Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1T9EP4BCDNV5ABV22T6QZ

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Duration:
49.0s
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$0.032128
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Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air at the bottom of the emergency stairwell tasted of rusted iron, damp soot, and something sharp that made the back of Detective Harlow Quinn’s throat ache. She paused at the rusted fire door, checking the worn leather watch on her left wrist. 03:14. Eighteen years with the Met had introduced her to every variety of subterranean London filth, from Victorian sewer overflows to rat-infested squatters' dens in Southwark, but this abandoned Tube station beneath Camden felt wrong before she even crossed the threshold. She pushed the heavy door open and stepped onto the disused platform. Her posture remained rigid, her movements dictated by a military precision that refused to yield to the ungodly hour. Harsh white halogen lamps had been erected on tripods by the forensics team, carving brutal geometric shadows across the curved, green-tiled walls. The posters peeling from the brickwork advertised West End shows that had closed in the late seventies. Yet, despite the decades of neglect, the stone floor of the platform was immaculate. No rat droppings. No discarded cider cans or rusted needles. And then there was the smell. Beneath the sterile tang of forensic luminol, the air carried a heavy, sweet residue—like burnt myrrh mixed with ozone. It was a scent Quinn hadn't smelled in three years. Not since a rain-slicked alley in Whitechapel where DS Morris had died with his eyes wide open and not a single mark on his body. Quinn’s sharp jaw tightened. She pulled on a pair of nitrile gloves, snapping them against her wrists, and walked toward the center of the platform where Detective Constable Patel stood hunched over a clipboard. "Talk to me, Patel," Quinn said, her voice cutting through the low hum of the portable generators. Patel jumped slightly, smoothing his tie. "Guv. Glad you're here. Urban explorers found him around one in the morning. Male, mid-thirties, no ID on the body. Looks like a drug deal gone sideways." Quinn stopped at the edge of the tarpaulin. The victim lay sprawled on his back near the yellow line of the platform edge. His coat was expensive wool, tailored, though the pockets had been turned inside out. His face was contorted, his skin a mottled, unnatural gray that didn't match standard lividity. "A drug deal," Quinn repeated flatly, her brown eyes narrowing as she scanned the immediate perimeter. "In a station that’s been welded shut by Transport for London since 1982." "Kids pry the grates open all the time, Guv," Patel offered, gesturing vaguely toward the dark mouth of the pedestrian tunnel at the far end of the platform. "Ravers, squatters, dealers looking for a quiet drop spot. Look at the chalk marks over there. Gang tags, probably. Or some kind of underground rave setup." Quinn didn't look at Patel. She walked the perimeter of the halogen light, her boots clicking evenly against the stone. Ten yards from the body, the platform widened into an alcove that had once housed ticket machines. Now, the floor was covered in a faint, sweeping grid of scuff marks. Not the chaotic trampling of a rave, and certainly not the hurried footprints of two dealers meeting in the dark. She crouched, her knees popping in the damp cold. The scuff marks formed neat, ten-by-ten-foot squares, aligned in two parallel rows facing a central aisle. At the corners of each square, deep grooves had been gouged into the grime, as if heavy wooden posts or iron frames had been slotted into place and then recently dragged away. "Market stalls," Quinn murmured. Patel walked over, peering down over her shoulder. "Sorry, Guv?" "Temporary stalls. At least a dozen of them." She pointed a gloved finger at a smudge of iridescent purple powder ground into the mortar between the flagstones. Beside it lay a shard of thick, dark glass that smelled faintly of sulfur. "They had heavy setups here. Braziers, tables, canopies. And they cleared the entire lot out in a hurry." "A pop-up market? Down here?" Patel sounded skeptical, the corner of his mouth twitching. "With respect, Detective Quinn, the grates up top are barely wide enough for a grown man to squeeze through. How would anyone haul market stalls down sixty feet of spiral stairs without half of Camden High Street noticing?" Quinn stood up, brushing dust from her trousers. She didn't have an answer for that yet, just a cold certainty settling into her gut. She walked to the edge of the platform and looked down into the pit where the tracks should have been. The iron rails were rusted through, choked with blackened weeds, except for a twenty-foot stretch directly opposite the alcove. There, the ballast stones were worn smooth by thousands of footsteps, leading straight toward a solid brick retaining wall. A dead end. Footprints leading into solid brick. She turned back to the body, where a young woman in protective shoe covers was crouched near the victim’s boots, peering intently through a pair of round glasses. A worn leather satchel, bulging with heavy, cloth-bound books, was slung across her chest, looking entirely out of place among the aluminum forensic kits. A wild halo of curly red hair escaped the clips holding it back, and as Quinn approached, the woman reached up, nervously tucking a stray lock behind her left ear. "Who is this?" Quinn demanded, stopping beside Patel. "Since when does scenes of crime bring leather bookbags into a cordon?" The young woman startled, scrambling to her feet. She wasn't