Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TARQYM3KCZ6ED4XXYSY3QZ

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Duration:
1m 5s
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$0.083102
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Meta

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air on the other side of the Veil tasted of warm honey and woodsmoke, and it hit the back of Rory's throat so sweet that she coughed. She had expected cold. She had braced for it when Isolde led them between the oak standing stones in Richmond Park, when the shimmer in the air thickened and bent the winter trees into wavering shapes only Rory seemed able to half-see. She had expected Hel to bite. Instead heat rolled over her skin in a slow, perfumed breath, lifting the ends of her black hair, finding its way under her coat as if the place had been waiting to feed her its weather. Her boots sank. Not into mud, though the ground gave like the soft crumb of fresh cake. She looked down and saw pale gold soil sifting around her soles, fine as sugar, glittering where it caught the light. Above them there was no sun. There was no proper sky, either, only a vast amber dome that deepened to burnt orange at its edges and glowed from within, as though they had stepped inside a lantern. Light fell without shadow, except where Nyx stood. Nyx came through last. For a moment they were nothing but a tall tear in the brightness, a humanoid silhouette drinking the light around their edges. Then they settled, solid enough that the sugared ground dimpled beneath them, their violet eyes opening like two faint coals. At six foot two they should have looked imposing. Here they looked underfed. The place seemed to dislike how little of them there was to indulge. "You said it would be loud," Rory said. Isolde walked ahead of them and left no footprints in the gold soil. Her silver hair swung at her waist, untouched by the warm wind, and wildflowers that had no business blooming in Richmond in December were blooming here too, only theirs were too large, their petals veined with something that pulsed. "I said Dymas never hungers," Isolde answered. "I did not say it shouts to prove it." The sound reached Rory then. Not loud, at first. Low. A hum under the ground and through the soles of her boots, punctuated by distant bells and a rhythmic, wet chopping. Somewhere far off, people were laughing with their mouths full. The noise rose and fell together, feast and kitchen and crowd woven into one long note, and underneath it, even softer, came the sighing of leaves. They were standing at the edge of a vineyard. The vines grew without posts or wire, rearing up in green spirals taller than Rory, each one braided around the next. Grapes hung in clusters the size of her head. Their skins were translucent. Inside each fruit, something dark moved sluggishly in amber liquid, not quite a seed and too deliberate to be pulp. When the warm air stirred the leaves, the grapes knocked gently together and chimed. Rory stopped without meaning to. Her hand went, stupidly, toward the nearest cluster. Nyx caught her wrist. Their fingers were solid and cool and did not quite have fingerprints. "Don't." The grape nearest her fingers swelled. A seam split its skin and a scent spilled out, blackberry and roast plum and something animal beneath it, so rich her stomach clenched with a hunger she had not felt a second before. Her mouth watered. Her scar, the small crescent on her left wrist, lay pale against Nyx's shadowed thumb. She pulled back. The grape sealed itself, slowly, as if disappointed. "Good," Isolde said from between the vines. "You learn with your eyes first. Some learn with their tongues, and then their tongues learn for them forever." "That's not reassuring," Rory said. "No," Isolde agreed, and because she could not lie there was a flat honesty in it that was worse than comfort. "It is accurate." They followed a path of crushed white stone that had been laid, Rory realized after several minutes, not with gravel but with salt. It crunched under her boots and tasted sharp in the air whenever the wind lifted it. The vineyard gave way to an orchard where trees bent under fruit she could almost name if she did not look directly at it. Pears with scarlet flesh visible beneath gold skin. Apples that steamed faintly, as if baked from the inside. Long yellow fruits that turned, very slightly, to keep their unblemished sides toward the light. No birds sang. Instead the orchard made a busy, contented sound of growth. Bark creaked. Fruit thudded softly into grass so green it hurt to look at. Split melons on the ground repaired themselves while she watched, rinds knitting, seeds retreating like shy teeth. Her pendant moved against her breastbone. The Heartstone had been warm since the standing stones, pulsing in time with a portal her body had felt before her mind accepted it. Now its rhythm changed. The deep crimson stone, no bigger than her thumbnail, throbbed once, hard, against her skin through her shirt, and the silver chain prickled with heat. The glow inside it brightened enough to stain her collarbone red. Rory pressed her palm over it. "It's faster." "The heart notices a larger body," Isolde said. Nyx had turned their head toward the far side of the orchard, where the amber light thickened over rooftops Rory had not noticed because they seemed to be built out of things meant to be eaten or drunk from. Timber