Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1QFAR36CM1XY9CVSQ91AT

Run Details

Duration:
37.0s
Cost:
$0.025874
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The descent smelled of damp lime and iron filings. Detective Harlow Quinn counted the concrete steps down into the bowels of Camden, her boots striking the grit with the measured cadence of a drill sergeant. Ninety-two steps. The air grew thick, trading the exhaust fumes of North London for a stagnant chill that bit at the back of her throat. At the bottom, blue-and-white police tape fluttered across a rusted Bostwick gate. Beyond it lay a forgotten cavern of the London Underground, sealed off since the Blitz. Quinn ducked under the tape, her sharp jaw set. Halogen floodlights set up by the Scene of Crime Officers carved harsh, sterile squares out of the darkness, illuminating tiled walls wept with black sludge. She checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. 03:14. "You took your time, Guv." DS Miller stood near the edge of the disused platform, a Styrofoam cup steaming in his gloved hand. He looked crumpled, his collar wilted by the subterranean humidity. "Traffic on the Euston Road," Quinn said, pulling a pair of blue nitrile gloves from her coat pocket. They snapped tight against her wrists. "What have we got?" "A mess. Rave gone wrong, or a turf war between two very eccentric gangs." Miller gestured with his chin toward the center of the platform. "No body, mind you. Just the aftermath." Quinn stepped into the halo of the floodlights. Her brown eyes swept the scene, cataloging before interpreting. Eighteen years in the Met taught a copper that rooms spoke, provided you shut up long enough to listen. This room was screaming nonsense. Three wooden stalls, constructed from heavy, dark timber that looked centuries older than the surrounding Edwardian tiles, lay splintered near the tracks. This was no makeshift chipboard setup used by squatters. The wood was dense, carved with intricate interlocking geometric shapes that caught the halogen glare. Scattered across the concrete were shards of thick, blown glass, pooling liquids that shimmered with an oily, violet iridescence, and piles of greyish ash. In the center of the platform sat a puddle of blood. Dark, almost black, and entirely coagulated. "Walk me through your rave theory, Miller," Quinn said, crouching beside a shattered vial. The liquid inside hadn't seeped into the porous concrete; it beaded on the surface like mercury, vibrating to a rhythm she couldn't feel through her boots. "Right, well, look at the layout." Miller stepped closer, careful to avoid the yellow numbered markers placed by the forensics team. "Bunch of kids break through the maintenance hatch up on Chalk Farm Road. They haul down timber for a pop-up bar, bring in some designer narcotics—the lab boys reckon that purple stuff is some new synthetic ketamine—and things get heated. Someone pulls a blade. We get claret on the floor, everyone panics, and they scarper through the tunnels." "Carrying their heavy oak timber out with them?" Quinn stood, her five-foot-nine frame rigid. "Look at the dust on the tracks, Miller." Miller squinted over the platform edge. "It's thick." "Untouched," Quinn corrected. "No footprints leading down the tunnel toward Mornington Crescent. None heading north either. And the maintenance hatch up top had a rusted padlock that Uniform had to bolt-cut twenty minutes ago." "There are dozens of ventilation shafts down here, Guv. Old wartime bunkers." "Show me the drag marks." Quinn pointed a gloved finger at the pool of blood. "That's at least three pints. Arterial spray on the pillar there—Wait." She stepped toward the tiled support column. The crimson droplets formed an arc across the yellowed ceramic, three feet off the ground. Beneath the arc, the blood appeared to stop mid-splatter, creating a crisp, vertical line of clean tile, as if a sheet of glass had been held against the wall during the violence and then removed. Quinn leaned in, her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair brushing the halogen lamp's stand. No smudge marks. No wipe patterns from a cloth. Just blood, and then nothing. "Clean-up crew?" Miller offered, taking a sip of his tea. "Professional hit, maybe. Organized crime using the tunnels for a drop." "Who cleans half a pillar with laser precision and leaves three pints of blood on the floor?" Quinn turned back to the center of the platform. Her chest tightened, a familiar, cold pressure behind her ribs. Three years ago, in a docklands warehouse in Rotherhithe, she had seen a wall just like that. Scorch marks that stopped at an invisible border. The smell of ozone and spoiled meat. DS Morris had walked into that warehouse ten paces ahead of her, turned a corner, and ceased to exist, leaving only his service radio melted into the floorboards. *Focus on the physical,* she told herself. *Evidence doesn't lie. People do.