Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1WMS78EAPQ1504FXH0QBM

Run Details

Duration:
37.8s
Cost:
$0.026838
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Cold London rain plastered Detective Harlow Quinn’s closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair to her skull, dripping from the line of her sharp jaw as she sprinted down the slick cobblestones of Chalk Farm Road. Ahead of her, the courier—Tomás Herrera, twenty-nine, former NHS paramedic turned underground fixer—vaulted a row of chained bicycles with infuriating agility. He was fast, fueled by the kind of frantic adrenaline that only guilty men possessed. Quinn didn’t waste breath shouting for him to stop. Eighteen years in the Met had taught her that runners didn’t yield to polite requests, and she needed every ounce of oxygen to keep pace. She lengthened her stride, her five-foot-nine frame eating up the wet pavement with military precision. She had been staking out The Raven’s Nest in Soho for three hours, watching the distinctive green neon sign bleed its sickly light into the puddles, waiting for a break in the case. When Herrera had slipped out the back carrying a reinforced medical cooler, glancing over his shoulder like a man hauling plutonium, she’d known she had her lead. She had tailed him north on the Northern Line, waiting for him to lead her to his buyers, until he’d spotted her reflection in the train window at Camden Town and bolted. Herrera cut hard left into a narrow pedestrian alleyway that smelled of rancid frying oil and wet cardboard. Quinn rounded the corner a second later, her boots skidding slightly on a slick manhole cover. She recovered her balance instantly, her brown eyes locked onto the dark leather jacket ahead of her. "Herrera!" she barked, the sound flat and authoritative against the drumming rain. "Give it up! I know about the revoked license, and I know who you're patching up in that Soho bar!" He didn't slow, only risked a quick, desperate glance back. Under the flickering sodium glow of a dying streetlamp, she caught the flash of warm brown eyes wide with panic, olive skin slick with rain, and wet, dark brown curls plastered to his forehead. As he threw out his left arm to shove an overflowing industrial bin into her path, his jacket sleeve rode up, revealing a jagged, pale scar running the length of his forearm. Quinn vaulted the rolling bin before it fully tipped, her booted foot clipping the plastic lid. She landed hard, jarring her knees, and kept running. Her left hand brushed the worn leather watch on her wrist—01:14 AM. No backup was coming. This wasn't an official sanction; the Superintendent had told her twice to drop her obsession with the Soho clique. *Let it go, Harlow,* he’d said, looking at her with that suffocating blend of pity and impatience that everyone had given her for the last three years. She couldn't let it go. Not with the memory of DS Morris still fresh behind her eyes—Morris lying in that Docklands warehouse three years ago, his chest cavity crushed from the inside out, not a single forced entry point in the building, and the air smelling faintly of ozone and copper. The official inquest had called it an undiagnosed freak cardiac event combined with structural collapse. Quinn knew better. The clique operating out of the back room of The Raven's Nest—the room behind the bookshelf she’d glimpsed on thermal imaging—was connected to the impossible things happening in the dark corners of her city. And Tomás Herrera was her key to cracking them open. Herrera reached the end of the alley and didn't turn onto the main road. Instead, he veered toward a dilapidated brick structure wedged between a shuttered vintage clothing shop and a railway viaduct. The rusted iron gates at the entrance bore the faded, chipping roundel of a long-abandoned Camden Tube station. A heavy chain hung around the bars, secured by a padlock that looked decades old, yet Herrera shoved one side of the gate and it swung inward on silently oiled hinges. He vanished into the dark maw of the stairwell. Quinn reached the gate three seconds later. She paused just outside the threshold, one hand resting on the cold iron, regulating her breathing. Her hand dropped instinctively into her coat pocket, fingers wrapping around the grip of her extendable baton and the small, high-lumen tactical torch beside it. She clicked the torch on. The beam cut through the curtain of rain, illuminating steps slick with black moss and litter leading down into the earth. Below, the air changed. The smell of London rain and exhaust vanished, replaced by a rising draft that carried the scent of dry dust, burning sage, sulfur, and something metallic that made the fine hairs on the back of her neck stand up. It was the same tang she’d smelled in the warehouse beside Morris’s body. Quinn clicked the torch off, plunging herself back into shadow. She stepped through the gate and descended the stairs, keeping her weight on the outer edges of the treads to minimize sound. The tiled tunnel at the bottom curved sharply. Ahead, the hurried scuff of Herrera’s boots echoed, followed by the low rumble of voices. Quinn pressed her back against the grime-caked Edwardian tiles and edged toward the corner. She risked