dark as fruitcake. Roofs of glazed tile the color of caramelized sugar. Chimneys releasing smoke that separated into scents as it drifted, garlic, thyme, brown butter, blood orange, each arriving in its own clean ribbon and refusing to mix. "Belphegor's kitchens," Nyx whispered, and their voice came to Rory not quite through the air. It slipped along the shadow under an apple tree and arrived at her ear like wind through a keyhole. "The nearer tables are served from there." "I thought Belphegor was a prince," Rory said. "He is." Nyx's eyes dimmed. "Princes here do not sit. They preside." As they walked, the path widened. Tables appeared between the trees, at first one or two, laid for no one, then whole groves of them. Long boards of black wood bowed under platters that refilled when Rory blinked. Roasted birds glazed and steaming, their cavities stitched with herbs. Bowls of grain that moved like slow water. Cheeses cut open to reveal fruit suspended inside like flies in amber, except the fruit was beating. No guests sat at the nearest tables, but the benches were warm when Rory passed close enough to feel heat radiating through her jeans. Goblets sweated. Napkins folded themselves into swans, shook out flat, then folded themselves into swans again, patient and mindless. Wonder rose in her despite the clench in her stomach. It was obscene and it was beautiful, and both facts occupied the same space without canceling each other out. A fountain beyond the tables threw wine upward in a red arc that never splashed. Beneath it, cups held themselves out on thin brass arms, filling and emptying, filling and emptying, though no hand took them. Music came from a cluster of musicians whose instruments were partly grown rather than made, strings stretched over hollow gourds, a flute carved from a bone so white it glowed. The tune was simple enough that Rory found herself timing her steps to it. One of the musicians had no eyes. Melted wax, or skin, had smoothed over the sockets, but his hands never missed a note. As they passed, his head angled toward her pendant, or toward the pulse under her skin, and his playing faltered for one note only. Rory kept walking faster. "Isolde," she said quietly. "Those chefs you mentioned. The souls." Isolde did not answer at once, which for her was its own kind of answer. They passed under an arch made of intertwined fig branches and into a working garden, and suddenly the kitchens were no longer a scent on the horizon but an open yard before them, screened only by steam. Men and women moved between cauldrons large enough to bathe in. They wore aprons stained in rainbow strata. Some sang as they stirred. Some wept in a habitual way, the way people might hum while doing dishes, tears falling straight into sauces that accepted them with a hiss. A woman with flour to her elbows rolled pastry so thin Rory could see the table through it, then began again the instant she finished, rolling the same sheet smaller and smaller until it vanished, whereupon a fresh ball of dough appeared under her hands and her shoulders sagged before she lifted the pin. A man tasted from a spoon. His eyes rolled back with bliss so complete it looked painful. He tasted again. And again. His hand shook, but it never stopped traveling from pot to mouth, pot to mouth, while his other hand fed the fire with split wood that smelled of cinnamon. Rory's hunger vanished. In its place came a nausea so abrupt she had to breathe through her mouth, which was a mistake because the air itself seemed to want seasoning her tongue. "They signed," Nyx said beside her, incorporeal now from the knees down, drifting over the salt path. "Most of them. On Earth, a lifetime of mastery. Here, an eternity to practice it." "That man isn't practicing," Rory said. "No," Nyx said. "He finished practicing a long time ago." A bell rang across the yard, deep and soft. Every chef lifted their head in the same instant. So did the eyeless musician behind them, and the trees, she would swear it afterward, leaned a fraction toward the sound. The hum under Rory's boots deepened. At the far end of the garden, gates made of woven copper vines began to unfold. Beyond them lay a terrace she had mistaken for a hill, and on the terrace a feast in full motion. Hundreds of tables. Thousands, perhaps, the amber light making distance untrustworthy. Figures sat eating in silks and rags and uniforms from centuries Rory could name and some she could not, and the sound they made now reached her clearly, cutlery and swallowing and laughter and moans, a great tide of appetite that did not ebb. Waiters moved among them carrying dishes that steamed with colors. Above the highest table, draped bunting stirred in air that had gone suddenly still at Rory's back, and the empty chair at the head of it all was large enough that its height had fooled her into thinking it a doorway. It was not empty. That was the worst of it. The cushions depressed under a weight she could not see. The goblet before it emptied, slowly, and filled again darker. Her Fae-forged blade, strapped inside her coat against her ribs, turned colder. The moonsilver had always been cold to the touch, but now the chill bled through cloth and skin until her breath shortened. She slid a hand inside and touched the leaf-shaped hilt and felt, faintly, a vibration like a plucked wire. Isolde had stopped. For the first time since Richmond, her expression showed something Rory