Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YEHA1S5RCQFXDHY6S3EAHW

Run Details

Duration:
48.3s
Cost:
$0.017390
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The man came out of the Raven’s Nest carrying a medical bag and looked straight at Detective Harlow Quinn. For half a second, neither of them moved. Rain spilled from the green neon sign above the Soho bar, streaking his face with green. Then he pulled his hood up and walked away. Quinn stepped out from beneath the shop awning. “Tomás Herrera.” He broke into a run. She went after him, her shoes striking water from the pavement. A couple leaving the bar stumbled aside. Herrera hit the corner, turned hard and vanished behind a delivery van. Quinn rounded it in time to see him shoulder through the late-night crowd on Old Compton Street. “Police! Move!” A man with an umbrella turned toward her, blocking half the pavement. Quinn knocked the umbrella aside and kept running. Herrera was quick, but he glanced back too often. At the next junction he missed the green light and had to dart between a taxi and a bus. The taxi braked with a long, furious blast. Quinn crossed behind it, one hand on the bonnet as it slid past. Her radio bounced against her coat. “Control, Quinn. Suspect making off north from Old Compton Street. Male, late twenties, dark hooded jacket, carrying a black medical bag. Request units.” The reply crackled through traffic noise. She gave her location and clipped the radio back onto her belt. Herrera cut into an alley between two restaurants. Quinn followed, splashing through a shallow stream of greasy rainwater. Steam poured from a kitchen vent. Ahead, Herrera shoved through a pair of men smoking beneath a fire escape; one swore and reached for him, then saw Quinn and flattened against the wall. At the far end, Herrera climbed onto a stack of beer crates. They collapsed under his weight. He caught a drainpipe, hauled himself over a low wall and dropped out of sight. Quinn reached the crates, found one still upright and used it to vault the wall. She landed badly on her right heel. Pain shot up her calf, but the leg held. Across the service yard, Herrera was already fighting with a gate. “Stop!” He got the bolt free and squeezed through. Quinn hit the gate a moment later and saw the rear lights of a moped flare beyond him. Herrera grabbed the driver’s arm and said something she couldn’t hear. The driver shook him off. Herrera yanked open the rear door of a minicab waiting at the kerb instead. Quinn sprinted toward it. The cab pulled away before she reached the street. She caught the registration, repeated it twice, and gave it to Control. Then she ran toward the junction, searching for a vehicle. A black cab had stopped at the lights. She showed her warrant card through the passenger window. “Follow that minicab. Northbound.” The driver took one look at her face and unlocked the door. Quinn climbed in, breathing hard. Her phone buzzed with an incoming call from the surveillance officer she had left outside the Nest’s rear entrance. “Did you see him?” she asked. “Only when he was already running. You all right?” “For now. Anyone else come out?” “Two women. We’ve got uniforms speaking to them.” “Keep an eye on the bar. If anyone moves a box or a bag out, I want to know.” She ended the call. The cab surged through a yellow light, the driver craning over the wheel to keep the minicab in sight. Quinn had spent six weeks trying to place Herrera with the group that met at the Raven’s Nest. The former paramedic had lost his licence after a set of cases the investigators had described, with unusual delicacy, as unauthorized treatment. Some records were missing. Others named patients whose addresses led nowhere. Three witnesses had refused to identify him, though one had clearly known him well enough to call him Tommy. Tonight Quinn had watched him enter the bar with an empty medical bag. He had come out twenty minutes later with it heavy enough to pull his shoulder down. The minicab swerved around a lorry on Tottenham Court Road. Quinn’s driver followed. “What’s he done?” the driver asked. “That’s what I’m trying to find out.” At a red light, the minicab gained half a street. Quinn leaned forward, watching the smear of its tail lamps through the wet windscreen. She had been too exposed outside the bar. Herrera had recognized her from somewhere, perhaps from the photographs she’d shown around his old workplace. Her phone buzzed again. Control had traced the minicab registration to a licensed driver. Another unit was attempting to intercept. They passed Euston, then followed the lights north. The streets narrowed and emptied. Rain rattled against the roof. Quinn checked the time on the worn leather watch at her left wrist and called the intercepting unit herself. “Where are you?” “Two minutes out, ma’am. Camden High Street.” The minicab braked. Herrera shoved open the rear door before it had quite stopped and ran between two parked cars. “There,” Quinn said. Her driver pulled in crookedly. She pushed cash through the partition, jumped out and ran after Herrera. Behind her, the minicab driver leaned on his horn. Herrera crossed the road