tall—barely five-foot-four—and her freckled complexion flushed pink under the harsh lights. "Eva Kowalski," Patel said quickly. "From the British Museum. We found some weird antiquities on the body, Guv. Since the victim had no wallet, the night-shift Super thought we might be looking at a black-market heritage theft—smugglers moving looted artifacts. Ms. Kowalski works in their restricted archives. She was on the call-out list for historical authentication." Quinn turned her gaze on Eva. She knew the name. Eva Kowalski was twenty-six, held an Oxford master's in Ancient History, and, more importantly to Quinn’s off-the-books files, was the childhood best friend of Aurora—a person of interest who kept surfacing on the periphery of three separate unexplained cases Quinn had been quietly tracking for months. "Ms. Kowalski," Quinn said, keeping her voice deliberately neutral, though her eyes missed nothing. "A little late for museum curation, isn't it?" "The police called the night desk," Eva said. Her green eyes darted briefly to the body, then to Quinn’s face, before dropping to the floor. Her fingers went to her left ear again, tucking back a curl that didn't need tucking. "They said there were inscribed items. They wanted to know if they were stolen from our collections." "And are they?" "No," Eva said quickly. Too quickly. "No, they're just... replicas. Tourist junk, mostly. Neo-pagan trinkets you can buy at any stall in Camden Lock." "Show me," Quinn said. Patel stepped forward and held out two transparent evidence bags. "Found the first one clutched in the vic's left hand. The second rolled under the bench over there." Quinn took the first bag. Inside was a flat, pale disc about the size of a two-pound coin, carved with a jagged, interlocking symbol. She held it up to the halogen light. "Bone," she said. "Cow bone, probably," Patel said. "Like a poker chip for whatever crooked game they were playing." "It’s not cow," Quinn said softly. The density was wrong, the grain too fine, the pale surface polished to an oily sheen that made her skin prickle even through the plastic and the nitrile gloves. She looked at Eva. "What does the carving mean, Ms. Kowalski?" "Nothing," Eva said, her voice tight. She adjusted her round glasses on the bridge of her nose. "It’s gibberish. A mashup of Norse runes and alchemical shorthand. Like I said, Camden market novelty stuff." Quinn didn't buy it for a second. A scholar from the restricted archives didn't sweat through her blouse in a forty-degree tunnel over a Camden novelty trinket. Quinn shifted her attention to the second evidence bag. Inside rested a small brass compass, its casing heavily aged with a patina of verdigris. Unlike any maritime or military instrument Quinn had ever seen, the face beneath the scratched glass was devoid of cardinal directions. Instead, the brass dial was deeply etched with intricate, overlapping geometric sigils. And the needle was moving. Quinn froze. She held the bag completely level in the palm of her hand. The needle wasn't pointing north—north was behind her, toward the chalk farm tunnels. Instead, the slender black needle was trembling violently, straining against its pivot to point directly across the tracks, straight at the solid brick retaining wall where the footprints vanished. Slowly, deliberately, Quinn pivoted ninety degrees to her left. The needle swung seamlessly inside its casing, ignoring magnetic north, locking back onto the brick wall. "Broken?" Patel asked, craning his neck. "Must be magnetized by the old power lines down here." "The power lines have been dead for forty years, Patel," Quinn said, her voice dropping anoctave. She stepped away from the light, walking toward the edge of the platform. As she moved closer to the tracks, the needle inside the evidence bag spun faster, vibrating with a faint, high-pitched hum she could feel in the bones of her fingers. It was the exact same dull vibration she had felt in her teeth the night Morris died. She turned back to look at Eva. The researcher hadn't followed them. She was standing rigid by the tripod lights, clutching the strap of her leather satchel with white-knuckled intensity, her green eyes wide and fixed entirely on the bag in Quinn’s hand. Quinn walked back over, her boots measuring the distance in slow, deliberate strides. She stopped directly in front of Eva, invading her personal space just enough to force the younger woman to look up. Quinn’s closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair gleamed under the stark lights, her face cast in hard planes. "The moon was full last night, wasn't it, Ms. Kowalski?" Quinn asked quietly. Eva’s breath hitched. "I—I don't know. Was it? It was cloudy." "It was full," Quinn said. She held up the bag containing the bone token, then the bag with the verdigris-stained compass. "A dozen stalls set up in a sealed station. Footprints leading into solid masonry. A man dead with no physical trauma, clutching a bone passkey. And a compass that doesn't point north, because it’s pointing at the exit they used when they packed up and left at dawn." "That's absurd," Patel laughed nervously, looking between the two women. "Guv, brick walls aren't exits. The guy OD'd on some bad synthetic gear, and his mates bolted up the fire escape." "Nobody went up that fire escape except the explorers who called it in," Quinn said without taking her eyes off Eva. "The dust on the steps was undisturbed until the uniforms trampled it. Everything that happened down here came through that wall, and went back through it." Eva’s hand crept up toward her left ear again, her fingers trembling as they brushed her red curls. "You're a police detective," she whispered, barely audible