Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TBFAHES0P16BPQNXM9DM0D

Run Details

Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.121601
Provider:
Meta

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Soho and ran in black lines from the awning of The Raven's Nest. The green neon sign above the door threw colour across the wet glass. Rory Carter pushed inside with her delivery jacket dark at the shoulders and rain in her straight black hair. Heat from the bar met her face. Maps covered the walls between black-and-white photographs, their frames thick with dust at the corners. Bottles stood in rows behind Silas Blackwood. His silver signet ring struck the glass in his hand each time he turned the cloth. Silas lifted his chin toward the stairs. "You live above a bar and you still come in soaked." Rory shook rain from her sleeves and left a wet print on the floorboards. "The Golden Empress sent me to Bloomsbury in that. Yu-Fei owes me a boat." "A boat will not fit in your flat." "It can replace the sofa." She hung her jacket on the hook beside the bookshelf and felt the room settle around her. Rain beat the windows. A man in a wet coat read a newspaper at the far table. A woman sat alone at the end of the bar with a short glass in front of her, her back straight, her coat folded on the next stool. The woman turned at the sound of the jacket hook. Rory stopped with one hand on the wood. The hair came first. Eva Price had worn hers in a mass of curls at school, curls in her eyes, curls caught in the zips of her bags, curls she tied with paint-stained ribbons. This woman wore a blunt cut that grazed her jaw. No ribbon. No paint. A charcoal suit kept its line across her shoulders. A thin gold band sat on her left hand where a chipped silver ring from Camden Market had sat for six years. Bright recognition crossed Eva's face, and then control replaced it. She set her glass down on a coaster. She aligned the coaster with the edge of the bar. "Rory." Rory's mouth opened before thought reached it. "Eva." "You look wet." "You look expensive." A laugh broke from Eva, short and surprised, and for a second the curls and ribbons stood in Rory's memory in place of the woman in front of her. Then Eva pressed her lips together and the laugh died. Silas placed a towel on the bar between them. He took in Eva's suit, Rory's frozen hand, the space neither woman crossed. "Tea, Carter?" "Tea will not touch this cold." "Whisky, then." "One." Silas poured without another word and moved toward the man with the newspaper, his limp shifting his weight on the turn. Rory took the stool two seats from Eva. She put her hands around the glass Silas left and felt heat sting her fingers. The crescent scar on her left wrist showed white against her skin. Eva looked at the scar, then at Rory's face. "How long have you lived here?" "Above. Two years in March." "In London?" "Two years in March." Eva turned her glass in a slow circle. "I moved here three years ago." "You hate London." "I hated London at seventeen. Rent cured some of it. Work cured the rest." "What work puts you in that suit?" "Harlan and Grey. Holborn." Rory stared. "Solicitors?" "Corporate. Mostly contracts. Some disputes when the partners want a face clients trust." "You told Mrs Lloyd you would burn in hell before you read a contract." "Mrs Lloyd retired. Hell had a waiting list." Rory drank. The whisky cut through the cold in her chest. "You did a conversion course?" "After Cardiff. Dad lost the garage lease. Mum needed help with the house. Law paid. Painting did not." "You won that prize in our last year. The one at the gallery on Cowbridge Road." "The prize paid fifty pounds and came with a speech. Harlan and Grey paid my deposit." Eva lifted her glass and drank as if the subject bored her. Her hand shook on the way down. She hid it under the bar. Rory set her own glass down harder than she meant to. "I did not know about the garage." "No." "Dad never mentioned it." "Your dad had other things to mention." The sentence landed. Rory felt it in her teeth. Silas wiped a clean section of the bar and kept his eyes on the cloth. Eva drew a breath through her nose. "Brendan came to Mum's house at Christmas. The year you left. He brought a tin of biscuits and asked if we had heard from you. Sat in our kitchen in his good coat. Mum made him tea in the pot she saved for visitors." "He never told me that." "He thought you would ring if you wanted us." "I wanted—" Rory stopped. The bar clock ticked above the bottles. The man with the newspaper turned a page. Eva waited with her face turned toward the shelves, her jaw tight. Rory pushed the glass away and pulled it back. "I changed my number in the hostel. Then I lost the phone on a bus in Peckham. Then weeks went. Then months went, and each month made the call into a speech. I hate speeches." "You could have sent a postcard. Cardiff sells them. Big picture of the castle. Wish you were here." "I was not wishing that." "No. You wished us gone in clean lines." "That is not fair." "Fair." Eva repeated the word without heat, and the lack of heat cut deeper than a shout. "I