a fractional glance around the bend. The abandoned ticket hall was lit not by electricity, but by dozens of glass lanterns filled with a static, pale blue luminescence that cast no heat and flickered without flame. Standing in front of the rusted turnstiles was a hulking figure in a heavy canvas coat, his face obscured by a wide-brimmed hat and a thick scarf wrapped up to his eyes. Herrera was already there, chest heaving, his wet curls dripping onto the scarred wooden floor. With his free hand, he reached beneath the collar of his soaked shirt. For a second, the blue lantern light glinted off a silver Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, before his fingers found a second leather cord. He yanked it over his head, holding out a small, yellowed disc that looked distinctly like carved bone. The guard didn't speak. He extended a gloved hand, palm up. As he did, the scarf slipped a fraction of an inch. Quinn’s breath caught in her throat. In the blue light, the skin beneath the guard's eyes wasn't skin at all—it had the dull, striated texture of gray slate, and his pupils were vertical slits that dilated in the gloom. A trick of the light. A mask. Some kind of elaborate subterranean fetish club or triad theatricality. Quinn’s rational mind fired off explanations with rapid-fire desperation, trying to force the observation into nineteen years of police training. The guard inspected the bone token in Herrera’s palm, grunted—a sound like grinding stones—and stepped aside. Herrera didn't wait; he clutched his medical cooler to his chest and darted past the turnstiles, descending the defunct escalators toward the lower platforms. Wait. If it required a token to get in, she was locked out. Quinn scanned the curved walls of the ticket hall. To her left, partially hidden behind a collapsed newspaper kiosk, was a maintenance door marked *Staff Only - High Voltage*. The lock had been sheared off years ago, the heavy oak door held shut only by a slide bolt that someone had lazily left half-drawn. As the guard turned his head to watch Herrera’s descent, Quinn moved. She crossed the gap in four silent strides, slipped behind the rotting kiosk, and eased the maintenance door open. It gave a faint, dry groan, masked by the rumble of an actual Northern Line train passing through an adjacent, active tunnel deep in the earth. She slipped inside and pulled the door shut behind her. She was in a narrow concrete service corridor that ran parallel to the main escalator shaft. Through rusted ventilation grates set into the wall every ten feet, she could look down into the heart of the lower station. Quinn stopped at the third grate, her fingers curling into the wire mesh as she stared down at the platform below. The Veil Market was in full swing. Both the northbound and southbound platforms, along with the dry, gravel-lined track bed between them, were packed with stalls draped in heavy velvets, oiled leathers, and tarpaulins covered in painted sigils that seemed to writhe when she didn't look directly at them. Hundreds of people crowded the narrow space, moving through a haze of violet incense smoke. Except they weren't all people. Directly below her grate, a merchant with skin the color of bruised plums was weighing out vials of glowing, luminescent mercury on brass scales. Across the tracks, a woman in a sharp bespoke suit was haggling over a cage containing a creature that looked like a six-legged crow, while a man beside her casually ignited a cigarette using a spark snapped directly from his own bare thumb. The murmur of the crowd was a hypnotic, unsettling symphony—English mixed with guttural, clicking tongues and melodic whispers that made Quinn’s teeth ache. Her mind rebelled, fighting to categorize what she was seeing. Hallucinogens in the ventilation system. A massive, coordinated delusion. *Morris,* a quiet voice in the back of her head whispered. *Remember Morris's chest.* She forced her breathing to slow. Panic was a civilian luxury. Whatever this place was—whatever laws of physics or biology were being broken down on those tracks—it was a marketplace. And markets had rules, buyers, and sellers. She scanned the crowd, her trained eyes cutting through the bizarre distractions until she spotted the familiar brown leather jacket. Herrera was halfway down the northbound platform, weaving through the press of bodies toward a tent made of patched, dark leather set up inside a deep tiled alcove. He was moving slower now, believing he had lost her at the street level, his left hand unconsciously rubbing the knife scar on his forearm through his wet sleeve. At the end of the service corridor, a spiral iron staircase led down to a maintenance doorway right at the edge of the northbound platform, twenty yards from the leather tent. Quinn looked at the worn leather watch on her left wrist. 