Run: 2026-10-08-01M4DAN2CN2T008GFP28KME04A

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 5.5 (Reasoning, Medium)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 16.2s
Cost:: $0.001381
Provider:: Claude Platform on AWS

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
50.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
67.44%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
58.14%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
79.76%	Name drop frequency	(details)
41.30%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
90.09%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
89.02%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
87.27%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
37.04%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
44.74%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
88.1599%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The oaks at the edge of Richmond Park had been ordinary a minute ago. Rory was sure of that. She had walked past them on the gravel path with her hood up and her breath clouding, the same as every other winter morning she'd spent running deliveries for Yu-Fei's restaurant. Then Isolde had stopped between two trunks, lifted one pale hand, and said, "Here the path forgets itself," and the trees had leaned apart like curtains.

Now the stones stood in a ring, grey and furred with lichen, each one taller than Rory and carved with spirals that seemed to slide when she didn't look straight at them.

"Don't touch the stones," Isolde said without turning around. She walked ahead of them, silver hair falling to her waist, and the grass beneath her did not bend. Rory watched for it, and it was true. Where Isolde's feet should have pressed the turf, there was only turf, springing straight back.

Nyx moved along the shadow the stones threw across the clearing. The Shade's outline rippled as they went, thinning where the light struck and thickening where it did not, so that for a moment their voice seemed to come from the dark beneath the nearest stone. "You're nervous," Nyx whispered. The voice carried like wind through dry leaves. "Your pulse is quick."

"I'm standing in a fairy ring," Rory said. "Forgive me for being nervous."

"Fae," Isolde corrected mildly. "The rings are older than the word for them."

Rory's left wrist tingled over the small crescent scar. Beneath her coat, the Heartstone pendant lay warm against her breastbone. It had been warm since they'd left the car, a faint, steady heat like a hand resting over her heart. She had told herself it was body heat. Now, as they crossed the threshold between the last two stones, the warmth flared once, sharp as a struck match, then settled into a slow, uneasy throb.

She pressed her palm to her chest. "Isolde."

"Yes." The seer did not look back.

"The pendant's reacting to something."

"It remembers Dymas," Isolde said. "Every ember in it does. It has been close to a gate of the Hel realms and it has not forgotten the heat." She paused at the edge of the clearing. "Do not worry about the warmth. Worry about the moment it stops."

"That's not comforting."

"It was not meant to be comforting. It was meant to be true." The corner of her mouth lifted. "I cannot lie, Aurora. You will find that inconvenient, but I think you will come to appreciate it."

Then the clearing opened, and Rory forgot to be afraid.

Wildflowers grew everywhere, in the grass, in the cracks between flat grey rocks, climbing the trunks of silver birches that Rory was certain had not been there a moment before. Foxglove and bluebells sat beside primroses and late roses, all blooming at once, as though spring and summer and autumn had been folded together and pressed flat. Their scent was thick and sweet and faintly green. Bees moved through them, lazy and gold, and beyond the flowers a stream ran over stones without a sound she could hear. She could see the water catching light. She could not hear it at all.

"It's quiet," she said.

"Listen harder," Nyx whispered.

She did. Beneath the silence there was a murmur, very faint, like a crowd in a distant room. Words came and went in it, half-formed, in languages she almost recognised. A laugh, thin as a thread. Somewhere a bell, rung once and not again.

"Are they talking about us?" she asked.

"Everything here talks about everything," Isolde said. "Mostly they are talking about the time they have lost."

Rory glanced at her. "Lost?"

"The grove keeps its own clock." Isolde reached out and touched a birch leaf. It shivered under her fingers and turned, very slowly, from green to gold and back to green. "An hour spent here can be a minute in your world. Or a week. Or a year, if you are unlucky and linger at the wrong stone. I once knew a man who sat down to rest beneath that willow and rose to find his grandsons grown and his dog long buried." She let the leaf go. "He was not unhappy. He simply had not expected to be so old."

Nyx drifted closer to the willow, its long branches trailing in the water. The Shade's form thinned until Rory could see the grass through them, then gathered itself again into a tall, dim shape. "This one remembers me," Nyx said softly. "Not the willow. The ground under it. Something was buried here before the roots came." A pause. "Something I once tried to bury myself."

Rory did not ask. She had learned in the last few weeks not to push Nyx toward the things they had been before they were Shade, and Nyx had learned to offer only what they chose to give.

Her hand drifted to her hip, where the Fae-forged blade hung in its sheath. Isolde had given it to her with the same serene expression she used for everything, as if handing over a teacup. Now it was cold through the leather, cold as river stones in January. In the strange grey-gold light, she saw a faint luminescence cross the moonsilver of the hilt, though the sun above was bright and unbroken.

"Is it always this cold?" she asked.

"Always," Isolde said. "It will be colder when we are near something that should not be here. I suspect you will not enjoy the feeling."

"I'm starting to hate your suspicions."

"Then you are learning."

