Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TBS726K64QTWQVRXND5ENK

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Duration:
1m 23s
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$0.073215
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt stuck, the way it always did, and by the time Rory wrestled it free she had already decided who stood on the other side. She was wrong, and being wrong cost her a full second of staring. Lucien Moreau filled the doorway like a rumour. Platinum hair slipped loose from its usual slick order. Charcoal suit, wet at the shoulder. And along his left side, beneath the open coat, a red bloom ate through his shirt, patient as ink in water. "You're bleeding on the doorstep." "My blood. My dry-cleaning bill." The mismatched eyes found her, one amber, one black, and did the thing where they visited her mouth before her eyes. "Hello, Rory." "Eight months." She kept her shoulder behind the door. "Most people text." "Most people have your number." "So do you." "Had." A beat. "You changed it." Ptolemy shouldered past her ankle, fat and fearless, and froze at the sight of the Frenchman. The tabby's tail bottle-brushed. Then, traitorously, he purred. "He remembers you." "He remembers I feed him from my fork." Lucien's smile cost him something. She watched him spend it. "Shall we argue indoors like civilised people, or would you prefer I bleed out on Eva's mat? It says welcome. Ironic, either way." She stepped aside. "Drip on the lino. She'll kill me if you stain the rug." He entered the way he always did, as if rooms rearranged themselves to suit him, cane tapping a soft tip-tap across the floorboards. She shot all three bolts behind him. The flat did its usual impersonation of a library explosion, Eva's books on every surface, scrolls rubber-banded along the windowsill, a mug by the sink growing something ambitious. Turmeric and old paper. Her own rain jacket steamed on its hook, still smelling of sesame oil from the Golden Empress run. "Bathroom cabinet," she said. "Green box. Don't touch anything else." "Your faith in me is touching." "My faith in you bled out in Antwerp." That landed. She saw it land, the small pause in his shoulders, and hated the satisfaction it gave her. When she came back with the kit he had folded himself onto the only clear chair, coat off, shirt unbuttoned, the ruin of him on display. The cut ran along his ribs, shallow but long, the work of someone in a hurry. Around it, the old geography she knew by heart, and one pale scar she didn't, high on his chest, still pink at the edges. "That's new." "Occupational hazard." "Whose occupation?" "Yours, indirectly." He watched her soak the gauze. "Someone bought a name last night. In a room I do business in, from a broker I drink with. Paid in old coin, no questions answered, which means questions were the whole point." "Nobody's buying anything worth my attention." "Not Aurora Carter." He didn't flinch when the antiseptic touched him. He had never flinched. She used to find that admirable. "The other name." Her hands stopped. The word sat between them without him saying it. Malphora. A name she had worn once, for one job, his job, and buried in a churchyard in her head with everything else from that week. "That name is dead." "Names don't die in my world, chérie. They appreciate." "Don't call me that." "You used to like it." "I used to like a lot of things." She pressed the gauze harder than the wound required. He breathed out through his nose, slow, and let her. "Who bought it?" "That's the interesting part. The broker wouldn't say, and brokers always say, once you've known them long enough to own their debts. So I bought the silence back." A muscle moved in his jaw. "It cost me a client I liked and a knee I didn't. Then I came here." "You're saying you got carved up on my behalf and you want, what, gratitude?" "I'm saying the buyer knew things. The job, the city, the year. Details that lived in exactly two heads." The amber eye fixed on her. "Mine is accounted for." "You're asking if I talked." "I'm asking nothing. I'm sitting in your friend's chair, ruining her upholstery, because you are the only person in London I would bleed towards instead of away from." His voice stayed level, which was worse than shouting. "Make of that what you will." The gauze had gone red. She swapped it out, and her fingers found the tape, and his skin was warm under her hands, familiar in a way that made her chest do something unhelpful. Eight months. Eight months of a new number and a new route to work and telling Eva, no, she didn't think about him, no, not even when it rained. "You told me to run," she said. "On that roof. You said run, and I ran." "And I admired the commitment. You didn't even look back." "You were supposed to follow." "I was supposed to do a great many things." His hand came up, unhurried, and closed around her left wrist. Not gripping. Resting. His thumb found the small crescent scar there, the childhood one, the one he had once kissed in a Marseilles hotel room like it was holy. "I followed eventually. You'd changed the locks." "You never asked me to stay." The words came out quieter than she intended. The flat hummed around them, the fridge, the curry house's extractor fan below, Ptolemy's purr from the arm of the sofa. Lucien looked up at her, and for once the fixer's face had nothing fixed about it, nothing brokered, nothing sold. "No," he said. "I never asked. I have rehearsed asking, in four languages, all of them cowardly." "Say it in one." He rose from the chair. She became aware, in order, of the tape still in her hand, of his ribs half-wrapped, of the six inches of air between them and how little of it was hers. His thumb moved once across the scar. Ptolemy stopped purring. The cat stood rigid on the sofa