stood on your front step with Evan banging on the door behind me. I told him you had gone to your aunt in Ireland. You have no aunt in Ireland. He called me a liar for an hour through the letterbox. My dad came home and put him in a headlock on the pavement." Rory went cold under her wet shirt. "He never—" "He never what? Hurt me? No. He saved his talent for you." The rain thickened against the glass. Silas set the man's change on the table and returned behind the bar at a distance that gave them the whole room. Rory touched the scar on her wrist with her thumb. Eva watched the movement and then forced her eyes back to her drink. "I wrote to your old email." "I know." "You know?" "Silas showed me how to recover the account last year. Forty-three messages sat in it. Birthdays. Your exams. The garage. Your mum in hospital." Eva's shoulders rose and fell once. "Read them all in one night?" "In one sitting. At that table." Rory pointed toward the table under the map of Prague. A ring stain marked the corner. "Did you answer?" "No." "Why keep the account open, then?" Rory turned her glass and watched whisky climb the sides. "Proof someone had known me before." Eva gave a sound that held no humour. "You kept us as an archive." "I kept you as the last person who knew where the bodies sat buried." "Poetic. Delivery work suits you." "It pays in cash and hot rice. Law paid in panic attacks and Dad checking my grades at Sunday lunch." "You were good at it." "I was good at exams. Court made me sick in the toilets before moots." "You never said." "You never asked why I smoked behind the law library with my hands shaking." Eva flinched. Her gold band caught the light from the bottles as she gripped her glass. "I thought you liked the drama." "And I thought you liked painting enough to starve for it. Here we sit. Two women of principle." The words left Rory's mouth and she wanted them back at once. Eva's face closed. She reached for her coat and folded it over her arm with sharp care. Silas stepped in and placed a bowl of salted nuts on the bar. The bowl scraped the wood. "House rule. Food before exits." Eva looked at the bowl, then at Silas. "We have rules about nuts now?" "We have rules about guests leaving with rain in their shoes and whisky in an empty stomach." "I ate at six." "It is ten." "I had a large lunch." "Lawyers lie with great posture." Eva sat down again. Her coat slid from her arm to the stool. She took three nuts and ate them one at a time. Rory felt a grin pull at her mouth despite the ache under her ribs. "He does that to me each night. I pay rent in obedience." "You live above a man who feeds you by force. Cardiff had your mother for that." "Mum fed neighbours. I received lectures with gravy." "Your mum gave me extra potatoes each Sunday because she thought Mum underfed me." "She thought everyone south of Merthyr needed potatoes." Eva's mouth softened at the edges. Then grief moved across her face and wiped the softness clean. "She rang me after you left. Your mum. Each Friday at seven. She asked about my course, my work, Dad's garage. She never asked about you in words. She asked with pauses." Rory stared at the map of Prague until the lines blurred. "How is she?" "Teaching three days a week. Your dad takes her to choir in the car and complains about the parking. They repainted your room." "What colour?" "White." "Good. The purple was a crime." "You chose it." "I was fourteen and drunk on rebellion and emulsion." Eva picked up her glass. Nothing remained but ice. She shook the ice and set the glass down again. "I came in here because our train from a client dinner got cancelled at Tottenham Court Road. My colleague swore this place poured a decent whisky and had no music. I sat down and Silas asked my name for the tab. Then he asked if Price came from Cardiff." Rory turned to Silas. He dried a glass that had dried minutes before. "You knew." Silas met her eyes over the rim. "I know a great many former addresses." "You collect people." "I collect debts. People carry them in." Eva touched the edge of her coaster and spun it half a turn. "He asked if I knew a Carter. I thought Brendan had taken to drinking in Soho bars under neon. Then you came through the door with rain down your neck and that jacket." "The jacket has reflective stripes. Very distinguished." "The jacket makes you look like a traffic cone with secrets." "Secrets keep the tips coming." Eva looked down at Rory's hands, red from the cold, nails cut short, a burn mark near one knuckle from a takeaway bag clasp. "You deliver food." "Golden Empress. Yu-Fei gives me the orders for drunks and actors because I keep a straight face." "You had a training contract waiting." "Dad had a training contract waiting. I had a bus ticket Eva bought with money from a Saturday job." Silence filled the space between the stools. Eva's fingers closed around her empty glass until her knuckles whitened. "I bought that ticket." "You did." "You used it. That part worked." "Eva—" "You used it, and then you cut the rope from your side of the bridge." Rory's throat closed. She coughed and reached for the