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Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YFB6DGN9WVD1AGA9ZK0G1H
Run Details
Model:
Kimi K3.1 Pro (Reasoning, Max)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
9m 11s
Cost:
$0.141103
Provider:
Moonshot AI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
89.49%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
76.87%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
50.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
99.69%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
50.60%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
90.91%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
88.78%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
94.6777%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The standing stone opened when
Aurora’s pendant
began to
beat. Not glow. Beat.
A slow, double pulse of
warmth
against her sternum, as if something beneath the crimson stone had woken to answer a knock.
Aurora stopped so abruptly that
Nyx nearly passed through her. Beyond them, Isolde stood between the ancient boundary stones, her silver hair stirring in a wind Aurora could not feel.
Frost silvered the clearing, but
wildflowers still starred the grass at her feet.
She had crossed the frozen
ground without leaving a single print.
A seam of amber light
appeared in the stone before her. “Please tell me that’s normal,” Aurora said. “It is a door,” Isolde replied. “That wasn’t my question.” “No. It was merely the safest answer.”
Nyx’s whisper slid through the
clearing like wind under a door. “The Veil is thin tonight. Thinner than it should be, even at the solstice.”
Aurora looked at the place
they indicated.
She saw only the seam
in the stone and, through it, a narrow ribbon of gold.
Whatever else Nyx perceived remained
stubbornly invisible to her. The pendant
pulsed
again.
An unknown benefactor had fastened
the silver chain around her neck without leaving so much as a name.
If its giver had finally
laid a trail, this was the first footprint.
Aurora closed her hand around
the gemstone, felt its heat through her glove, and stepped forward. Isolde caught her sleeve. “Where every vessel is full,”
the seer said
, “pour nothing of yourself.” Aurora waited. “And?” “And walk between your hungers, not after them.” “Comforting,” Nyx said.
Isolde turned her pale lavender
eyes on them. “Comfort is a coin. Spend it where it purchases something.”
Then she passed into the
stone. There was no other word for it.
Her body did not fade
or dissolve.
She simply crossed the amber
seam and ceased to be in Richmond.
Nyx went next, their tall
silhouette folding into darkness thin enough to slip through the gap.
Aurora took one breath of
cold winter air, tightened her grip on the pendant, and followed. Heat enclosed her. For an instant she could
neither see nor
hear. Something thick and sweet pressed against her tongue.
Then her boot struck soft
earth, sound returned in a rush, and she stumbled beneath an amber sky. There was no sun. Light filled the whole vault above her, honey-dark at the horizon and pale gold overhead.
It came from everywhere and
gave nothing a decent shadow. Aurora turned
slowly
, trying to find the west, then gave up. Behind her stood the standing stone—or a stone
very
much like it—alone in a meadow of red grass. The amber seam narrowed as she watched. For one breath she saw frost, black oak branches, and a wedge of night.
Then the opening closed with
a soft, satisfied sound. “Tell me there’s a handle on this side,” she said. “There may be,” Isolde replied. Aurora looked at the featureless stone. “You’re enjoying this.” “I am enjoying
very
little. It makes enjoyment easier to identify.” Nyx had solidified beside a low silver shrub. Their edges
were smoking
. Aurora’s amusement vanished. “Are you all right?” “No.” They drew their arms close, and the darkness of their body thickened. “This sky is badly designed.” Beyond the meadow, the land descended in terraces so broad that Aurora could not see their ends. Vineyards spilled down them in green and violet waves. Some of the grapes were clear as blown glass, each berry holding a pinpoint of golden light. Farther away, orchards crowded around white towers, and slender bridges leapt from garden to garden with nothing beneath them but distance. A canal ran beside the path. Aurora watched its copper-colored water flow uphill.