could read without translation. Not fear. Recognition, perhaps, and regret sharpening it. "You didn't tell us he'd be at table," Rory said. "I told you Dymas never hungers," Isolde said. "A prince is not separate from his realm, Aurora." Her lavender eyes held Rory's. "If I had told you plainly, you would have heard it plainly. That is a different danger." Before Rory could answer, a waiter detached himself from the nearest kitchen table and approached with a tray balanced on one palm. He was young, or had been young when he died, with burns up both forearms in the neat rows of oven racks. His smile was professional and exhausted and stretched too wide when he saw the pendant glowing at her throat. On his tray sat three small glasses of something amber and clear. And beneath them, folded once, a card thick as a playing card and cream-colored. He did not offer the drinks. He offered the card, bowing from the waist with the tray held impossibly level. Rory took it because refusing would have required a reason she did not yet have. The card was warm. On the outside, in handwriting that looked exactly like her mother's, it said her full name, and beneath that, in smaller letters, Guest of Honor. Inside there was only a seating number and a single line, written before she had ever heard of Dymas, before the pendant had arrived from no one, before she had fled Cardiff or London or Evan. She knew the date at the bottom the way she knew her own pulse. It was tomorrow's. The feast noise dimmed, or her hearing did. Across the terrace, down the long corridor of tables, heads began to turn. Not all of them. Enough. Chewers paused mid-bite. A woman with gravy on her chin stared at Rory with sudden, lucid horror and began, silently, to shake her head. The goblet at the unseen head of the table emptied again, and this time it did not immediately refill. Rory folded the card shut. Her hand was steady, which surprised her, and the Heartstone hammered against her fingers through the paper like something that wanted out of her chest and into the ground. "We need to see the kitchens," she said, because that had been the plan, because cool heads were only useful if they kept moving, because the number on the card matched the copper gate now opening at the terrace's side. Nyx became solid all at once beside her, and their shadow fell across her boots despite the shadowless light, long and dark and hers to stand in. "Then do not eat," they whispered, as the waiter smiled and smiled and stepped backward toward the steam. "And Rory, whatever is served to you here, do not thank them for it."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.056
82.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2331
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"gently"
1"slowly"
2"very"
3"slightly"
4"softly"
5"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2331
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"wavering"
count1
1
word"imposing"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count1
3
word"rhythmic"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"throbbed"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count2
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"wavering"
1"imposing"
2"pulsed"
3"rhythmic"
4"stomach"
5"throbbed"
6"pulse"
7"weight"
8"chill"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences159
matches
0"k with bliss"
88.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences159
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences171
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2331
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
82.59% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount2151
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.35
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Rory29
Isolde9
Richmond3
Park1
Hel1
Nyx10
December1
Heartstone2
Fae-forged1
Guest1
Honor1
Dymas1
Cardiff1
London1
Evan1
persons
0"Veil"
1"Rory"
2"Isolde"
3"Nyx"
4"Heartstone"
5"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"December"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
globalScore0.826
windowScore0.833
41.30% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences115
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"seemed able to half-see"
1"not quite a seed and too deliberate to be pulp"
2"not quite have fingerprints"
3"not quite through the air"
4"appeared under her hands and her shoulders sagged before she lifted the pin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.858
wordCount2331
matches
0"not with gravel but with salt"
1"no longer a scent on the horizon but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences171
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean39.51
std29.13
cv0.737
sampleLengths
028
184
238
345
472
58
668
767
89
968
1013
1117
1258
1311
1426
155
1624
1796
1844
196
2064
218
228
2379
2441
258
2612
2773
2843
29109
3047
314
3210
3352
34102
3551
3632
3732
386
3910
4045
4116
42126
4330
4453
4526
4610
4739
4863
4926
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences159
matches
0"been laid"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs360
matches
0"were blooming"
1"were laughing"
2"were standing"
3"was beating"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences171
ratio0
matches(empty)
93.29% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2156
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"visible beneath gold skin."