01:19 AM. If she went through that door, she was leaving the world she understood behind. She had no gun, no radio signal this deep beneath the Camden clay, and no bone token to explain her presence if that slate-skinned guard or whatever served as security down here decided to check credentials. If they caught her, there wouldn't be an inquest. She would simply vanish into the subterranean dark of London, another cold case on a dusty shelf at New Scotland Yard. The smart play—the textbook Met play—was to retreat, climb back up into the rain, and call in a specialized armed unit to raid the station. Even as the thought formed, she saw an elderly woman near the tracks toss a pinch of glittering powder into a brazier, and for a split second, the entire tiled wall behind her rippled like water, revealing rough-hewn cavern stone before snapping back to dirty white ceramic. If she brought a tactical team down here tomorrow, they would find nothing but rats, rusted rails, and an empty, echoing ruin. She didn't know how she knew it, only that her instincts—the same instincts that had kept her alive for eighteen years—were screaming that this place wasn't permanently tethered to the map. Below, Herrera reached the leather tent, glanced around once more, and ducked inside the flap. Quinn’s jaw set. She thought of the green neon sign of The Raven's Nest, of the hidden room behind the bookshelf, and of her partner's cold body on a concrete floor. She adjusted the collar of her wet trench coat to sit higher around her neck, checked that her baton was easily accessible, and walked down the spiral stairs. She pushed the maintenance door open and stepped out onto the platform, into the blue light and the sulfur haze, keeping her head down and her eyes locked on the leather tent.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.53% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2007
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"lazily"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"sharply"
2"lazily"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2007
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"structure"
count1
1
word"maw"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"hulking"
count1
6
word"gloom"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count2
8
word"symphony"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"structure"
1"maw"
2"weight"
3"echoed"
4"flickered"
5"hulking"
6"gloom"
7"scanned"
8"symphony"
9"familiar"
10"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences111
matches
0"e with panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences111
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords13
totalWords1992
ratio0.007
matches
0"Let it go, Harlow,"
1"Staff Only - High Voltage"
2"Morris,"
3"Remember Morris's chest."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1971
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity0.81
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
London3
Detective1
Harlow2
Quinn16
Chalk1
Farm1
Road1
Tomás2
Herrera13
Met2
Raven3
Nest3
Soho2
Northern2
Line2
Camden3
Town1
Superintendent1
Morris5
Docklands1
Tube1
Edwardian1
Saint1
Christopher1
High1
Veil1
Market1
English1
New1
Scotland1
Yard1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Raven"
5"Superintendent"
6"Morris"
7"Edwardian"
8"Saint"
9"Christopher"
10"English"
places
0"London"
1"Chalk"
2"Farm"
3"Road"
4"Soho"
5"Camden"
6"Town"
7"New"
8"Scotland"
globalScore1
windowScore1
97.37% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"sigils that seemed to writhe when she didn't look directly at them"
1"looked like a six-legged crow, while a ma"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.502
wordCount1992
matches
0"not by electricity, but by dozens of glass lanterns filled with a static, pale blue"
77.38% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences112
matches
0"through that door"
1"screaming that this"
2"checked that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean47.43
std32.55
cv0.686
sampleLengths
054
115
2141
351
432
576
687
7113
882
99
1048
1182
1232
1323
1422
1562
1671
1722
1839
1937
2040
2113
2254
2357
2410
2538
2621
277
2857
295
3090
3119
3214
3337
3477
3531
3613
37105
38100
3915
4059
4132
86.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences111
matches
0"was connected"
1"was lit"
2"was locked"
3"been sheared"
4"were packed"
5"being broken"
72.61% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs314
matches
0"was coming"
1"was weighing"
2"was haggling"
3"was seeing"
4"was leaving"
5"were screaming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences112
ratio0.116
matches
0"Ahead of her, the courier—Tomás Herrera, twenty-nine, former NHS paramedic turned underground fixer—vaulted a row of chained bicycles with infuriating agility."
1"Her left hand brushed the worn leather watch on her wrist—01:14 AM."
2"This wasn't an official sanction; the Superintendent had told her twice to drop her obsession with the Soho clique."
3"Not with the memory of DS Morris still fresh behind her eyes—Morris lying in that Docklands warehouse three years ago, his chest cavity crushed from the inside out, not a single forced entry point in the building, and the air smelling faintly of ozone and copper."
4"The clique operating out of the back room of The Raven's Nest—the room behind the bookshelf she’d glimpsed on thermal imaging—was connected to the impossible things happening in the dark corners of her city."
5"In the blue light, the skin beneath the guard's eyes wasn't skin at all—it had the dull, striated texture of gray slate, and his pupils were vertical slits that dilated in the gloom."