Somewhere far off, thousands of
glasses chimed together. The sound
trembled
through her teeth. “Dymas,” Isolde said. The name
seemed to
change the air. Aurora noticed the richness of it then: ripe fruit, warm bread, crushed herbs, caramel just before it burned. Beneath those scents lay something darker, meaty and mineral. A breeze moved through the vineyard. Every leaf turned at once, though the breeze had already passed. Nyx stared at them. “I preferred it when doors were the worst possibility.” They followed Isolde down. The path
was paved
with flat stones, each carved to resemble an open hand. Moss had filled the lines of the palms. Aurora tried not to step on the fingers, then felt foolish, then saw one stone flex beneath Isolde’s foot and decided foolishness was preferable. The scent of bread strengthened. For Aurora it became ginger, star anise, rice steam, and the clean, fierce heat of the Golden Empress’s kitchen at the height of a Friday service.
She could almost hear Yu-Fei
calling an order over the clatter. Her
stomach
tightened. “What do you smell?” she asked. Nyx was silent for several steps. “Woodsmoke. Apples.” Isolde’s answer came softer. “Rain before it reaches the field.” The path offered each of them a different kindness. Aurora liked it less for that.
They passed beneath an orchard
bough. The fruit hanging above her head was deep blue, dusted with silver, each one no larger than a plum. Inside their translucent skins, points of light moved in slow constellations. One gave off the clean scent of snow. Aurora stopped despite herself. The fruit turned toward her. There was no stem twisting, no hand moving it.
It simply rotated until a
dimple in its skin faced her like an eye. “Don’t,” Nyx whispered. “I wasn’t going to.” Her hand was already lifted.
She lowered it and wiped
her glove on her coat as if she could remove the impulse along with the orchard’s silver dust. The fruit gave a tiny sigh. All along the branch, the others
began to
whisper
. They did not use words. Somehow that was worse. “Keep moving,” Aurora said. No one argued. The path ended at a colonnade swallows had turned into a ruin, except there were no nests, no droppings, and no swallows. Vines had cracked the pale columns. Beyond them, stairs descended into the hillside. Aurora heard knives. Months of collecting deliveries from restaurant kitchens had taught her the sound: the quick chop of a blade through something crisp, the heavier knock of bone against board, steel scraped clean,
porcelain
set down too hard. This was the same music with every voice removed. No one called an order. No one laughed. No one swore at a broken plate. At the bottom of the stairs, a hundred cooks worked in an open courtyard. A woman in a linen coif stirred an empty cauldron. Beside her, a man in a quilted doublet trimmed the same invisible joint of meat, his knife rising and falling with tireless precision. Farther on, a chef in modern whites plated nothing onto a succession of spotless dishes. Aurora could see the hearth through his hands. Fine brass chains ran from the cooks’ wrists into channels in the floor. When they reached the end of one movement, the chains drew them back to begin it again. The nearest cook was a narrow, dark-haired woman. Steam rose around her, though her pot contained only water gone still and gray. A rectangular tag hung against her collarbone. Aurora leaned close enough to read it without crossing the chain. MARA BELL, LONDON. Beneath that, in smaller letters: ONE SERVICE, TO END WHEN THE PRINCE IS CONTENT. At the bottom sat a stamped initial: B. Mara Bell’s spoon completed another circle. “How long?” Aurora asked. The woman did not look up. Aurora thought of the clothes in the courtyard, the centuries standing shoulder to shoulder.
She thought of the word
content in a place built around hunger. Nyx extended a sliver of shadow toward the chain. The brass link brightened. The shadow recoiled. “Belphegor’s contracts are old,” Isolde said. Aurora straightened. “Can they be broken?” “Anything made can be unmade.” “And?” “And some things enjoy the making more than the maker enjoys the end.” It was not an answer.
It might have been a
warning not to try. A bell sounded somewhere above them. Every cook paused. For one terrible second, the courtyard held a hundred kinds of stillness.
Then a hundred heads turned
toward Aurora. She did not step back.