over the generator's hum. "You look at evidence. That's just an old piece of brass." "I look at what's there, Ms. Kowalski. Not what makes me comfortable." Quinn lowered the evidence bags, her brown eyes boring into the researcher's. "Three years ago, my partner died in an alley that smelled just like this platform. The official report said acute cardiac arrest. I know better. And I think you know what this compass was crafted to find, what this bone buys entry to, and why your friend Aurora’s name keeps turning up in my notebooks." Eva went entirely pale, her freckles standing out starkly against her skin. She took a half-step back, her satchel bumping against a forensic tripod. "I'm done with my consultation," she said, her voice cracking slightly before she forced it steady. "The items don't belong to the Museum. If you don't have any more questions about Roman or Saxon antiquities, Detective, I'd like to go home." Quinn watched her for a long, silent beat. She could press her now, drag her down to the station as a material witness, maybe shake her until the academic veneer cracked. But Eva was terrified—not of the Met, and not of Quinn, but of whatever had been on this platform two hours ago. Pushing her into a corner in front of Patel would only make her clam up, and worse, it would tip off Aurora and the rest of her little clique that Quinn was onto the mechanism of their world, not just their crimes. "Of course," Quinn said smoothly, stepping aside and gesturing toward the stairwell door. "Thank you for your time, Ms. Kowalski. Constable Patel will escort you to the street to sign the log." Eva didn't wait for Patel. She turned and walked briskly toward the exit, her head down, practically lunging for the heavy iron door. Patel cast a baffled look at Quinn before hurrying after the researcher, his keys jingling in the damp air. Left alone inside the cordon, Quinn walked back to the yellow line at the platform's edge. She looked down at the small brass compass in her hand. The needle had stopped spinning; it was locked dead-ahead, trembling with a faint, rhythmic pulse, pointing straight at the dark brick wall across the tracks. She slipped the evidence bag into the deep pocket of her trench coat, neglecting to log it on Patel's clipboard. Her fingers brushed the worn leather of her watchband as she stared at the solid masonry, waiting for the bricks to breathe.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount7
adverbTags
0"Quinn repeated flatly [flatly]"
1"Patel said quickly [quickly]"
2"Eva said quickly [quickly]"
3"Quinn said softly [softly]"
4"Quinn asked quietly [quietly]"
5"Patel laughed nervously [nervously]"
6"Quinn said smoothly [smoothly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.51
leniency1
rawRatio0.269
effectiveRatio0.269
73.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2285
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"nervously"
count2
2
adverb"quickly"
count3
3
adverb"deliberately"
count2
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"completely"
count1
6
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"nervously"
2"quickly"
3"deliberately"
4"softly"
5"completely"
6"slowly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2285
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"standard"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"aligned"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"intricate"
count1
7
word"magnetic"
count1
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"intensity"
count1
10
word"stark"
count1
11
word"synthetic"
count1
12
word"comfortable"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"standard"
1"scanned"
2"chaotic"
3"aligned"
4"footsteps"
5"etched"
6"intricate"
7"magnetic"
8"could feel"
9"intensity"
10"stark"
11"synthetic"
12"comfortable"
13"rhythmic"
14"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences122
matches
0"was terrified"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences122
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2279
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions88
wordCount1634
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity2.33
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective2
Harlow1
Quinn38
Met2
London1
Victorian1
West1
End1
Whitechapel1
Morris2
Constable1
Patel16
Eva14
Kowalski1
Oxford1
Ancient1
History1
Aurora2
Camden1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Met"
3"Morris"
4"Constable"
5"Patel"
6"Eva"
7"Kowalski"
places
0"London"
1"Victorian"
2"West"
3"End"
4"Whitechapel"
5"Ancient"
globalScore0.337
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences94
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.878
wordCount2279
matches
0"not of the Met, and not of Quinn, but of whatever had been on this platform two hours ago"
1"not of Quinn, but of whatever had been on this platform two hours ago"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean40.7
std23.74
cv0.583
sampleLengths
085
131
263
360
434
517
633
752
829
954
1070
1157
124
1310
1459
1552
1682
178
1882
1920
2021
2156
2256
2322
2458
253
2624
274
2828
2935
3016
3146
3234
3327
3457
355
3656
379
3816
3916
4076
4143
4250
4313
4411
4569
4631
4747
4841
4979
82.25% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences122
matches
0"been erected"
1"been turned"
2"was contorted"
3"was covered"
4"been gouged"
5"been slotted"
6"were rusted"
7"was crouched"
8"was terrified"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs257
matches
0"wasn't pointing"
1"was standing"
26.24% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences147
ratio0.041
matches
0"Beneath the sterile tang of forensic luminol, the air carried a heavy, sweet residue—like burnt myrrh mixed with ozone."
