Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1VJDE51828R541YWZHHCM

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Duration:
26.5s
Cost:
$0.023978
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The insulated delivery bag snagged on a jagged oak spur, ripping the cheap red nylon with a sharp zip. Aurora yanked the strap free. Polystyrene containers shifted inside, sloshing warm sweet-and-sour sauce against the lining. Yu-Fei Cheung did not accept excuses for late drop-offs, not even when the customer's postcode led past the wrought-iron gates of Richmond Park and straight into a dense thicket of ancient timber. She checked the crumpled paper receipt in her fist. "Leave the black bean beef by the western marker. Double tip in the tin." Aurora muttered the instructions to the empty air, her voice flat. The park had swallowed the rumble of London traffic five minutes ago. When she stepped between the towering, twisted oak standing stones that bordered the clearing, the residual hum of the city hadn't just faded. It had snapped off, like a radio unplugged from the wall. Ahead lay the Grove. Wildflowers carpeted the grass in thick, vibrant swathes, bluebells and foxgloves blooming in defiance of the calendar. They didn't sway. Nothing swayed. Her boots crushed a patch of purple petals, releasing a heavy, cloying scent that reminded her of lilies left too long in stagnant vase water. She adjusted the bag on her shoulder, her thumb brushing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. An old habit from her days with Evan, back when the air in their Cardiff flat used to go this exact kind of quiet right before a plate flew at her head. "Just drop the food, Rory," she told herself. Her voice died against the velvet silence. No echo returned from the surrounding oaks. The trees formed a tight, suffocating ring, their gnarled bark resembling knuckles clenched in rigor mortis. At the centre of the clearing stood a waist-high stump. A rusted biscuit tin sat on top of the wood. Aurora marched toward it. Thirty paces. Keep the head down, take the cash, walk back out. Simple. She wasn't a Pre-Law student anymore, arguing hypotheticals in bright lecture halls, she was a girl who delivered takeaway to rich eccentrics and occult hobbyists because they paid in untraceable twenty-pound notes. Halfway to the stump, a sound broke the stillness. *Tick-tock.* Aurora froze. Her boot hovered an inch above a cluster of white anemones. The sound hadn't come from a watch. It sounded wet, like a thick drop of grease hitting a cold iron skillet, followed by the click of a tongue against the roof of a dry mouth. It came from the left, deep within the shadow of two intertwined oaks. She whipped her head around. Straight shoulder-length black hair lashed across her cheek. Nothing. Just the pale, unnatural bloom of dog-roses climbing a dead branch. Yet, at the very edge of her bright blue eyes, the dark space between the trunks seemed to settle, like a heavy curtain dropping back into place a fraction of a second too late. Her pulse hammered against her collarbones. Beneath her zipped fleece, the Heartstone Pendant shifted. The thumbnail-sized crimson gem usually rested cold against her sternum, a strange keepsake from a stranger she’d never thanked. Now, it radiated a sudden, prickling heat, warming the silver chain against her skin. She didn't reach for it. Giving fear an audience only fed it. Instead, she closed the distance to the stump in six brisk strides. She unclipped the red nylon flap, pulled out the warm plastic bag of containers, and set it beside the biscuit tin. Her fingers prised open the rusted lid. Inside lay three crisp twenty-pound notes. Beside the money sat a single human molar, its roots dark and dry. Aurora left the tooth, snatched the notes, and shoved them into her jeans pocket. *Flip-flop.* The sound came from behind her this time. Not footsteps on grass, something softer, heavier, like raw liver slapping against wet pavement. She pivoted, bringing her torch up in a tight arc. The beam sliced through the clearing, washing over the wildflowers. The yellow light made the vibrant petals look bleached and sickly, like painted bone. The beam hit the boundary where she had entered. Aurora's breath hitched. The gap between the ancient oak standing stones was gone. Where the dirt path back to Richmond Park should have been, a solid wall of blackthorn brambles choked the space, thick as a man's thigh and glistening with black sap. She swung the light left. Oaks. Right. More oaks. Wait. She brought the beam back to the centre. The stump with the takeaway bag stood ten feet behind her now. She hadn't walked ten feet. She had only turned around. The Heartstone seared against her chest, pulsing with a rhythmic, feverish warmth that matched her racing blood. Something moved in the upper canopy. No leaves rustled. No branches creaked under weight. Just a long, vertical shadow detaching itself from a trunk and sliding sideways into the next, moving with the smooth, jerky precision of a spider on glass. "Keep the change," Aurora said. Her voice sounded thin, scraped raw. "I'm leaving." A voice answered from the brambles three feet to her right. "Leave the black bean beef by the western marker." It wasn't a person mimicking her. It was her own voice, down to the slight Welsh inflection she'd spent three years in London filing away. Except the cadence was wrong. The words stretched out, syllables sagging in the middle as if the speaker didn't understand where one word ended and the next began, only the shape of the noise. Aurora backed away from the brambles, her heels sinking into the soft turf. From the opposite side of the clearing, behind the stump, the sound came again, closer to the ground. "Just drop the food, Rory." The name sounded wet, chewed between flat teeth. She clicked her torch off. If the light showed them where she was, the dark was safer. Her eyes adjusted, drinking in the faint,sourceless luminescence that clung to the year-round flowers. The clearing hadn't just shifted, it was shrinking. The ancient oak standing stones were closer together now. She could smell them, a stink of rot and bruised copper that rose from the soil around their bases. At the edge of her vision, one of the standing stones twitched. It wasn't an oak. It was too tall, its bark too smooth, folded like damp grey linen over joints that bent the wrong way. As she stared at the space beside it, refusing to look directly at the thing, she saw the lower half of it uncoil from the earth. Long, pale roots, thick as fingers, pulled free of the dirt without making a sound. The Heartstone burned against her skin, glowing so bright the deep crimson light bled right through the black fabric of her fleece, painting a red target over her heart. Behind her, on the wooden stump, the plastic takeaway bag crinkled as long, grey fingers pushed through the tied handles.
