Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TBEYPPKRNR84575Y68473V

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Duration:
1m 15s
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$0.113259
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Meta

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The dead man had no shadow. Detective Harlow Quinn noticed it before she noticed the blood, which was the wrong order of things and stayed with her as she crossed the abandoned Tube platform. The work lights SOCO had rigged along the curved wall threw everything else into hard double relief, the stalls, the overturned crates, the uniformed constable trying not to look at the jars on the nearest counter, in several of which something pale turned slowly in green fluid. But the man on his back beside the far stall lay flat and clean-edged under the lamps, as if the light passed through the place where his shadow should have been and found nothing to stop it. Quinn stopped at the edge of the taped cordon and took in the Veil Market properly. She had heard of it for years in the way detectives heard of things that never made it cleanly into statements, always secondhand, always retracted by morning. A black market beneath Camden, in a Tube station closed before the war and struck from public maps, selling enchanted goods and banned alchemical substances and information that cost more than money. It moved every full moon, or so the story went. You got in with a bone token. You got out if you had paid for the right things. Tonight the market hung in a state of arrested flight. Stalls made from platform benches, scaffolding, and mildewed theatre flats lined both sides of the tracks. Canvas awnings sagged under strings of unlit bulbs. There were bolts of cloth blacker than the tunnel dark, cages covered with muslin, trays of teeth sorted by size, a rack of umbrellas furled tight and dripping though there was no rain underground. The air tasted of hot dust and copper and the green iron smell of the tracks. Somewhere beyond the bricked arch at the north end, water dripped with metronomic patience. Her people had secured it the ugly, ordinary way, by finding the service door behind a Camden lock-up, forcing the padlock, and descending four flights of concrete stairs with torches and radios that died one landing down. Whatever traders had been here, they had gone before the first constable reached the platform. They had left their wares and their dead man behind. Quinn checked her watch out of habit before ducking under the tape. Worn leather strap, left wrist, the face scratched from a fall onto Brixton tarmac six years ago. Twenty past two. The second hand moved. Good. Down here, she was already learning to verify simple things. "Detective." Eva Kowalski stood inside the cordon beside the body, looking small and badly out of place in a waxed coat too warm for the tunnels, her worn leather satchel bulging with books against her hip. Curly red hair escaped in all directions. Her round glasses had fogged, cleared, and fogged again at the bottom edge, and as Quinn approached she tucked a strand behind her left ear with the brisk, nervous gesture of someone trying to keep her hands from doing something worse. "Miss Kowalski." Quinn kept her voice level. "Who let you through?" "Sergeant Bhatt." Eva glanced toward the stairs. "He called the Museum when he saw the markings. The Museum called me. I'm on some list, apparently. For restricted material that turns up in unfortunate contexts." Quinn looked at her, then at the constable by the stall, who found sudden interest in his notebook. Eighteen years in the Met had taught her that a list like that probably existed and that she would never be told how names got onto it. She filed the irritation where it belonged and crouched, careful of her knees, on the other side of the body. Up close the dead man was worse in the details than at a distance. Fiftyish, thin, with the stooped shoulders of someone who worked bent over small things. His hands were long-fingered and nicked all over from tools, the nails rimmed black. He wore a tradesman's apron with a dozen pockets, each neatly buttoned, and a shirt beneath it soaked dark to the waist. Yet the tiles under him were nearly dry. The blood that had left him had gathered instead in a shallow, improbable disc around his torso, as if it had been poured into a mould. It had not run into the grout lines. It had not followed the slight slope of the platform toward the tracks. His eyes were open. Brown, like hers, which she disliked noticing. They stared at the vaulted ceiling with an expression less of fear than of strenuous attention, as if he had died listening for something. "Name?" Quinn said. "Casimir Vane," Eva said. "Shade artisan. One of the best. He had the corner pitch here for years, whenever the market came back to Camden." She tucked the hair behind her left ear again. "He made instruments. Things for finding your way when the way isn't on a map." "And this?" Quinn nodded at the shallow disc of blood, the chalk marks half under it. Three concentric circles had been drawn around the stall and overlapped the body. Symbols filled the bands between them in a cramped, deliberate hand, white chalk gone pink where the blood had touched it but not dissolved it. "That's why Sergeant Bhatt called." Eva pushed her glasses up with one knuckle. "It's an opening rite. Or the remains of one. Salt, chalk, blood as the anchor. You make a space where the Veil is thin and you call a rift into it. If you wanted to bring something through from the other side, or send something there without using the doors everyone