Run: 2026-10-20-01M5C6D6KSHHV87SCZ1RB6YY7W

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25.5s
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$0.001326
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InferenceNet

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air changed first. It thickened, warmed, and carried a sweetness so heavy it coated the back of Rory's throat—overripe fruit and woodsmoke, honey and something darker, like caramel left too long on the stove. One moment she was standing in the damp Richmond gloaming with the Fae blade cold against her hip; the next, Nyx's shadow-slick hand closed around her wrist, and the world folded. Not teleportation. Nothing so clean. It was more like being poured through a keyhole that had been left ajar in the fabric of things. Rory stumbled forward onto ground that gave beneath her boots like packed earth, and looked up, and forgot how to breathe. The sky was amber. Not the amber of sunset—sunset bled and bruised into violet and umber at its edges. This was amber all through, a warm honeyed dome from horizon to horizon, as though the whole vault of heaven had been lacquered and lit from behind. No sun, but light nonetheless, diffuse and golden, slanting down through a haze of drifting pollen or perfume-smoke or something in between. Rory turned in a slow circle, and the circle kept going, because there was no horizon she could find. The land simply continued, terraced and thicketed, dissolving into amber at its edges. "Breathe, Rory." Nyx's voice was a whisper carried on wind that had no source. They stood a few paces off, more solid than usual, their silhouette deeper than any shadow should be. Their violet eyes reflected nothing of the amber light. "The air here is richer than you're used to. You'll want to take it slow." "I'm breathing." Rory's voice came out thin. She pressed a hand to her sternum and felt the Heartstone pendant beneath her shirt pulse once against her palm—a warm, answering throb. "Where—?" "Dymas." Isolde's silver hair caught the golden light and threw it back. The seer stood at the edge of the clearing, barefoot on the grass, and Rory noticed—as she always noticed, and never quite accepted—that the grass did not bend beneath her feet. "The realm of Prince Belphegor. The seat of Gluttony. We are expected." "Expected by whom?" Rory's hand drifted to the hilt of the moonsilver blade. It was cold even through the leather of her jacket. She'd learned, in the three weeks since Isolde had pressed it into her hands, that the cold sharpened when something demonic drew near. Right now it was merely chilly, which she chose to find reassuring. "By the land itself," Isolde said, which was not an answer. "Come. The path is short, but it is not straight." They walked. The grass beneath Rory's boots was unnervingly soft, springy, and it released a scent with every step—thyme and lavender and something musky underneath. They passed through an orchard first, trees heavy with fruit she couldn't name: globes of deep violet the size of her fist, clusters of translucent silver berries that chimed faintly when the wind moved through them. Rory stopped at one tree and reached up, and the fruit seemed to lean toward her fingers of its own accord. "Don't," Nyx said. "Not until you know what it does." "What it does?" "Everything here is grown for a purpose," Isolde said, gliding ahead. "The orchards of Dymas feed its kitchens, and its kitchens feed its feasts, and its feasts feed—well. You'll see." They emerged from the orchard onto a terrace of pale stone that overlooked the realm proper, and Rory's breath caught again. Below them, the land fell away in a series of wide, gentle valleys, each one killed and worked and planted in patterns so intricate they looked from above like embroidery—vineyards in spirals, fields of grain arranged in whorls, gardens laid out in geometries that hurt to look at too long. Smoke rose in lemon-colored columns from a hundred chimneys. Rivers of something that glittered like liquid amber threaded through it all, and on those rivers moved boats with sails of spun—not silk, something finer. Boats carrying cargo she couldn't identify at this distance. Boatmen whose songs drifted up to the terrace as a faint, minor-key humming that made the back of Rory's neck prickle. "It's beautiful," she said, and meant it, and hated that she meant it. "It is," Nyx agreed. Their form had thickened further, less shadow now and more presence. "That's the trap of it. Gluttony doesn't hide. It invites." They descended a stair cut into the living rock—each step warm underfoot, polished smooth by centuries of use, or something like centuries. Halfway down, Rory paused and pressed her hand flat against the stone wall. It pulsed. Not the steady beat of a heart, but the slow, deep throb of something vast and patient, like a body in deep sleep. She pulled her hand away. "The realm is alive," Nyx said, watching her. "Or close enough. Belphegor's will saturates it. Every wall, every stone, every root and river. You'd do well to remember that." At the bottom of the stair, a village—if a village could be a hundred kitchens stacked and terraced and blooming with roofs of copper that had weathered to verdigris. The smell hit Rory before she saw the source: bread and roasting meat and butter and garlic and a dozen spices she could name and a hundred she couldn't. Her stomach clenched, sudden and sharp, and she realized she was ravenous in a way that had nothing to do with skipping lunch. A figure approached. Not a demon—a woman, or the shape of one, tall and broad and wearing an apron stained with a dozen colors. Her skin was the deep blue of a bruise, and her eyes had no whites, only darkness. She did not speak. She simply held out a tray, and on the tray were small cups of something steaming and gold. Rory looked at Nyx. Nyx looked at Isolde. Isolde smiled her riddling smile and took a cup. "You've eaten nothing since dawn," the