Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TC2HNV94ZQVG8SFKVE2MSQ

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1m 8s
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$0.097316
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The oaks at the edge of Richmond Park were not where Rory had left them. She stopped on the wet grass and checked the path behind her. The deer had vanished, though she had heard them moving through the bracken a minute before. The last of the London light hung low and iron-grey beyond the trees, and her breath smoked in the cold. December had stripped the branches bare. It should have smelled of rain and rotting leaves. Instead, a thread of sweetness curled through the air, too faint to name. Honey. Warm earth. Something green and crushed. "You see it too," she said. Nyx stood beside her without quite standing on the ground. In the failing light they were taller than they had been on the street, six feet and more of shadow gathered into a human shape, their edges eating what little colour remained. Only their eyes burned clear, a faint violet glow where a face should have been. "I see a door pretending not to be one," Nyx whispered. The wind carried their voice from somewhere behind her left ear, though their mouth, if they had one, never moved. "Doors in this place rarely open both ways." Between the oaks, seven standing stones leaned together in a ring too small for comfort. Rory had walked this part of the park before, with takeaway coffees and Eva complaining about her boots, and she would have sworn on her unfinished law degree there had been nothing here but mud and a fallen log. Now lichen veined the stones in spirals. Snow had begun to fall beyond the trees, thin white flecks that melted before they reached the ring. Her phone said 4:47. She watched the minute hold, refuse to turn, then flicker back to 4:46. "Time's wrong," she said. "Time is polite here," Nyx said. "It waits to be invited." That was not reassuring. Rory rubbed her thumb over the small crescent scar on her left wrist, an old habit she had never quite broken, and took out the Heartstone without deciding to. The crimson gem lay against her palm, thumbnail-small on its silver chain. For weeks it had carried its own treacherous warmth, pulsing whenever something from Hel pressed too close to the world. Now it was cool. Not dead. Listening. Beyond the stones, the air shivered. At first she thought it was heat-haze, impossible in the cold. Then the shimmer deepened, a distortion like breath on glass, and through it she saw colours that could not belong to a winter evening in Richmond. Gold pooled where there should have been shadow. Flowers lifted blue faces from grass that was suddenly, impossibly green. Rory's heart kicked hard once. "That is the Veil," Nyx said, and for the first time their whisper came from directly beside her, as if even they did not trust themselves to be overheard. "Thin enough to step through. Thin enough to tear." "And Isolde is in there." "Isolde is the reason the grove tolerates visitors. Do not mistake tolerance for welcome." "Noted." Rory tucked the pendant back beneath her coat. Her bright blue eyes stayed on the shimmer. Cardiff common sense, her mother's voice, her father's courtroom logic — none of it had prepared a vocabulary for this. She made do. "We don't eat anything. We don't give our full names to anything that asks. We stay on the path." "There may not be a path." "Then we stay together." Nyx's head inclined. Their shadow thinned at the shoulder and rewove itself. "A sound plan. The grove will enjoy dismantling it." Rory stepped between the stones. The cold did not fade; it was taken. One stride her boots squeaked on frost, the next they pressed into warm, springy turf that gave off the scent of rain after sun. Sound changed in her ears with a soft pop. Traffic, dogs, the distant complaint of a plane over Heathrow — gone. In their place came water running somewhere out of sight, and a layered birdsong so rich it took her a moment to understand no single bird was singing. Each note arrived a fraction after its echo, as if the grove were remembering the song rather than making it. She turned. The stones stood behind her, but Richmond Park did not. Grey winter showed through the gap in a narrow, wavering slice, already distant, like a picture hung at the far end of a corridor. Snow fell through that slice and stopped mid-air at the threshold, melting into sparks. "Oh," Rory said quietly. "That's —" Words failed in a way she resented. Wonder rose through the fear, clean and embarrassing as childhood. Wildflowers crowded the clearing in defiance of season: bluebells beside foxgloves, primroses opening under roses, white blossom drifting from branches heavy with autumn fruit. Every bloom she named belonged to a different month. Together they made the air thick and dizzying. Above them, the canopy braided oak and silver birch and trees she could not identify, their leaves turning slowly though there was no wind, showing first green, then gold, then a translucent underside veined with light. The light had no source. It lay amber over everything, not sunset and not morning, and in it Nyx kept losing definition. Their form guttered. One moment they were solid enough that grass bent beneath them; the next, Rory could see flowers through their chest. Nyx noticed her looking. "The shadows here are not empty," they said. "They object to being worn." "Can you stay?" "For now." Their violet eyes narrowed. "Do not follow me if I come apart. A shadow separated from its shape may return wearing another." Rory filed that under things she would absolutely worry about later. She crouched and pressed her palm to the ground. Warmth pulsed up through the soil, slow and regular. For one horrifying second she was certain the grove had a