1"She wasn't tall—barely five-foot-four—and her freckled complexion flushed pink under the harsh lights."
2"Eva Kowalski was twenty-six, held an Oxford master's in Ancient History, and, more importantly to Quinn’s off-the-books files, was the childhood best friend of Aurora—a person of interest who kept surfacing on the periphery of three separate unexplained cases Quinn had been quietly tracking for months."
3"The needle wasn't pointing north—north was behind her, toward the chalk farm tunnels."
4"But Eva was terrified—not of the Met, and not of Quinn, but of whatever had been on this platform two hours ago."
5"The needle had stopped spinning; it was locked dead-ahead, trembling with a faint, rhythmic pulse, pointing straight at the dark brick wall across the tracks."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount603
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.01824212271973466
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004975124378109453
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean15.5
std10.17
cv0.656
sampleLengths
028
116
21
340
412
519
622
717
814
93
107
116
1219
1310
1425
154
1630
1717
186
1927
208
2115
2214
2315
2416
2513
2628
2726
285
2915
3017
3113
3220
339
3416
3532
364
378
382
3927
4014
4118
4214
4338
448
4516
4620
4719
4819
493
65.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4178082191780822
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners61
88.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences113
matches
0"Instead, the brass dial was"
1"Instead, the slender black needle"
2"Slowly, deliberately, Quinn pivoted ninety"
ratio0.027
96.11% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences113
matches
0"She paused at the rusted"
1"She pushed the heavy door"
2"Her posture remained rigid, her"
3"It was a scent Quinn"
4"She pulled on a pair"
5"His coat was expensive wool,"
6"His face was contorted, his"
7"She walked the perimeter of"
8"She crouched, her knees popping"
9"She pointed a gloved finger"
10"She didn't have an answer"
11"She walked to the edge"
12"She turned back to the"
13"She wasn't tall—barely five-foot-four-and her"
14"She knew the name."
15"Her green eyes darted briefly"
16"Her fingers went to her"
17"She held it up to"
18"She looked at Eva."
19"She adjusted her round glasses"
ratio0.31
66.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount89
totalSentences113
matches
0"The air at the bottom"
1"She paused at the rusted"
2"She pushed the heavy door"
3"Her posture remained rigid, her"
4"The posters peeling from the"
5"It was a scent Quinn"
6"Quinn’s sharp jaw tightened."
7"She pulled on a pair"
8"Quinn said, her voice cutting"
9"Patel jumped slightly, smoothing his"
10"Quinn stopped at the edge"
11"The victim lay sprawled on"
12"His coat was expensive wool,"
13"His face was contorted, his"
14"Quinn repeated flatly, her brown"
15"Patel offered, gesturing vaguely toward"
16"Quinn didn't look at Patel."
17"She walked the perimeter of"
18"She crouched, her knees popping"
19"The scuff marks formed neat,"
ratio0.788
88.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Yet, despite the decades of"
1"Now, the floor was covered"
ratio0.018
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The posters peeling from the brickwork advertised West End shows that had closed in the late seventies."
1"A worn leather satchel, bulging with heavy, cloth-bound books, was slung across her chest, looking entirely out of place among the aluminum forensic kits."
2"Eva Kowalski was twenty-six, held an Oxford master's in Ancient History, and, more importantly to Quinn’s off-the-books files, was the childhood best friend of …"
3"The density was wrong, the grain too fine, the pale surface polished to an oily sheen that made her skin prickle even through the plastic and the nitrile gloves…"
4"Patel cast a baffled look at Quinn before hurrying after the researcher, his keys jingling in the damp air."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Quinn repeated flatly, her brown eyes narrowing as she scanned the immediate perimeter"
1"Patel sounded, the corner of his mouth twitching"
2"Eva said, her voice tight"
3"Quinn said, her voice dropping anoctave"
4"Quinn lowered, her brown eyes boring into the researcher's"
5"she said, her voice cracking slightly before she forced it steady"
51.96% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags21
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated flatly (repeat)"
1"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
2"Quinn demanded (demand)"
3"Patel laughed nervously (laugh)"
4"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0.238
effectiveRatio0.196
80.0128%