seer said. "And the walk between worlds is taxing. Drink. It's only broth." Rory took a cup. It was warm in her hands and smelled of marrow and herbs and something sharp, like the green of a stem snapped fresh. She drank. It was the best thing that had ever touched her tongue—and not in a simple way. It was the memory of every good meal she'd ever had, layered and deepened, and underneath it something that whispered: more. There's more. There's so much more. She set the cup down before she could ask for a second. "Good," Isolde said. "You're learning." They moved deeper. The village became a town, and the town became a city of low walls and open courtyards and markets that spilled their wares into the streets. Everywhere, food. Spits of meat turning over fires that burned with green flame. Tables piled with fruit she'd seen in the orchard and fruit she hadn't. Vendors who called out in languages she half-understood—bargains, invitations, samples offered on the flat of a palm. Rory kept her hands to herself after the third time someone tried to press a pastry into her fingers. And everywhere, souls. She saw them in the kitchens, behind the ovens and the great iron cauldrons, their faces slack in a way she recognized from the worst days of her life with Evan—that particular emptiness, that particular patience. They wore aprons like the woman with the broth. Some of them met her eyes as she passed. Most didn't. "Helbound," Nyx murmured. "Contracted here. Some for a season, some—longer. Belphegor pays well, by Hel's standards." "What's the price?" "Something they were glad to give up, at the time. Usually their appetite. Their capacity to be satisfied." Nyx's voice dropped lower, if a whisper could drop. "The irony is Belphegor's idea of humor." They came at last to the heart of the city. A palace sprawled before them, if a palace could be built of kitchens. Wings and terraces and chimneys and towers, all of it low and wide and golden, and from every tower rose smoke so thick and fragrant Rory could taste it. The gates were open. Two figures flanked them—tall, horned, their skin the polished black of obsidian and their aprons as stained as the broth-woman's. They did not move. They did not need to. Isolde stopped at the threshold and turned to Rory. Her lavender eyes were grave. "You will be welcomed," she said. "You will be offered everything you desire, and it will be real, and it will be a cage if you let it. The prince does not make bargains, Aurora. He makes invitations. The difference is that a bargain ends." "And the pendant?" Rory's hand went to her chest again. The Heartstone was pulsing, steady and warm, faster now than it had been on Earth. "Keep it close. It will tell you what is true." Isolde's gaze flicked to the gates, to the waiting guards, to the amber light spilling out across the flagstones. "And there is something else. Something the prince wants. He will not ask for it directly. He will feed you first, and ply you with wine and wonders, and he will watch to see what you do with your full belly and your softened mind. That is the test of Dymas. It is the oldest test there is." "Hunger," Rory said. "Fullness," Isolde corrected. "Hunger is easy to resist. Any fool can go empty. But to be sated, and still remember what you came for—" She smiled her riddling smile again. "That is a rarer thing." Nyx stepped up beside Rory, their shadow-hand brushing hers. "I'll be with you. In the light, I'm weaker, but I can still hear. If you need me, say my name." Rory looked at the gates. At the amber sky. At the smoke pouring from a hundred chimneys, and the tables she could glimpse through the open doors, already laden, already waiting. Her stomach clenched again, and her mouth watered, and the Heartstone pulsed warm against her breastbone like a second heartbeat. "Let's get this over with," she said, and walked forward into the court of Gluttony.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1702
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1702
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"whisper"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"throb"
count2
3
word"intricate"
count1
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"stomach"
count2
7
word"grave"
count1
8
word"desire"
count1
9
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"pulse"
2"throb"
3"intricate"
4"silk"
5"pulsed"
6"stomach"
7"grave"
8"desire"
9"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences103
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences103
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1686
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount1331
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.58
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory21
Richmond1
Fae1
Nyx10
Heartstone3
Isolde10
Evan1
Earth1
Gluttony1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
globalScore0.711
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like centuries"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.593
wordCount1686
matches
0"Not the steady beat of a heart, but the slow, deep throb of something vast"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences121
matches
0"hated that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean42.15
std31.37
cv0.744
sampleLengths
066
124
221
3100
456
531
655
758
821
982
1010
113
1230
13135
1413
1525
1665
1729
1881
1963
2017
2119
2272
2312
245
2591
2659
2716
283
2934
3085
3114
3245
3325
3487
353
3635
3730
3851
3915
98.45% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences103
matches
0"being poured"
1"been left"
2"been lacquered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs222
matches
0"was standing"
1"was pulsing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences121
ratio0.116
matches
0"It thickened, warmed, and carried a sweetness so heavy it coated the back of Rory's throat—overripe fruit and woodsmoke, honey and something darker, like caramel left too long on the stove."