heartbeat, and that it had just noticed hers. She stood too quickly. "There's a path." "Now there is," Nyx said. The flowers had drawn apart ahead of them, revealing a track of pale earth no wider than her shoulders. It had not been there when she looked a breath before. Or she had not been permitted to see it. The distinction felt important and unhelpful. They followed it deeper. The grove expanded as they walked. That was the only honest word for it. Trees Rory had taken for a boundary kept retreating beyond new clearings. A stream crossed the path, running uphill over black stones, its water so clear that the pebbles below seemed magnified and edged in silver. Tiny fish turned in it, and each fish cast two shadows, one following, one darting ahead as though it knew where the fish would choose to go. Rory stopped on the narrow bridge of roots. "That's not possible." "Here, possible is a local custom." Nyx glided over the water without using the bridge at all, and landed less solid than before. "You are thinking too loudly. The place hears appetite better than speech. Want carefully." She wanted, suddenly and sharply, to run back. She wanted Evan's voice to stop being the thing that had chased her from Cardiff. She wanted her mother to understand why law had felt like a room with no windows. She wanted answers about the pendant and Hel and why a delivery job at the Golden Empress had become the least strange part of her life. The flowers along the bank leaned toward her, faces opening wider. Rory took her foot off the bridge and set it firmly back on the path. "Nice try," she told the grove. Somewhere among the trees, something laughed with wet leaves. They went on. The deeper they travelled, the more her senses disagreed with one another. She heard the scent of rain before it darkened the leaves. The amber light tasted faintly of copper on the back of her tongue. When she brushed a fern, the frond recoiled, then curled affectionately around her wrist until she shook it free. Her skin prickled. The small hairs on her arms lifted, not from cold, but from the attention of the place. Every branch seemed to hold its pose only while observed. Out of the corner of her eye, trunks shifted. Looked at directly, they were innocent. The path forked around a tree whose roots had grown over a stone chair. On the chair sat a bowl of black water. In the water, Rory saw the flat above Silas' bar, her own narrow bed, the window lit as she had left it that morning. Then the reflection rippled, though no breeze touched it, and she saw the same room at night with the door open and a man standing inside whom she would not, could not, look at long enough to name. Her hand went to the Heartstone. It had warmed by a single degree. "Don't," Nyx said. Rory jerked back. She had been leaning toward the bowl without knowing she had moved. "The grove offers mirrors to the lost." Nyx's whisper scraped thin. "It rarely returns the same face." "I'm not lost," she said, and was annoyed by how much effort the sentence required. "No," said a woman's voice from behind the tree. "You are merely not yet found." Rory turned so fast the world dragged. Isolde Varga stepped from between two trunks that had definitely been touching a moment ago. Silver hair fell to her waist, unbound, unsnarled by branch or bramble. Her pale lavender eyes held Rory with an ageless calm that offered no comfort at all. She was shorter than Rory, ethereal in a way that made the flowers seem coarse, and when she walked down the path her feet disturbed nothing. Rory looked, because she could not help it. Damp earth. Fallen petals. No footprints. Nyx bowed. In their shadow, the gesture looked like a candle bowing in its own flame. "Seer." "Nightwhisper." Isolde's gaze moved over them, and the light dimmed where it touched their shape. "You bring me a Carter, a stone, and a winter that has forgotten its manners. Two of the three are dangerous." "You knew we were coming," Rory said. "I knew a coming," Isolde replied. "You have chosen to be its shape." She tilted her head, listening to something Rory could not hear. "Ask, then. But know that a true answer and a kind one are seldom sisters." "We need to know what the Heartstone is opening," Rory said. "And why it pulses near Hel. And whether Belphegor—" The grove stilled. It was worse than any sound. Birdsong cut off mid-note. The uphill stream froze in its bright arc. Even the leaves stopped turning. The name lay on the amber air like ash. Rory felt Nyx gather abruptly solid at her side, cold pressing through her coat where their arm almost touched hers. Isolde was no longer smiling. "Speak princes softly in borrowed gardens, Aurora Carter. Some hungers are flattered to be remembered where feasts are grown." "Dymas," Nyx murmured. "She means—" "I mean what I have said," Isolde said, and because Rory knew the old stories she understood at once: the seer could not lie. Every evasion was a shape around a truth, not a departure from it. "Walk with me. The heart of the grove dislikes being approached by those who stand still." There was no refusing, because the path had already closed behind them. Flowers stood shoulder-high where they had come through, woven tight with briar. Rory's phone buzzed once in her pocket. She took it out. No signal, no battery icon, only the time crawling in a circle: 4:47, 4:46, 4:47, 9:13, midnight. She put it away. They followed Isolde between trees older than London. Bark peeled in her passing to reveal eyes of pale wood that closed as Rory passed. The stream returned, whispering now in syllables just below recognition. At one point she heard Eva laugh, clear and close, and had to bite the inside of her cheek to keep from answering. At another, the smell of her father's study — paper, leather, rain on Cardiff stone — rolled from a hollow oak so powerfully that her