Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1RR6P2NMXPVKC15C2XTY2

Run Details

Duration:
41.9s
Cost:
$0.030408
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air beneath Camden tasted of copper, wet soot, and something sharp that made the back of Detective Harlow Quinn’s throat ache. She stood at the top of the rusted spiral staircase, her shoulders squared with the military precision that eighteen years in the Metropolitan Police had drilled into her bones. Below her, the halogen floodlights of the crime scene unit cut harsh, sterile squares into the gloom of the abandoned Tube station. Quinn checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. 03:14. Two hours since the anonymous tip had brought a patrol unit down through a welded-shut maintenance hatch off Chalk Farm Road. Two hours since they had found the body on the tracks, and forty minutes since someone at Scotland Yard had decided the scene was weird enough to warrant calling the British Museum. She descended the stairs, her boot heels ringing against the iron grates. At the bottom, the tiled tunnel opened up into a subterranean cavern. The grime of decades—blackened grease and calcified water stains—had been scrubbed away in strange, localized patches along the curved walls. There were no rats. In a disused London underground tunnel, the absence of verdigris-slicked rodents was the first thing that set Quinn’s teeth on edge. "Detective Quinn?" Quinn turned. A young woman stood near the yellow tape, looking entirely out of place among the hulking silhouettes of the forensic technicians. She was short, perhaps five-foot-four, with a halo of curly red hair and round glasses that reflected the harsh glare of the halogens. A worn leather satchel, bulging with the squared-off shapes of heavy books, pulled her right shoulder down. "You’re the museum consult," Quinn said. It wasn't a question. She let her brown eyes sweep over the woman, taking in the freckled complexion and the nervous way the girl’s fingers rose to tuck a stray curl behind her left ear. "Bit late for a history lesson, Miss...?" "Kowalski. Eva Kowalski." Eva adjusted her glasses, her green eyes darting toward the body lying on the dry ballast of the tracks before returning to Quinn’s face. "I work in the restricted archives. Your Inspector Vance called my department head when the patrol officers found the markings on the platform. My degree is in Ancient History, so when things look sufficiently old and pagan, I get woken up." "Vance is an idiot who watches too much television," Quinn said, her sharp jaw tightening. "Let’s see what’s got him spooked." She ducked under the tape, neither inviting Eva nor telling her to stay back. After a second’s hesitation, the younger woman followed, her satchel thudding softly against her hip. The victim was male, mid-thirties, dressed in a bespoke charcoal overcoat that had no business being fifty feet below Camden High Street. He lay flat on his back between the rusted rails. There was no blood. His eyes were open, clouded over with a milky film that looked like cataracts, though the preliminary rigor in his jaw suggested he’d only been dead a few hours. Quinn crouched beside the body, pulling on a pair of nitrile gloves. "Tell me what Vance told you, Miss Kowalski. Give me the official theory." Eva stopped at the edge of the concrete platform, looking down into the pit. She tucked that same lock of red hair behind her left ear again. "Inspector Vance believes this was a ritualistic staging. A squatting cult, or perhaps an illicit antiquities smuggling ring that went wrong. He pointed out the chalk circles on the platform here, and the residue in the jars they found smashed near the tunnel mouth." "And do you agree with him?" "The markings aren't ancient," Eva said, her voice dropping an octave, losing some of its nervous flutter as she slipped into academic assessment. "They’re a bastardized mash-up of late medieval alchemy symbols and modern occultism. Honestly, Detective, from a purely historical standpoint, it looks like rubbish. Stage dressing." "Stage dressing," Quinn repeated slowly. She leaned closer to the dead man’s lapel. "Except our boy here isn't wearing a costume. This coat is Savile Row. His shoes are hand-stitched Italian leather. Look at the soles." Eva leaned over the platform edge, squinting through her round glasses. "They’re clean." "Spotless," Quinn corrected. "To get down here from the street, I had to walk through ankle-deep sludge in the maintenance shaft. The patrol officers tracked mud all over the stairs. How does a man in thousand-pound brogues walk into a derelict station without getting a speck of London clay on his heels?" "He was carried?" Eva suggested, though her tone lacked conviction. "No drag marks. No bruising on the wrists or ankles from being hauled down an iron spiral staircase. He walked here. Just not the way we came." Quinn stood up, dusting her knees, though she hadn't touched the ground. She turned her back on the body and looked at the platform itself. This was where the narrative fell apart completely. Quinn had worked homicides, narcotics, and gangland executions. She knew what a dump site looked like, and she knew what a squat looked like. This was neither. She walked the length of the yellow tiles, her gaze sweeping the floor. Every ten feet, the decades of grey dust