1"One moment she was standing in the damp Richmond gloaming with the Fae blade cold against her hip; the next, Nyx's shadow-slick hand closed around her wrist, and the world folded."
2"Not the amber of sunset—sunset bled and bruised into violet and umber at its edges."
3"She pressed a hand to her sternum and felt the Heartstone pendant beneath her shirt pulse once against her palm—a warm, answering throb."
4"The seer stood at the edge of the clearing, barefoot on the grass, and Rory noticed—as she always noticed, and never quite accepted—that the grass did not bend beneath her feet."
5"The grass beneath Rory's boots was unnervingly soft, springy, and it released a scent with every step—thyme and lavender and something musky underneath."
6"Below them, the land fell away in a series of wide, gentle valleys, each one killed and worked and planted in patterns so intricate they looked from above like embroidery—vineyards in spirals, fields of grain arranged in whorls, gardens laid out in geometries that hurt to look at too long."
7"Rivers of something that glittered like liquid amber threaded through it all, and on those rivers moved boats with sails of spun—not silk, something finer."
8"They descended a stair cut into the living rock—each step warm underfoot, polished smooth by centuries of use, or something like centuries."
9"At the bottom of the stair, a village—if a village could be a hundred kitchens stacked and terraced and blooming with roofs of copper that had weathered to verdigris."
10"Not a demon—a woman, or the shape of one, tall and broad and wearing an apron stained with a dozen colors."
11"It was the best thing that had ever touched her tongue—and not in a simple way."
12"She saw them in the kitchens, behind the ovens and the great iron cauldrons, their faces slack in a way she recognized from the worst days of her life with Evan—that particular emptiness, that particular patience."
13"Two figures flanked them—tall, horned, their skin the polished black of obsidian and their aprons as stained as the broth-woman's."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1353
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.029563932002956393
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005173688100517369
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean13.93
std10.54
cv0.757
sampleLengths
04
131
231
32
43
519
621
74
815
927
1022
1119
1213
1314
1418
159
1615
177
1823
191
2012
2131
2212
2313
2410
2523
2612
2711
2810
292
3023
3136
3221
333
347
353
3611
3719
3821
3950
409
4125
429
4321
4413
454
4611
4710
4822
4913
67.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4462809917355372
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners54
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
ratio0
80.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences89
matches
0"It thickened, warmed, and carried"
1"It was more like being"
2"They stood a few paces"
3"Their violet eyes reflected nothing"
4"She pressed a hand to"
5"It was cold even through"
6"She'd learned, in the three"
7"They passed through an orchard"
8"They emerged from the orchard"
9"she said, and meant it,"
10"Their form had thickened further,"
11"They descended a stair cut"
12"She pulled her hand away."
13"Her stomach clenched, sudden and"
14"Her skin was the deep"
15"She did not speak."
16"She simply held out a"
17"It was warm in her"
18"It was the best thing"
19"It was the memory of"
ratio0.348
44.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences89
matches
0"The air changed first."
1"It thickened, warmed, and carried"
2"Nothing so clean."
3"It was more like being"
4"Rory stumbled forward onto ground"
5"The sky was amber."
6"This was amber all through,"
7"Rory turned in a slow"
8"The land simply continued, terraced"
9"Nyx's voice was a whisper"
10"They stood a few paces"
11"Their violet eyes reflected nothing"
12"Rory's voice came out thin"
13"She pressed a hand to"
14"Isolde's silver hair caught the"
15"The seer stood at the"
16"Rory's hand drifted to the"
17"It was cold even through"
18"She'd learned, in the three"
19"Isolde said, which was not"
ratio0.831
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
ratio0
44.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"This was amber all through, a warm honeyed dome from horizon to horizon, as though the whole vault of heaven had been lacquered and lit from behind."
1"They passed through an orchard first, trees heavy with fruit she couldn't name: globes of deep violet the size of her fist, clusters of translucent silver berri…"
2"Below them, the land fell away in a series of wide, gentle valleys, each one killed and worked and planted in patterns so intricate they looked from above like …"
3"Rivers of something that glittered like liquid amber threaded through it all, and on those rivers moved boats with sails of spun—not silk, something finer."
4"Her stomach clenched, sudden and sharp, and she realized she was ravenous in a way that had nothing to do with skipping lunch."
5"It was the memory of every good meal she'd ever had, layered and deepened, and underneath it something that whispered: more."
6"Vendors who called out in languages she half-understood—bargains, invitations, samples offered on the flat of a palm."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
73.08% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Nyx agreed (agree)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"Isolde corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.154
81.1532%