eyes stung. Nothing emerged from the hollow. That restraint felt worse than if something had. The grove's centre opened without warning. A circle of grass lay under a sky that had no business above Richmond. Stars burned there in daylight amber, constellations arranged in spirals Rory did not recognise. At the middle rose a tree so vast its lowest branches vanished into cloud, its trunk split around a hollow filled with moonlight, though there was no moon. Beneath it, a pool reflected the stars. Along its edge, wildflowers bloomed white, all of them, as if colour itself bowed here. Isolde stopped at the pool. "Kneel," she said. "Why?" "Because the gift has waited longer than your line has borne your name, and gifts of the Courts grow teeth when kept waiting." Isolde reached into the hollow of the tree. Her hand went farther than the trunk should have allowed, past bark, past darkness, into that improbable moonlight. When it withdrew, she held a dagger. It was slender and leaf-shaped, wrought of a metal that was not silver but remembered it — moonsilver, cool and luminous, glowing faintly now as if the pool lent it light. Isolde offered it hilt-first. Even from a foot away, Rory felt the cold coming off the blade. "I can't take that," she said. "You can," Isolde said. "That is the difficulty the visions enjoy." "What is it for?" "Cutting what pretends a door is a wall. Parting wards. Reminding demons that older bargains than theirs still keep their edges." Isolde's lavender eyes flicked once toward Nyx, then back. "It will not love you. Fae things seldom do. But it may respect the hand that bleeds honestly." Rory took it. The cold bit clean through her palm, bracing as river water, and the blade's glow brightened where her fingers closed. Around them, the white flowers turned their faces toward her in perfect silence. Her heart was hammering. The pendant warmed at last against her chest — not with the warning pulse she knew from Hel-touched places, but in slow answer, crimson to moonsilver, as if two distant things had recognised one another across her body. From far beyond the grove, muffled and impossible, a church clock struck. Isolde looked up at the star-torn amber sky. "When you step out," she said, "the park will tell you a story about lost minutes. Believe it no more than you must." "How long have we been here?" Rory asked. Isolde walked back toward a path that had not existed until her first step imagined it, and left no footprints on the grass. "Long enough," she said, "for the world outside to have missed you. Not long enough, I think, for what follows you to have given up." Rory closed her hand around the cold blade and followed her deeper, while behind her Nyx came apart into the grove's bright shadows and gathered themselves again, step by uneasy step, in her wake.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory said quietly [quietly]"
1"Isolde's lavender eyes flicked once [once]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.517
leniency1
rawRatio0.065
effectiveRatio0.065
86.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2518
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"sharply"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
2"quickly"
3"carefully"
4"sharply"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2518
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"flicker"
count1
1
word"treacherous"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"wavering"
count1
6
word"absolutely"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"firmly"
count1
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"treacherous"
2"warmth"
3"whisper"
4"echo"
5"wavering"
6"absolutely"
7"pulsed"
8"firmly"
9"flicked"
10"perfect"
11"silence"
12"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences186
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences186
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences215
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2524
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount2066
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond4
Park2
Rory30
London2
Nyx16
Eva2
Heartstone2
Hel3
Heathrow1
Words1
Evan1
Cardiff3
Golden1
Empress1
Varga1
Isolde13
Hel-touched1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Eva"
3"Heathrow"
4"Words"
5"Evan"
6"Empress"
7"Varga"
8"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Heartstone"
4"Hel"
5"Cardiff"
6"Golden"
7"Hel-touched"
globalScore0.774
windowScore0.333
91.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences129
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed magnified and edged in silver"
1"felt like a room with no windows"
2"looked like a candle bowing in its own fl"
81.14% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.189
wordCount2524
matches
0"not from cold, but from the attention of the place"
1"not silver but remembered it"
2"not with the warning pulse she knew from Hel-touched places, but in slow answer, crimson to moonsilver, as if two distant thi"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences215
matches
0"through that slice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs80
mean31.55
std28.38
cv0.9
sampleLengths
015
163
220
36
457
539
679
717
84
911
1072
116
1256
135
1438
155
1614
1759
186
194
2021
215
22101
2350
246
2594
2645
2717
283
2924
3048
317
325
3345
344
3577
3611
3737
3865
3911
4021
419
42103
4385
4413
453
4615
4717
4815
4915
99.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences186
matches
0"was taken"
1"been permitted"
2"was annoyed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs353
matches
0"was singing"
1"were remembering"
2"was hammering"
49.83% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences215
ratio0.033
matches
0"Cardiff common sense, her mother's voice, her father's courtroom logic — none of it had prepared a vocabulary for this."