Her hand moved instead to
the dagger at her belt. Moonsilver met her palm through the wrapping, cold enough to ache. Mara Bell’s lips parted. “Covers,” she whispered. The word rasped, as if it had
been stored
somewhere dry for years. Aurora waited. The cooks returned to work. Chop. Scrape. Pour. The
porcelain
clicked. Mara Bell stirred her gray water. Nyx’s violet eyes had narrowed to slits. “I dislike being anticipated.” “You dislike being seen,” Aurora said. “Today I am making distinctions.” They crossed the courtyard without speaking again. Aurora counted doorways as they went: two on the left, one choked with vines, three beneath the broken gallery. If they had to run, she wanted choices. At the far end stood a table beneath a canopy of white flowers. Three covered dishes steamed
gently
on its surface. As they approached, the scent of ginger and rice became so vivid that Aurora’s mouth filled with saliva. A small card leaned against the nearest glass. Come in, it said. You must be tired. She stopped an arm’s length away. The writing changed. Just one bite. The letters flowed like ink in water, graceful and patient. Aurora looked back at the cooks. Not one of them
was eating
. “Nothing here is free,” she said. “Oh, many things are free,” Isolde replied. “That is how they become expensive.” Aurora took the long way around the table. Behind her,
porcelain
gave a disappointed click. The pendant had cooled after the gate closed.
Now, as they passed beneath
a second arch, it warmed again. Once. Twice. Aurora touched it through her coat. “There’s another portal.” “Or the same one,” Isolde said, “after it has changed its mind about shape.” The corridor beyond the arch descended in a tightening spiral. The walls here were older than the courtyard. No gold adorned them, no carving of vines or feasting figures. Their surfaces had
been worn
smooth by hands, thousands upon thousands of them, until the stone held a soft luster. The kitchen sounds followed for a while.
Then they began to arrive
in the wrong order. A plate broke before Aurora heard it fall. A knife scraped after its shadow moved along the wall.
Finally there was only their
breathing and the faint hiss of Nyx’s substance brushing the air. At the bottom, a curtain of light barred the way. It was almost invisible: a trembling across the dark, like heat above a road. Beyond it lay a circular chamber open to the amber sky. Nyx touched the barrier with two fingers. Their hand vanished to the wrist. They tore themselves backward. For an instant their entire arm was smoke, violet light tumbling inside it. Then the fingers returned. “No,” they said. Aurora drew the Fae blade. It was slender and leaf-shaped, made for a hand smaller than a warrior’s. No moon lit it here; the moonsilver remained dark. Yet after all this time in Dymas’s heat, it was still bitterly cold. Isolde had given it to her without asking for payment. Aurora had not yet decided whether that made the gift more trustworthy or less. She set its edge against the trembling air. The ward resisted.
Not like wood or cloth, but like something gristly
and alive. Cold ran up the dagger into her wrist. Her fingers
began to
numb. Nyx moved closer. “Rory.” “I’ve got it.” “You are cutting a hole in something that may be holding up the ceiling.” Aurora looked at the smooth stone above them. “Then stand where it isn’t.” She pulled the blade down. The ward parted with the sound of a thousand tiny bells. For a heartbeat, every hair on her body stood up.
Then the opening spread, silent
and silver-edged, until it was wide enough for them to pass. The chamber beyond smelled of winter. A tree grew through its center, though Aurora could not have said whether its roots were in the floor or the sky. Its dark trunk pierced both. Branches heavy with blue fruit bent around a table of black stone. Three chairs stood at the table. Three glasses. Three napkins folded like closed wings. Steam threaded from beneath three silver covers. There was no dust anywhere. Aurora’s card lay beside the nearest plate. She used the tip of the Fae blade to turn it over. AURORA CARTER. The ink was wet. Nyx sent a thread of shadow toward the second card. It flipped. ALDRIC. Nyx became so still that they
seemed painted on the air
. Aurora did not know the name. Nyx did; that was plain in the way their outline drew inward, protective as a
clenched fist
. “Friend of yours?” she asked quietly. “Not for a
very
long time.” The shadow snapped back. The card fell facedown. Isolde left the third card untouched. At the far end of the table, set into the black stone, was an empty silver fitting. Aurora knew its shape before she understood why. The shallow curve. The small, irregular oval. The delicate claws waiting to hold a gemstone. Her pendant beat against her sternum. The fitting answered with a faint crimson glow. Wonder and dread arrived together, indistinguishable for one dizzy moment. Someone had built this room around an absence. Someone had set her name beside a meal and left a place for the stone that had brought her here. A bell sounded beneath the floor. Far above them, every kitchen knife stopped. The covered dishes rattled. One lid lifted by a fraction, then another. Warm air sighed out, carrying woodsmoke, apples, rain, ginger—and beneath it all, the dark, meaty scent Aurora had noticed when they first arrived. “Rory,” Nyx whispered. “I know.” She closed one hand around the Heartstone and kept the Fae blade raised in the other. She had come looking for the person who had given it to her.