without looking. A cyclist shouted and skidded sideways. Quinn reached the opposite pavement in time to see him disappear through a gap in a corrugated construction fence. She drew her torch and followed. The gap opened onto a narrow yard strewn with wet rubble. A brick building stood at the back, its windows boarded, its doorway sealed with metal sheeting. Herrera was kneeling beside a concrete stairwell that descended beneath the building. He had set his bag down and was working at a chain around the gate. Quinn stopped at the top of the yard. “Herrera. Hands where I can see them.” He looked up. Rain shone on his olive skin; his short dark curls were plastered to his forehead. For the first time, she saw how frightened he was. He held up both hands. A small pale disc lay on his palm. “Someone’s going to die,” he said. “Then tell me where they are.” “In there.” “What’s in the bag?” “Things I need.” “Step away from it.” A sound rose from below the gate: metal dragging over stone, followed by a low murmur of voices. Quinn angled her torch down the stairwell. The beam caught damp tiles, old posters furred with mould, and darkness beyond a bend. Herrera’s fingers closed around the disc. “Please. If you arrest me now, she won’t last the hour.” “Who?” He glanced toward the stairwell. It was enough. He snatched up the bag and pressed the disc against the padlock. The chain fell open. Quinn lunged. Her hand caught his sleeve, then slipped on wet fabric. He went through the gate and down the steps. She reached for the chain and pulled it clear before it could tangle around her legs. By the time she reached the bend, Herrera was gone. The stairs ended at a tiled passage. A draught came up from it, carrying the smell of damp brick and something sharp and medicinal. Quinn heard footsteps retreating, then a door slamming somewhere ahead. She radioed Control with the location. Static swallowed her first attempt. She climbed three steps and tried again. “This is Quinn. Suspect has entered what appears to be a disused station beneath Camden. Access through the construction yard on—” The radio hissed. A voice broke through, too distorted to understand. She gave the address again, slowly, then asked for a repeat. Nothing. Rain drummed on the metal gate above her. Quinn looked down the passage. The sensible course was to secure the exit and wait for the unit. There was one gate, as far as she knew. Herrera had nowhere to go unless the station connected to another entrance. Unless it connected to the tunnels. Unless there was a train. Unless the woman he had mentioned was real. Quinn touched the radio once more, then went down. The passage opened into an old ticket hall. Glass crunched underfoot. The original booths remained along one wall, their windows dark, but someone had hung lamps from the ceiling. Their amber light reached a set of double doors at the far end. A broad man stood in front of them. He wore a black coat with the collar turned up and held a short length of pipe in one hand. Herrera was nowhere in sight. “Police,” Quinn said. “A man just came through here.” “Token.” “I’m looking for Tomás Herrera.” “Token,” he said again. She approached to within a few feet. His eyes stayed on her left hand, where her warrant card was visible, then dropped to her radio. Behind the doors, Quinn could hear voices and the clink of crockery. “I need to speak to whoever’s in charge.” “You can speak to me.” “Fine. Open the door.” He shifted the pipe from one hand to the other. Quinn noticed a pale disc set into a metal plate beside the frame. Bone, perhaps. Like the one Herrera had held against the padlock. “You let him through.” “He had a token.” “Where does it lead?” “Market.” “What kind of market opens in a sealed station?” “The kind that needs tokens.” Quinn held his gaze. She could hear her own breathing. Her heel throbbed, and sweat had cooled beneath her coat. The man was large, but the hall gave her room to move; she could probably get past him. The question was what waited on the other side, and whether she could get back out. A woman cried out beyond the doors. The sound cut off abruptly. The man’s eyes flicked toward it. Quinn took the chance and drove her shoulder into him. He struck the wall, swore and swung the pipe. It caught her upper arm, numbing it to the elbow. She seized his wrist before he could swing again and twisted hard. The pipe clattered onto the tiles. He shoved her back. Quinn slipped on the broken glass and caught herself against the ticket booth. The man reached inside his coat. She drew her baton. “Don’t.” He stopped with his hand hidden. For a moment they watched each other. Then the double doors opened behind him, and a young woman carrying a wooden crate came through. The doorkeeper turned his head. Quinn stepped around him and caught the door before it shut. “Police,” she told the woman. “Stay back.” The woman dropped the crate and ran. Quinn went through. A broad staircase descended to the platform. Stalls crowded the steps and spilled onto the floor below, their canvas roofs strung with lamps. People moved between them under a haze of smoke. Quinn saw trays of rings, stoppered bottles, bundles