6"The guard inspected the bone token in Herrera’s palm, grunted—a sound like grinding stones—and stepped aside."
7"Herrera didn't wait; he clutched his medical cooler to his chest and darted past the turnstiles, descending the defunct escalators toward the lower platforms."
8"To her left, partially hidden behind a collapsed newspaper kiosk, was a maintenance door marked *Staff Only - High Voltage*."
9"The murmur of the crowd was a hypnotic, unsettling symphony—English mixed with guttural, clicking tongues and melodic whispers that made Quinn’s teeth ache."
10"Whatever this place was—whatever laws of physics or biology were being broken down on those tracks—it was a marketplace."
11"The smart play—the textbook Met play—was to retreat, climb back up into the rain, and call in a specialized armed unit to raid the station."
12"She didn't know how she knew it, only that her instincts—the same instincts that had kept her alive for eighteen years—were screaming that this place wasn't permanently tethered to the map."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2001
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"paramedic turned underground fixer—"
1"dry, gravel-lined track"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.01999000499750125
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.012993503248375811
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean17.79
std10.69
cv0.601
sampleLengths
033
121
215
39
425
515
633
727
832
918
1016
1117
1212
1320
1410
1534
1632
1716
189
1912
204
2119
2227
235
2446
2515
263
2734
2810
2914
3019
3118
3231
339
347
3516
3625
375
3821
394
4039
4113
4210
4322
448
4515
4614
478
4830
4932
61.01% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.39285714285714285
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners44
61.73% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences108
matches
0"Instead, he veered toward a"
1"Directly below her grate, a"
ratio0.019
97.78% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences108
matches
0"He was fast, fueled by"
1"She lengthened her stride, her"
2"She had been staking out"
3"She had tailed him north"
4"She recovered her balance instantly,"
5"she barked, the sound flat"
6"He didn't slow, only risked"
7"She landed hard, jarring her"
8"Her left hand brushed the"
9"She couldn't let it go."
10"He vanished into the dark"
11"She paused just outside the"
12"Her hand dropped instinctively into"
13"She clicked the torch on."
14"It was the same tang"
15"She stepped through the gate"
16"She risked a fractional glance"
17"He yanked it over his"
18"He extended a gloved hand,"
19"She crossed the gap in"
ratio0.306
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences108
matches
0"He was fast, fueled by"
1"Quinn didn’t waste breath shouting"
2"She lengthened her stride, her"
3"She had been staking out"
4"She had tailed him north"
5"Herrera cut hard left into"
6"Quinn rounded the corner a"
7"She recovered her balance instantly,"
8"she barked, the sound flat"
9"He didn't slow, only risked"
10"Quinn vaulted the rolling bin"
11"She landed hard, jarring her"
12"Her left hand brushed the"
13"This wasn't an official sanction;"
14"She couldn't let it go."
15"The official inquest had called"
16"Quinn knew better."
17"The clique operating out of"
18"Herrera reached the end of"
19"The rusted iron gates at"
ratio0.685
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences108
matches
0"If it required a token"
1"To her left, partially hidden"
2"If she went through that"
3"If they caught her, there"
4"Even as the thought formed,"
5"If she brought a tactical"
ratio0.056
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences81
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Herrera cut hard left into a narrow pedestrian alleyway that smelled of rancid frying oil and wet cardboard."
1"The smell of London rain and exhaust vanished, replaced by a rising draft that carried the scent of dry dust, burning sage, sulfur, and something metallic that …"
2"He yanked it over his head, holding out a small, yellowed disc that looked distinctly like carved bone."
3"In the blue light, the skin beneath the guard's eyes wasn't skin at all—it had the dull, striated texture of gray slate, and his pupils were vertical slits that…"
4"She was in a narrow concrete service corridor that ran parallel to the main escalator shaft."
5"Both the northbound and southbound platforms, along with the dry, gravel-lined track bed between them, were packed with stalls draped in heavy velvets, oiled le…"
6"Across the tracks, a woman in a sharp bespoke suit was haggling over a cage containing a creature that looked like a six-legged crow, while a man beside her cas…"
7"The murmur of the crowd was a hypnotic, unsettling symphony—English mixed with guttural, clicking tongues and melodic whispers that made Quinn’s teeth ache."
8"She didn't know how she knew it, only that her instincts—the same instincts that had kept her alive for eighteen years—were screaming that this place wasn't per…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she barked (bark)"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
85.6100%