Run: 2026-10-08-01M4DAHN1V3N9W1GNJ7YP42ZR0

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 5.5 (Adaptive)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 14.8s
Cost:: $0.001291
Provider:: Claude Platform on AWS

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
9.52%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
45.95%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
67.57%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
78.66%	Name drop frequency	(details)
91.86%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
94.18%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
84.49%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
86.96%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
91.70%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
26.04%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
82.5642%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The stones were older than the park's paths, older than the deer that drifted between the bracken, and Rory could feel their age before she saw them. Dusk had settled over Richmond like a dropped cloth. Behind them the lights of Sheen Gate blinked on one by one, then went small and distant, as if someone had turned the volume down on the world.

"Don't touch the oaks," Isolde said without turning around. Her silver hair moved down her back like poured water. "They remember hands."

Rory pulled hers back from the nearest trunk, where bark had split into deep grooves that looked almost like script. Her wrist ached along the thin crescent scar, the old reminder she had not thought about in months. She tucked her hand into her jacket pocket instead and felt the Heartstone through the lining. It was warm. Not hot, just the steady warmth of a palm resting on a cup of tea.

She had decided hours ago not to mention that to anyone.

Nyx drifted at the edge of the group, a long figure cut from the dusk itself. Where the last of the light fell, they were a tall, human outline of darkness; where it didn't, they were nothing at all, just a shadow that lay wrong on the grass. Their voice came from somewhere near her shoulder, soft as wind through a keyhole. "You're counting the steps again."

"I'm not."

"Eleven since the last stone. You always count when you're frightened."

"I'm not frightened. I'm paying attention." She glanced down at the ground and stopped.

Isolde had walked ahead, and the grass she had crossed was bent as if no one had ever stood on it. Rory's own boots pressed the blades flat, and when she lifted her foot the grass slowly, reluctantly, rose again. Nothing in the Grove, she was beginning to understand, behaved the way it ought to.

"Come," Isolde called. "The gate is open. It won't stay open for long, and it does not enjoy waiting."

They passed between two standing stones. Rory had expected a jolt, the sort of pressure change she associated with lifts or aeroplanes. Instead the air simply thickened, like stepping into warm honey, and the sound of traffic from the road dropped away so completely that her own heartbeat seemed loud.

Then the light changed.

It came not from the sky, which had gone no further toward night, but from the ground. Wildflowers covered the clearing: foxglove and bluebell, poppies and something with petals like frosted glass, all blooming at once. Their colours were too clean. Rory had grown up in Cardiff, where even the parks wore a layer of soot and rain. These flowers looked freshly painted. Bees moved among them, but the bees were slow, drifting in lazy spirals as though the air was too heavy for them.

"Wildflowers all year," Isolde said, and Rory had the odd impression she was reading from a card. "Spring is always here, and the frost never comes. That is the first kindness and the first warning."

"What's the second?" Rory asked.

"That you will want to stay."

Nyx made a sound that might have been a laugh. "She says that to everyone."

"And everyone listens," Isolde replied serenely. "Sometimes they even heed it."

They moved on. The path wound between trees whose trunks were pale as bone and whose leaves turned slowly, though there was no wind. Rory caught herself listening for birdsong and heard nothing, then realised the silence was not empty. It was full of something low and patient, a hum just beneath hearing that made the fillings in her teeth ache. Every so often a thread of shimmer crossed her vision, a faint distortion like heat above tarmac, gone the moment she turned toward it. She thought of the Veil, which she had only ever read about in Wardens' reports and half-remembered lectures, and wondered whether she was seeing it or whether it was seeing her.

The Fae blade at her hip went cold against her thigh. She had grown used to that, the way it never warmed no matter how long she carried it, but now the chill spread through the fabric of her trousers, sharp and clarifying. Moonsilver, Isolde had called it, and she had not asked where the moon was.

Ahead, the trees opened onto a pool. It was perfectly round and perfectly still, and its surface reflected not the pale trunks around it but a sky full of stars. Rory stopped at the edge. The stars in the water were moving, drifting slowly across a sky that did not match the one above. A single shooting star fell through the reflection and left a trail that hung for a long moment before fading.

"Don't fall in," Nyx murmured. "Not everything that falls comes back out."

"Would you come after me?"

"I might. I'd have to ask first who else had gone in, and why."

Rory crouched and let her fingers hover above the water without breaking the surface. The Heartstone pulsed once against her chest, a warm knock, and the reflected stars shivered. She went very still. Somewhere far beyond the trees, under all that glittering sky, there was a door, and it had noticed her.

Isolde's pale lavender eyes found her across the pool. "Ah," she said softly. "You have brought something with you, child. Now we shall see whether it brought you."