* She walked the perimeter of the debris field. The SOCO team was bagging fragments of pottery at the far end, their murmurs echoing off the curved ceiling. Quinn kept her gaze glued to the ground. Near the base of a rusted bench, half-buried in a drift of grey ash, something glinted. Not the harsh reflection of glass, but the dull, sickly green of oxidized metal. Quinn knelt. Using a plastic evidence pen, she nudged the ash aside. "Marker twelve," she called out to the nearest photographer. "Get a macro shot of this before I bag it." The photographer shuffled over, his camera flashing twice. Miller peered over her shoulder. "An old pocket watch? Loads of antique tat down here. Probably nicked from Camden Lock." "It's a compass," Quinn said. She picked it up by the edges. The small brass casing was heavy, coated in a thick patina of verdigris that felt greasy even through the nitrile. Instead of north, south, east, and west, the faceplate was etched with jagged, interlocking sigils that hurt her eyes to trace for too long. Inside, the needle wasn't pointing north toward Hampstead. It was spinning. Not wildly, like a broken mechanism, but in a slow, deliberate counter-clockwise circle, pausing for a fraction of a second every time it aligned with the half-splattered pillar. "Magnetics from the live rails above us," Miller said, waving a hand toward the ceiling. "Throws the needle off. My uncle had an old brass compass from the Navy did the same thing near power lines." Quinn didn't answer. She walked five paces away from the pillar. The needle stopped spinning. It locked dead onto the clean half of the tiled column, trembling with a faint, mechanical hum that vibrated against her thumb. She stepped back toward the pillar. Two feet out, the needle began its slow, rhythmic rotation again. "Miller," Quinn said, her voice dropping an octave. "What did the lab boys say about the ash?" "Wood ash. From the stalls." Quinn lowered the compass into a clear plastic evidence bag, sealing the top with a sharp press of her fingers. She crouched by the nearest grey pile and pinched a bit between her thumb and forefinger. It wasn't flaky. It was dense, gritty, and cold—colder than the ambient air of the tunnel. She rubbed her fingers together; the substance left a greasy black smear on the blue rubber, smelling faintly of cloves and burnt hair. "Have you ever burned oak, Miller?" "Can't say I'm much of a woodsman, Guv." "It doesn't leave grease." Quinn stood, wiping her gloved hand on a tissue before bagging a sample of the residue. She looked around the cavern again, stripping away Miller's assumptions. No entry trail through the tunnels. A padlocked hatch above. Yet, look at the floor between the splintered stalls. The grime of eighty years had been scuffed smooth by hundreds of boots. A thoroughfare. People had been standing here, shoulder to shoulder, hours ago. She walked to the rusted Bostwick gate where she had entered. Just inside the barrier stood an iron brazier, cold now, filled with not coal, but small, jagged fragments of bleached white. Quinn picked one up. Porous on the inside, smooth and curved on the exterior. A rib. Human or pig, forensics would tell, though a carved symbol on the flat side—matching the ones on the compass—suggested no butcher had handled it. "Tokens," she murmured. "Sorry?" Miller asked, checking his phone. "Look, Guv, the Super wants a preliminary by six. If we call it a gang dispute over a stash house, we can hand it off to Trident and get some kip." "Look at the gate, Miller. Someone stood here collecting these bone fragments. Entry fee. Beyond that, stalls arranged in a semi-circle." Quinn paced the curve of the platform, her military bearing making her look like a general surveying a routed camp. "They weren't kids having a knees-up. This was a market. A hidden one. Organised, populated, and well-supplied." "A market," Miller repeated, skepticism dripping from the word. "Fifty feet under Camden, behind a rusted padlock, selling... what? Purple oil and antique compasses?" "And then something happened," Quinn continued, ignoring his tone. She stopped at the blood pool. "Not a knife fight. Look at the stalls. They weren't smashed inward by a brawl; they were blown outward from the pillar. Concussive force. Yet there's no crater, no shrapnel, and no scorch marks." She looked