whisky. "I believed distance kept Evan from your door." "Evan found our door before you reached London. Distance kept you from hearing him." "I know that now." "Knowing now pays no one." Silas refilled Eva's glass without a request and placed water beside Rory's whisky. He left the bottle on the back shelf and went to stack chairs at the far end, though no chair needed stacking. Eva took a long drink. "I married Tomos." Rory blinked. "Tomos Rees? From sixth form? Tomos with the car that smelled of chips and deodorant?" "He grew up. People do in your absence." "Are you—" "We divorced last spring." "God. Eva." "God had no comment. Tomos wanted a wife who came home before nine and liked dinners with partners. I wanted a husband who noticed when I stopped speaking at the table. We compromised with lawyers." She twisted the gold band. The ring resisted at the knuckle and then held. "You still wear it." "It keeps clients from asking about my weekend." "Does it keep you from asking?" Eva looked up. Her eyes shone in the low light, and anger gave her face more life than the polished calm had done. "You get no rights here, Rory. You left the room. You do not get to walk back in and rearrange the furniture." "I walked into my own bar." "You walked into a coincidence." "Then leave." "I intend to." Neither woman moved. Rain found a loose pane and rattled it in bursts. The newspaper man folded his paper, paid Silas, and stepped out into the green wash of the sign. Eva picked up a nut and turned it between finger and thumb. "You missed Mum's funeral." The room shrank. Rory heard the tick of the clock and the hum from the fridge behind the bar. "When?" "November. Two years back. Infection after the hip operation. Dad rang your old number until a man in Swansea told him to stop calling." "I did not know." "You arranged that." Rory's hand found the scar again. Her thumb pressed the crescent shape hard enough to hurt. "What was it like?" "Cold church. Warm pub. Dad stood at the grave with his hat in both hands and thanked the flowers. Your mum sang. Her voice broke on the second verse and Brendan put his hand on her back and kept it there until the end." "I should have stood beside you." "Yes." "I should have held the hymn book. You always lose the page." "I lose the page still." Eva ate the nut at last and reached for her glass with a hand that had steadied through effort. "Say the rest." Rory frowned. "What rest?" "The part you rehearsed for forty-three emails and a recovered account. I can see it behind your eyes. You had a speech for the train platform in Cardiff at fourteen when the inspector caught us without tickets. You have one now." "I hate speeches." "You love an audience of one." Rory laughed, and the sound scraped her throat. "Fine. I missed you so much in the first months that I walked past art shops in Camden and stood outside like a ghost with shopping bags. I saw a blue scarf in a window in March and bought it for your birthday. It sits in my drawer upstairs with the tag on. I kept your messages because deleting them felt like killing the girl who knew to buy me a ticket before she asked if I wanted saving. I read them when Evan found my Instagram under another name and sent a photograph of our old street. I read them when Dad rang and spoke about the weather for twenty minutes and never once used my name wrong or right. I missed you, and missing you made me furious with you for having a life that continued in straight lines." Eva stared at her. "My life has no straight lines. My life has a suit from a shop where the assistant measures your grief and calls it tailoring." "Your lines looked straight from Peckham." "From Peckham, your silence looked like relief." Rory nodded and took the blow standing. Silas returned and set two fresh glasses on the bar. This time he poured water into both. "Whisky has done its work." Eva lifted her glass of water and looked at it with suspicion. "He parents you." "He parents the whole street. The kebab shop fears him." "The kebab shop fears no man." "The kebab shop sends him free chips each Friday and asks about his knee." Eva turned to Silas. Her expression shifted into something near respect. "You run a bar, a canteen, and a lost persons bureau." "I run a bar. People bring the rest through the door." Rory wrapped her hands around the water. Condensation soaked her palms. "Did you tell her I lived here before I came in?" "I told her a Carter drank here." "That counts as theatre, Si." "It counts as a door left open." Eva pushed her empty whisky glass toward him. "Open doors cause draughts." "Closed doors cause rot." "I shall quote you in court." "Quote the nuts. Juries trust food." A real laugh left Eva this time. It reached her eyes and changed her face back toward the girl who had painted song lyrics on the inside of her school locker. Rory felt the laugh hit a place under her ribs that had kept its shape for Eva through two years of messages and silence. Eva caught Rory looking. The laugh faded, but her face kept some warmth. "What colour was the scarf?" "Cobalt. Too bright for your new life in charcoal." "Cobalt suits