watches, this is roughly how the older texts describe doing it." "You think he did this to himself." "I think he started it," Eva said. "And I think something finished it for him. Look at the outer ring. It's broken there, by his left hand. Broken outward." Quinn looked. There was a gap in the chalk perhaps four inches wide, and beyond it a fan of white dust sprayed toward the tracks. "Meaning?" "Meaning whatever was in the circle left," Eva said. A constable at the cordon shifted his weight. Quinn rose slowly and walked the stall front, giving herself distance to think in. That was one interpretation. She had been offered three since descending the stairs, each worse supported than the last. Bhatt, who had the sense to call for help and the pallor of a man who would be requesting a transfer inland, thought robbery. Someone had tried to lift the artisan's stock, been interrupted, and killed him. The duty inspector, safely above ground and speaking through a runner, had suggested an overdose, a bad batch of whatever alchemical filth the stall sold, death dressed up afterwards to frighten competitors. Eva offered a rite gone wrong, or gone right in the worst way. Quinn disliked all three equally, which usually meant the scene was trying to tell her something plainer and uglier. Robbery first. She scanned the stall. The counter was a door laid across two trestles, covered in green baize worn to the weave. On it sat scales, a roll of instruments in oiled cloth, twists of wire, small labelled tins arranged by size with military neatness. A tin of what looked like dried violets. A dish of mercury bright even in this light. Nothing overturned. Nothing rifled. Beneath the counter, a lockbox sat in plain view, its lid closed, its clasp undamaged. If this was robbery, the thief had the self-restraint of a saint and the priorities of a madman, because the only empty space she could see was a single velvet-lined depression in a display tray, shaped to hold something round and no larger than a pocket watch. "Was something taken from here?" she asked. Eva followed her gaze. "His compass, probably. He always kept his own on the tray. Not for sale. A Veil Compass." She said it with capitals audible. "Brass casing, protective sigils etched into the face. The needle doesn't point north. It points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal. He crafted it himself. Everyone down here knew it." "And it's gone." "Yes." " convenient missing compass, valuable bespoke item." Quinn looked down at the body again. "Bhatt's robbery." "Except nothing else was taken," Eva said, a little quickly, as if she had been waiting for permission to argue with the police theory rather than volunteer her own. "And Casimir wouldn't have opened the stall tonight without setting it in the tray. It was his signature. His advertisement. Look at the rest of the tray. The other pieces are symmetrical. Five on the left, five on the right, the space in the middle." Quinn saw it once it was pointed out and was annoyed at having missed it. Ten small instruments in a row, each in its own hollow, laid out with a jeweller's precision. The empty place had not been left by a snatch. The stock around it framed it. Vane had set his table expecting the compass there, or expecting to put it there. She crouched again, this time at the body's right side, and studied the hands. The left lay palm up in the broken place in the chalk. The right lay across his stomach, fingers curled loosely. There was chalk on the left fingertips, thick in the whorls. There was none on the right. But under the right thumbnail and packed into the cuticle of the first two fingers was a crust of blue-green, bright as oxidised copper. "Verdigris," she said. Eva leaned in, then stopped herself before crossing some invisible boundary of contamination she had clearly been warned about. "From brass. Old brass." Quinn did not answer. Three years ago she had stood in a stairwell in Deptford breathing brick dust and somebody else's blood through her mouth, calling down a corridor for DS Morris and getting no answer, and the first thing she had seen when they found his coat, only his coat, folded over a railing as neatly as if he had meant to come back for it, had been that same blue-green crust on the cuff turn-up. The forensic report had called it copper alloy residue and had nothing else to say. Morris had never walked out of that building. No body, no weapon, no sign of a struggle beyond the coat and the residue and a scorch mark on the wall in a shape no one would put a name to in writing. She had not thought about the colour in months. She thought about it now with her hand steady and her jaw tight, and she put it away hard. "Victim is left-handed," she said. "How do you know?" Eva asked. "Chalk on the left hand, tool wear on the left thumb, callus pattern." Quinn pointed with the capped end of her pen, not touching. "But the verdigris is on the right. If he handled his own brass compass a hundred times a day for years, you'd expect the staining worked into the dominant hand, the skin, not packed fresh under the nails of the wrong one." She looked at the curled fingers again. "That looks recent. And it looks forced. As if someone pressed something into his right hand after he was already down, and his fingers scraped the casing." "Or he grabbed for it while he was dying," Eva said. "With the hand he doesn't use, while his left lay in the chalk he was working with." Quinn stood. "Possible. People do uncharacteristic things while they're dying. But they don't usually do tidy things." She walked the circle slowly, counting her paces, checking the floor the way she would check