Now, staring at the empty
fitting, she wondered whether it had ever been a gift at all. Some invitations
were written
on paper. Others came on a chain.
created_at
"2026-10-27T10:43:52.888Z"
10/27/2026, 10:43:52 AM
model
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182717
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streamed
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cancelled
false
latency
3805
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
551229
tokens_prompt
1547
tokens_completion
15460
native_tokens_prompt
1629
native_tokens_completion
14061
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
10927
native_tokens_cached
1536
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
num_fetches
(null)
web_search_engine
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
service_tier
(null)
usage
0.1411032
router
(null)
user_agent
"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.22.1; linux; x64))"
http_referer
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session_id
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preset_id
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api_type
"completions"
id
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upstream_id
"chatcmpl-6ae0806921f18935e38ba108"
provider_responses
0
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is_byok
false
latency
3805
model_permaslug
"moonshotai/kimi-k3.1-pro-20261023"
provider_name
"Moonshot AI"
status
200
total_cost
0.1411032
cache_discount
0.0027648
upstream_inference_cost
0
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
22
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she asked quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences
49
tagDensity
0.449
leniency
0.898
rawRatio
0.045
effectiveRatio
0.041
89.49%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2378
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
1
adverb
"very"
count
3
2
adverb
"gently"
count
1
highlights
0
"slowly"
1
"very"
2
"gently"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
76.87%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2378
totalAiIsms
11
found
0
word
"pulse"
count
1
1
word
"warmth"
count
1
2
word
"whisper"
count
2
3
word
"pulsed"
count
1
4
word
"comforting"
count
1
5
word
"trembled"
count
1
6
word
"stomach"
count
1
7
word
"porcelain"
count
3
highlights
0
"pulse"
1
"warmth"
2
"whisper"
3
"pulsed"
4
"comforting"
5
"trembled"
6
"stomach"
7
"porcelain"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"clenched jaw/fists"
count
1
highlights
0
"clenched fist"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
252
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
5
narrationSentences
252
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
1
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
280
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
36
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2375
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
15
unquotedAttributions
1
matches
0
"Come in, it said."
50.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
94
wordCount
2132
uniqueNames
14
maxNameDensity
1.97
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
3.5
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora
42
Nyx
18
Isolde
14
Richmond
1
Golden
1
Empress
1
Friday
1
Yu-Fei
1
Bell
3
Fae
3
Dymas
1
Heartstone
1
Mara
3
Three
4
persons
0
"Aurora"
1
"Nyx"
2
"Isolde"
3
"Empress"
4
"Yu-Fei"
5
"Bell"
6
"Mara"
places
0
"Richmond"
1
"Dymas"
globalScore
0.515
windowScore
0.5
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
169
glossingSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"seemed painted on the air"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
2
per1kWords
0.842
wordCount
2375
matches
0
"neither see nor"
1
"Not like wood or cloth, but like something gristly"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
280
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
161
mean
14.75
std
14.23
cv
0.965
sampleLengths
0
10
1
25
2
10
3
44
4
11
5
7
6
6
7
4
8
7
9
25
10
32
11
4
12
47
13
4
14
12
15
3
16
8
17
3
18
18
19
6
20
26
21
32
22
3
23
35
24
4
25
36
26
48
27
10
28
5
29
9
30
11
31
12
32
7
33
18
34
77
35
8
36
6
37
3
38
34
39
17
40
13
41
4
42
46
43
42
44
3
45
6
46
8
47
10
48
15
49
44
99.69%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
252
matches
0
"was paved"
1
"been stored"
2
"been worn"
3
"were written"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
367
matches
0
"were smoking"
1
"was eating"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
3
semicolonCount
2
flaggedSentences
4
totalSentences
280
ratio
0.014
matches
0
"Behind her stood the standing stone—or a stone very much like it—alone in a meadow of red grass."