me. Suits lie." "Bring proof tomorrow." The words came out before Rory could weigh them. Tomorrow hung between them. Eva turned her water glass and watched light move through it. "I have court at nine. A client who believes contracts bend under confidence." "Breakfast at eight, then. The café on Dean Street burns toast in a way that feels like home." "I never agreed to breakfast." "You asked about the scarf." "I asked about a colour." "Cobalt demands inspection." Eva's mouth fought a smile and lost for half a second. "You deliver at lunch?" "From eleven." "Then eight leaves you time to sleep and regret your cooking opinions." "I shall bring the scarf. You bring the ability to choose a page in a hymn book." "I shall bring a bill for the ticket." "Interest?" "Two years of it. Compound." Rory raised her water glass. Eva hesitated with hers halfway to the bar top, her gold band bright, her blunt hair falling across one cheek where curls had once fallen without permission.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
98.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2999
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2999
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"aligned"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"grave"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"aligned"
1"weight"
2"stomach"
3"silence"
4"grave"
5"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences130
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences305
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen141
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2999
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions103
wordCount1308
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.98
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Carter1
Silas15
Blackwood1
Price1
Camden1
Market1
Eva39
Rory36
Prague2
Rain3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Silas"
3"Blackwood"
4"Price"
5"Market"
6"Eva"
7"Rory"
8"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"Camden"
2"Prague"
globalScore0.009
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences101
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2999
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences305
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs248
mean12.09
std14.23
cv1.177
sampleLengths
050
145
27
311
414
514
68
75
862
910
108
1179
1228
131
147
151
163
173
1839
1922
202
216
222
231
2421
2535
269
276
285
292
304
318
326
333
3414
357
364
372
381
3913
4014
418
4211
435
4418
4516
4616
4725
4811
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs208
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences305
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1311
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.013729977116704805
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences305
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences305
mean9.83
std11.06
cv1.125
sampleLengths
018
113
219
37
415
57
616
77
811
914
1014
118
125
1317
144
1513
1628
1710
188
194
2030
2110
222
232
249
2522
2610
278
2810
291
307
311
323
333
3429
3510
369
3713
382
396
402
411
4221
438
4415
4512
469
476
485
492
43.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.25901639344262295
totalSentences305
uniqueOpeners79
54.64% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences122
matches
0"Then Eva pressed her lips"
1"Then grief moved across her"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences122
matches
0"His silver signet ring struck"
1"She hung her jacket on"
2"She set her glass down"
3"She aligned the coaster with"
4"He took in Eva's suit,"
5"She put her hands around"
6"Her hand shook on the"
7"She hid it under the"
8"Her gold band caught the"
9"She reached for her coat"
10"Her coat slid from her"
11"She took three nuts and"
12"She shook the ice and"
13"He dried a glass that"
14"She coughed and reached for"
15"He left the bottle on"
16"She twisted the gold band."
17"Her eyes shone in the"
18"Her thumb pressed the crescent"
19"Her expression shifted into something"
ratio0.172
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount115
totalSentences122
matches
0"The green neon sign above"
1"Rory Carter pushed inside with"
2"Maps covered the walls between"
3"Bottles stood in rows behind"
4"His silver signet ring struck"
5"Silas lifted his chin toward"
6"Rory shook rain from her"
7"She hung her jacket on"
8"A man in a wet"
9"A woman sat alone at"
10"The woman turned at the"
11"Rory stopped with one hand"
12"The hair came first."
13"Eva Price had worn hers"
14"This woman wore a blunt"
15"A charcoal suit kept its"
16"A thin gold band sat"
17"She set her glass down"
18"She aligned the coaster with"
19"Rory's mouth opened before thought"
ratio0.943
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"It reached her eyes and changed her face back toward the girl who had painted song lyrics on the inside of her school locker."
1"Rory felt the laugh hit a place under her ribs that had kept its shape for Eva through two years of messages and silence."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
86.0918%