Run: 2026-10-08-01M4DAFAR2G5EP7FHJPADFJG55

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 5.5 (Adaptive)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 17.5s
Cost:: $0.001558
Provider:: Claude Platform on AWS

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
12.50%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
81.40%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
67.44%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
71.50%	Name drop frequency	(details)
100.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
94.79%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
86.08%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
58.21%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
58.82%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
34.62%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
85.5118%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The standing stones rose out of the bracken like the knuckles of some buried giant, six of them, each taller than a man and furred with pale lichen. Aurora Carter stopped at the boundary and waited for her eyes to adjust. Behind her, the ordinary Richmond evening hung over the park: dog walkers' voices, the hiss of tyres on the distant road, a jogger's breath. Ahead, the light had gone the color of weak honey, though the sun had set over Kingston twenty minutes ago.

"Don't step over the line yet," Isolde said. The Seer walked at the edge of the stones without seeming to move, her silver hair lifting in a wind Rory couldn't feel. Rory had stopped looking for her footprints in the mud. There were none. "The grove is patient, but it is not forgiving of impatience."

"Helpful," Rory muttered.

"Truthful," Isolde said serenely. "Helpfulness is a separate matter."

Nyx said nothing. They had already slid halfway into the shadow cast by the nearest stone, and the outline of their body rippled like heat over tarmac. Only the faint violet glow of their eyes marked where they were. When they spoke, the voice came from everywhere and nowhere, like a whisper carried on a wind that had not yet arrived. "The air tastes of old rain. The Veil is thin here. Thin as a wet paper lantern."

Rory could see it too, if she let her gaze go soft. A faint shimmer hung between the stones, like the air above a summer road, and when she looked straight at it, it slid away. She had seen it only once before, in a dark kitchen above Silas' bar, and she had told herself then that she had imagined it.

She touched the silver chain at her throat. The Heartstone pendant was warm against her collarbone, warm in a way that had nothing to do with her skin. It had been growing warmer since they left the car park, a slow pulse like a second heartbeat. Hel was close. She didn't want to think about how she knew that.

"Ready?" she asked.

"No one is ever ready," Isolde said. "Walk anyway."

Rory stepped between two stones.

The cold hit first, then the silence. It was not the silence of an empty place but the silence of a held breath, deep and enormous. The bracken gave way to grass so fine and green it looked painted, and the grass was threaded with wildflowers: foxglove and harebell, white campion, yellow tormentil, blooms that should have been dead in February and were not. Bees moved among them, slow and heavy, humming a note Rory felt in her molars.

"The flowers," she said quietly. "It's winter."

"It is always the season that is needed," Isolde replied. "Here, the year folds in on itself like a letter. You will find it hard to say how long you have been walking. Do not trust your watch."

Rory glanced at her wrist. The second hand was frozen, then jerked forward twice and stopped again. She swore under her breath and tucked her hand into her coat.

The grove opened around them. Trees stood in a ring, oaks so old their trunks had split into separate columns, each one grown around a standing stone as if the wood had tried to swallow it and given up. Their branches met overhead in a roof of dark, glossy leaves. Between them, light drifted: small pale sparks that rose from the grass, hovered, and sank again, like embers thrown from a fire that wasn't there.

"Are those—" Rory began.

"Lantern-moths," Isolde said. "Or the souls of those who fell asleep in the grass a long time ago. It is difficult to tell, and they do not like to be asked."

Rory didn't ask.

They walked on. The grass sloped down toward a pool so still that it reflected the canopy perfectly, leaves and sky and all, except that the sky in the water was the wrong color: a deep, bruised violet with a single pale star. Rory crouched at the edge. Her reflection looked back at her, pale and tired, her black hair stuck to her cheek. Then the reflection blinked a half-second after she did.

She stood up very fast.

Nyx had drifted to the water's edge. Their shadow lay across the pool and did not lie flat on the surface, but rose a little, bending toward the glowing star as though it were something to be worshipped. "The water remembers everything that has touched it," Nyx whispered. "Do not lean too far. It is hungry for company."

On the far side of the pool, a low wall of grey stone ran into the earth, carved with symbols Rory half recognised: spirals, a broken crown, a shape like a open hand with an eye in its palm. Some of the carvings had been worn smooth by centuries of rain, others looked freshly cut.

She reached out and touched one. The stone was cold, but the cold was wrong, dense and deliberate, like metal left in a freezer. Beneath her fingertips she felt a faint tremor, slow and steady, like something sleeping.

Her blade shifted against her hip. She had not drawn it, but the Fae-forged dagger was humming against its sheath, and when she looked down, the moonsilver was faintly luminous, though there was no moon overhead, only that bruised, unnatural sky.

"Isolde," she said. "Why is the knife glowing?"

The Seer turned, her lavender eyes unreadable. "Because something beneath us has noticed that you are carrying a piece of the wrong realm," she said, "and something above us has noticed that you are carrying a sword. Neither of them is pleased. Both of them are curious."

"That's not an answer."