They walked on, deeper among the flowers. Ahead, a low mound rose from the grass, ringed by a second circle of stones that were not grey at all but pale as bone. Between two of them, the air shimmered faintly, like heat above a road in August, and Rory understood with a cold drop of certainty that she was looking at the Veil. Not a wall, not a curtain. A thinness, stretched like a membrane across the gap.

The Heartstone pulsed hard against her skin, once, twice, and the bluebells at her feet turned slowly towards it.

"Rory," Nyx whispered. "Don't step closer."

She stopped. Her heart hammered. Beside her, Isolde's lavender eyes had gone very still.

"Well," the seer said softly. "Now we shall see what the grove has been keeping for us."

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

50.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde corrected mildly [mildly]"
1	"Nyx said softly [softly]"
2	"the seer said softly [softly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.526

leniency

rawRatio

0.15

effectiveRatio

0.15

67.44%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1075

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	3

adverb	"slowly"
count	2

adverb	"softly"
count	2

highlights

0	"very"
1	"slowly"
2	"softly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

58.14%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1075

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"throb"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	2

word	"silence"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulse"
1	"warmth"
2	"throb"
3	"comforting"
4	"silence"
5	"shimmered"
6	"pulsed"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	68
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	85
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	57
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1075
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	15
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

79.76%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

783

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.4

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
Yu-Fei	1
Isolde	10
Rory	11
Shade	3
Heartstone	2
Nyx	8
Fae-forged	1
January	1
August	1
Veil	1

persons

0	"Yu-Fei"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Rory"
3	"Shade"
4	"Nyx"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"January"
3	"August"
4	"Veil"

globalScore

0.798

windowScore

0.833

41.30%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"spirals that seemed to slide when she didn't look straight at them"
1	"as if handing over a teacup"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.93

wordCount

1075

matches

0	"not grey at all but pale as bone"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	85
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

31.62

std

30.01

0.949

sampleLengths

0	76
1	32
2	51
3	62
4	13
5	13
6	75
7	8
8	7
9	5
10	48
11	3
12	37
13	10
14	102
15	4
16	4
17	44
18	7
19	17
20	5
21	101
22	65
23	38
24	72
25	7
26	25
27	6
28	4
29	78
30	19
31	6
32	14
33	17

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been folded"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

129

matches

0	"was looking"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	85
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

90.09%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

787

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"lay warm against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.044472681067344345

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.011435832274459974

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	85
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

12.65

std

10.04

0.794

sampleLengths

0	14
1	5
2	31
3	26
4	32
5	9
6	19
7	8
8	15
9	11
10	35
11	4
12	8
13	4
14	8
15	5
16	4
17	9
18	9
19	11
20	20
21	8
22	27
23	7
24	1
25	7
26	5
27	5
28	31
29	12
30	3
31	19
32	18
33	10
34	30
35	27
36	9
37	22
38	7
39	7
40	4
41	4
42	2
43	16
44	12
45	6
46	8
47	7
48	7
49	10

89.02%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	1
diversityRatio	0.5411764705882353
totalSentences	85
uniqueOpeners	46

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then Isolde had stopped between"
1	"Then the clearing opened, and"
2	"Somewhere a bell, rung once"

ratio

0.055

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She had walked past them"
1	"She walked ahead of them,"
2	"It had been warm since"
3	"She had told herself it"
4	"She pressed her palm to"
5	"She paused at the edge"
6	"Their scent was thick and"
7	"She could see the water"
8	"She could not hear it"
9	"It shivered under her fingers"
10	"She let the leaf go"
11	"She had learned in the"
12	"Her hand drifted to her"
13	"They walked on, deeper among"
14	"Her heart hammered."

ratio

0.273

87.27%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oaks at the edge"
1	"Rory was sure of that."
2	"She had walked past them"
3	"Isolde said without turning around"
4	"She walked ahead of them,"
5	"Rory watched for it, and"
6	"Nyx moved along the shadow"
7	"The Shade's outline rippled as"
8	"The voice carried like wind"
9	"Isolde corrected mildly"
10	"Rory's left wrist tingled over"
11	"It had been warm since"
12	"She had told herself it"
13	"She pressed her palm to"
14	"The seer did not look"
15	"She paused at the edge"
16	"The corner of her mouth"
17	"Wildflowers grew everywhere, in the"
18	"Foxglove and bluebells sat beside"
19	"Their scent was thick and"

ratio

0.745

100.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Now the stones stood in"
1	"Now, as they crossed the"
2	"Now it was cold through"

ratio

0.055

37.04%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"She had walked past them on the gravel path with her hood up and her breath clouding, the same as every other winter morning she'd spent running deliveries for …"
1	"Foxglove and bluebells sat beside primroses and late roses, all blooming at once, as though spring and summer and autumn had been folded together and pressed fl…"
2	"Isolde had given it to her with the same serene expression she used for everything, as if handing over a teacup."
3	"Ahead, a low mound rose from the grass, ringed by a second circle of stones that were not grey at all but pale as bone."

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	20
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

44.74%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1	"Isolde corrected mildly (correct)"
2	"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
3	"Nyx whispered (whisper)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.368

leniency

0.737

rawRatio

0.286

effectiveRatio

0.211

88.1599%