had been swept away in neat, rectangular footprints—not the footprints of boots, but the footprints of structures. Booths. Stalls. "Look at the mortar between the tiles," Quinn said, gesturing for Eva to join her. Eva stepped carefully around an evidence cone marking a scatter of dried, iridescent purple leaves. "What am I looking at?" "Wax," Quinn said, crouching again to tap a drip of hardened black tallow with her gloved fingernail. "Hundreds of drips, layered over each other, concentrated in tidy little four-by-four-foot squares all the way down the concourse. And smell the air. Underneath the damp." Eva inhaled, her brow furrowing. "Brimstone. And... star anise? Frankincense?" "This wasn't a ritual," Quinn murmured, her mind clicking into the cold, high-gear focus that had earned her three commendations before she turned thirty-five. "And it wasn't a one-off smuggling drop. This was a market. A crowded one. Dozens of people milling around, standing in front of wooden stalls, burning candles for light. They were here tonight. Hours ago." "A market?" Eva’s laugh was too quick, slightly breathless. Her hand flew to her left ear again, fingers tangling in the red curls. "Detective, the gate at the top of the stairs was rusted shut. The forensics team had to use an angle grinder to widen the maintenance hatch just to get their gear down here. How do you move dozens of people and wooden stalls out of a sealed subterranean tube station in the middle of the night?" Quinn stood up and fixed Eva with a hard, unblinking stare. "I don't know, Miss Kowalski. The same way my partner walked into an empty warehouse in Rotherhithe three years ago and never walked out, despite me watching the only door." The silence that followed was heavy, broken only by the hum of the portable generator down the tunnel. Eva’s green eyes widened slightly behind her lenses, the color draining from her freckled cheeks. She didn't offer a platitude, which Quinn appreciated. Instead, Quinn turned back to the edge of the platform where the body lay. "If this was a market, our victim was a buyer or a seller. He didn't die on the tracks. He fell from the platform during the pack-up, or he was pushed. Which means if he was holding anything, it didn't necessarily land with him." Quinn hopped down into the track bed, landing lightly on the balls of her feet. She ignored the body this time, pulling a small high-lumen torch from her coat pocket. She angled the beam under the overhang of the concrete platform, where the shadows were thickest and the CSU floodlights couldn't reach. "What are you looking for?" Eva asked, kneeling on the platform edge above her, the leather satchel swinging forward to bump against the concrete. "Whatever they missed because they were too busy taking photos of chalk circles." Quinn swept the beam along the rusted cabling that ran beneath the platform lip. Three feet from the victim’s outstretched right hand, wedged between a ceramic insulator and the damp brick wall, something caught the light. It was a dull, greenish-gold glint. "Hello," Quinn whispered. She reached into the crevice and pulled the object free. Immediately, she noticed a second item lying just beneath it in the dirt—a small, flat disc of carved bone, etched with a symbol that made her eyes water if she looked directly at it. She left the bone token where it was for a moment, focusing on the heavier object in her palm. She stepped back into the wash of the floodlights and held her hand up so Eva could see. It was a small brass compass, heavy and cold even through the nitrile glove. The metal casing was ancient, crusted with a thick patina of verdigris, yet the glass face was entirely unmarred. Beneath the glass, the dial wasn't marked with north, south, east, or west. Instead, the brass face was intricately etched with tiny, interlocking sigils that looked nothing like the clumsy chalk marks on the floor. These were razor-sharp, precise, and deeply unsettling. Above her, Eva sucked in a sharp breath. The sound was small, almost swallowed by the generator's hum, but Quinn heard it. She looked up. Eva wasn't looking at the compass like a baffled academic anymore. She was staring at it the way a bomb disposal tech stares at a ticking suitcase. Her fingers were frozen against her left ear. "Well, Miss Kowalski," Quinn said, her voice dangerously soft. "Tell me this is stage dressing." "I..." Eva swallowed hard, pulling her gaze away from the verdigris-patinated brass to meet Quinn’s eyes. "It looks like a bespoke piece. Victorian, maybe? They loved occult parlor tricks." "Did they," Quinn said flatly. She looked back down at the compass in her palm. The needle inside wasn't pointing north toward Hampstead. It wasn't jittering or spinning wildly, either. The needle, forged from some metal so dark it seemed to drink the halogen light, was locked with absolute, trembling certainty toward the solid brick wall at the far end of the platform. Quinn stepped three paces to her left. The needle shifted smoothly, tracking that exact same spot on the dead-end wall. She walked toward the wall, climbing the steps at the end of the platform. Eva scrambled to her feet and followed, her boots clicking rapidly on the tile. "Detective, you shouldn't move evidence before it's logged—" "Quiet," Quinn ordered. She stopped six inches from the tiled wall at the terminal