Rory stood, slowly, and found that she had already decided to go on. That, more than anything, frightened her.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

9.52%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde replied serenely [serenely]"
1	"she said softly [softly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.429

leniency

0.857

rawRatio

0.222

effectiveRatio

0.19

45.95%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

925

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"slowly"
count	4

adverb	"reluctantly"
count	1

adverb	"completely"
count	1

adverb	"perfectly"
count	2

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"softly"
count	1

highlights

0	"slowly"
1	"reluctantly"
2	"completely"
3	"perfectly"
4	"very"
5	"softly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

67.57%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

925

totalAiIsms

found

word	"could feel"
count	1

word	"reminder"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

word	"chill"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

highlights

0	"could feel"
1	"reminder"
2	"warmth"
3	"silence"
4	"chill"
5	"pulsed"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	56
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount	0
hedgeCount	0
narrationSentences	56
filterMatches	(empty)
hedgeMatches	(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	69
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	33
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	925
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	7
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

78.66%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

771

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.43

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	11
Richmond	1
Sheen	1
Gate	1
Heartstone	2
Isolde	7
Grove	1
Cardiff	1
Nyx	3
Veil	1
Fae	1

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Gate"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Nyx"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Grove"
2	"Cardiff"
3	"Fae"

globalScore

0.787

windowScore

0.833

91.86%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"seemed loud"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

2.162

wordCount

925

matches

0	"not from the sky, which had gone no further toward night, but from the ground"
1	"not the pale trunks around it but a sky full of stars"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"found that she"

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.26

std

29.91

0.873

sampleLengths

0	64
1	22
2	72
3	11
4	67
5	2
6	11
7	14
8	55
9	19
10	50
11	4
12	85
13	35
14	5
15	6
16	15
17	11
18	116
19	57
20	74
21	12
22	5
23	14
24	52
25	28
26	19

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	56
matches	(empty)

94.18%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

126

matches

0	"was beginning"
1	"was reading"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.014

matches

0	"Where the last of the light fell, they were a tall, human outline of darkness; where it didn't, they were nothing at all, just a shadow that lay wrong on the grass."

84.49%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	589
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	34
adverbRatio	0.057724957555178265
lyAdverbCount	8
lyAdverbRatio	0.013582342954159592

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	69
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

13.41

std

7.86

0.587

sampleLengths

0	27
1	9
2	28
3	9
4	10
5	3
6	20
7	18
8	16
9	3
10	15
11	11
12	16
13	32
14	14
15	5
16	2
17	11
18	14
19	21
20	19
21	15
22	3
23	16
24	6
25	16
26	28
27	4
28	17
29	19
30	5
31	17
32	5
33	22
34	17
35	18
36	5
37	6
38	10
39	5
40	6
41	5
42	3
43	21
44	16
45	21
46	24
47	31
48	11
49	32

86.96%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	0
diversityRatio	0.5217391304347826
totalSentences	69
uniqueOpeners	36

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead the air simply thickened,"
1	"Then the light changed."
2	"Somewhere far beyond the trees,"

ratio

0.057

91.70%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Her silver hair moved down"
1	"Her wrist ached along the"
2	"She tucked her hand into"
3	"It was warm."
4	"She had decided hours ago"
5	"Their voice came from somewhere"
6	"She glanced down at the"
7	"They passed between two standing"
8	"It came not from the"
9	"Their colours were too clean."
10	"They moved on."
11	"It was full of something"
12	"She thought of the Veil,"
13	"She had grown used to"
14	"It was perfectly round and"
15	"She went very still."
16	"she said softly"

ratio

0.321

26.04%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The stones were older than"
1	"Dusk had settled over Richmond"
2	"Isolde said without turning around"
3	"Her silver hair moved down"
4	"Rory pulled hers back from"
5	"Her wrist ached along the"
6	"She tucked her hand into"
7	"It was warm."
8	"She had decided hours ago"
9	"Nyx drifted at the edge"
10	"Their voice came from somewhere"
11	"She glanced down at the"
12	"Isolde had walked ahead, and"
13	"Rory's own boots pressed the"
14	"Nothing in the Grove, she"
15	"They passed between two standing"
16	"Rory had expected a jolt,"
17	"It came not from the"
18	"Wildflowers covered the clearing: foxglove"
19	"Their colours were too clean."

ratio

0.868

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	53
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

100.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"It was full of something low and patient, a hum just beneath hearing that made the fillings in her teeth ache."
1	"A single shooting star fell through the reflection and left a trail that hung for a long moment before fading."

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	9
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.333

leniency

0.667

rawRatio

0.143

effectiveRatio

0.095

82.5642%