1
"No moon lit it here; the moonsilver remained dark."
2
"Nyx did; that was plain in the way their outline drew inward, protective as a clenched fist."
3
"Warm air sighed out, carrying woodsmoke, apples, rain, ginger—and beneath it all, the dark, meaty scent Aurora had noticed when they first arrived."
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1092
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"sweet pressed against her"
adverbCount
37
adverbRatio
0.03388278388278388
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.007326007326007326
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
280
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
280
mean
8.48
std
5.39
cv
0.636
sampleLengths
0
10
1
2
2
1
3
22
4
10
5
20
6
13
7
11
8
11
9
7
10
6
11
4
12
7
13
11
14
14
15
7
16
16
17
9
18
4
19
18
20
13
21
16
22
4
23
12
24
2
25
1
26
8
27
3
28
8
29
10
30
6
31
7
32
7
33
12
34
16
35
16
36
3
37
9
38
8
39
18
40
4
41
15
42
10
43
11
44
18
45
7
46
14
47
9
48
10
49
5
50.60%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
15
diversityRatio
0.3357142857142857
totalSentences
280
uniqueOpeners
94
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
11
totalSentences
220
matches
0
"Then she passed into the"
1
"Then her boot struck soft"
2
"Then the opening closed with"
3
"Somewhere far off, thousands of"
4
"Somehow that was worse."
5
"Then a hundred heads turned"
6
"Just one bite."
7
"Then they began to arrive"
8
"Finally there was only their"
9
"Then the fingers returned."
10
"Then the opening spread, silent"
ratio
0.05
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
37
totalSentences
220
matches
0
"She had crossed the frozen"
1
"She saw only the seam"
2
"Her body did not fade"
3
"She simply crossed the amber"
4
"It came from everywhere and"
5
"Their edges were smoking."
6
"They drew their arms close,"
7
"They followed Isolde down."
8
"She could almost hear Yu-Fei"
9
"Her stomach tightened."
10
"They passed beneath an orchard"
11
"It simply rotated until a"
12
"Her hand was already lifted."
13
"She lowered it and wiped"
14
"They did not use words."
15
"She thought of the word"
16
"It was not an answer."
17
"It might have been a"
18
"She did not step back."
19
"Her hand moved instead to"
ratio
0.168
100.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
155
totalSentences
220
matches
0
"The standing stone opened when"
1
"A slow, double pulse of"
2
"Aurora stopped so abruptly that"
3
"Frost silvered the clearing, but"
4
"She had crossed the frozen"
5
"A seam of amber light"
6
"Nyx’s whisper slid through the"
7
"Aurora looked at the place"
8
"She saw only the seam"
9
"Whatever else Nyx perceived remained"
10
"The pendant pulsed again."
11
"An unknown benefactor had fastened"
12
"Aurora closed her hand around"
13
"Isolde caught her sleeve."
14
"the seer said"
15
"Isolde turned her pale lavender"
16
"Her body did not fade"
17
"She simply crossed the amber"
18
"Nyx went next, their tall"
19
"Aurora took one breath of"
ratio
0.705
90.91%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
4
totalSentences
220
matches
0
"If its giver had finally"
1
"If they had to run,"
2
"Now, as they passed beneath"
3
"Now, staring at the empty"
ratio
0.018
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
85
technicalSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"A slow, double pulse of warmth against her sternum, as if something beneath the crimson stone had woken to answer a knock."
1
"She lowered it and wiped her glove on her coat as if she could remove the impulse along with the orchard’s silver dust."
2
"Beside her, a man in a quilted doublet trimmed the same invisible joint of meat, his knife rising and falling with tireless precision."
3
"Someone had set her name beside a meal and left a place for the stone that had brought her here."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
22
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
88.78%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
20
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1
"she whispered (whisper)"
2
"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
49
tagDensity
0.408
leniency
0.816
rawRatio
0.15
effectiveRatio
0.122
94.6777%