Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TBGSEEEE48X6BQ23TFKTR9

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3m 31s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The spring rolls were still warm when somebody said her real name. "Aurora? Aurora Carter?" Nobody in London called her that. Rory turned with the delivery bag half off her shoulder and found a woman in a green silk scarf inside the door, rain bright on her dark coat, one hand still on the brass handle as though the street might pull her back out. "Carys." "Thank God. I said to them, that's Aurora Laila Carter, I'd know that face at a funeral." Silas took the bag from her shoulder and set it behind the bar. His eyes moved from the woman to Rory and back, quick as a card trick. Then he reached for glasses, limp and all, the soul of hospitality. "Your friends want the snug. Through the bookcase. Push the Dickens." Three suits shook off the weather and filed behind the shelves. Laughter rose, then muffled, as the bookcase swung shut. Carys stayed where she was. "Look at you." "People keep saying that." Rory pulled out the next stool, then changed her mind and stood. "You sound like my father." "I sound called to the Bar. Same thing, your mother says." Carys unwrapped the scarf. Under it sat a cream blouse and a thin gold chain. Somebody had sanded her vowels down between Cardiff and the Strand. "Rioja, if it's open. Not the house red. I know what house red tastes like in places with green neon." "Rioja." Silas reached for the bottle. "So this is where you've been." Carys took in the maps, the black-and-white photographs, Rory's delivery jacket steaming on its hook. "Four years." "Four years in March." "You counted." "You didn't?" "Eva posts photographs. You're never in them. I check anyway." Carys accepted the wine, turned the glass once, didn't drink. "She says you're well. She says it in the voice of a policeman's widow." "I am well." "You deliver noodles." "For Yu-Fei. Golden Empress, Brewer Street. Best roast duck in Soho, and he pays cash." Rory opened a carton and ate a spring roll with her fingers, because it gave her hands something to do that wasn't shaking. "You won the mooting final at nineteen. You made the visiting judge laugh, Aurora. In a court of law." "Rory." "You always hated Rory." "I changed my mind about a few things." Carys's gaze dropped to Rory's left wrist, to the small crescent scar, pale as a thumbnail moon. Rory had stopped hiding it two summers ago. Her sleeve found it anyway. "I think about this more than I should. My bracelet, the railings at Roath Park. You climbed up like it was nothing." "You cried harder than I did." "You didn't cry. You went quiet. That's how I knew it was bad." The wine turned in her glass. "Third year, you went quiet again. Same face. Different reason." The neon hummed. Somewhere behind the bookcase a cork came out of a bottle with a soft, rude pop, and the suits laughed at nothing. "The barbecue at your parents'," Carys said. "That last summer. Your shoulder was purple past the sleeve line, and you told me the shower door had jumped its rail." "It had." "I was twenty-one, and you asked me, without asking, to believe you. So I did. I've been believing you ever since, cariad. I'd like to stop." Rory set the spring roll down. Grease shone on her fingertips. "You looked too closely. Everyone else had the manners to look away." "So you cut me out for seeing you." "I cut you out so one of us got to keep the good version." Carys made a small sound, not quite a laugh, and drank at last. "God. You still do that." "Do what." "Answer the question under the question. Your father's trick. He did it at your mother's table and I watched you learn it." She turned the glass by its stem. "He wrote my reference, you know. Chambers off Gray's Inn. Pupillage, then tenancy this spring. He signs his emails Brendan now. He used to be B. R. Carter on everything, even the note in your lunchbox." "Good for him. Good for you." "You sleep through the night, then?" "Like the dead." "Listen to you. You used to talk in paragraphs." "Paragraphs don't keep, Carys." "No. I suppose they don't." A beat. "You look older. Not in a bad way. In the way of people who've stopped auditioning." Silas drifted past with a cloth and a glass, close enough to hear, which was his trade and his habit. He topped up the Rioja without being asked and drifted off again. "Your mother keeps your room," Carys said. "Not like a museum. Like you're coming home. There's a difference, and it's killing her, if you want the truth of it." "I didn't ask for the truth of it." "No. You never did. That was the whole trouble with you." Carys pressed her thumb to the rim of the glass, lifting a clear half-moon off the surface. "What do you want, Carys?" "I wanted to see you. I had it in my head that if I saw you, I'd know whether to keep forgiving myself." She drank. "And there's a trial. Fraud, three weeks, papers everywhere. And." "And." "He's in London." Rory's hands were still. She was aware of them, which was worse. "Clerkenwell. Moved in the spring. He asked after you at Rhodri's wedding in October, pleasant as punch. Said he knew you were here. Said it the way men say things when they think they're holding the winning ticket." Rain worked at the windows. The green neon bled through the glass and pooled on the wet pavement outside. "There's a girl," Carys said. "Bronwen. Twenty-three if she's that. He took the glass out of her hand at the reception. 