of dried plants and neat rows of teeth. A butcher’s hook hung from one stall, supporting a carcass she could not identify. The voices had quieted. Faces turned toward her. At the bottom of the stairs, Herrera pushed through the crowd with his bag held against his chest. Quinn started after him. A stallholder pulled a sheet across a table as she passed, covering a set of surgical instruments. Another ducked out of sight behind stacked crates. “Police!” Quinn called. “Herrera, stop!” Someone seized her coat from behind. She spun, baton raised. The doorkeeper had followed her down and now stood close enough that she could smell tobacco on his breath. “You don’t belong here,” he said. “Then help me find him and I’ll leave.” His expression did not change. Around them, the crowd was closing the space between the stalls. Quinn counted four people within reach, then six. No uniforms, no radio, no clear path back to the doors. She lowered the baton a few inches without putting it away. Across the platform, Herrera disappeared behind a curtain of blue plastic. The doorkeeper saw her looking. “Whatever he’s doing, let him do it.” A sharp bang came from behind the curtain. Then Herrera shouted, “Hold her still!” Quinn pulled free and ran. Someone tried to block her path; she shoved past, shouldering through the plastic strips into a narrow service room. A woman lay on a table beneath a bare lamp. Her skin was grey, her lips dark. Herrera stood over her with his sleeves pushed up, a scar visible along his left forearm. His bag lay open beside a scatter of bloodied dressings. A second man gripped the woman’s shoulders. “Out,” Herrera said. Quinn stopped just inside the doorway. The woman’s shirt had been cut away. A deep wound crossed her ribs, but it was what moved inside it that held Quinn still: a thin black filament, drawing itself slowly beneath the skin. Herrera caught it with forceps. The woman arched and screamed. The man at her shoulders struggled to hold her down. Quinn had seen that movement once before. Three years ago, beneath the skin at DS Morris’s throat, just before he died. She had told the investigators it might have been a muscle spasm. The pathologist had found nothing to explain it. Herrera pulled. The filament came free, writhing against the metal jaws. “Jar,” he said. The man holding the woman hesitated, then reached blindly toward the table. Quinn found a glass jar beside her and passed it to him. Herrera dropped the filament inside. It struck the bottom with a tiny click and went still. For several seconds the only sound was the woman’s ragged breathing. Herrera pressed a dressing to her wound. “More pressure,” he told the other man. He looked at Quinn. “I need my hands.” She realized she had raised the baton again. She lowered it. “What is that?” she asked. Herrera glanced at the jar, then back at his patient. “Something that would have killed her.” “Morris had one.” That made him look up. Quinn stepped closer. “My partner. Three years ago. I saw it move in his neck.” “I don’t know your partner.” “You know what this is.” “I know how to get it out. That’s all.” He reached for a packet in his bag. Quinn caught his wrist. His pulse hammered beneath her fingers; a Saint Christopher medallion had slipped from his collar and hung against his shirt. “You’re coming with me.” The patient made a wet, painful sound. Herrera looked from Quinn’s hand to the woman on the table. “Give me five minutes.” The doorkeeper appeared in the doorway behind Quinn. She heard the crowd gathering beyond him. If she dragged Herrera out now, she might not reach the stairs. If she left him free, he could vanish into the market before her colleagues found the entrance. Quinn released his wrist and took out her phone. No signal. She opened the camera and photographed the jar, Herrera, the patient and the open bag. Herrera flinched at the flash. “Don’t photograph her.” “Then keep working.” He tore open the packet with his teeth. Quinn moved to the doorway, where she could watch him and the crowd. The doorkeeper stood aside, but only far enough to let her see the platform. Somewhere beyond the stalls, a bell rang. People began pulling down lamps and folding canvas. Cases snapped shut. The market was packing away, fast. Quinn looked back at Herrera. He was stitching the woman’s wound, his hands steady now. “You said five minutes,” she told him. Outside, the bell rang again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said again [again]"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.234
leniency0.469
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.031
96.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2569
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2569
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"traced"
2"footsteps"
3"throbbed"
4"flicked"
5"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences246
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences246
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
2"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences295
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2569
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
