Run: 2026-10-20-01M5C6NTAXHTQE8DP7QE979FPQ

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Lucien Moreau stood in the doorway of the flat on Brick Lane with a bottle of ’82 Bordeaux in one hand and a gold-embossed business card in the other. His heterochromatic gaze swept over Rory's shoulder, cataloguing the stacks of research notes, the cold mug of tea, and the tabby cat currently judging him from the arm of a threadbare sofa. “You look like hell, Aurora.” “And you look like a tax collector.” She blocked the entrance with her hip, arms folded. The cat yowled its agreement. “Eva’s not here.” “I know.” He inclined his head, a ghost of a smile playing at his lips. “I came to see you.” Rory’s scarred wrist throbbed, a dull ache she’d learned to associate with every bad decision she’d ever made. One of which was letting him walk out of her life two years ago without a word of explanation. The other was believing she’d never see him again. “I’m busy.” “With what?” He leaned against the doorframe, cane hooked over one arm. “Staring at a wall and hoping it blinks first?” “Ptolemy and I are having a very important conversation about current affairs. He’s very opinionated about the state of the local mouse economy.” “Fascinating.” Lucien pushed past her with the kind of confidence only a half-demon could muster, the bottle of wine catching the dim light of the hallway as he set it on the dining table. “I’ll wait.” Rory’s jaw tightened. She could feel the heat radiating from him, the faint scent of cedar and something darker, something that whispered of Avaros and shadows that moved on their own. It was the same scent that had lingered on her pillow for weeks after he’d gone, a phantom reminder of nights spent tangled in sheets that smelled of him. “You’ve got five minutes,” she said, shutting the door. The three deadbolts clicked into place. “Start talking.” “I need your help.” “No.” “I haven’t told you what it is yet.” “Doesn’t matter.” She pulled out a chair, turned it backwards, and straddled it, arms folded over the backrest. It was a deliberate power move, one her father had taught her back in Cardiff. Never let a barrister see you sweat; never let a Frenchman see you care. “Last time you needed my help, you disappeared for two years and left me with a stack of unanswered questions and a very confused cat.” Ptolemy, as if on cue, stretched and sauntered over to Lucien, weaving between his ankles with a traitorous purr. “You named him Ptolemy,” Lucien observed, scratching behind the cat’s ears. “He’s named after the astronomer. The cat’s got a decent sense of direction. You don’t.” “Harsh.” “Honest.” Lucien poured two glasses of wine. He didn’t ask permission. He didn’t ask for anything, ever. He simply assumed the world would bend to his will, and the infuriating thing was that it usually did. The ruby liquid gleamed in the glass, and Rory caught a glimpse of his reflection in the window behind him. One amber eye, one black as pitch. Even now, standing in a cramped flat above a curry house, he looked like he belonged in a painting. “The job is simple,” he said, sliding a glass toward her. “A book. A very old, very dangerous book. It’s been stolen. I need someone with your particular talents to help me get it back.” “I’m not a thief.” “You’re a delivery girl for a Chinese restaurant. You see things. You notice things. And you have an uncanny ability to walk into a room and remember where every exits is within three seconds.” He sipped his wine. “You’re wasted behind a till, Aurora.” “I’m not doing it.” “I’ll pay you.” “I don’t want your money.” “What do you want?” The question hung in the air between them. Rory’s mind flashed to the last time they’d stood this close, the way he’d cupped her face in his hands, the way he’d said, “I’m sorry,” before vanishing into the London night. She’d told herself it didn’t matter. She’d told herself she was better off without him. The lie had held up for about six months. “Answers,” she said. “Why did you leave?” Lucien’s jaw tightened. The clock on the mantelpiece ticked with the kind of oppressive rhythm that made Rory want to throw it out the window. The tabby cat, sensing the shift in the room, ceased his purring and slunk away to the corner. “I was contracted,” he said. “By someone who knew about my affiliations. Someone who wasn’t particularly interested in hearing ‘no.’ I had to disappear for a while. It was safer for you.” “You could have written.” “And said what? ‘Dear Aurora, I’m being hunted by a consortium of angry warlocks, please don’t think less of me’?” “I would have helped.” “I know.” His voice softened, and for a moment, the mask slipped. The half-demon fixer, the man who negotiated with monsters and never lost his cool, was replaced by something raw and tired. “That’s why I didn’t ask.” Rory took a long swallow of wine. It was good wine. It always was. “And now?” “The people hunting me aren’t warlocks anymore. They’re worse. And they’re not just interested in the book. They’re interested in anyone who can read it. That includes you.” She set the glass down. Her hands, she noticed, were perfectly still. That was good. She’d learned that from her mother, the Welsh teacher who could silence a room of rowdy second-year comprehensive students with a single raised eyebrow. “What do you mean, includes me?” “The book is written in a dead language. One very few people can decipher. You’ve got a talent for ancient scripts. I remember.” He smiled, but it didn’t reach his eyes. “I remember everything.” “Flattery won’t work on me.” “I’m not trying to flatter you. I’m trying to warn you. The people who stole the book haven’t found a translator yet. But if they start looking in the right places, they’ll find you. And they won’t ask politely.” Rory stood up, her chair scraping against the floorboards. The anger that had been simmering in her chest was boiling now, a dangerous heat that she’d learned to control but never learned to extinguish. She crossed the room in three steps and grabbed a handful of his expensive shirt. “You led them here.” “I came to warn you.” “Same thing!” “No.” His hand closed around her wrist, gentle but firm. The touch burned, the way his touch always did, like he was made of fire and shadow and everything she couldn’t have. “I’m here to make sure you’re not caught unaware. If I wanted to hand you over, I wouldn’t be standing in your flat drinking your wine and letting you threaten to break my jaw.” “I wasn’t threatening.” “You were considering it.” “I was considering several options. All of them involved violence.” “See? That’s exactly the kind of resourcefulness I need.” He released her wrist, and the absence of his touch left an ache that was both physical and something more. “I have a safehouse. Off the grid. Magically warded. You’ll be safe there.” “I’m safe here.” “No, you’re not.” He pulled back the curtain. Across the street, a black car idled, its engine a low rumble in the night. “They’ve been watching for three days. I made sure to let them see me. It bought us a little time. Not much.” Rory stared at the car. The windows were tinted so dark they looked like voids. A chill crept up her spine, not from the cold but from the memory of the last time she’d been followed. Evan. The ex she’d fled Cardiff to escape. The man who’d left bruises on her arms and scars on her mind. She’d spent two years looking over her shoulder. She’d thought she was finally free. “You bastard,” she whispered. “I know.” “You absolute, fucking bastard.” “I know that too.” He reached out, and for a moment, his fingers hovered millimetres from her cheek, close enough that she could feel the warmth of them. “I’ll get you out of this. I promise. But I need you to trust me.” “You lost that privilege two years ago.” “I know.” His hand dropped. “But I need you to pretend. Just until we’re somewhere safe. Then you can yell at me all you want. You can even throw things at my head. I have a very good doctor.” Rory closed her eyes. Above her, the flat seemed to hold its breath. The cat meowed, a plaintive sound that cut through the silence. Outside, a car door opened. “One night,” she said. “One night. And then I’m coming back here, and you’re going to answer every question I have. Every single one.” “Deal.” The front door didn’t so much open as explode inward, the deadbolts tearing free of the doorframe with a shower of splintered wood and brass screws. Rory’s head whipped around. The black car was empty now. Two figures stood in the doorway, silhouettes framed by the dim light of the hall. They were tall. Too tall. Their eyes reflected the room’s light like an animal’s would, a flash of iridescent green that sent a shudder down her spine. “Lucien Moreau,” the first one said. Its voice was a grinding sound, like rocks being slowly crushed. “You’re late.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"His hand closed around [around]"
1"He pulled back [back]"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.284
leniency0.568
rawRatio0.095
effectiveRatio0.054
71.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1560
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"very"
count7
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"perfectly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1560
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"fascinating"
count1
2
word"could feel"
count2
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"sense of"
count1
5
word"uncanny"
count1
6
word"oppressive"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"eyebrow"
count1
9
word"simmering"
count1
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"warmth"
count1
12
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"fascinating"
2"could feel"
3"reminder"
4"sense of"
5"uncanny"
6"oppressive"
7"silence"
8"eyebrow"
9"simmering"
10"chill"
11"warmth"
12"down her spine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
90.59% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences82
filterMatches