"No," Isolde agreed. "It is a true sentence arranged in an unkind order. That is the best I can do with the grove's hospitality."

The pendant pulsed against Rory's chest, hot now, almost painful. Somewhere beyond the trees, low and far away, a sound began: a deep, hollow tolling, like a bell struck under water. The sparks above the grass rose all at once, a thousand small lights lifting toward the canopy, and the wildflowers bowed in the sudden wind.

Rory's breath came short. Beside her, Nyx's shadow stretched toward the sound, and their violet eyes flared.

"Walk," Isolde said softly. "Quickly, now. The grove has finally decided to show you its heart."

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

12.50%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde said serenely [serenely]"
1	"she said quietly [quietly]"
2	"Isolde said softly [softly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.615

leniency

rawRatio

0.188

effectiveRatio

0.188

81.40%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1075

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"softly"
count	1

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

highlights

0	"perfectly"
1	"very"
2	"softly"
3	"quickly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

67.44%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1075

totalAiIsms

found

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	3

word	"unreadable"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

highlights

0	"whisper"
1	"pulse"
2	"silence"
3	"unreadable"
4	"pulsed"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	67
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"tried to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	79
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	40
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1075
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	15
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

71.50%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

828

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.57

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Carter	1
Richmond	1
Ahead	1
Kingston	1
Seer	2
Rory	13
Isolde	7
Nyx	4
Heartstone	1
February	1
Fae-forged	1

persons

0	"Carter"
1	"Seer"
2	"Rory"
3	"Isolde"
4	"Nyx"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Kingston"
2	"February"

globalScore

0.715

windowScore

0.833

100.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences	42
glossingSentenceCount	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.93

wordCount

1075

matches

0	"not the silence of an empty place but the silence of a held breath, deep"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	79
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.68

std

27.28

0.787

sampleLengths

0	85
1	55
2	3
3	9
4	78
5	61
6	59
7	3
8	9
9	5
10	79
11	7
12	38
13	29
14	75
15	4
16	31
17	3
18	73
19	5
20	58
21	55
22	38
23	41
24	8
25	47
26	4
27	24
28	56
29	17
30	16

94.79%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was threaded"
1	"been worn"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

133

matches

0	"was humming"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	79
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	226
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	5
adverbRatio	0.022123893805309734
lyAdverbCount	1
lyAdverbRatio	0.004424778761061947

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	79
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

13.61

std

10.38

0.763

sampleLengths

0	28
1	13
2	24
3	20
4	8
5	23
6	10
7	3
8	11
9	3
10	4
11	5
12	3
13	24
14	12
15	22
16	17
17	12
18	24
19	25
20	8
21	20
22	18
23	3
24	10
25	3
26	7
27	2
28	5
29	7
30	19
31	38
32	15
33	5
34	2
35	10
36	28
37	5
38	12
39	12
40	5
41	34
42	11
43	25
44	4
45	3
46	28
47	3
48	3
49	40

86.08%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.5316455696202531
totalSentences	79
uniqueOpeners	42

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Only the faint violet glow"
1	"Then the reflection blinked a"
2	"Somewhere beyond the trees, low"

ratio

0.054

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"They had already slid halfway"
1	"She had seen it only"
2	"She touched the silver chain"
3	"It had been growing warmer"
4	"She didn't want to think"
5	"It was not the silence"
6	"she said quietly"
7	"She swore under her breath"
8	"Their branches met overhead in"
9	"They walked on."
10	"Her reflection looked back at"
11	"She stood up very fast."
12	"Their shadow lay across the"
13	"She reached out and touched"
14	"Her blade shifted against her"
15	"She had not drawn it,"

ratio

0.286

58.21%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones rose out"
1	"Aurora Carter stopped at the"
2	"The Seer walked at the"
3	"Rory had stopped looking for"
4	"Isolde said serenely"
5	"Nyx said nothing."
6	"They had already slid halfway"
7	"Rory could see it too,"
8	"A faint shimmer hung between"
9	"She had seen it only"
10	"She touched the silver chain"
11	"The Heartstone pendant was warm"
12	"It had been growing warmer"
13	"Hel was close."
14	"She didn't want to think"
15	"Rory stepped between two stones."
16	"The cold hit first, then"
17	"It was not the silence"
18	"The bracken gave way to"
19	"Bees moved among them, slow"

ratio

0.804

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	56
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

58.82%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The Heartstone pendant was warm against her collarbone, warm in a way that had nothing to do with her skin."
1	"The bracken gave way to grass so fine and green it looked painted, and the grass was threaded with wildflowers: foxglove and harebell, white campion, yellow tor…"
2	"Trees stood in a ring, oaks so old their trunks had split into separate columns, each one grown around a standing stone as if the wood had tried to swallow it a…"
3	"Their shadow lay across the pool and did not lie flat on the surface, but rose a little, bending toward the glowing star as though it were something to be worsh…"

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	16
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

34.62%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1	"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2	"Isolde agreed (agree)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.5

leniency

rawRatio

0.231

effectiveRatio

0.231

85.5118%