41.16% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions112
wordCount2251
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity2.18
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest3
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn49
Soho1
Old1
Compton1
Street1
Herrera34
Control3
Tommy1
Tottenham1
Court1
Road1
Euston1
Morris1
Saint1
Christopher1
Rain4
Unless3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Harlow"
3"Quinn"
4"Herrera"
5"Tommy"
6"Morris"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
9"Rain"
places
0"Detective"
1"Soho"
2"Old"
3"Compton"
4"Street"
5"Tottenham"
6"Court"
7"Road"
8"Euston"
globalScore0.412
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences177
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2569
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences295
matches
0"seen that movement"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs138
mean18.62
std16.26
cv0.874
sampleLengths
019
133
28
32
45
547
62
756
819
923
1018
1151
1232
1342
141
1556
1613
1739
184
1912
2024
216
229
236
248
2519
2623
2770
2829
2913
306
317
3248
3320
3437
353
367
3720
383
3926
4031
416
4254
4315
4428
4513
466
476
482
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences246
matches
0"were plastered"
1"was gone"
87.28% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs414
matches
0"was already fighting"
1"was attempting"
2"was kneeling"
3"was working"
4"was closing"
5"was packing"
6"was stitching"
94.43% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences295
ratio0.017
matches
0"Ahead, Herrera shoved through a pair of men smoking beneath a fire escape; one swore and reached for him, then saw Quinn and flattened against the wall."
1"Rain shone on his olive skin; his short dark curls were plastered to his forehead."
2"The man was large, but the hall gave her room to move; she could probably get past him."
3"Someone tried to block her path; she shoved past, shouldering through the plastic strips into a narrow service room."
4"His pulse hammered beneath her fingers; a Saint Christopher medallion had slipped from his collar and hung against his shirt."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2252
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount72
adverbRatio0.03197158081705151
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.004884547069271759
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences295
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences295
mean8.71
std5.04
cv0.579
sampleLengths
019
18
216
39
48
52
65
711
87
912
1017
112
1212
138
149
1519
168
1713
186
1923
206
2112
228
2310
246
2527
2612
275
2815
2915
307
319
3211
331
348
3518
3611
375
3814
394
409
4112
4210
438
449
454
4612
475
4819
496
47.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.2576271186440678
totalSentences295
uniqueOpeners76
71.84% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences232
matches
0"Then he pulled his hood"
1"Then she ran toward the"
2"Then the double doors opened"
3"Then Herrera shouted,"
4"Somewhere beyond the stalls, a"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount64
totalSentences232
matches
0"He broke into a run."
1"She went after him, her"
2"Her radio bounced against her"
3"She gave her location and"
4"They collapsed under his weight."
5"He caught a drainpipe, hauled"
6"She landed badly on her"
7"He got the bolt free"
8"She caught the registration, repeated"
9"She showed her warrant card"
10"Her phone buzzed with an"
11"She ended the call."
12"He had come out twenty"
13"She had been too exposed"
14"Her phone buzzed again."
15"They passed Euston, then followed"
16"Her driver pulled in crookedly."
17"She pushed cash through the"
18"She drew her torch and"
19"He had set his bag"
ratio0.276
26.81% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount201
totalSentences232
matches
0"The man came out of"
1"Rain spilled from the green"
2"Quinn stepped out from beneath"
3"He broke into a run."
4"She went after him, her"
5"A couple leaving the bar"
6"Herrera hit the corner, turned"
7"Quinn rounded it in time"
8"A man with an umbrella"
9"Quinn knocked the umbrella aside"
10"Herrera was quick, but he"
11"The taxi braked with a"
12"Quinn crossed behind it, one"
13"Her radio bounced against her"
14"The reply crackled through traffic"
15"She gave her location and"
16"Herrera cut into an alley"
17"Quinn followed, splashing through a"
18"Steam poured from a kitchen"
19"They collapsed under his weight."
ratio0.866
64.66% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences232
matches
0"By the time she reached"
1"If she dragged Herrera out"
2"If she left him free,"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences101
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Herrera was kneeling beside a concrete stairwell that descended beneath the building."
1"A deep wound crossed her ribs, but it was what moved inside it that held Quinn still: a thin black filament, drawing itself slowly beneath the skin."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Herrera shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.234
leniency0.469
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.031
90.6077%