Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TBHKR0489ADXG18VC4XGYC

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3m 26s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory had the chain off and the second deadbolt turned before her brain caught up with her hands. Eva had a key. Eva's paranoia had three deadbolts, and Rory had just opened all of them for a knock. Lucien Moreau filled the doorway like a rumour she'd spent six weeks denying. Charcoal suit. Ivory cane. Platinum hair slicked back from a face that had no business looking that rested, and the eyes, one amber, one black, both taking her apart with professional interest. "Bonsoir, Rory." "No." She swung the door shut. The cane stopped it, ivory against the paint, gentle as a handshake and immovable as a mortgage. "Move your stick." "Cane." "Move it or I'll snap it over my knee." "You'd chip the ivory. It's older than your parliament." "Five seconds, Lucien." "Show me your left wrist, and I'll go." Her thumb moved to cover the inside of her wrist before she could stop it. He watched it happen. He watched everything. It was his whole rotten profession. "Why." "Because if I'm wrong, you get to say so for the rest of your life, and we both know how you'd savour that." Downstairs, the curry house's extractor fan hummed through the floorboards. The landing light buzzed. Rory kept her hand where it was. "When did it start?" The French in him surfaced when he lowered his voice, all the consonants going soft. "Start what." "Rory." Four languages in his mouth, and he used none of them. Just her name, like a key he'd kept. "Three days. It's a rash." "It isn't." "You don't know that." "Say the name you signed at the auction." Her stomach dropped clean through the floorboards and into the balti pans below. "Malphora," he said, when she didn't. The lamp in the hall flickered. She opened the door wide. "Ten minutes." He crossed the threshold and paused, one polished shoe above the line of salt she'd poured that week and told no one about. "You laid salt." "Eva's notes." "Effective against almost nothing." He stepped over it without breaking it. "Charming against me." Ptolemy shot down the hallway and wound himself around Lucien's ankles, purring like a tiny tabby traitor. "Bonsoir, Ptolémée." "He does that for the curry man." "The curry man doesn't bring him sardines." "You've been feeding Eva's cat." "I've been in the neighbourhood." The flat was its usual beautiful disaster. Books fanned open on every surface, scrolls pinned under mugs, index cards in Eva's handwriting creeping up the walls. Turmeric and old paper. Lucien took it all in the way he took in everything, once and completely, the way other people read contracts. Then he went to the window and checked the street through the gap in the curtains. She hated that he did it. She hated more that it steadied her. "Two months ago you walked me into an auction under a false name." "A borrowed name. There's a difference." "Enlighten me." "Malphora is a hollow name. A dead house of Avaros. No heirs, no claimants, nobody to object. I needed a pedigree to get you past the door, and dead names don't complain." "This one does." "So it seems." "You signed me into a debt house like a hire car." "The ledger was a formality." "The ledger was in blood, Lucien." "Everything in Avaros is in blood. They find ink vulgar." He said it the way other men said they find falafel overrated. Rory folded her arms and kept her left wrist tucked out of sight. "So explain the rash." "In my father's country, debt is the nearest thing they have to scripture. The Auditors are its clergy. The tithe on the Malphora accounts falls due tonight, at midnight, and it collects from the signer." "I didn't sign anything real." "You signed a dead name in living blood. In Avaros, that's fraud." "Then un-fraud it. You're the fixer. Fix." Something crossed his face, quick and tired. "I spent six weeks across the border buying your note. The principal belongs to me now. Congratulations. Your debt is mine." "You're my creditor." "I prefer patron." "I prefer your funeral." "Fraud can't be purchased, Rory. Only answered. Before the Audit, in person, or under the protection of a house name freely given." The lamp hummed. Ptolemy leapt onto the sofa arm between them, looked from one face to the other, and left. Even the cat wouldn't take sides. "You vanished." "I was crossing a border that doesn't stamp the passports of half-breeds. It took time." "You could have written." "You changed your number." "You'd have found it. You find everything." "Yes." No smile. "Finding you was never the problem. Being allowed to stay was." She looked at the books, the salt line, anywhere but at him. "The night after the auction. The roof. You were going to say something." "So were you." "I found the ledger page the next morning." "I know. You left it on my desk. Very theatrical." "Don't." "Give me your hand." "You're not my doctor." "I'm your creditor. Collateral inspection." She almost laughed. That was the worst of him. He could always find the one joke that lived in her. He peeled his gloves off, finger by finger, unhurried, and her mouth went dry for reasons she refused to discuss with herself. His knuckles were split. Both hands. Old bruises gone yellow at the edges, fresh ones laid over the top like a second signature. She didn't ask. He saw her not asking. She held out her left wrist. The crescent scar sat pale and familiar, and his thumb stopped on it first. "This one I