a room where a witness had sworn no one entered or left. The platform dust was thick between the stalls, grey felt over tile, recording everything. She could read the last twenty minutes in it. SOCO boot prints, Bhatt's smaller tread, Eva's flat shoes inside the cordon. Before them, the scuffs and drags of the market being abandoned, all of it flowing toward the stairs and toward a service tunnel at the southern end. All of it, without exception, flowed away. Nothing flowed toward the stall. Nothing crossed the chalk but the spray of dust bursting outward through the gap. "The entrance is flooded," she said. Eva blinked behind the fogged glasses. "What?" "Bottom of the service stairs. Ankle-deep, leaking from the old pipe run. Every one of us came through it. Look at the prints on the steps. Look at yours." Eva looked down at her own shoes, the hems of her trousers dark to the shin. "Now look at his boots." Quinn pointed. Vane's boots were under the counter edge, placed side by side, which was another thing wrong, because men who collapsed in their own blood did not first remove their boots and set them in a pair. The leather was dry. The soles were clean. The dust on the uppers was old and even. "He didn't walk in here tonight. He didn't walk across this platform at all. Those boots haven't touched wet concrete in days." "He wouldn't wear them in the stall," Eva said slowly. "Artisans work in soft shoes sometimes, for the circles. Chalk dust. Sensitivity." But she was looking at the body now rather than the stall, and Quinn could see the argument moving behind her green eyes, rearranging itself. "His feet," Eva said. "Bare," Quinn said. "And clean. In a station that's filth from end to end, the soles of a dead man's feet are clean." She let the silence do the work for a moment. The water dripped beyond the arch. One of the jars on the nearest stall ticked faintly against its glass, though nothing had touched it. Sergeant Bhatt appeared at the cordon with a evidence bag in his hand and the expression of a man carrying something he wanted very much to give to someone else. "Ma'am. From under the counter. SOCO nearly missed it. It was behind the lockbox, in the dark." Quinn took the bag by its sealed top. Inside was a small brass compass. The casing had a patina of verdigris so deep in the engraving that the protective sigils etched around its face showed dark against the metal. The glass was cracked in one corner. The needle beneath it swung as Bhatt's hand left the bag, swung again as Quinn steadied it, and settled quivering toward the body on the floor as if drawn there. Eva made a sound. "That's his." "You're certain." "I've seen it a dozen times. He'd let people hold it and laugh when they thought it was broken." Her hair came loose again; this time she did not tuck it back. "It always pointed to the market door. The entrance is a standing portal, weak but constant. He used to say a compass that couldn't find the door home was firewood." Quinn held the bag at waist height and took one measured step backward, away from the body, toward the tracks. The needle trembled and held. Another step. It held on Vane, true as a plumb line. She walked sideways along the platform, bag in her left hand below her watch, counting under her breath, ten paces, fifteen, passing stalls of covered cages and bottled light, and the needle dragged reluctantly with her distance but never left the dead man. At twenty paces it began to swing in earnest, uncertain for the first time, caught between the body behind her and something else, and when she stopped and turned toward the bricked arch at the end of the platform, it steadied again, forward now, pointing into the dark where the water dripped. She walked back. Eva had not moved. Her face had lost color under the freckles. "It points to the nearest rift," Quinn said. "Yes." "It pointed at him from twenty feet. Not at your standing door by the stairs. At him." She stopped at the cordon and watched the needle settle again through the cracked glass, unwavering, on the center of Casimir Vane's bloodless, blood-ringed chest. "And when I got far enough away, it found the next nearest. The arch." Eva's mouth opened. She closed it. "That isn't possible," she said, and then, with the honesty that had probably made her good at her work and bad at police stations, "It isn't possible unless the rite worked in a way I haven't seen described. Unless he didn't open a rift in the circle." "No," Quinn said. The blood that would not run into the grout lines. The shadow that would not fall. The clean feet of a man who had never crossed the platform, the boots paired under his counter, the compass pressed into his wrong hand after the chalk work was done, the empty place on the tray where he had meant to set the one instrument that could betray what had happened to him. The market had not been robbed. No one had fled down the flooded stairs leaving wet prints for her to follow, because no one who mattered had used the stairs at all. "Unless he is the rift," she said. "Or it's in him. Or it's wearing the shape of him and hasn't finished." She looked at Eva, who was staring at the body with her satchel clutched now in both hands like a shield of books. "Your circle isn't broken outward because something escaped from it, Miss Kowalski. It's broken outward because something arrived, and it arrived already inside the man who drew it." Far down the platform, beyond the cordon, beyond the reach of the work lights where the bricked arch stood in the dripping dark, the needle in Quinn's hand jumped once against the glass, hard, like something small and brass had just heard its name called.