arm, staring at the window, and a sound came out of him that Rory had never heard from anything with a face that small. Low. Continuous. The extractor fan's hum died. The street noise died with it, the mopeds, the drunks, theBrick Lane Friday, all of it gone, as if someone had pressed the world against wool. Frost feathered across the inside of the glass. Lucien moved before she did. The ivory handle of his cane twisted, and a slim blade slid out of it, whisper-quiet, and he put himself between her and the door with the ease of a man who had done it before and lied about it. "You said you lost them in Whitechapel." "I lost the ones I could see." The first deadbolt turned on its own. Then the second. The third deadbolt stuck, the way it always did, and the whole door shuddered in its frame as something on the other side leaned its weight against the wood and spoke her name through the gap. Not Aurora. The other one, in a voice like a coin dragged across stone. Rory reached past Lucien, opened the cutlery drawer, and took out Eva's biggest knife. "Eva's going to kill me," she said, and the third bolt gave way.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.269
leniency0.538
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1213
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1213
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"familiar"
2"whisper"
3"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences71
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences71
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1213
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
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wordCount821
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
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Moreau1
Ptolemy3
Frenchman1
Eva3
Golden1
Empress1
Marseilles1
Lane1
Friday1
Aurora1
Lucien5
persons
0"Rory"
1"Moreau"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Eva"
4"Lucien"
places
0"Golden"
1"Marseilles"
2"Lane"
3"Friday"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1213
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean22.46
std21.92
cv0.976
sampleLengths
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144
25
328
412
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63
76
824
93
1041
1115
1280
1310
146
158
1685
172
182
192
2041
216
2224
233
2435
254
269
274
285
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3050
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335
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3563
3616
3710
385
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406
4149
4217
434
4443
453
4664
478
4845
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs129
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences108
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount826
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.01937046004842615
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0036319612590799033
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
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std9.81
cv0.873
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143
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164
174
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1913
205
2123
223
2312
2423
257
2628
274
2818
294
306
316
328
332
3417
3526
3616
3724
382
392
402
418
4233
436
4411
454
466
473
483
499
74.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4722222222222222
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences59
matches
0"Then, traitorously, he purred."
1"Then the second."
ratio0.034
64.07% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences59
matches
0"She was wrong, and being"
1"She kept her shoulder behind"
2"She watched him spend it."
3"She stepped aside."
4"He entered the way he"
5"She shot all three bolts"
6"Her own rain jacket steamed"
7"She saw it land, the"
8"He watched her soak the"
9"He didn't flinch when the"
10"He had never flinched."
11"She used to find that"
12"Her hands stopped."
13"She pressed the gauze harder"
14"He breathed out through his"
15"His voice stayed level, which"
16"She swapped it out, and"
17"His hand came up, unhurried,"
18"His thumb found the small"
19"He rose from the chair."
ratio0.39
19.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences59
matches
0"The third deadbolt stuck, the"
1"She was wrong, and being"
2"Lucien Moreau filled the doorway"
3"Platinum hair slipped loose from"
4"Charcoal suit, wet at the"
5"The mismatched eyes found her,"
6"She kept her shoulder behind"
7"Ptolemy shouldered past her ankle,"
8"The tabby's tail bottle-brushed."
9"Lucien's smile cost him something"
10"She watched him spend it."
11"She stepped aside."
12"He entered the way he"
13"She shot all three bolts"
14"The flat did its usual"
15"Her own rain jacket steamed"
16"She saw it land, the"
17"The cut ran along his"
18"He watched her soak the"
19"He didn't flinch when the"
ratio0.881
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
28.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He entered the way he always did, as if rooms rearranged themselves to suit him, cane tapping a soft tip-tap across the floorboards."
1"She swapped it out, and her fingers found the tape, and his skin was warm under her hands, familiar in a way that made her chest do something unhelpful."
2"The street noise died with it, the mopeds, the drunks, theBrick Lane Friday, all of it gone, as if someone had pressed the world against wool."
3"The ivory handle of his cane twisted, and a slim blade slid out of it, whisper-quiet, and he put himself between her and the door with the ease of a man who had…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.096
leniency0.192
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.038
88.9849%