1"The cold did not fade; it was taken."
2"Traffic, dogs, the distant complaint of a plane over Heathrow — gone."
3"One moment they were solid enough that grass bent beneath them; the next, Rory could see flowers through their chest."
4"At another, the smell of her father's study — paper, leather, rain on Cardiff stone — rolled from a hollow oak so powerfully that her eyes stung."
5"It was slender and leaf-shaped, wrought of a metal that was not silver but remembered it — moonsilver, cool and luminous, glowing faintly now as if the pool lent it light."
6"The pendant warmed at last against her chest — not with the warning pulse she knew from Hel-touched places, but in slow answer, crimson to moonsilver, as if two distant things had recognised one another across her body."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount908
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.034140969162995596
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.009911894273127754
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences215
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences215
mean11.74
std8.33
cv0.709
sampleLengths
015
112
216
320
46
59
613
71
82
94
106
1110
1232
1315
1411
1520
168
1715
1839
197
2018
214
2213
234
246
255
264
2729
2812
2920
304
312
321
336
3411
3526
368
3711
385
3929
409
415
4214
439
448
4520
463
4719
486
494
67.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4232558139534884
totalSentences215
uniqueOpeners91
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences160
matches
0"Instead, a thread of sweetness"
1"Only their eyes burned clear,"
2"Then the shimmer deepened, a"
3"Somewhere among the trees, something"
4"Then the reflection rippled, though"
5"Even the leaves stopped turning."
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences160
matches
0"She stopped on the wet"
1"It should have smelled of"
2"Her phone said 4:47."
3"She watched the minute hold,"
4"Her bright blue eyes stayed"
5"She made do."
6"Their shadow thinned at the"
7"It lay amber over everything,"
8"Their form guttered."
9"Their violet eyes narrowed"
10"She crouched and pressed her"
11"She stood too quickly."
12"It had not been there"
13"They followed it deeper."
14"She wanted, suddenly and sharply,"
15"She wanted Evan's voice to"
16"She wanted her mother to"
17"She wanted answers about the"
18"she told the grove"
19"They went on."
ratio0.225
91.25% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount118
totalSentences160
matches
0"The oaks at the edge"
1"She stopped on the wet"
2"The deer had vanished, though"
3"The last of the London"
4"December had stripped the branches"
5"It should have smelled of"
6"Something green and crushed."
7"Nyx stood beside her without"
8"The wind carried their voice"
9"Rory had walked this part"
10"Snow had begun to fall"
11"Her phone said 4:47."
12"She watched the minute hold,"
13"That was not reassuring."
14"Rory rubbed her thumb over"
15"The crimson gem lay against"
16"Gold pooled where there should"
17"Flowers lifted blue faces from"
18"Rory's heart kicked hard once."
19"Nyx said, and for the"
ratio0.738
93.75% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences160
matches
0"Now lichen veined the stones"
1"Now it was cool."
2"Even from a foot away,"
ratio0.019
89.29% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Flowers lifted blue faces from grass that was suddenly, impossibly green."
1"Above them, the canopy braided oak and silver birch and trees she could not identify, their leaves turning slowly though there was no wind, showing first green,…"
2"Tiny fish turned in it, and each fish cast two shadows, one following, one darting ahead as though it knew where the fish would choose to go."
3"She was shorter than Rory, ethereal in a way that made the flowers seem coarse, and when she walked down the path her feet disturbed nothing."
4"It was slender and leaf-shaped, wrought of a metal that was not silver but remembered it — moonsilver, cool and luminous, glowing faintly now as if the pool len…"
5"The pendant warmed at last against her chest — not with the warning pulse she knew from Hel-touched places, but in slow answer, crimson to moonsilver, as if two…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags31
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Isolde's gaze moved, and the light dimmed where it touched their shape"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.367
leniency0.733
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.067
91.7887%