created_at"2026-10-13T16:34:44.289Z" 10/13/2026, 4:34:44 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1153
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1153
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"glistening"
count1
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"racing"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"silence"
2"echo"
3"pulse"
4"footsteps"
5"glistening"
6"rhythmic"
7"warmth"
8"racing"
9"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences98
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences102
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1153
ratio0.002
matches
0"Tick-tock."
1"Flip-flop."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount1115
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Cheung1
Richmond2
Park2
London2
Grove1
Evan1
Cardiff1
Pre-Law1
Aurora8
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Welsh1
persons
0"Cheung"
1"Evan"
2"Aurora"
3"Heartstone"
4"Pendant"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1153
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean22.61
std16.69
cv0.738
sampleLengths
019
148
29
314
411
546
64
747
850
98
1030
1120
1249
139
141
1513
1648
1713
1812
1934
2047
2112
2233
237
2419
2514
261
2722
2810
2933
303
3140
329
331
3430
3517
3641
3713
3811
399
4059
4113
4218
435
448
4531
4636
4712
4865
4929
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs171
matches
0"was shrinking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences102
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1129
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.022143489813994686
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005314437555358724
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences102
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences102
mean11.3
std8.22
cv0.727
sampleLengths
019
15
211
332
49
514
611
712
823
911
104
1117
123
132
1425
1518
1632
178
187
197
2016
2110
2210
234
242
2510
261
2732
289
291
302
3111
327
3328
3413
355
368
371
3811
3934
406
418
4219
4314
445
457
4612
4721
487
496
67.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.45098039215686275
totalSentences102
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences86
matches
0"Just the pale, unnatural bloom"
1"Instead, she closed the distance"
2"Just a long, vertical shadow"
ratio0.035
85.12% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences86
matches
0"She checked the crumpled paper"
1"It had snapped off, like"
2"They didn't sway."
3"Her boots crushed a patch"
4"She adjusted the bag on"
5"she told herself"
6"Her voice died against the"
7"She wasn't a Pre-Law student"
8"Her boot hovered an inch"
9"It sounded wet, like a"
10"It came from the left,"
11"She whipped her head around."
12"Her pulse hammered against her"
13"She didn't reach for it."
14"She unclipped the red nylon"
15"Her fingers prised open the"
16"She pivoted, bringing her torch"
17"She swung the light left."
18"She brought the beam back"
19"She hadn't walked ten feet."
ratio0.337
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences86
matches
0"The insulated delivery bag snagged"
1"Aurora yanked the strap free."
2"Polystyrene containers shifted inside, sloshing"
3"Yu-Fei Cheung did not accept"
4"She checked the crumpled paper"
5"Aurora muttered the instructions to"
6"The park had swallowed the"
7"It had snapped off, like"
8"Wildflowers carpeted the grass in"
9"They didn't sway."
10"Her boots crushed a patch"
11"She adjusted the bag on"
12"An old habit from her"
13"she told herself"
14"Her voice died against the"
15"The trees formed a tight,"
16"A rusted biscuit tin sat"
17"Aurora marched toward it."
18"She wasn't a Pre-Law student"
19"Halfway to the stump, a"
ratio0.698
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences86
matches
0"Yet, at the very edge"
1"Now, it radiated a sudden,"
2"If the light showed them"
ratio0.035
42.86% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"When she stepped between the towering, twisted oak standing stones that bordered the clearing, the residual hum of the city hadn't just faded."
1"Her boots crushed a patch of purple petals, releasing a heavy, cloying scent that reminded her of lilies left too long in stagnant vase water."
2"She wasn't a Pre-Law student anymore, arguing hypotheticals in bright lecture halls, she was a girl who delivered takeaway to rich eccentrics and occult hobbyis…"
3"The Heartstone seared against her chest, pulsing with a rhythmic, feverish warmth that matched her racing blood."
4"The words stretched out, syllables sagging in the middle as if the speaker didn't understand where one word ended and the next began, only the shape of the nois…"
5"Her eyes adjusted, drinking in the faint,sourceless luminescence that clung to the year-round flowers."
6"The Heartstone burned against her skin, glowing so bright the deep crimson light bled right through the black fabric of her fleece, painting a red target over h…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.7197%