end of the station. There was no door here. Just white tiles covered in seventy years of soot. Yet, as she held the small brass compass up to the bricks, the dark needle vibrated so violently against the glass that she could feel the hum in her wrist. The air right in front of the wall was freezing. And there, wedged into a hairline crack in the mortar at eye level, was a splinter of rough, unpainted pine wood—the kind of cheap timber used to build market stalls—sheared cleanly in half, as if the rest of the plank had simply ceased to exist on this side of the brick. Quinn lowered the compass. She looked at her watch. The second hand was ticking backward. She took two steps back from the wall, and the watch resumed its normal rhythm. Slowly, with the deliberate grace of a predator that had finally caught the scent, Quinn turned to face the young archivist. Eva was clutching the strap of her book-laden satchel with both hands now, her knuckles white. "Last night was a full moon, wasn't it, Miss Kowalski?" Quinn asked, though she already knew the answer. She’d stared up at it from her balcony in Vauxhall, thinking of Morris. "Yes," Eva whispered. "A market that leaves no mud. A dead man in clean shoes. A compass that points at a solid brick wall that smells like ozone and pine." Quinn slipped the compass into her own evidence bag, sealing the plastic strip with a sharp snap. She looked past Eva, down toward the track bed where that strange little bone token still lay hidden in the dark. "Inspector Vance thinks he’s looking for a cult of squatters. I think this place cleared out hours ago because the lease was up. And I think you know a hell of a lot more about where they went than they teach at Oxford." Eva’s hand twitched toward her left ear, stopped halfway, and dropped to her side. "Detective Quinn, I just work in the archives. I read old books." Quinn stepped in close, towering five inches over the younger woman, letting the cold certainty in her brown eyes do the work. "Then you'd better start reading faster, Miss Kowalski. Because whatever walked through that wall tonight left a body in my jurisdiction. And I’m going to find out how to open the door."
created_at"2026-10-13T16:33:11.904Z" 10/13/2026, 4:33:11 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
69.57% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Quinn repeated slowly [slowly]"
1"Eva swallowed hard [hard]"
2"Quinn said flatly [flatly]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.457
leniency0.913
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.13
81.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2187
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count2
5
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
2"completely"
3"carefully"
4"slightly"
5"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2187
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"hulking"
count1
2
word"swept away"
count1
3
word"furrowing"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"glint"
count1
6
word"etched"
count2
7
word"vibrated"
count1
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"predator"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"hulking"
2"swept away"
3"furrowing"
4"silence"
5"glint"
6"etched"
7"vibrated"
8"could feel"
9"predator"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences112
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2181
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
44.53% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions75
wordCount1517
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity2.11
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden2
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn32
Metropolitan1
Police1
Tube1
Chalk1
Farm1
Road1
Scotland1
Yard1
British1
Museum1
London1
Eva22
High1
Street1
Three1
Hampstead1
Vauxhall1
Morris1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Police"
3"Yard"
4"Eva"
5"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"Metropolitan"
2"Chalk"
3"Farm"
4"Road"
5"Scotland"
6"London"
7"High"
8"Street"
9"Hampstead"
10"Vauxhall"
globalScore0.445
windowScore0.5
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences92
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like cataracts, though the prelimi"
1"looked like, and she knew what a squat lo"
2"looked like"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.917
wordCount2181
matches
0"neither inviting Eva nor"
1"not the footprints of boots, but the footprints of structures"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean39.65
std24.02
cv0.606
sampleLengths
073
164
269
32
463
548
668
721
829
965
1025
1171
126
1348
1436
1513
1652
1710
1852
198
2067
2115
2220
2343
2410
2559
2679
2741
2841
2958
3052
3124
3255
333
3463
3518
3675
3725
3835
3915
4029
4115
4248
4320
4436
453
4659
4761
4830
4937
99.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences112
matches
0"been scrubbed"
1"been swept"
33.33% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs240
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"was staring"
2"wasn't pointing"
3"wasn't jittering"
4"was ticking"
5"was clutching"
58.82% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences136
ratio0.029
matches
0"The grime of decades—blackened grease and calcified water stains—had been scrubbed away in strange, localized patches along the curved walls."