adverbCount88
adverbRatio0.04081632653061224
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.012059369202226345
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences171
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences171
mean13.63
std10.18
cv0.747
sampleLengths
028
14
238
36
436
53
614
721
86
931
108
114
1222
1320
149
154
1613
178
1813
1939
207
219
225
234
241
2521
2610
2726
289
2921
309
314
3220
3314
345
358
364
3712
381
396
4034
413
4215
433
448
457
4619
475
4821
493
69.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4502923976608187
totalSentences171
uniqueOpeners77
92.59% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences144
matches
0"Instead heat rolled over her"
1"Then they settled, solid enough"
2"Somewhere far off, people were"
3"Instead the orchard made a"
ratio0.028
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences144
matches
0"She had expected cold."
1"She had braced for it"
2"She had expected Hel to"
3"Her boots sank."
4"She looked down and saw"
5"Her silver hair swung at"
6"They were standing at the"
7"Their skins were translucent."
8"Her hand went, stupidly, toward"
9"Their fingers were solid and"
10"Her mouth watered."
11"Her scar, the small crescent"
12"She pulled back."
13"They followed a path of"
14"It crunched under her boots"
15"Her pendant moved against her"
16"It slipped along the shadow"
17"It was obscene and it"
18"she said quietly"
19"They passed under an arch"
ratio0.257
91.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount106
totalSentences144
matches
0"The air on the other"
1"She had expected cold."
2"She had braced for it"
3"She had expected Hel to"
4"Her boots sank."
5"She looked down and saw"
6"Light fell without shadow, except"
7"Nyx came through last."
8"Here they looked underfed."
9"The place seemed to dislike"
10"Isolde walked ahead of them"
11"Her silver hair swung at"
12"The sound reached Rory then."
13"A hum under the ground"
14"The noise rose and fell"
15"They were standing at the"
16"The vines grew without posts"
17"Grapes hung in clusters the"
18"Their skins were translucent."
19"Rory stopped without meaning to."
ratio0.736
69.44% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences144
matches
0"Now its rhythm changed."
1"Before Rory could answer, a"
ratio0.014
74.01% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences83
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Instead heat rolled over her skin in a slow, perfumed breath, lifting the ends of her black hair, finding its way under her coat as if the place had been waitin…"
1"There was no proper sky, either, only a vast amber dome that deepened to burnt orange at its edges and glowed from within, as though they had stepped inside a l…"
2"Her silver hair swung at her waist, untouched by the warm wind, and wildflowers that had no business blooming in Richmond in December were blooming here too, on…"
3"Chimneys releasing smoke that separated into scents as it drifted, garlic, thyme, brown butter, blood orange, each arriving in its own clean ribbon and refusing…"
4"Some wept in a habitual way, the way people might hum while doing dishes, tears falling straight into sauces that accepted them with a hiss."
5"Figures sat eating in silks and rags and uniforms from centuries Rory could name and some she could not, and the sound they made now reached her clearly, cutler…"
6"Above the highest table, draped bunting stirred in air that had gone suddenly still at Rory's back, and the empty chair at the head of it all was large enough t…"
7"Her hand was steady, which surprised her, and the Heartstone hammered against her fingers through the paper like something that wanted out of her chest and into…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
56.25% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Isolde agreed (agree)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.533
leniency1
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.188
90.6467%