created_at"2026-10-13T10:03:22.209Z" 10/13/2026, 10:03:22 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags33
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.55
leniency1
rawRatio0.03
effectiveRatio0.03
86.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2983
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count4
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"loosely"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"quickly"
2"loosely"
3"very"
4"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2983
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"etched"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"unwavering"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"scanned"
2"velvet"
3"etched"
4"stomach"
5"silence"
6"measured"
7"trembled"
8"unwavering"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences159
matches(empty)
88.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences159
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
2"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences186
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen75
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2984
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions71
wordCount2262
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.11
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn25
Tube2
Veil1
Market1
Camden2
Brixton1
Kowalski1
Eva21
Met1
Three2
Deptford1
Morris2
Bhatt4
Vane4
Casimir1
Far1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Camden"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Morris"
7"Bhatt"
8"Vane"
places
0"Tube"
1"Veil"
2"Deptford"
3"Far"
globalScore0.947
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences117
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like dried violets"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2984
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences186
matches
0"engraving that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean43.25
std37.75
cv0.873
sampleLengths
06
1112
216
387
498
562
647
71
883
911
1034
1165
12119
1335
143
1549
1654
1775
187
1929
2026
219
2222
23101
2419
25129
267
2758
283
291
3016
3174
3263
3376
343
3523
36134
3728
385
396
40100
4111
4234
4397
4419
456
467
4729
4816
4982
85.40% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences159
matches
0"been poured"
1"been drawn"
2"been offered"
3"been interrupted"
4"was pointed"
5"was annoyed"
6"been left"
7"been warned"
8"was cracked"
9"been robbed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs376
matches
0"was already learning"
1"was trying"
2"was looking"
3"was staring"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences186
ratio0.005
matches
0"\"I've seen it a dozen times. He'd let people hold it and laugh when they thought it was broken.\" Her hair came loose again; this time she did not tuck it back."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2271
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"single velvet-lined depression"
1"same blue-green crust"
2"bloodless, blood-ringed chest."
adverbCount62
adverbRatio0.027300748568912372
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.010568031704095112
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences186
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences186
mean16.04
std13.38
cv0.834
sampleLengths
06
128
247
337
416
527
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710
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911
1010
1116
128
1334
1416
1514
1637
1715
1810
1912
2017
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224
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251
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297
304
317
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3318
3427
3520
3614
3714
3814
3922
408
4126
428
4313
444
457
4624
473
484
4930
62.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.43548387096774194
totalSentences186
uniqueOpeners81
24.51% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences136
matches
0"Somewhere beyond the bricked arch"
ratio0.007
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences136
matches
0"She had heard of it"
1"It moved every full moon,"
2"You got in with a"
3"You got out if you"
4"Her people had secured it"
5"They had left their wares"
6"Her round glasses had fogged,"
7"She filed the irritation where"
8"His hands were long-fingered and"
9"He wore a tradesman's apron"
10"It had not run into"
11"It had not followed the"
12"His eyes were open."
13"They stared at the vaulted"
14"She tucked the hair behind"
15"She had been offered three"
16"She scanned the stall."
17"She said it with capitals"
18"She crouched again, this time"
19"She had not thought about"
ratio0.25
70.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount106
totalSentences136
matches
0"The dead man had no"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn noticed it"
2"The work lights SOCO had"
3"Quinn stopped at the edge"
4"She had heard of it"
5"A black market beneath Camden,"
6"It moved every full moon,"
7"You got in with a"
8"You got out if you"
9"Tonight the market hung in"
10"Stalls made from platform benches,"
11"Canvas awnings sagged under strings"
12"The air tasted of hot"
13"Her people had secured it"
14"Whatever traders had been here,"
15"They had left their wares"
16"Quinn checked her watch out"
17"The second hand moved."
18"Eva Kowalski stood inside the"
19"Her round glasses had fogged,"
ratio0.779
73.53% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences136
matches
0"If this was robbery, the"
1"Before them, the scuffs and"
ratio0.015
50.09% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences77
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn noticed it before she noticed the blood, which was the wrong order of things and stayed with her as she crossed the abandoned Tube platfo…"
1"But the man on his back beside the far stall lay flat and clean-edged under the lamps, as if the light passed through the place where his shadow should have bee…"
2"A black market beneath Camden, in a Tube station closed before the war and struck from public maps, selling enchanted goods and banned alchemical substances and…"
3"Her people had secured it the ugly, ordinary way, by finding the service door behind a Camden lock-up, forcing the padlock, and descending four flights of concr…"
4"They stared at the vaulted ceiling with an expression less of fear than of strenuous attention, as if he had died listening for something."
5"Vane had set his table expecting the compass there, or expecting to put it there."
6"Three years ago she had stood in a stairwell in Deptford breathing brick dust and somebody else's blood through her mouth, calling down a corridor for DS Morris…"
7"She walked the circle slowly, counting her paces, checking the floor the way she would check a room where a witness had sworn no one entered or left."
8"She walked sideways along the platform, bag in her left hand below her watch, counting under her breath, ten paces, fifteen, passing stalls of covered cages and…"
9"The clean feet of a man who had never crossed the platform, the boots paired under his counter, the compass pressed into his wrong hand after the chalk work was…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags33
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn pointed, not touching"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.317
leniency0.633
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.6948%