at the clean half of the pillar, then down at the evidence bag in her hand. Through the plastic, the brass needle was still straining toward the tiles. "They didn't leave through the tunnels," Quinn said, her gaze fixing on the vertical line where the blood simply ceased. "They left right here." Miller sighed, rubbing the bridge of his nose. "Through a solid brick pillar, Guv? Come on. It's four in the morning." "A doorway that isn't there anymore." Before Miller could offer another rationalization, a sharp scuffle echoed from the top of the concrete stairs. "Hold on! You can't go down there, love, this is a—" a young PC's voice barked from the landing above, followed by the heavy thud of a leather bag hitting the steps. "I have clearance from the British Museum's antiquities liaison!" a woman's voice shot back, breathless and tight with panic. "Constable, if your team touches those alchemical—those *historical* vessels without proper containment, half this borough will be breathing neurotoxins by sunrise!" Quinn's head snapped toward the stairs. Her hand didn't go to her baton; it went to the evidence bag in her pocket, tucking the brass compass out of sight just as a short woman with a halo of curly red hair ducked under the police tape, pushing her round glasses up a freckled nose.
created_at"2026-10-13T16:32:30.055Z" 10/13/2026, 4:32:30 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.468
leniency0.936
rawRatio0.045
effectiveRatio0.043
97.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1755
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1755
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"fluttered"
count1
3
word"aftermath"
count1
4
word"constructed"
count1
5
word"intricate"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
8
word"synthetic"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"aligned"
count1
13
word"mechanical"
count1
14
word"vibrated"
count1
15
word"rhythmic"
count1
16
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"chill"
2"fluttered"
3"aftermath"
4"constructed"
5"intricate"
6"shimmered"
7"shattered"
8"synthetic"
9"familiar"
10"echoing"
11"etched"
12"aligned"
13"mechanical"
14"vibrated"
15"rhythmic"
16"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences108
matches
0"t with panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences108
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords10
totalWords1748
ratio0.006
matches
0"Focus on the physical,"
1"Evidence doesn't lie. People do."
2"historical"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
61.79% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1247
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.76
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn22
Camden1
North1
London2
Bostwick2
Underground1
Blitz1
Scene1
Crime1
Officers1
Miller12
Styrofoam1
Met1
Edwardian1
Rotherhithe1
Morris1
Hampstead1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Underground"
3"Scene"
4"Officers"
5"Miller"
6"Edwardian"
7"Morris"
places
0"North"
1"London"
2"Rotherhithe"
3"Hampstead"
globalScore0.618
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
28.38% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.716
wordCount1748
matches
0"Not the harsh reflection of glass, but the dull, sickly green of oxidized metal"
1"Not wildly, like a broken mechanism, but in a slow, deliberate counter-clockwise circle, pausing for"
2"not coal, but small, jagged fragments of bleached white"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean30.14
std18.8
cv0.624
sampleLengths
060
127
245
35
428
528
632
736
85
970
1017
1140
1279
1322
148
1534
1612
1726
1857
1927
2021
2126
2270
2312
2435
2530
2612
2719
288
2920
305
3151
3239
3336
3437
3517
3617
375
3875
396
408
4130
4244
4332
4440
453
4637
4758
4824
4949
95.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences108
matches
0"been held"
1"was etched"
2"been scuffed"
42.77% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs212
matches
0"was screaming"
1"was bagging"
2"wasn't pointing"
3"was spinning"
4"was still straining"
13.96% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences133
ratio0.045
matches
0"The liquid inside hadn't seeped into the porous concrete; it beaded on the surface like mercury, vibrating to a rhythm she couldn't feel through her boots."
1"It was dense, gritty, and cold—colder than the ambient air of the tunnel."
2"She rubbed her fingers together; the substance left a greasy black smear on the blue rubber, smelling faintly of cloves and burnt hair."
3"Human or pig, forensics would tell, though a carved symbol on the flat side—matching the ones on the compass—suggested no butcher had handled it."
