Run: 2026-10-13-01M4TC5QRBG8S1NASX8FHM0EXX

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2m 4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Nobody had called her Aurora in three years, so the name slid past her the first time. It came again with the surname attached, and her hand stopped on the glass. "Aurora Carter. As I live and breathe." The Raven's Nest hummed its low tune, a dozen conversations folded into one another, ice cracking in the well, the green neon buzzing through the window glass. Rory stood at the end of the bar with her delivery jacket still on, counting Yu-Fei's float into the till while Silas pulled a pint for a man who'd been nursing the same Guinness since she came in. She knew every voice in the room. This one she knew from somewhere else entirely. She turned. Nia Pritchard wore her hair at the jaw now, and a coat that cost more than Rory's rent, but the tilt of the head hadn't changed. Mooting finals. Third row. Warm white wine in plastic cups and a solemn vow to take the Western Circuit by storm. "Nia." "You didn't turn around." "You said it wrong. Nobody uses the whole thing unless they're selling something or serving papers." "I'm a barrister. The whole thing's an occupational hazard." Nia opened her arms. Rory lifted the float tin onto the bar between them, and they both pretended the tin had been the plan all along. "You're thinner." "You're posher." "Chambers makes us wear the armour." Nia slipped onto a stool and took in the old maps, the black-and-white photographs climbing the wall, the smell of wet wool and lime. "Chablis, if there is such a thing in an establishment like this." Silas set a glass down without a word. He'd heard. He always heard. "Since when do you drink wine with a stem?" "Since the tax man started buying." The old half-smile. "You still on snakebite?" "I deliver for a Chinese restaurant and live above a bar. I drink what's free." The words landed harder than she meant them to. Nia turned the glass by its stem, and for a moment the only sound was the neon. "What are you doing in Soho?" "Junior on a fraud at the Bailey. My instructing solicitor stood me up, and your green light looked like the least disappointing thing on the street." A beat. "Eva's mother told mine you were in London. That's all anyone's known for three years. London. Like saying the moon." Rory folded a tenner into a square, then unfolded it. "I send Mam money. She knows I'm alive." "Your father tells the golf club you're on a gap year." "It's been three years." "A long year, then." "You were top of the year, Aurora. You walked out of the evidence exam an hour early and they still marked you first." "You remember marks." "I remember what we were going to be. Carter and Pritchard. We were going to terrify the Western Circuit." "Pritchard and Carter. I was going to let you go first." "Charitable." Nia's smile didn't hold. She reached across the bar and caught Rory's left wrist, an old reflex, and her thumb found the small crescent scar under the cuff of the jacket. "Still there." "Mr Prosser's greenhouse. You held your cardigan to it and told me not to look." "You looked." "I always look. It's the problem." Nia let go slowly, the way you set down evidence you wish you'd never found. "I wrote to you. After you left. To your mam's address, it was all I had." "She forwarded them." "You read them." "They're in a shoebox under my bed. Unopened." Rory turned her glass a quarter of a circle. "They keep me honest." "That's a terrible sentence, Aurora." "It's the only one I've got." The Guinness man asked for a refill and Silas limped down the bar to him, signet ring glinting under the low lamps, his eyes doing a slow circuit of the room as they always did. Habit, Rory knew now. The kind you pick up in places where habits keep you breathing. "Second year," Nia said. "Your kitchen on Albany Road. I told you he was hollowing you out." "You said he was a parasite." "I said he fed on you, and you didn't ring me for a month." She drank. "I've replayed that kitchen for six years. The exact sentence. What I'd change." "You'd have lost me sooner with a better sentence." "I know. That's the bit I live with." Rory had no answer shaped for that, so she gave her the truth sideways. "You rang on my birthday. First year I was here." "You remembered." "The phone remembered." Silas came back down the bar with the house phone in hand. "Laila. Cheung's on the line. Archer Street order's gone walkabout." "Tell him the walkabout's a traffic warden with a God complex. I'll sort it." Nia waited until he'd limped out of earshot. "Laila." "Yu-Fei reckons Aurora's bad luck. Too many r's. Laila's what he settled on." "And Rory?" "London name." "What happened to the old one?" "She's in the shoebox with your letters." For a second Nia looked nine years old again, pressing a cardigan to a wound and begging her not to look. Then the barrister came back over her face like a visor, and Rory understood, with a small cold drop in her stomach, that the visit had a second purpose. Barristers don't land on a subject by accident. "I saw him