Run: 2026-10-08-01M4DA06YRA4M2RT3EEVM0KSNY

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 5.5 (Adaptive)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 16.1s
Cost:: $0.001490
Provider:: Claude Platform on AWS

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
12.50%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
76.42%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
76.42%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
78.89%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
74.51%	Name drop frequency	(details)
45.83%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
94.79%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
92.50%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
78.46%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
38.95%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
58.82%	Technical jargon density	(details)
93.75%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
56.25%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
82.6025%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The frost had not yet burned off Richmond Park when they reached the oaks. Aurora could still hear the distant hum of traffic along the Sheen Gate Road, the thin metallic ticks of the cold cooling in the bare branches, and her own breath going out in pale clouds. Then Isolde stepped between two standing stones, and the sounds fell away as if someone had shut a door.

Aurora followed without thinking, then stopped and turned back. The gap between the stones showed only more trees, a grey December morning, and a fallen log furred with moss. When she looked forward again, the morning was gone.

"Don't look back too long," Isolde said. She had not turned around. Her silver hair moved down her back like water poured slowly from a jug, and the pale lavender of her eyes caught a light that did not come from any sky Aurora could see. "The path remembers those who doubt it."

"That's not exactly reassuring," Aurora said.

"It was not meant to reassure. It was meant to be true."

Beside her, Nyx made a sound that might have been a laugh. The Shade's silhouette thinned at the edges, as it often did in daylight, and then gathered itself again into the tall, shifting outline of a person made of dusk. Their violet eyes drifted across the clearing. "She has been practising that one," Nyx murmured, and the voice was like wind moving through dry leaves. "Her riddles get better every century."

"Three hundred years of practice," Isolde said serenely. "I have had time."

Aurora kept her hand near the hilt at her hip. The Fae-forged blade lay cold against her palm even through her coat, a cold that did not fade with her warmth. Under her shirt the Heartstone pendant rested against her sternum, and she felt it stir. It was not the sharp heat it gave near a Hel portal. This was softer, a slow warmth, like a hand laid on her chest.

She frowned and touched it through the fabric. "It's doing something."

"It is listening," said Isolde.

"To what?"

"To the grove. Everything here listens. That is why it is so difficult to keep secrets."

The ground underfoot changed as they walked. The hard, damp earth of the park gave way to a carpet of grass so fine and green it looked painted, and the grass was threaded with flowers. Violets, white anemones, a blue so intense it hurt to look at directly. Foxglove stood in tall pink spires beside the roots of trees whose leaves were still full and gold, as though it were October in some other country and summer in another. Bees moved among the blossoms, slow and fat. Aurora heard them, a deep drone that filled the clearing like the sound of a river heard through a wall.

"Wildflowers all year," Nyx said. "The grove does not know the calendar. It has never needed one."

Aurora crouched and touched a violet. Its petals were cool and slightly damp, like a morning leaf. Where her fingers brushed the stem, a tiny crescent of pale light bloomed along the skin of her left wrist, over the old scar from the accident when she was seven. She stared at it, then pulled her sleeve down quickly, heart knocking.

Nyx drifted closer. "Do you feel it too?"

"It's like it recognised me," she said slowly.

"Perhaps it did." Isolde's voice came from ahead, distant and unbothered. "Or perhaps you touched something that was already touching you."

Aurora stood, brushing soil from her knees, and followed the seer deeper. The oaks grew closer together, their trunks thick and grooved, and between them stood more stones, taller than the first, black and seamed with silver lichen. Some leaned together like old men in conversation. Others had split down the middle, the halves held apart by roots as thick as Aurora's arm. Carved into the face of the nearest was a spiral that seemed to shift when she looked away, though she could never catch it moving.

"Who built these?" she asked.

"No one built them," Isolde said. "They were grown. Much as the old things grow."

"That's not an answer."

"No," Isolde agreed, "but it is what I have."

Nyx stopped at the base of a stone and laid a hand, or a shape that served as a hand, against its surface. The shadows around their fingers stretched and deepened, pooling into the cracks of the bark-like rock. "There is a hollow beneath this one," they said. "A current. It moves toward the centre." They turned their head, and the violet light in their eyes flickered. "It is very old, Aurora. Older than the Veil, I think. Older than the borders anyone has drawn."

Aurora looked at the stone, then at the shadow-pooled crevice. The air there was colder, and when she breathed in, she tasted something sharp, like iron and rain. Her pendant pulsed once, brighter, and the warmth spread across her chest in a slow tide.

"Is that Hel?" she asked quietly.

Isolde's head tilted. Her answer, when it came, was delicate as a thread. "Hel is a house with many doors. Some of them are kitchens."

Nyx gave the same soft laugh. "She means no," they said. "Not yet."

"That's not a no," Aurora muttered.

"It is never a no," said Isolde, and walked on.

They reached the centre of the grove as the light changed. It did not dim or brighten. It simply shifted, the way a page turns, and the trees opened to reveal a clearing ringed by a dozen stones, each one humming faintly with a note Aurora felt in her teeth rather than heard. In the middle lay a pool so still it might have been glass, reflecting a sky that was not quite the sky above, a sky the colour of wine held up to a window.