remember." "Everyone remembers the ones they didn't cause." "I remember all of yours." Beside the scar, the mark. A scrawl of script, faint, the colour of a scar healing backwards. It warmed under his thumb. The amber eye flared. The black one swallowed the lamplight whole. "Midnight," he said. "You came at half eleven at night to tell me I have cursed eczema." "I came at half eleven because midnight is when the tithe falls due." His thumb hadn't moved from her wrist. "There is one protection the Audit honours. A house name, freely given. Wear mine. A year and a day." "You want to marry me for tax reasons." "I want you breathing. The paperwork is incidental." "And if it were only paperwork, Lucien?" He stepped in. Clove and cold air and a thread of smoke, Avaros still clinging to him like a country that didn't want to let him leave. "Then I'd have offered it six weeks ago, on a roof, in the middle of the sentence you didn't let me finish." Her heart did something undisciplined. Her wrist flared hot. She hissed and pulled back, and from the hallway Ptolemy yowled, tail a bottlebrush, every hair aimed at the front door. The lamp flame lay down flat. The turmeric smell vanished, and in its place came cold incense and wet stone. Tick. The first deadbolt turned on its own. Tick. The second. Lucien moved. The blade slid out of the cane with a sound like a secret, and he put himself between her and the door without seeming to hurry. "Rory. Say my name. Any of them. It counts if you mean it." "You pick your moments." "I've had worse. None come to mind." The third deadbolt turned. The door opened. The corridor stood empty. The landing light was out. From the stairwell came the patient sound of pages turning, one by one, and then a voice, courteous, bored, eternal. "Malphora. The Audit will see you now."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.064
leniency0.128
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"stomach"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"stomach"
1"flickered"
2"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences77
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1267
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount702
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory4
Moreau1
French1
Ptolemy3
Lucien4
Eva3
Avaros1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Moreau"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Eva"
5"Avaros"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1267
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences149
matches
0"poured that week"
1"hated that he"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs103
mean12.3
std12.81
cv1.041
sampleLengths
038
145
22
31
422
53
61
79
89
93
108
1128
121
1323
1421
154
1615
172
1820
195
202
214
228
2313
2412
257
2623
273
282
2914
3017
312
327
337
345
355
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3713
386
392
4032
413
423
4311
445
456
4610
4725
484
4935
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs134
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences149
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount702
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.02564102564102564
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0014245014245014246
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean8.5
std6.88
cv0.809
sampleLengths
018
14
216
313
42
52
628
72
81
95
1017
113
121
139
149
153
168
1715
184
193
206
211
2223
2310
244
257
264
2715
282
2912
308
315
322
334
348
3513
366
376
385
392
4023
413
422
4311
443
4517
462
477
487
495
58.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.40939597315436244
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners61
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences68
matches
0"Just her name, like a"
1"Then he went to the"
2"Even the cat wouldn't take"
ratio0.044
61.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences68
matches
0"She swung the door shut."
1"Her thumb moved to cover"
2"He watched it happen."
3"He watched everything."
4"It was his whole rotten"
5"Her stomach dropped clean through"
6"he said, when she didn't"
7"She opened the door wide."
8"He crossed the threshold and"
9"He stepped over it without"
10"She hated that he did"
11"She hated more that it"
12"He said it the way"
13"She looked at the books,"
14"She almost laughed."
15"He could always find the"
16"He peeled his gloves off,"
17"His knuckles were split."
18"She didn't ask."
19"He saw her not asking."
ratio0.397
18.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences68
matches
0"Rory had the chain off"
1"Eva had a key."
2"Eva's paranoia had three deadbolts,"
3"Lucien Moreau filled the doorway"
4"Platinum hair slicked back from"
5"She swung the door shut."
6"The cane stopped it, ivory"
7"Her thumb moved to cover"
8"He watched it happen."
9"He watched everything."
10"It was his whole rotten"
11"Downstairs, the curry house's extractor"
12"The landing light buzzed."
13"Rory kept her hand where"
14"The French in him surfaced"
15"Her stomach dropped clean through"
16"he said, when she didn't"
17"The lamp in the hall"
18"She opened the door wide."
19"He crossed the threshold and"
ratio0.882
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Platinum hair slicked back from a face that had no business looking that rested, and the eyes, one amber, one black, both taking her apart with professional int…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.026
leniency0.051
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.6145%