0"see see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1560
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
92.47% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount956
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.15
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
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Brick1
Lane1
Bordeaux1
Rory11
Lucien6
Avaros1
Cardiff2
Frenchman1
London1
Welsh1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore0.925
windowScore1
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like he belonged in a painting"
1"looked like voids"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.641
wordCount1560
matches
0"not from the cold but from the memory of the last time she’d been followed"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"was that it"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean23.28
std22.42
cv0.963
sampleLengths
061
15
224
320
446
52
621
723
836
960
1017
114
121
138
1472
1519
1611
1715
181
191
2081
2135
224
2344
244
253
265
274
2864
297
3043
3132
324
3320
344
3538
3614
372
3828
3939
406
4134
425
4339
4449
454
465
472
4866
493
88.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences82
matches
0"was replaced"
1"was made"
2"were tinted"
3"been followed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs163
matches
0"was letting"
1"was believing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences134
ratio0.007
matches
0"Never let a barrister see you sweat; never let a Frenchman see you care."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount960
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.027083333333333334
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.007291666666666667
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean11.64
std9.64
cv0.828
sampleLengths
029
132
25
316
45
53
615
75
818
919
109
112
1212
139
1423
1534
162
173
1828
1929
209
216
222
234
241
258
2618
2715
2814
2925
3019
3111
3215
331
341
356
364
376
3819
3920
407
4119
4211
4324
444
4538
466
474
483
495
44.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3358208955223881
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
41.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences76
matches
0"His heterochromatic gaze swept over"
1"She blocked the entrance with"
2"He inclined his head, a"
3"He leaned against the doorframe,"
4"She could feel the heat"
5"It was the same scent"
6"she said, shutting the door"
7"She pulled out a chair,"
8"It was a deliberate power"
9"He didn’t ask permission."
10"He didn’t ask for anything,"
11"He simply assumed the world"
12"he said, sliding a glass"
13"He sipped his wine"
14"She’d told herself it didn’t"
15"She’d told herself she was"
16"His voice softened, and for"
17"It was good wine."
18"It always was."
19"She set the glass down."
ratio0.447
12.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences76
matches
0"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
1"His heterochromatic gaze swept over"
2"She blocked the entrance with"
3"The cat yowled its agreement."
4"He inclined his head, a"
5"Rory’s scarred wrist throbbed, a"
6"The other was believing she’d"
7"He leaned against the doorframe,"
8"Lucien pushed past her with"
9"Rory’s jaw tightened."
10"She could feel the heat"
11"It was the same scent"
12"she said, shutting the door"
13"The three deadbolts clicked into"
14"She pulled out a chair,"
15"It was a deliberate power"
16"Ptolemy, as if on cue,"
17"Lucien observed, scratching behind the"
18"Lucien poured two glasses of"
19"He didn’t ask permission."
ratio0.895
65.79% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"Even now, standing in a"
ratio0.013
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"His heterochromatic gaze swept over Rory's shoulder, cataloguing the stacks of research notes, the cold mug of tea, and the tabby cat currently judging him from…"
1"She could feel the heat radiating from him, the faint scent of cedar and something darker, something that whispered of Avaros and shadows that moved on their ow…"
2"Ptolemy, as if on cue, stretched and sauntered over to Lucien, weaving between his ankles with a traitorous purr."
3"The half-demon fixer, the man who negotiated with monsters and never lost his cool, was replaced by something raw and tired."
4"She’d learned that from her mother, the Welsh teacher who could silence a room of rowdy second-year comprehensive students with a single raised eyebrow."
5"The anger that had been simmering in her chest was boiling now, a dangerous heat that she’d learned to control but never learned to extinguish."
6"The man who’d left bruises on her arms and scars on her mind."
77.38% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He inclined, a ghost of a smile playing at his lips"
1"His hand closed around, gentle but firm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Lucien observed (observe)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.095
leniency0.189
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.054
79.9654%