'She's had enough,' smiling. And I stood there with my champagne and smiled back, because that is what you do at weddings." The glass came down harder than she meant. "I did nothing, Aurora. Again. I know what doing nothing costs now. I've been paying it off for four years and the interest is a disgrace." "You couldn't have stopped him." "No. But I could have stood next to you while he did it." Carys looked at her then, properly, the way she had at Roath Park with a cardigan pressed to a ten-year-old's wrist. "That's the bit I can't put down. I let you carry it alone because alone was tidier for everyone." The bookcase door opened and shut. One of the suits crossed to the Gents, humming. Silas chose that moment to come down the bar, unhurried, his knee dragging its usual half-beat behind him. He set a folded beermat on the wood between them. "Rory." "Si." "Tuesday. A man came in before the rush. Good coat, wrong shoes, too clean for the weather we're having. Well-spoken." His signet ring clicked once against the bar. "Asked for Aurora Carter by name. Said he was an old friend." The hum of the neon filled the space where Rory's answer should have been. "I told him no one by that name drank here. He left this all the same. I meant to burn it." Silas looked at Carys, then back. "Then I heard Clerkenwell." Neither of them touched the beermat. It sat there, damp at the corners, the raven logo facing up. Carys reached first. She turned it over with one lacquered nail, read the two words written across it in black ink, and went the colour of old paper. "It's addressed to Laila," she said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"His signet ring clicked once [once]"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.261
leniency0.522
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.029
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1264
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.04% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1264
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences53
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences53
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences103
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1264
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
31.39% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount548
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.37
worstName"Carys"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
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Rory10
Carys13
Cardiff1
Strand1
Silas5
Rioja1
Roath1
Park1
Gents1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Carys"
2"Silas"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Roath"
3"Park"
globalScore0.314
windowScore0.5
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a laugh, and drank at last"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1264
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences103
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean18.87
std17.07
cv0.905
sampleLengths
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250
31
417
540
611
720
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921
1057
116
1223
134
142
152
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173
183
1938
2019
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224
238
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2522
266
2729
2825
2929
302
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3211
3312
348
3514
3618
372
3865
396
406
413
429
434
4423
4532
4629
478
4833
4935
98.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences53
matches
0"being asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs100
matches
0"wasn't shaking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences103
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount554
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.030685920577617327
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0018050541516245488
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences103
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences103
mean12.27
std10.02
cv0.817
sampleLengths
012
13
26
344
41
517
613
715
812
911
1011
119
125
133
1416
155
1615
1711
1811
1920
206
2121
222
234
242
252
2620
2714
283
293
3038
3119
321
334
348
3517
368
375
3822
396
4019
4110
423
4322
447
4522
462
4726
486
495
77.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.49514563106796117
totalSentences103
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences47
matches
0"Then he reached for glasses,"
1"Somewhere behind the bookcase a"
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences47
matches
0"His eyes moved from the"
1"Her sleeve found it anyway."
2"She turned the glass by"
3"He topped up the Rioja"
4"She was aware of them,"
5"He set a folded beermat"
6"His signet ring clicked once"
7"It sat there, damp at"
8"She turned it over with"
ratio0.191
13.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences47
matches
0"The spring rolls were still"
1"Nobody in London called her"
2"Rory turned with the delivery"
3"Silas took the bag from"
4"His eyes moved from the"
5"Laughter rose, then muffled, as"
6"Carys stayed where she was."
7"Rory pulled out the next"
8"Carys unwrapped the scarf"
9"Somebody had sanded her vowels"
10"Silas reached for the bottle"
11"Carys took in the maps,"
12"Carys accepted the wine, turned"
13"Rory opened a carton and"
14"Carys's gaze dropped to Rory's"
15"Rory had stopped hiding it"
16"Her sleeve found it anyway."
17"The wine turned in her"
18"The neon hummed."
19"Rory set the spring roll"
ratio0.894
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Rory turned with the delivery bag half off her shoulder and found a woman in a green silk scarf inside the door, rain bright on her dark coat, one hand still on…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Carys pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.072
leniency0.145
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.029
90.0382%