Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1Z424SBQAS92Q27YHSRA3

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Duration:
34.6s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third brass deadbolt clicked back, and I yanked the door open. "Forget your keys again, Ev..." The word died in my throat. Lucien Moreau filled the cramped doorway, smelling of expensive sandalwood and the sharp ozone of a portal jump. I threw my weight against the wood. An ivory cane tip jammed into the gap an inch from my fingers. "A charming welcome, *ma petite*." "Piss off, Lucien." "After climbing three flights of stairs that smell of fried onions?" "Fenugreek. It's a curry house." "It is an assault on the senses." He pushed the door open with two gloved fingers. I backed up a step, hating that I yielded the ground, hating more that my pulse jumped at the low rumble of his voice. Six months of radio silence, and he waltzed into Eva's Brick Lane flat looking like he had stepped out of a Mayfair tailor's shop. Not a single platinum hair out of place. His charcoal wool coat was buttoned to the throat, hiding whatever weapons he carried today, though the cane was bad enough. He stepped inside and nudged the door shut with his heel. The three deadbolts remained open. My skin prickled. "Eva isn't here." "I am aware." "Then we have nothing to talk about." "Did I come for Eva?" "You didn't come for me. You made that clear in Soho." Lucien's mismatched eyes swept the cramped living room. The black iris swallowed the dim light from the crooked floor lamp, while the amber one gleamed like a trapped wasp. He took in the towers of leather-bound grimoires balanced on the radiator, the yellowed parchment scrolls pinned to the peeling wallpaper, and the half-eaten carton of prawn crackers from the Golden Empress sitting on the coffee table. Ptolemy hopped down from the windowsill. The fat tabby cat marched over and rubbed his cheek against Lucien's polished Oxford shoes, purring like a chainsaw. Traitor. Lucien crouched to scratch behind the cat's ears. The movement pulled his coat taut across his broad shoulders. "At least someone in this dump has manners." "He likes the smell of sulphur. Reminds him of his litter box." Lucien straightened, his lips curving into that slow, wicked half-smile that used to make me forget my own name. My left wrist throbbed right over the small crescent scar. A phantom ache. The last time I saw him, he had pinned that same wrist to the velvet booth at the Nightingale while whispering that I was a liability he could no longer afford. I crossed my arms, tucking the scar out of sight. "State your business and get out. I have an early shift." "Delivering spring rolls on a moped. A tragic waste of a pre-law education." "Better than selling demon blood to East End gangsters." "I broker information, Rory. Blood is far too messy for my tastes." He walked toward the kitchenette, his cane tapping a steady tick-tock against the uneven floorboards. The flat was too small for him. Every breath I took pulled his scent into my lungs. Cedar, winter air, and the dark, metallic tang of Avaros magic. My traitorous body leaned a fraction of an inch in his direction before I locked my knees. He stopped beside the makeshift desk Eva had built from an old door and two filing cabinets. His gloved hand hovered over a spread of charcoal rubbings. "Don't touch those." "High Demonic script. Seventh century, if the dialect is accurate." "Leave it, Lucien." "Eva is digging into the Malphora bloodline again." "Eva's research is none of your concern." He turned his head. The amber eye locked onto mine, stripping away the six months of anger I had built up like bricks. "It is when her research includes your name in the margins." My stomach dropped. I kept my face blank, a trick learned from twenty years of dining with an Irish barrister father who treated dinner conversation like cross-examination. "You're hallucinating." "Am I?" He tapped a sticky note attached to the lamp shade. My handwriting. A list of translation variants for the word *vessel*. I crossed the room and snatched the note, crumpling it in my fist. Doing so brought me within arm's reach of him. Rookie mistake. Lucien didn't step back. He loomed over me, five inches taller and radiating a heat that had nothing to do with the faulty radiator. Up close, the faint shadows under his eyes showed. He wasn't sleeping. Good. I had spent forty nights staring at the ceiling above Silas' bar, wondering if the half-demon who tore my heart out had even paused for a drink afterward. "Why did you come here, Luc?" The nickname slipped out. His jaw tightened. His gaze dropped to my mouth, lingering on my bottom lip before snapping back up. The air between us thickened, charged with the memory of his hands in my hair and the taste of gin on his tongue in the back alley behind his club. "Pack a bag." "Excuse me?" "Your flat above the pub is compromised. I assumed you would be there, until I saw the watchers at the corner of Dean Street." "What watchers?" "Hounds from the Lower Ward. Two of them, wearing human skin that doesn't quite fit." "And you thought you'd play knight in shining armour?" "I never shine, *chérie*. You know that better than anyone." He raised a hand. I didn't flinch, though my heart hammered against my ribs. His leather-gloved knuckles brushed a strand of black hair behind my ear. Even through the kidskin leather, his touch burned. I hated that I didn't slap his hand away. I hated that my eyelids fluttered shut for a second. "You left me in Soho," I said. "I sent you away." "Same thing." "Not even close." "You told me I was a distraction. A human plaything you'd grown bored of." His thumb traced my cheekbone, stopping at the corner of my jaw. His grip wasn't gentle. It was possessive, tilted on the edge of violence, the exact way he used to hold me when he was terrified of losing control of his father's blood. "And you believed me," he said. "A clever girl like you." "You made it convincing. Especially the part where you walked out with that succubus." "Camille owed me a favour. She got me past the Ward bosses watching the door." "While I walked home in