Aurora stepped to the edge and looked down. Her reflection looked back, pale and steady, but for a heartbeat, the water showed a second figure standing behind her, tall and crowned in silver, and then it was only her again.

She didn't speak. Neither did the others. Somewhere behind the oaks, something that might have been a bird began to sing, and the song seemed to go on far longer than any bird's breath should allow.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

12.50%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde said serenely [serenely]"
1	"she said slowly [slowly]"
2	"she asked quietly [quietly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.5

leniency

rawRatio

0.188

effectiveRatio

0.188

76.42%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1060

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"slowly"
count	2

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	1

highlights

0	"slowly"
1	"slightly"
2	"quickly"
3	"very"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

76.42%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1060

totalAiIsms

found

word	"warmth"
count	3

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

highlights

0	"warmth"
1	"flickered"
2	"pulsed"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	67
matches	(empty)

78.89%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	82
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	36
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1060
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	19
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

74.51%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

861

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.51

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
Sheen	1
Gate	1
Road	1
Isolde	9
December	1
Aurora	13
Nyx	6
Shade	1
Fae-forged	1
Heartstone	1
Hel	1
October	1

persons

0	"Isolde"
1	"Aurora"
2	"Nyx"
3	"Shade"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"Sheen"
3	"Gate"
4	"Road"
5	"Hel"

globalScore

0.745

windowScore

0.833

45.83%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"spiral that seemed to shift when she looked away, though she could never catch it moving"
1	"not quite the sky above, a sky the colour of wine held up to a window"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1060
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	82
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

32.12

std

30.34

0.944

sampleLengths

0	68
1	38
2	53
3	6
4	12
5	72
6	12
7	71
8	11
9	5
10	2
11	16
12	107
13	17
14	60
15	8
16	8
17	21
18	88
19	5
20	15
21	4
22	9
23	85
24	44
25	6
26	25
27	13
28	6
29	10
30	87
31	40
32	36

94.79%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was gone"
1	"was threaded"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	155
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	82
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

92.50%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

863

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"lay cold against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.04171494785631518

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.012746234067207415

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	82
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

12.93

std

8.91

0.689

sampleLengths

0	14
1	35
2	19
3	9
4	20
5	9
6	7
7	5
8	34
9	7
10	6
11	12
12	12
13	29
14	7
15	18
16	6
17	8
18	4
19	10
20	21
21	15
22	12
23	13
24	8
25	3
26	5
27	2
28	16
29	7
30	28
31	13
32	31
33	8
34	20
35	5
36	12
37	6
38	11
39	31
40	12
41	3
42	5
43	8
44	11
45	10
46	12
47	26
48	8
49	17

78.46%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.5
totalSentences	82
uniqueOpeners	41

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then Isolde stepped between two"
1	"Somewhere behind the oaks, something"

ratio

0.035

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She had not turned around."
1	"Her silver hair moved down"
2	"Their violet eyes drifted across"
3	"It was not the sharp"
4	"She frowned and touched it"
5	"Its petals were cool and"
6	"She stared at it, then"
7	"she said slowly"
8	"They turned their head, and"
9	"Her pendant pulsed once, brighter,"
10	"she asked quietly"
11	"Her answer, when it came,"
12	"They reached the centre of"
13	"It did not dim or"
14	"It simply shifted, the way"
15	"Her reflection looked back, pale"
16	"She didn't speak."

ratio

0.298

38.95%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The frost had not yet"
1	"Aurora could still hear the"
2	"Aurora followed without thinking, then"
3	"The gap between the stones"
4	"She had not turned around."
5	"Her silver hair moved down"
6	"The Shade's silhouette thinned at"
7	"Their violet eyes drifted across"
8	"Nyx murmured, and the voice"
9	"Isolde said serenely"
10	"Aurora kept her hand near"
11	"The Fae-forged blade lay cold"
12	"It was not the sharp"
13	"This was softer, a slow"
14	"She frowned and touched it"
15	"The ground underfoot changed as"
16	"The hard, damp earth of"
17	"Violets, white anemones, a blue"
18	"Foxglove stood in tall pink"
19	"Bees moved among the blossoms,"

ratio

0.842

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	57
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

58.82%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The Fae-forged blade lay cold against her palm even through her coat, a cold that did not fade with her warmth."
1	"Foxglove stood in tall pink spires beside the roots of trees whose leaves were still full and gold, as though it were October in some other country and summer i…"
2	"In the middle lay a pool so still it might have been glass, reflecting a sky that was not quite the sky above, a sky the colour of wine held up to a window."
3	"Somewhere behind the oaks, something that might have been a bird began to sing, and the song seemed to go on far longer than any bird's breath should allow."

93.75%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx murmured, and the voice was like wind moving through dry leaves"

56.25%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1	"Isolde agreed (agree)"
2	"Aurora muttered (mutter)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.438

leniency

0.875

rawRatio

0.214

effectiveRatio

0.188

82.6025%