1"Every ten feet, the decades of grey dust had been swept away in neat, rectangular footprints—not the footprints of boots, but the footprints of structures."
2"Immediately, she noticed a second item lying just beneath it in the dirt—a small, flat disc of carved bone, etched with a symbol that made her eyes water if she looked directly at it."
3"And there, wedged into a hairline crack in the mortar at eye level, was a splinter of rough, unpainted pine wood—the kind of cheap timber used to build market stalls—sheared cleanly in half, as if the rest of the plank had simply ceased to exist on this side of the brick."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1537
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"dull, greenish-gold glint."
adverbCount56
adverbRatio0.03643461288223813
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.016916070266753416
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean16.04
std11.36
cv0.708
sampleLengths
022
129
222
310
41
521
632
712
812
920
104
1121
122
132
1421
1523
1617
176
184
1931
207
2127
2241
2315
246
2514
2615
2722
2810
294
3029
3112
3213
3314
3413
3544
366
3723
3825
395
408
4123
4211
432
443
4549
4610
4739
4813
498
69.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.42962962962962964
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners58
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences103
matches
0"Instead, Quinn turned back to"
1"Immediately, she noticed a second"
2"Instead, the brass face was"
3"Just white tiles covered in"
4"Slowly, with the deliberate grace"
ratio0.049
91.84% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences103
matches
0"She stood at the top"
1"She descended the stairs, her"
2"She was short, perhaps five-foot-four,"
3"It wasn't a question."
4"She let her brown eyes"
5"She ducked under the tape,"
6"He lay flat on his"
7"His eyes were open, clouded"
8"She tucked that same lock"
9"She leaned closer to the"
10"She turned her back on"
11"She knew what a dump"
12"She walked the length of"
13"Her hand flew to her"
14"She didn't offer a platitude,"
15"She ignored the body this"
16"She angled the beam under"
17"It was a dull, greenish-gold"
18"She reached into the crevice"
19"She left the bone token"
ratio0.32
52.23% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences103
matches
0"The air beneath Camden tasted"
1"She stood at the top"
2"Quinn checked the worn leather"
3"She descended the stairs, her"
4"The grime of decades—blackened grease"
5"A young woman stood near"
6"She was short, perhaps five-foot-four,"
7"A worn leather satchel, bulging"
8"It wasn't a question."
9"She let her brown eyes"
10"Eva adjusted her glasses, her"
11"Quinn said, her sharp jaw"
12"She ducked under the tape,"
13"The victim was male, mid-thirties,"
14"He lay flat on his"
15"His eyes were open, clouded"
16"Quinn crouched beside the body,"
17"Eva stopped at the edge"
18"She tucked that same lock"
19"Eva said, her voice dropping"
ratio0.816
48.54% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences103
matches
0"Yet, as she held the"
ratio0.01
64.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"She was short, perhaps five-foot-four, with a halo of curly red hair and round glasses that reflected the harsh glare of the halogens."
1"The victim was male, mid-thirties, dressed in a bespoke charcoal overcoat that had no business being fifty feet below Camden High Street."
2"His eyes were open, clouded over with a milky film that looked like cataracts, though the preliminary rigor in his jaw suggested he’d only been dead a few hours…"
3"Immediately, she noticed a second item lying just beneath it in the dirt—a small, flat disc of carved bone, etched with a symbol that made her eyes water if she…"
4"Instead, the brass face was intricately etched with tiny, interlocking sigils that looked nothing like the clumsy chalk marks on the floor."
5"And there, wedged into a hairline crack in the mortar at eye level, was a splinter of rough, unpainted pine wood—the kind of cheap timber used to build market s…"
6"Slowly, with the deliberate grace of a predator that had finally caught the scent, Quinn turned to face the young archivist."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Quinn said, her sharp jaw tightening"
1"Eva suggested, though her tone lacked conviction"
2"Quinn said, her voice dangerously soft"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated slowly (repeat)"
1"Quinn corrected (correct)"
2"Eva suggested (suggest)"
3"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
4"Quinn whispered (whisper)"
5"Quinn ordered (order)"
6"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.348
leniency0.696
rawRatio0.438
effectiveRatio0.304
81.0590%