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.07
leniency0.14
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1062
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1062
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"loomed"
count1
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"fluttered"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pulse"
2"silence"
3"throbbed"
4"velvet"
5"stomach"
6"loomed"
7"charged"
8"fluttered"
9"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences64
matches
0"was terrified"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords4
totalWords1062
ratio0.004
matches
0"ma petite"
1"vessel"
2"chérie"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount726
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.83
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Eva2
Brick1
Lane1
Mayfair1
Golden1
Empress1
Lucien6
Oxford1
Nightingale1
Avaros1
Irish1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Empress"
3"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Golden"
3"Oxford"
4"Nightingale"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1062
matches(empty)
39.68% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences105
matches
0"hating that I"
1"whispering that I"
2"hated that I"
3"hated that my"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean17.13
std18.76
cv1.095
sampleLengths
012
15
224
320
45
53
611
75
87
986
1019
113
123
137
145
1511
1666
1726
1818
198
2012
2163
2210
2311
2413
259
2612
2760
2827
293
3010
313
328
337
3423
3511
3627
372
382
3921
4024
4165
426
4352
443
452
4624
472
4815
499
94.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences64
matches
0"was buttoned"
1"was terrified"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs119
matches
0"wasn't sleeping"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences105
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount685
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slow, wicked half-smile"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.026277372262773723
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.00145985401459854
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean10.11
std7.35
cv0.727
sampleLengths
012
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26
318
47
513
65
73
811
95
107
119
1224
1324
148
1521
1611
175
183
193
203
217
225
2311
248
2521
2637
276
2819
291
308
3110
328
3312
3419
3510
363
3731
3810
3911
4013
419
4212
4315
447
4510
4611
4717
4817
4910
69.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4380952380952381
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
6.21% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences58
matches
0"I threw my weight against"
1"He pushed the door open"
2"I backed up a step,"
3"His charcoal wool coat was"
4"He stepped inside and nudged"
5"My skin prickled."
6"He took in the towers"
7"My left wrist throbbed right"
8"I crossed my arms, tucking"
9"He walked toward the kitchenette,"
10"My traitorous body leaned a"
11"He stopped beside the makeshift"
12"His gloved hand hovered over"
13"He turned his head."
14"My stomach dropped."
15"I kept my face blank,"
16"He tapped a sticky note"
17"I crossed the room and"
18"He loomed over me, five"
19"He wasn't sleeping."
ratio0.534
3.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences58
matches
0"The third brass deadbolt clicked"
1"The word died in my"
2"Lucien Moreau filled the cramped"
3"I threw my weight against"
4"An ivory cane tip jammed"
5"He pushed the door open"
6"I backed up a step,"
7"His charcoal wool coat was"
8"He stepped inside and nudged"
9"The three deadbolts remained open."
10"My skin prickled."
11"Lucien's mismatched eyes swept the"
12"The black iris swallowed the"
13"He took in the towers"
14"Ptolemy hopped down from the"
15"The fat tabby cat marched"
16"Lucien crouched to scratch behind"
17"The movement pulled his coat"
18"Lucien straightened, his lips curving"
19"My left wrist throbbed right"
ratio0.914
86.21% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"Even through the kidskin leather,"
ratio0.017
56.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Lucien straightened, his lips curving into that slow, wicked half-smile that used to make me forget my own name."
1"I kept my face blank, a trick learned from twenty years of dining with an Irish barrister father who treated dinner conversation like cross-examination."
2"He loomed over me, five inches taller and radiating a heat that had nothing to do with the faulty radiator."
3"His gaze dropped to my mouth, lingering on my bottom lip before snapping back up."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.047
leniency0.093
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.3967%