	1
Nyx	5

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Nyx"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"

globalScore

0.731

windowScore

0.833

100.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences	46
glossingSentenceCount	0
matches	(empty)

1.78%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.982

wordCount

1009

matches

0	"not warmer exactly, but it was softer"
1	"Not the warmth of skin, but a deeper heat, like a coal banked under ash"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	77
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

32.55

std

29.09

0.894

sampleLengths

0	69
1	37
2	15
3	78
4	12
5	89
6	9
7	16
8	45
9	60
10	5
11	16
12	78
13	6
14	36
15	3
16	24
17	2
18	19
19	95
20	54
21	6
22	14
23	87
24	23
25	5
26	4
27	46
28	34
29	3
30	19

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	64
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

135

matches

0	"was not looking"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	77
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

88.85%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

850

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"slender leaf-shaped dagger,"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.04588235294117647

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.009411764705882352

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	77
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

13.1

std

8.59

0.655

sampleLengths

0	18
1	16
2	21
3	6
4	8
5	3
6	26
7	8
8	7
9	8
10	10
11	23
12	3
13	7
14	35
15	12
16	7
17	24
18	30
19	17
20	11
21	9
22	16
23	6
24	20
25	14
26	5
27	30
28	7
29	23
30	5
31	10
32	6
33	23
34	12
35	22
36	15
37	6
38	2
39	4
40	29
41	7
42	3
43	12
44	12
45	2
46	19
47	4
48	20
49	27

75.32%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.4675324675324675
totalSentences	77
uniqueOpeners	36

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then she noticed the flowers."
1	"Then Nyx straightened and the"

ratio

0.035

79.65%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It was February."
1	"Her silver hair moved down"
2	"She walked a pace ahead,"
3	"It never came."
4	"It drifted like a breath"
5	"Their eyes, faintly violet, were"
6	"It was not warmer exactly,"
7	"They grew in drifts across"
8	"she said quietly"
9	"She rubbed it absently and"
10	"It pulsed once, slow and"
11	"She kept her eyes on"
12	"Their trunks were pale and"
13	"It held the reflection of"
14	"They reached a second ring"
15	"She had carried a blade"
16	"It was always cold."
17	"It came again, and the"
18	"Her watch read a little"
19	"She glanced at it and"

ratio

0.351

47.72%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones rose out"
1	"Rory counted them without meaning"
2	"Each was rough-barked oak that"
3	"Moss grew on the north"
4	"Lichen spread in pale rings"
5	"It was February."
6	"Isolde said, without turning around"
7	"Her silver hair moved down"
8	"She walked a pace ahead,"
9	"It never came."
10	"The ground took no print"
11	"Rory glanced down at her"
12	"Nyx murmured at her shoulder"
13	"The voice came from nowhere"
14	"It drifted like a breath"
15	"Nyx had been a silhouette"
16	"Their eyes, faintly violet, were"
17	"It was not warmer exactly,"
18	"Rory breathed it in and"
19	"They grew in drifts across"

ratio

0.825

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	57
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

56.28%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Each was rough-barked oak that had been split and set upright, though no hand she could imagine had done the work."
1	"Rory glanced down at her own boots, which had left dark crescents at every step, and then at the grass ahead, which sprang back straight behind Isolde as if nob…"
2	"Their trunks were pale and smooth as bone, and their branches arched overhead to form a roof of gold-green leaves that filtered the light into slow-moving coins…"
3	"Rory saw the shadow lean over the pool, and for an instant there was a second shape beneath the surface, a figure with its arms raised and its face turned upwar…"

79.55%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde said, without turning around"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.417

leniency

0.833

rawRatio

0.1

effectiveRatio

0.083

82.3937%