4"\"Not a knife fight. Look at the stalls. They weren't smashed inward by a brawl; they were blown outward from the pillar. Concussive force. Yet there's no crater, no shrapnel, and no scorch marks.\""
5"Her hand didn't go to her baton; it went to the evidence bag in her pocket, tucking the brass compass out of sight just as a short woman with a halo of curly red hair ducked under the police tape, pushing her round glasses up a freckled nose."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1261
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slow, deliberate counter-clockwise circle,"
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.02141157811260904
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.007137192704203013
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean13.14
std9.6
cv0.731
sampleLengths
09
126
22
323
412
515
69
725
810
91
105
1118
1210
1318
146
154
1625
177
188
199
2019
215
2222
239
2415
2524
2611
276
2814
2926
3021
3158
3214
338
346
352
363
3731
3812
3915
4011
417
4215
4335
4413
453
466
475
4810
4911
84.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5227272727272727
totalSentences132
uniqueOpeners69
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences99
matches
0"Just blood, and then nothing."
1"Instead of north, south, east,"
2"Just inside the barrier stood"
ratio0.03
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences99
matches
0"She checked the worn leather"
1"He looked crumpled, his collar"
2"They snapped tight against her"
3"Her brown eyes swept the"
4"She stepped toward the tiled"
5"Her chest tightened, a familiar,"
6"She walked the perimeter of"
7"she called out to the"
8"She picked it up by"
9"It was spinning."
10"She walked five paces away"
11"It locked dead onto the"
12"She stepped back toward the"
13"She crouched by the nearest"
14"It wasn't flaky."
15"It was dense, gritty, and"
16"She rubbed her fingers together;"
17"She looked around the cavern"
18"She walked to the rusted"
19"She stopped at the blood"
ratio0.222
96.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences99
matches
0"The descent smelled of damp"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn counted the"
2"The air grew thick, trading"
3"Quinn ducked under the tape,"
4"Halogen floodlights set up by"
5"She checked the worn leather"
6"DS Miller stood near the"
7"He looked crumpled, his collar"
8"Quinn said, pulling a pair"
9"They snapped tight against her"
10"Miller gestured with his chin"
11"Quinn stepped into the halo"
12"Her brown eyes swept the"
13"This room was screaming nonsense."
14"This was no makeshift chipboard"
15"The wood was dense, carved"
16"Quinn said, crouching beside a"
17"The liquid inside hadn't seeped"
18"Miller stepped closer, careful to"
19"Quinn stood, her five-foot-nine frame"
ratio0.727
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences99
matches
0"Yet, look at the floor"
1"Before Miller could offer another"
ratio0.02
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Three wooden stalls, constructed from heavy, dark timber that looked centuries older than the surrounding Edwardian tiles, lay splintered near the tracks."
1"The wood was dense, carved with intricate interlocking geometric shapes that caught the halogen glare."
2"Scattered across the concrete were shards of thick, blown glass, pooling liquids that shimmered with an oily, violet iridescence, and piles of greyish ash."
3"Beneath the arc, the blood appeared to stop mid-splatter, creating a crisp, vertical line of clean tile, as if a sheet of glass had been held against the wall d…"
4"The SOCO team was bagging fragments of pottery at the far end, their murmurs echoing off the curved ceiling."
5"The small brass casing was heavy, coated in a thick patina of verdigris that felt greasy even through the nitrile."
6"Instead of north, south, east, and west, the faceplate was etched with jagged, interlocking sigils that hurt her eyes to trace for too long."
7"It locked dead onto the clean half of the tiled column, trembling with a faint, mechanical hum that vibrated against her thumb."
8"Her hand didn't go to her baton; it went to the evidence bag in her pocket, tucking the brass compass out of sight just as a short woman with a halo of curly re…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice dropping an octave"
1"Miller repeated, skepticism dripping from the word"
43.62% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Quinn corrected (correct)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"Miller repeated (repeat)"
3"Quinn continued (continue)"
4"a young PC's voice barked (bark)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.255
leniency0.511
rawRatio0.417
effectiveRatio0.213
82.9582%