at Christmas." No preamble. Riposte. "Pontcanna. He's doing conveyancing, of all the small grey things. He asked if I ever heard from you. I said no, we lost touch." The wine had stopped moving in her glass. "He knew you were in London, Aurora. He knew the restaurant. He knew the street." Rory's eyes went to the window. Trained reflex now, Silas' work, the way her feet knew the exits of every room she entered. Across the street, in the spill of green neon, a man stood facing the bar. Not smoking. Not checking a phone. Just facing it. She didn't know the build. She knew the stillness. "How long," Silas said at her shoulder. He hadn't limped up. He'd simply arrived. "Since the Chablis." His hand came to rest on the bar, the signet ring touching down once, a gavel ending something. "Malphora." Quiet, the way you'd say a prayer backwards. Nia stood too fast. The stool leg scraped. "What did he call you?" Somewhere behind the bar, a lock let go, and the bookshelf swung open on its dark seam. "Back room," Silas said. "Both of you. Now."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.127
leniency0.254
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1093
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1093
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"glinting"
count1
1
word"complex"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"complex"
2"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1093
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
64.38% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount584
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.71
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
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Raven1
Nest1
Yu-Fei1
Silas6
Guinness2
Pritchard1
Rory10
Western1
Circuit1
Nia10
Riposte1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Silas"
4"Pritchard"
5"Rory"
6"Nia"
places(empty)
globalScore0.644
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences31
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1093
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean15.84
std16.08
cv1.015
sampleLengths
031
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280
32
447
51
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716
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926
102
112
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1313
149
1513
1615
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2018
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224
234
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253
2619
2711
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336
3415
3516
363
373
3821
395
406
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4217
436
4429
459
468
4724
482
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs96
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences109
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount496
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.024193548387096774
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.006048387096774193
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean10.03
std8.25
cv0.822
sampleLengths
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327
438
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4527
462
4715
482
496
67.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.46788990825688076
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences46
matches
0"Then the barrister came back"
1"Just facing it."
2"Somewhere behind the bar, a"
ratio0.065
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences46
matches
0"It came again with the"
1"She knew every voice in"
2"He always heard."
3"She reached across the bar"
4"She didn't know the build."
5"She knew the stillness."
6"He hadn't limped up."
7"He'd simply arrived."
8"His hand came to rest"
ratio0.196
57.83% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount37
totalSentences46
matches
0"Nobody had called her Aurora"
1"It came again with the"
2"The Raven's Nest hummed its"
3"Rory stood at the end"
4"She knew every voice in"
5"This one she knew from"
6"Nia Pritchard wore her hair"
7"Nia opened her arms."
8"Rory lifted the float tin"
9"Nia slipped onto a stool"
10"Silas set a glass down"
11"He always heard."
12"The old half-smile"
13"The words landed harder than"
14"Nia turned the glass by"
15"Rory folded a tenner into"
16"Nia's smile didn't hold."
17"She reached across the bar"
18"Nia let go slowly, the"
19"Rory turned her glass a"
ratio0.804
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences46
matches(empty)
ratio0
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory stood at the end of the bar with her delivery jacket still on, counting Yu-Fei's float into the till while Silas pulled a pint for a man who'd been nursing…"
1"The Guinness man asked for a refill and Silas limped down the bar to him, signet ring glinting under the low lamps, his eyes doing a slow circuit of the room as…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.048
leniency0.095
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.4410%